Full Metal Panic! - Corrections Topic

lovelight

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections to Full Metal Panic.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 12!

Terabyte

Volume 10 - Part 1:

[12%] “Still the hospital in Mexico.” ► It should be Still at?
[83%] 《Sergeant,》he said. ► Missing space.

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Volume 10 - Part 2:

[19%] Lambda driver-mounted machine—》Al reported. ► Missing space.
[57%] point. They’d failed to take out his priority target, ► It should be He’d / his (Kaspar) or They’d / their (the group)?
[69%] Kaname didn’t try question or berate him, either. ► It should be try to.
[92%] She was now a lump of flesh breathing foam, ► It should be a period.

83drew

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1% - The c-130 is a transport airplane, not helicopter

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@83drew I'm not the editor for this series so there's no point in mentioning me... 😅

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Volume 10 - Part 3:

~~[0%] the C-130 transport helicopter landed on Rakan Island. ► Based on the description it should be an airplane?~~ Already reported.
[1%] deck open to take in supplies from transport helicopters. ► Just like above, it should probably be (air)planes rather than helicopter(s)? Even later on it talks about "planes".

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Volume 10 - Part 4:

[48%] just dangled there, immobile, like a log.. ► Duplicate period.

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Volume 10 - Part 7:

[Generic] Salvio isn't exactly what I would call a typical "Italian name". Usually the name would be either Salvo (no i) or Silvio (double i); and this second option is already used once. Regardless, all 8 instances should be updated to use the same name.
[74%] “Uh... is that harder?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly a single one.

Liz

@Terabyte That's interesting. It's definitely Salvio, but wouldn't be the first time we had a slightly weird name to deal with. There's... https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alessandro_Salvio at least?

Terabyte

@Liz Indeed, the name Salvio does exist too, but it's an extremely rare variant compared to the other 2 mainstream names I mentioned. (I actually had to search to be sure it even existed at all... lol)

Not a big deal anyway, but it just somehow felt 'wrong' for an Italian name. I thought it was a case of Engrish and that's why I mentioned it. 😋

Liz

@Terabyte Nah, it's cool to know! I appreciate hearing about it.

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Volume 10 - Part 8:

[66%] from the ceiling. Ashe ran for the exit, Sousuke ► It should be As he (space).

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Volume 10 - Part 9:

[24%] “Your team that brought it down,” Leonard ► Remove that.
[75%] My father was investigating it before he died. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[75%] “It’s been there since the 80s?” Leonard asked ► It should be Lemon.

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Volume 10 - Part 10:

[Generic] Leonard is calling Chidori the Whispering but it feels a bit off somehow. Wouldn't the Whisperer be better? Or did you avoid the option because it's too similar to Whispered? (That's just me nitpicking a bit though. I have no idea what the original JP text is.)

Liz

@Terabyte Yeah, the furigana is "whispering" (in English) so if we get an anime of this part I assume they'll be saying that out loud. I'd have done whisperer if it was up to me for sure.

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Volume 10 - Part 11:

[37%] darkness: it Leonard Testarossa and Chidori Kaname. ► Remove it. Or should it be it was?

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Volume 10 - Part 12:

[Generic] The 3 instances of canceller should instead be canceler (single L).
[22%] Lonely little Melissa,. I wanted to be sweeter ► Duplicate punctuation.
[57%] wasn’t reckless in its approach. but if it came ► Wrong punctuation or But (Capitalized)?

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Volume 11 - Part 1:

[68%] the gun in his son’s hands. “Good to see you,” ► It should be a period.

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Volume 11 - Part 2:

[84%] <img src="- Dark-haired man chucks off his headset"> ► Missing illustration.

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Volume 11 - Part 3:

[59%] he’d been unable to protect him. But that was all. ► It should be them (Fowler's wife and children).
[95%] insert4.jpg ► This image is out of place. It should have been in part 2. (See the error I posted previously about Volume 11 - Part 2.)

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Volume 11 - Part 5:

[34%] no matter how strong the enemy, she would overcome. ► It should be overcome it / overcome them?
[51%] I can just do whatever I want. Whatever I want.... ► It should be 3 periods.