Record of Wortenia War - Corrections Topic
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This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Record of Wortenia War.
Currently in prepublication: Volume 10!
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Volume 9 - Part 1:
[Generic] The name Kouichirou is writtenIt's confirmed that the name's been changed to Koichiro.61 times
asKoichiro
in this part. (Or did the name change at some point?)- [6%] monikers,
“the nightless cities”,
these districts ► Move the comma inside the quotes. - [26%] his orders until now,
Zhen
had been struggling to ► It should be Zheng. - [59%] they said
‘help us to some of your coins’,
but ► Move the comma inside the quotes. - [82%] but it looks like
they’d
seen their share of battles. ► It should be they’ve.
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Volume 9 - Part 2:
[Generic] The name Kouichirou is written another44 times
asKoichiro
in this part.- @ZackZeal could you confirm what the correct name is? Also, Grindiana's surname as well since I'm still confused about it, too. 😋
- [20%] attacked identified himself as Koichiro
Mikoshiba..
► Duplicateperiod
.Also, seeGeneric issue
above. [59%] queen, the Vixen of the North, GrindianaHelnecharles
. ► It should be Helnescharles (additional s)?- [64%] northern front armies,
marshalled
by the crown prince. ► It should be marshaled (US spelling).
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@Terabyte said in Record of Wortenia War - Corrections Topic:
could you confirm what the correct name is? Also, Grindiana's surname as well since I'm still confused about it, too.
It's Koichiro - no long vowels, hence Ryoma being Ryoma and not Ryouma.
Grindiana's surname is Helnecharles.
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@ZackZeal Thanks for the clarification. I've edited my posts. 😉
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Volume 9 - Part 3:
- [11%] I did everything I could. The
only
left to do now is to ► It should be only thing. - [19%] called the
“Petals of the Northern Wind”,
a group ► Move the comma inside the quotes. - [22%] Petals of the
North
Wind would be sold off to slavery. ► It should be Northern. - [28%] this. The
Northern Wind Petals
tried to make a living ► It should be Petals of the Northern Wind? - [67%]
insert10.jpg
► The illustration is already used at 42%. The one here is either aduplicate
placed wrongly or it should be a different image.
- [11%] I did everything I could. The
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@Terabyte said in Record of Wortenia War - Corrections Topic:
[67%] insert10.jpg ► The illustration is already used at 42%. The one here is either a duplicate placed wrongly or it should be a different image.
Fixed!
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Volume 9 - Part 4:
- [3%] positions of ensuring the fort’s
defences
and being in ► It should be defenses (US spelling). - [15%] of Joshua’s forces, though
; Only
a few hundred to ► It should be either a period or only (lowercase). - [23%] countries in all directions, meaning
Shadina
couldn’t ► It should be Shardina. - [25%] knights were compared to commoners,
It
could be ► It should be it (lowercase). - [35%] Rising from the bed, he
rings
the bell sitting at his ► It should be rang? - [45%] it would burn if the fire were to begin from
=
within. ► Remove extra=
character. - [46%] As mighty
a
Fort Notis may be, all of its defensive ► It should be as? - [53%] “What?! What in the world happened...
!?
” Moore’s ► This series uses ?! usually. - [60%] “Wh-
Why....
?” ► It should be 3 periods. - [63%] the Wortenia Peninsula in the Kingdom of
Rhodesia
. ► It should be Rhoadseria.
- [3%] positions of ensuring the fort’s
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Volume 9 - Part 5:
- [11%] Sara
didn’t
notice the way her shoulders shivered, ► Given the context, it should be did? - [24%] it would have been more
lethal,but
ordinary water ► Missing space. - [28%] He went from a vertical slash to
an
horizontal one. ► It should be a. - [28%] The surrounding
O&’ltormean
and Helnesgoulan ► It should be O’ltormean. Remove&
. - [50%] Everyone was confident Moore was
waning
. ► It should be winning. - [53%] Moore would pay a steep price,
And
once he used ► It should be and (lowercase). - [55%] upper left position, and as it
travelled
to the right, ► It should be traveled (US spelling). - [97%] in these
conditions.In
which case, there could ► Missing space.
- [11%] Sara
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Volume 9 - Part 6:
- [4%] the meaning of the phrase,
‘ignorance is bliss’..
► Duplicateperiod
+ move the period inside the quotes. - [36%] tormented Chris for a long
time,
The young knight ► It should be a period. - [40%] the God of Light Meneos was
worshipped
, and the ► It should be worshiped (US spelling). - [61%] go ahead and do that,”
The
Pope clapped his hands ► It should be the (lowercase)? - [86%] father worrying over his daughter’s wellbeing,”
He
said. ► It should be he (lowercase)? - [95%] that much, the conclusion he’d come
towas
obvious. ► It should be to was (space). - [99%] who helped with the publishing of
volume 7
, as well ► It should be volume 9?
- [4%] the meaning of the phrase,
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Hi @ZackZeal see below for errors I have found and some oddities that may need correcting :) Thanks a bunch for getting this translated!
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Volume 09 - Part 1:
[23%] But from the time he received his orders until now,Already mentionedZhen
had been ► Correct to Zheng- [30%] At that moment,
Liu
had made himself into a precision ► Correct to Zheng
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Volume 09 - Part 2:
- [23%] "Yes, the mystery man we attacked identified himself as Koichiro
Mikoshiba..
► Correct to one or three full-stops - [35%] "Is
It
really you, Koichiro...?" ► Correct to Lowercase
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Volume 09 - Part 3:
[5%] TheAlready mentionedonly left
to do now is to keep believing and move forward. ► Add thing- [35%] And among those monsters, the Eagle Lord was considered
on
a class that was ► Should this be in?
1. 'And among those monsters, the Eagle Lord was considered in a class that was' - [52%] Ryoma's hands scanned over
the
Kikoku, the sword sheathed at his waist, ► Consider removing - no other named swords have been given the same treatment with 'the' placed before them that I can remember. Also can't see the point of it. - [58%] The air rumbled
as
little by littleas
two twisters formed, accompanied by the rolling of thunder. ► Remove one or the other
1. 'The air rumbled little by little as two twisters formed, accompanied by the rolling of thunder.'
2. 'The air rumbled as little by little two twisters formed, accompanied by the rolling of thunder.'
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Volume 09 - Part 4:
- [15%] Reading his commander's resolve from his expression, the aide
nods
. ► Correct to nodded [23%] True, given how much stronger knights were compared to commoners,Already mentionedIt
could be quelled ► Lowercase the 'It'[30%] Rising from the bed, heAlready mentionedrings
the bell sitting at his bedside ► Correct to rang[38%] it would burn if the fire were to begin fromAlready mentioned=within
. ► Remove '='- [38%] Everyone was saying whatever came to mind, and the
Xaroodian
soldiers ► Correct to Helnesgoulan - [46%] Don't be shy and
put
as much as possible! ► Add on OR correct to use
1. 'Don't be shy and put on as much as possible!'
2. 'Don't be shy and use as much as possible!' - [46%] Surprised to find that Moore had already changed into his armor, the aide
continues
. ► Correct to continued - [53%] Normally, no one would have worked up the nerve to stand in the way of someone in such a
loft
station. ► Correct to lofty [53%] the governor of the Wortenia Peninsula in the Kingdom ofAlready mentionedRhodesia
. ► Correct to Rhodseria- [69%] Watching them leave, Moore
nods
lightly andturns
to Ryoma, who was still smiling and made no signs of moving. ► Correct to nodded AND turned
1. 'Watching them leave, Moore nodded lightly and turned to Ryoma, who was still smiling and made no signs of moving.' - [69%] They couldn't afford to make the fact a chief vassal of the Empire was murdered in the Emperor's castle and that his killer got away known to the general public. ► Please add some punctuation... especially before known
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Volume 09 - Part 5:
- [0%] A chime-like voice accompanied by the clatter of
clangering
armorreaches
her ears. ► Correct to clanging (clangering just sounds wrong and no dictionaries show it) AND reached
1. 'A chime-like voice accompanied by the clatter of clanging armor reached her ears.' - [0%] This issue spans over most of the dialogue on this page, it feels awkward and doesn't clearly differentiate which twin is speaking.
'"Sara, how are things going on your side?"' - then after Sara replies the next dialogue is '"And how did things go on your side?" Laura asked.' ► Should this be Sara, with the Sara in the next dialogue replace with Laura? Is this Laura asking Sara the same thing twice? I can't easily find if one of the twins names are accidentally swapped, so it might be worth going back to the source to find out which order the dialogue is actually in. - [7%] both as a practitioner of thaumaturgy and
as warrior
. ► Add a - [14%] The next moment, a
crescent, invisible
something was fired along that slash's trajectory, ► Consider adding of
1. 'The next moment, a crescent, of invisible something was fired along that slash's trajectory,' [21%] or rock it would have been moreAlready mentionedlethal,but
ordinary water didn't have ► Add space- [21%] Why was he
doing so
deliberately? ► Consider adding it
1. 'Why was he doing it so deliberately?' [28%] The surroundingAlready mentionedO&'ltormean
and Helnesgoulan knights ► Remove &[42%] Everyone was confident Moore was waning. ► Either Moore is winning or Ryoma is waning.Already mentioned- [50%] By comparison, a typical one-handed sword weighs an
average 1.5
kilograms. ► Consider adding of - [85%] Multiple mentions of Julianus the first do not have
I
after them which is contradictory to the usage in Part 6. - [85%]
Julanus'
heart
, by contrast, was overcome by an odd sensation that had clouded over hisheart
. ► Correct to Julianus' OR Julianus I's ALSO consider revising the double use of heart.
1. 'Julianus' heart, by contrast, was overcome by an odd sensation that had clouded over his mind.'
2. 'Julianus I's heart, by contrast, was overcome by an odd sensation that had clouded over his mind.'
3. 'Julianus, by contrast, was overcome by an odd sensation that had clouded over his heart.' - [85%] Your Majesty, and that's why
i'm
confident that you will agree ► Capitalise theI
[92%] O'ltormea's land was impossible in theseAlready mentionedconditions.In
which case, ► Add space
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Volume 09 - Part 6:
- [6%] Anything
Julianus
did now would likely fail ► Correct to Julianus I - [25%] Its southern borders were constantly in a
constant
state of tension. ► Reword as it is clumsy use of wording.
1. 'Its southern borders were constantly in a state of tension.'
2. 'Its southern borders were constantly in a state of perpetual tension.' - [25%] "Yes, I'll have to return to Rhoadseria
per
haste, as well... ► Correct to post
1. '"Yes, I'll have to return to Rhoadseria post haste, as well...' - [31%] To that end, she wanted to see him
to
come to the correct answer on his own. ► Remove as superfluous
1. 'To that end, she wanted to see him come to the correct answer on his own.' - [50%] It's impossible, and
Julianus
knows it. ► Correct to Julianus I - [50%] "... with that army still in their
hands
, and pulling that army back..." ► Correct to lands - [56%] After a few
moments of long
silence, the man suddenly spoke. ► Consider rearranging words
1. 'After a few long moments of silence, the man suddenly spoke.' - [56%] "Yes. We'll scout things out
so
if he's in league with them, and if he isn't..." ► Correct to to see
1. '"Yes. We'll scout things out to see if he's in league with them, and if he isn't..."' - [68%] continents could only summon a few hundred otherworlders every
day
. ► Check, but should correct to year
1. 'continents could only summon a few hundred otherworlders every year. ' - [68%] And the people it summoned were essentially selected
in
random. ► Correct to at
1. 'And the people it summoned were essentially selected at random.' [93%] After hearing that much, the conclusion he'd comeAlready mentionedtowas
obvious. ► Add space[93%] I would like to extend my thanks to the editors who helped with the publishing of volumeAlready mentioned7
, as well ► Correct to 9
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Volume 10 - Part 1:
- [42%] the recoil of that movement
travelled
up from ► It should be traveled (US spelling). - [43%] It relied not on
cancelling
out the attack with ► It should be canceling (US spelling). - [50%] The
principal
behind it was simple: the attack ► It should be principle.
- [42%] the recoil of that movement
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Volume 10 - Part 2:
- [8%] explanation for such
an
heroic feat, perhaps. ► It should be a.
- [8%] explanation for such