Tearmoon Empire - Corrections Topic

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Volume 6 - Part 4:

[5%] them muttered a “just keep an eye out then”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.
[31%] Gil, if it please you. It’ll please me, at least. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[44%] and influence almost rivalled the emperor’s, ► It should be rivaled (US spelling).
[52%] “This is... My, where am I?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a single one.
[79%] What does our mushroom sense tell us? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[93%] manual dexterity that rivalled the sleights of ► It should be rivaled (US spelling).

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Volume 6 - Part 5:

[6%] to elicit any acknowledgement. She realized that ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
[72%] inconvenient truths, Mis was second to none. ► It should be Mia.
[89%] wrong?” she asked with a inquisitive tilt of the ► It should be an.

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Volume 6 - Part 6:

[16%] the strike by a hair’s margin.. It was as ► Duplicate period.
[24%] To challenge an definitively superior foe ► It should be a.

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Volume 6 - Part 7:

[2%] of her skirt, she signalled for him to begin. ► It should be signaled (US spelling).
[56%] fate should have signalled the end of her ► It should be signaled (US spelling).
[80%] “Take a— Huh?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a single one.

Libri Liberorum

Volume 6 part 7:

the creature known as M. Princessus

This violates species naming in several ways. The genus name is capitalized and often abbreviated to a single letter (as here) but the species name is not capitalized, hence "M. princessus".

Assuming M is for Mia, they are the wrong way around: the ordering is generic to specific, hence it should be "P. mia" or "Princessus mia".

Having said all that, this is a light novel, not a biology text, and the original reads better than all of my alternatives.

DeiLight

@libri-liberorum Very good point. I actually thought about this for a bit when I was writing the draft. The emphasis I wanted is on the "princess," so P. mia doesn't work. Princessus mia does, but I sort of wanted the abbreviation, as it's the format I believe to be most familiar to people in writing and most easily evokes scientific naming. To that end, I used princessus as the species.

For those of you whose sanity suffers from this usage, feel free to assume the M. in M. princessus is a more generic classification. Moon, maybe. Her binomial nomenclature is Moon princessus.

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Volume 6 - Part 8:

[41%] she regarded the excited child fondly . ► Remove extra space.
[65%] of her consciousness left her as well.. ► Duplicate period.

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Volume 6 - Part 9:

[7%] Citrina stepped up to them, almost in defence of Bel, ► It should be defense (US spelling).

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Volume 6 - Part 10:

[40%] was staring down an opponent rivalling Remno’s ► It should be rivaling (US spelling).
[44%] assassin whose prowess rivalled the likes of Dion ► It should be rivaled (US spelling).
[52%] future for which they yearned.Until the dogged will ► Missing space.
[64%] Abandoning all semblance of defence, he leaned in ► It should be defense (US spelling).

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Volume 6 - Part 11:

[17%] so long as we do so in the corect fashion. ► It should be correct.
[83%] Mia had given Ludwig free reign over his ► It should be rein.

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Volume 6 - Part 12:

[26%] helping Her Highness escape.”Tears fell from the ► Missing space.
[49%] “Judgment? What do you mean? asked Mia. “What ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[71%] anyone should keep their mouth, Barbara, it is you.” ► It should be mouth shut.

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Volume 6 - Part 13:

[3%] the guilt of being descendents of conspirators, ► It should be descendants.
[23%] At that, Mia hastily signalled for him to stop. ► It should be signaled (US spelling).
[87%] Hmm... I guess that would be very nice..” ► Duplicate period. (Or should it be 3 periods?)
[90%] say, their philosophies, values, and faiths. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.

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Volume 6 - Part 14:

[70%] Mia’s Diary of Gluttony ► The usual title format is missing.
[85%] Highly recommended Recommend ✰x5 ► Duplicate recommended, and one is Capitalized, too. Error or on purpose?
[92%] apologize for Mia’s behaviour. ► It should be behavior (US spelling).

supera1998

Volume 6 - Part 4

[34%] "expected was for the Great Detester of All Things "Imperia" - l is missing. It should be Imperial

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Volume 7 - Part 1:

[9%] to speak her mind.“Actually, Lord ► Missing space.
[25%] “All I can say is.. the realization ► It should be 3 periods.
[31%] what ministry officials for. Or the ► It should be were for?

pcj

Volume 7 - Part 1:

[43%] in the midst of debarking >> while my dictionary agrees with your usage here, I've never heard this word used this way before. To me, debarking is what you do to a dead tree before cutting it into lumber (which is, indeed, the other definition of the word in the dictionary). Maybe it should be disembarking?

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Volume 7 - Part 2:

[6%] ostensibly irrational behaviour Mia kept displaying. ► It should be behavior (US spelling).
[14%] of noble taste buds.In any case, while said nobles ► Missing space.
[58%] a future in which Mia sat the throne as its first-ever ► It should be sat on.

jazzyjeoff

Vol 7, part 3, 52%

“The motion was natural1almost subconscious”
The number 1 is randomly inserted in the sentence.

Vol 7, part 2 , %34 Minor continuity question— Rafina is referred to as an early teen— about the same age as Mia. Isn’t she older than that by volume 7? She was described as 14 in the first book—2 years older than Mia.

zchronos

Vol. 7, part 3, 29%
"Ruby leaned back and sipped her team"
her tea?

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Volume 7 - Part 3:

[18%] the moon, and they were to be united as one ► Missing period.
~~[31%] back and sipped her team, evidently trying to ► It should be tea.~~ Already reported.
[55%] farmers as the descendents of serfs before.” ► It should be descendants.
[56%] The motion was natural1almost subconscious ► It should be natural, almost (remove 1; add space + comma)?