Altina the Sword Princess - Corrections Topic
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0% - Until the Queen's Navy were defeated - While the Navy is indeed made up of a multitude, the Navy itself is technically singular, so should be "was defeated" here. -
@zwabbit Thank you! This correction has been made.
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Volume 9 part 1
Jessica's gesture had served one important purpose:
Then two important purposes are described.
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Volume 9 - Part 1
- [38%] their troops had endured one large-scale battle
another
>> should be after another
- [38%] their troops had endured one large-scale battle
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@pcj Thank you!
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Volume 9 - Part 2:
- [71%] “Well, we’ve gotta play it
safe....
” ► It should be 3 periods.
- [71%] “Well, we’ve gotta play it
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Volume 9 Part 3 is missing an image:
Unable to download image with URL: 'BASTIAN WITH DAGGER GUARDING ELIZE'.
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@pcj I reported it earlier in Discord. It's been fixed already. 🙃
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v9 p3 32%: Bastian had made off with the dagger about half a month ago,
Maybe I missed something by skipping Loose Threads, but didn't Bastian take the dagger when leaving for his High Britannia study abroad. I'm pretty sure that was longer than 2 weeks ago, so something seems wrong here.
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@hatguy12 You're right, it should be half a year.
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@hatguy12 said in Altina the Sword Princess - Corrections Topic:
Maybe I missed something by skipping Loose Threads, but
It's up to you whether you read it or not, but I'd like to heartily recommend you give Loose Threads a chance if you ever have the time. It doesn't simply contain random filler content but actually shows some good backstory and side-story for various characters and has some hilarious scenes.
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@shiny I'll concur with shiny and also point out that at least half of it is actually plot-relevant to the main story as well (and there are things in volume 9 that will leave you semi-lost if you didn't read the parts leading up to it in Loose Threads).
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@pcj said in Altina the Sword Princess - Corrections Topic:
@shiny I'll concur with shiny and also point out that at least half of it is actually plot-relevant to the main story as well (and there are things in volume 9 that will leave you semi-lost if you didn't read the parts leading up to it in Loose Threads).
Agreed, a good chunk helps explain a lot in terms of past and present plots (and who knows how much it will help with future plot and character points).
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Volume 9 - Part 4:
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Chapter 3: Late-Night Coffee
► The usual title format is missing.
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At about 67%, there is reference to Regis's
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@someoldguy Thank you! Correction has been made.
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Grebeauvoir was a provincial city spread across a steep mountain range, and situated at the base of numerous hills.
This confused me greatly. I think "spread across" needs to say something different. How can it be both on the mountains and yet at the base of the hills? Perhaps the province spreads across mountains but the city is situated at the base of the hills?
Eventually I get a description "The city essentially lay in a basin among the mountains" and a map, which did make sense.
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Volume 9 - Part 7:
- [22%] before the plan commenced,
“
he explained. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is astarting
one.
- [22%] before the plan commenced,
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Volume 09 - Part 7:
- [11%] spread oil around the capital or
seawater
over the plains. ► Should be freshwater they filled barrels from lakes...
- [11%] spread oil around the capital or
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Volume 10 - Part 5:
- [27%] already feeling
at one
with the mare. ► It should be as one?
- [27%] already feeling