I Shall Survive Using Potions! - Corrections Topic
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This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for I Shall Survive Using Potions!
Currently in prepublication: Volume 7!
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Volume 6 - Part 1:
- [4%] for emergencies and other important situations!
” ”
► Duplicateclosing double quote
. - [20%] greatest threat, which is
you,
the first prince...” ► Removeyou,
(comma included). Kaoru's talking to Serge and not Brancott's first prince. (He's not even there?) - [26%] no intention of helping one side of a mortal
war .
” ► Removespace
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- [4%] for emergencies and other important situations!
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Volume 6 - Part 2:
- [4%] they stopped hearing from him
with him
. It was ► Removewith him
. - [22%]
insert3.jpg
► This is either thewrong illustration
or it's placed in thewrong spot
. - [35%] dining hall in Brancott, were one
in
the same, ► It should be and. - [46%] Chapter
40
: Final Moments ► It should be 44? The last chapter in part 1 was Chapter 43: The Battle Begins. - [51%]
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► This is either thewrong illustration
or it's placed in thewrong spot
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► This is either thewrong illustration
or it's placed in thewrong spot
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- [4%] they stopped hearing from him
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V6 P3 25%:
but she knew that Kaoru had a special place in her heart forthem Even
now that she was dead
Missing period.At 87%, Kaoru's narration says "just over a year", but it's been five years (Kaoru time) since she initially entered this world.
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Volume 6 - Part 3:
- [0%] her unbridled rage and hatred against the
enemy .
► Remove extraspace
. - [83%] It was Reiko Kuon in her
fifteen year old
body, ► It should be fifteen-year-old (hyphens). - [83%] her body was that of a
fifteen year old
, it was ► It should be fifteen-year-old (hyphens).
- [0%] her unbridled rage and hatred against the
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Then, the first prince and newly crowned king of
Balmore
negotiated a peace treaty with the Kingdom of Balmore,Brancott
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Volume 6 - Part 4:
- [9%] “I thought I was gonna
die...
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [10%]
And when you die,
you’re removed from your ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing. (Or merge it with the previous paragraph; it's all Reiko talking.) - [63%] that Kaoru
had
been made out as some villain. ► It should be had not / hadn’t? [69%] and newly crowned king ofAlready reported.Balmore
negotiated ► It should be Brancott.
- [9%] “I thought I was gonna
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Volume 6 - Part 4
- [61%] If you wanted to research a country,
picking
their official history. >> should be pick
- [61%] If you wanted to research a country,
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Volume 6 - Part 5:
- [35%] these days we do have skilled
staff ,
so we mix it ► Remove extraspace
. - [45%] About Fran saving the
continent...,it
wasn’t as if ► Replace thecomma
with a space
- [35%] these days we do have skilled
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Volume 6 - Part 6:
- [11%] the first Ed Silver once
told me
that if the Goddess ► It should be said or it implies Ed said it directly to him. (He's the twelfth generation so Ed's already dead at this point.) Also, you might want to check the next dialogue, too. - [59%] Tweet tweet tweet tweet tweet
!Tweet
tweet tweet ► Missing space.
- [11%] the first Ed Silver once
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V6P6 60%:
And so, we went off of thestreet
and into a thicket where we couldn’t be spotted. We didn’t want to be caught illegally camping out in the open, especially not somewhere we could be seen from thestreet
. If you’re gonna camp, you have to do it somewhere where you can’t be seen.Street is usually used in a town or city; road fits the circumstance better.
I brought out chairs and a table, a cooking table, a simple
furnace
, a water tank, cookware, and some ingredients, then got straight to making dinner.stove fits American usage better. We use furnaces to heat houses.
Later, she describes the "furnace" as being like a camping/cooking fire.
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Volume 6 - Part 7:
- [3%] that came from a
far-away
land. They might discuss ► It should be far away (space; which is also used later on) or faraway (no hyphen). - [62%] the realtor chased
me
away as soon as they saw us... ► It should be us?
- [3%] that came from a
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Volume 6 - Part 8
- [50%] No one dared
denied
their beliefsand branded
it as heresy. >> should be: no one dared to deny their beliefs or brand it as heresy.
- [50%] No one dared
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Volume 6 - Part 8:
- [34%] came to an end. Do you all realize what this
means?
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [53%] In other words,
worshipping
any other god was seen ► It should be worshiping (US spelling). - [48%] from Lady Celestine’s order that tries to give us
flak...
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [54%] No one
dared denied
their beliefs andbranded it
as heresy. ► It should be dared to deny / brand them (their beliefs; plural) or denied / branded them? - [71%] the others
said.“
Achille and I have a child as well...” ► Missing space. - [83%] as the “three vows of the
Silver Horse
,” eventually ► Should this be Silver Breed like the story's title and previous instances?
- [34%] came to an end. Do you all realize what this
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@Terabyte said in I Shall Survive Using Potions! - Corrections Topic:
[71%] the others said.“Achille and I have a child as well...” ► Missing space.
This line also should have a paragraph break, because of the change of speaker.
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Volume 6 Part 8
Those little stories were a great epilogue. Made me cry.
No one dared denied their beliefs and branded it as heresy. — 50%
“No one dared deny their beliefs or brand it as heresy.”
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Volume 7 - Part 1:
- [49%] main items that would cover our living
expenses .
► Remove extraspace
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themselves.I
could even teach them ► Missing space.
- [49%] main items that would cover our living
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Volume 7 - Part 2:
- [54%] put me out of reach of
-not
just thugs and small-time ► It should be not (removedash
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- [54%] put me out of reach of
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Volume 7 - Part 2:
- [70%] let’s not make anything that
people
would make people go crazy and take it by force >> remove this word
- [70%] let’s not make anything that
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Volume 7 - Part 3:
- [48%] make products out of it,
Like
jerky and ► It should be like (lowercase). - [60%] twenties if this had
beenJapan
. Locally, ► It should be been Japan (space). - [98%] division. As
such.
we started getting ► It should be a comma.
- [48%] make products out of it,