Monster Tamer - Corrections Topic

[lovelight]

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Monster Tamer.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 4!

[Jon Mitchell]

not to be too impatient- but it's not up yet/for me top read/comment/correct?

[Lily Garden]

@lovelight said in Monster Tamer - Corrections Topic:

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Slayers.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 3!

Slayers? Methinks this is a typo or we have a case of quantum entanglement of narratives 😁

[Rahul Balaggan]

I edited the opening post.

[Terabyte]

Volume 3 - Part 1:

• [66%] center stage. Both The students and the knights ► It should be the (lowercase).

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Volume 3 - Part 2:

• [47%] A powerful sense of discomfort shook my brian. ► It should be brain.

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Volume 3 - Part 3:

• [60%] returning her gaze to LIly. “You know Takaya Jun, ► It should be Lily (lowercase i).

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Volume 3 - Part 4:

• [45%] a similar ring, although her’s was a different color. ► It should be hers.

[Iseguy]

Volume 3 Part 5

“It’s fine, it’s fine. We’ve got nothing to do anyway,” he said as he pushed Shiran’s back into the hallway.

“pushed Shiran back”

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Volume 3 - Part 6:

• [15%] show it to him one day. I no longer had a choice.. ► Duplicate period.
• [19%] to picture from her meagre change in expression, ► It should be meager (US spelling).

[Iseguy]

Volume 3 Part 6

Mana cocked her head then answered me in a content manner.

contented

Mana’s face was tinged a faint red as she held her own body over her somewhat disheveled clothes.

Gave me the wrong visual. Maybe “through”?

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Volume 3 - Part 7:

• [44%] So, didn’t it make perfect sense to doubt her Wasn’t it ► Missing question mark.

[Iseguy]

Volume 3 Part 7

Back during the fight with the then nameless Gerbera,

“then-nameless”

“You need to put in the effort to realize your dreams. Your’s is one which can be fulfilled, after all.”

“Yours”

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Volume 3 - Part 8:

• [15%] “Guh....” ► It should be 3 periods.
• [17%] “Wha—?! ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
• [86%] Her puppet feet tread through the soft earth. ► It should be treaded?

[Iseguy]

Volume 3 Part 8

She couldn’t say anymore.

“any more.”

Even she, who had lived far longer than I, had no idea what was going.

“going on.”

she was able to take chase while remaining out of visible range.

“give chase”

Her puppet feet tread through the soft earth. The way she dragged along was similar to a plow reclaiming ground.

“trod through”.
“plodded” or “stomped” would also be better than “dragged”, unless Mana was being dragged. The metaphorical meaning, if any, is getting lost in context.

[Terabyte]

Volume 4 - Part 1:

• [55%] we visitors possessed really all that impressive...?” ► No dialogue here. Remove the extra closing double quote.

[Iseguy]

Volume 4 part 1

Shiran was the first human I met since being teleported here—

“First local human”, technically. Can we still use the word “native”?

I got to hear about another amusing story too.

“story, too.”

[Khaos]

Volume 4 - Part 2:

• [80%] Gooseflesh ran down my skin,

Not sure if the term 'gooseflesh' was used for a specific reason, but with the way this is worded, I think 'goosebumps' is the better fit.

Otherwise if it was something like, 'Suddenly I had gooseflesh'. I think it would work.

[Terabyte]

Volume 4 - Part 3:

• [27%] “From what I can see, Takahira was engaged in combat ► It should be Takahiro.

[Terabyte]

Volume 4 - Part 4:

• [General] When referring to sprite(s) the wrong(?) word spirit(s) is used 5 times.
• [68%] down? Any hope of defeating him was still meagre, however. ► It should be meager (US spelling).
• [83%] surpassed a rare specimen of another magical puppet, Rose. ► It should be a rare magical puppet specimen?
• [97%] also no telling if this “someone’ was tying together more than just ► The closing double quote is wrongly a single one.