Monster Tamer - Corrections Topic

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Volume 7 - Part 3:

[2%] in the neighbouring villages, they would be ► It should be neighboring (US spelling).
[48%] “Sorry for having you stay with me, Kei.”. ► Remove duplicate period after the quote.

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Volume 7 - Part 4:

[14%] in Aker. And sense they’d approached us ► It should be since?
[83%] ► Ayame's speech. Remove the italic format and wrap it in square brackets instead.

“Mhm. Gerbera like, gave it a big tug with her threads, then it went wham!”

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Volume 7 - Part 5:

[49%] some dried meat, Kei suddenly spoke up. ► It should be Shiran?
[51%] the thick fog, I‘d only seen its silhouette. ► It should be I’d (different ’ ).

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Volume 7 - Part 6:

[64%] “No... Everyyy—one... Know... “ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a starting one. Also, remove the extra space before it.
[90%] “I think it’s usually the other way around?”’ ► Remove extra single quote at the end.

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Volume 7 - Part 7:

[Generic] At first the Misty Lodge's power is described (twice) as rewrite reality, but later on it changes to overwrite/overwritten reality. While the words are similar the meaning is slightly different. Make it consistent.

thubar2000

I'd also already increaed my sensitivity by training with Asarina to communicate through the mental path without speaking, so we could act in consort.

->

I'd also already increaed my sensitivity by training with Asarina to communicate through the mental path without speaking, so we could act in concert.

I don't think that "in consort" is used like that.

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Volume 7 - Part 10:

[4%] related to my body; It was purely an emotional ► It should be it (lowercase).

Gamen

V8p3
[5%] In other words, the methal path had formed a connection before we’d even met. -> mental

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Volume 8 - Part 5:

[7%] “Oh, that sounds great, Matser,” Lily chimed in. ► It should be Master.
[15%] close to me. It’ll be big problem if you get lost.” ► It should be a big.
[15%] “Lost....” Lobivia muttered. Then she suddenly ► It should be 3 periods.

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Volume 8 - Part 8:

[11%] nothing to lose by knowing of a precedence.” ► Maybe precedent?
[14%] someone who prefered to remain in dragon ► It should be preferred.
[24%] a major role in molding his childrens’ egos. ► It should be children’s.

Weasalopes

@terabyte said in Monster Tamer - Corrections Topic:

[11%] nothing to lose by knowing of a precedence.” ► Maybe precedent?

Yeah... I think 'precedence' is a plural kinda thing, as in "Order of Precedence", while 'precedent' is singular.

[24%] a major role in molding his childrens’ egos. ► It should be children’s.

Ah.
One offspring: child
Multiple offspring: children

Children is already a plural reference.

Weasalopes

V8P10:

So long as I was withLily
So long as I was with Lily

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Volume 8 - Part 10:

[29%] “My eyes darted about in confusion. “Huh? ► The dialogue starts later. Remove extra starting double quote at the start.
[51%] she was reading, Her flaxen hair swaying ► It should be her (lowercase).
~~[62%] So long as I was withLily, I couldn’t sever ► Missing space.~~ Already reported.
[92%] It was a voice I was very familiar with.. ► Duplicate period.

Gamen

V8p10
[13%] I put down the wooden sword and shield I’d still been holding and stood them up -> stood up
[37%] Mrgh. Big words. my sister -> My

GeorgeMTO

V9P2 0% - two elves greaty, especially Kei - greatly

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Volume 9 - Part 5:

[65%] “I’ve heard from Siran that there are ► It should be Shiran.

Nekoatl

Vol. 9 Part 3

21% a swarm of monsters could become a threat that even cheaters couldn't hold out against them.
-> a swarm of monsters could become a threat that even cheaters couldn't hold out against.
OR a swarm of monsters could become such a threat that even cheaters couldn't hold out against them.

Nekoatl

Vol. 9 Part 6

94% not even a dropl. -> not even a drop.

Iseguy

9.6

It's *strewed" about,

“strewn” is by far the more common conjugation

Nekoatl

Vol. 9 Part 7

61% so I'd hurt her to do. -> so I'd hurt her to do so.