Demon Lord, Retry! - Corrections Topic
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This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Demon Lord, Retry!
Currently in prepublication: Volume 8!
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Volume 6 - Part 1:
- [32%] but simply an
acknowledgement
that humans were ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling). - [51%] voice and shouted.
hat
tasted like plain-old water ► It should be What? - [85%] the manufactured sense of
fulfilment
. At this rate, ► It should be fulfillment (US spelling).
- [32%] but simply an
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V6 P2 27%:
Nowm
he planned to renovate the structure for actual battle.
Now31%:
Xenobia became Zenobia.36%:
“How...Could
this have happened...!?”
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Volume 6 - Part 2:
- [12%] one and only weakness,
And
intended to take her ► It should be and (lowercase). - [26%] ceremonial purposes until now.
Nowm
he planned ► It should be Now. (And, maybe, change the precedinguntil now
with so far to avoid a duplicate?) - [28%] What merit is there
and
you cutting down the beast ► It should be in. - [31%] “
Certainly, you jest.
” Azur deeply bowed, as if ► Remove thecomma
? [32%] all tools at my disposal.Already reported.Zenobia
, the Tzardom, ► It should be Xenobia.- [35%] such extreme lengths in a foreign
nation...? “
► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly astarting
one. Also, remove theextra space
before it. - [55%]
Hanzo
spread her fan and snickered, seeing how ► It should be Kongming. - [72%] and silverware.
One one
would find it difficult to ► Duplicateone
. - [94%] a similar expression. There was
so
sign of valor ► It should be no.
- [12%] one and only weakness,
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Volume 6 - Part 3:
- [9%] closest being to the Great Light and
consider
its voice ► It should be considered. - [93%] our job,” Monkey Magic chimed in.
We’re gonna party
► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing. - [94%] Monkey Magic said as
h pointed
to Weeb. He glared ► It should be he pointed.
- [9%] closest being to the Great Light and
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V6 P4 40%:
In fact, he was sure that the people’s hearts would leave the Demon Lord at once, their grudge leading to the/
inevitable revolution that he feared above all.
Stray slash character. -
Volume 6 - Part 4:
[40%] their grudge leading toAlready reported.the/
inevitable revolution ► Remove random/
character.- [69%] “
Um..
! You’ll get your hands dirty, Master Demon ► It should be 3 periods. - [76%] their skin was supple and their hair
were
luscious. ► It should be was?
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Volume 6 - Part 5:
- [9%] “
Your
blushing, Grandpa. That’s kind of cute, ► It should be You’re. - [49%] so I’m going to set up a refuge, just in
case.
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [93%] Neither of them
seem
troubled by the number, ► It should be seemed?
- [9%] “
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V6 P5 50%:
There was a second-floor loft thatleft
to the attic.
Really think this should be led65%:
demanding to see the Demon Lordin flesh
.
in the flesh is more common96%:
blot out theson
sun to make the metaphor work -
V6 P6 0%:
suggestive ofconsistent
modifications by Yu.
Not sure if consistent is the correct word here. Either constant or ongoing would be more appropriate. -
Volume 6 - Part 7:
- [0%] foremen issuing
similar sentiments
their workers. ► It should be similar statements to? - [29%] becomes stagnant before completely breaking
down.
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [44%] on the other hand, wanted to demand
Tahar
tell him ► It should be Tahara. - [59%]
insert6.jpg
► Either it's thewrong illustration
or thewrong place
. - [66%] “There’s the booze! This is what I’ve been waiting
for!
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [76%] as well as water
wheels,caves
, and mossy rocks that ► Missing space. - [81%] from the guests. Pick any room you want from
there.
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [88%] “Let go of me! We’re going
up stairs
!” Grabbing Tron ► It should be upstairs (no space).
- [0%] foremen issuing
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Volume 6, Part 8, 64%:
"His shock therapy might have rocketed Tahara into the opposite direction."
Since Tahara's efforts were directed toward getting Kondo to open up, this should probably be:
"His shock therapy might have rocketed Kondo in the opposite direction." -
V6P8 83%:
“No,” the Demon Lordshut down
.
Most likely, "shut her down", or even "shot her down". -
Volume 6 - Part 8:
- [25%] the driver to shreds and using his skull as a
goblet.
► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. [69%] His shock therapy might have rocketedAlready reported.Tahara
into ► It should be Kondo?[86%] “No,” the Demon LordAlready reported.shut
down. As lenient as he ► It should be shut her.
- [25%] the driver to shreds and using his skull as a
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Volume 6 - Part 9:
- [95%]
“Let’s begin... Area Modification!
The Demon Lord selected ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
- [95%]
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V6 P10 11%:
“She can be quite stubborn, so no amount of persuading from me convinced her to come. My silly little sister, with no idea that she’s playing right into yourhand.
Missing closing quote.Around 20%:
“Where’s the romance in a dark forest...?” the Demon Lord grumbled, puffing out smoke.”
Found the missing quote from above, it's incorrectly placed here.Around 43%:
Yu dove into his arms and buried her face inher
chest.
his78%:
Considering thathim
and his advisors had always fought players on their own, he was definitely at an advantage now that he could hire adventurers, militarymen, and even mercenaries.
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Volume 6 - Part 10:
- [Generic] This series uses !? usually but there are
38 instances
of?!
in this part. - [2%] and a
sixteen year old
who never left his room. ► It should be sixteen-year-old (hyphens). [11%]Already reported.playing right into your hand.
The Demon Lord ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.[27%] grumbled, puffing out smoke.Already reported.”
Besides, while Luna ► No dialogue here. Remove the extraclosing double quote
.- [37%] blinding speed,
augmenting
the Demon Lord’s age. ► It should be reducing. [46%] dove into his arms and buried her face inAlready reported.her
chest. ► It should be his.- [70%] “Are we in... the village of Rabbi...?
’
► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly asingle
one. - [75%] all preplanned,
With
the land below it leveled ► It should be with (lowercase).
- [Generic] This series uses !? usually but there are
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Thank you for your support and reports as always, @Terabyte and @SomeOldGuy!
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Volume 7 - Part 1:
- [29%] ——Hellion Territory, southeast on the
continent
► Missing period for consistency.
- [29%] ——Hellion Territory, southeast on the
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V7P2
6% - If you're not joking, kid, your naivety
and
starting to get funny. ► I think it should be is.7% - some are there for extra
cash, And
some girls ► Either cash. And or cash, and It depends on which punctuation you want to use.