A Wild Last Boss Appeared! - Corrections Topic

Terabyte

Volume 5 - Part 10:

[0%] fairies and were sometimes worshipped as holy beings. ► It should be worshiped (US spelling).
[9%] a moment, then said, “.I see.” For an instant, her gaze ► Remove extra period.
[28%] were now a necessary defence for the Crown Empire. ► It should be defense (US spelling).
[43%] swirling around the room, Lufasmet Megrez’s gaze ► It should be Lufas met (space).
[59%] “Y-Yooouuu.... Damn you. How dare you fool us!” ► It should be 3 periods.
[76%] “I’ll kill you! Kill! KIIIL!” ► It should be KIIILL (double L). Or it's on purpose?
[77%] Dubhe, ALphecca, and Emperor Borealis. They, who ► It should be Alphecca (lowercase L).
[89%] my head of fire is hot; It’s because it’s summer ► It should be it’s (lowercase). Or use a period.
[99%] There’s a limit to how far you should go for a hook. ► It should be book?

Microdynames

Volume 5 Part 10

Not so much a correction, more of a suggestion.

The title of the short story「竜王が勝負を仕掛けてきた」translated here as "The Dragon King Made a Challenge" is if I'm not mistaken meant to be another one of this series's endless chapter title Pokemon jokes (endless in the WN version anyway, since all the chapter titles vanished in the LN), as it's the exact phrasing used for every Trainer battle challenge in the Japanese version.

To try to preserve the joke's existence it might be worth adapting it to one of the translation choices used in the official Pokemon game translations like "The Dragon King Wants to Fight", "The Dragon King Would Like to Battle", or more recently "You are Challenged by the Dragon King"

(The official translation keeps changing every game, haha...)

Edit: It's probably too late to say this, but the title of the premium bonus short story in volume 2 「おや？メラクのようすが……」, translated as "Oh? Merak seems..." is also meant to be the stock "What? (Pokemon) is evolving!" phrase.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 1:

[42%] The Goddess was the undeniably the one who ► Remove first/duplicate the.
[55%] no choice but torisk diving into the memories ► It should be to risk (space).
[64%] Miss Lufas... Bro...ther...) ► Remove extra parenthesis at the end.

pcj

Volume 6 - Part 1:

[48%] Polluxed paused for a moment, considering the possibilities. >> should be Pollux
~~[51%] There’s no choice but torisk diving into the memories of my “true body.” >> should be to risk (add a space)~~ (already reported)

KathleenT

@terabyte @pcj Thanks for these! Typo's have been fixed.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 2:

[61%] “Don’t get shit twisted. We’re not villains. we’re gentlemen.” ► It should be We’re (Capitalized).
[86%] I never expected to see you here.”Alfie replied awkwardly, ► Missing space.
[90%] it’d be better to tell you, I think since knowing would make ► Remove since. Or add a comma before it?
[95%] Apparently, the lord, he head of the Spess family, wants to ► It should be the.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 3:

[9%] he just seemed “ kind of like a punk.” ► Remove extra space.
[78%] “Okay, let’s go,” he said ► Missing period.
[84%] the back spoke up.“That voice... Alfie?” ► Missing line break.

KathleenT

@terabyte Thanks for these! Typos have been fixed.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 4:

[16%] question, Lufas,” said Sei “Why are you here?” ► Missing punctuation.
[40%] He was never once complemented, and he was ► It should be complimented.
[42%] That’s why I hurt others more than necessary ► Missing period.
[48%] his mouth, his jaw was pulverised, and his eyes ► It should be pulverized (US spelling).

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 5:

[16%] to worry less as we fought.. I had left Dina ► Duplicate period.
[27%] “No, wait. Something doesn’t seem right. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[61%] keep up with me, Karkinos!” yelled Sorpius. ► It should be Scorpius.
[90%] “Grk... Oooaarrgghh!”i ► Remove random i at the end.

KathleenT

@terabyte Thanks for these. Typos have been updated!

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 6:

[51%] their stats were actually higher then were when they ► It should be than when (removing were).
[65%] Lufas caught that. Then, Benetnash turned around as ► It should be Benetnasch.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 7:

[Generic] While Hel is a place that exists in this world there are some instances of hel (lowercase) that should probably be hell. I listed them below. (If that's not the case then the instances of hell should be changed to hel instead?)
[14%] In the midst of this hel hot enough to even boil rock, ► It should be hell.
[37%] save them from this hel. However, reality forced her ► It should be hell.
[37%] who drove them further into hel. She was the scum ► It should be hell.
[58%] What the hell is she?! I don’t know anything like her?! ► It should be anyone ? (Or is anything used on purpose?)
[65%] But.. Ahhh, how ironic. To think that the one to say ► It should be 3 periods.
[87%] Didn’t Exgate Online accomodate all sorts of regions ► It should be accommodate.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 8:

[36%] “Lord Lufas!” Kross exclaimed. “Are you ► It should be Lady Lufas.
[72%] making their anger known,but the words ► Missing space.

pcj

Volume 6 - Part 8:

[41%] Dina couldn’t be found. She could go anywhere using Exgate, so it was easy for Libra to get outside of detection range. >> should be her to get outside of Libra's

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 9:

[5%] out of our way. But ,well, they had been ► Move the space after the comma.
[55%] said to be the descendents of angels who ► It should be descendants.

pcj

Volume 6 -Part 9:

[74%] like moving the closet and checking behind the piece of furniture itself >> there are several ocurrances of this throughout this chapter, this one is just the best example of it. For North Americans, a closet is a small room. A piece of furniture for that purpose would be called a wardrobe.

KathleenT

@terabyte and @pcj Thanks for all of these! Typos have been updated.

pcj

Volume 6 - Part 10:

[1%] Even then, they could all easily down several times more than a normal person could, so it needn’t be said that a steady source of food was absolutely necessary. >> Is this backwards? If they can all eat a lot, then it could be said that a steady source of food would be necessary. Or maybe it needn't be said that a steady source of food wasn't absolutely necessary.

Terabyte

[14%] the slums,” said Lufas “Their leader might ► Missing punctuation.
[80%] Miss Lufaaaaaaaassss!? ► It should be ?! for consistency.