The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 6:

[35%] That was an acknowledgement on his part that this was ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
[51%] her innocence with feelings along. We need firm evidence.” ► It should be alone.
[61%] I’m sure if she’d enjoy watching someone be questioned ► Remove if.
[63%] not the only one who’s had to ensure days of loneliness.” ► It should be endure.

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Volume 6 - Part 7:

[16%] to use rat poison. Animals—and and small children, ► Duplicate and.
[42%] it when I question her, but does make me wonder.” ► It should be it does?
[53%] details by now,” said Her Majesty, so let’s move on ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 8:

[6%] and have her take to the blame for the ill effects.” ► Remove to.
[24%] I wanted to see Lord Simeon looking all gallant! ► This is Adrien(?) talking. Remove Lord.
[90%] stabbed him. There’s no time to lose!. They said ► Duplicate punctuation.

Philip Reuben

Slightly belatedly getting to the corrections (thanks as always!)

@MasterLillyclaw said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6

Part 4, 71%

"Julianne,” he began, but he was unable to say anything further, and walked over to us in silence. Apparently unable to say anything either, His Highness silently walked over to us. He stopped in front of Julianne . . .

Seems like the sentence was edited but the original version accidentally got left in?

Oops, yes indeed. I've fixed that now.

@Terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6 - Part 4:

[42%] on your playing. Quite a misjudgement on my part.” ► It should be misjudgment (US spelling).

Fixed!

[74%] For you to make filthy would bring me the sweetest ► It should be make me?

@nofairytale said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:
Or use a word that sounds even more inappropriate maybe? "For you to defile / soil / taint me..." 😁

I like "defile" 😂 Gone with that after discussing with the editor.

@Terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6 - Part 5:

[5%] now she has rather a cold and distant air about her. ► It should be a rather (switch around)?

This is fine, "rather a" + adjective + noun is a normal (if old fashioned) construction.

[19%] I hurried back to the queen’s champers. However, my ► It should be chambers.

[46%] “A change of plans in order. Once the details become ► It should be is in.

[52%] “Are you referring to Nadia?” Princess Henriette replied ► Missing period.

Fixed!

@Terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6 - Part 6:

[35%] That was an acknowledgement on his part that this was ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).

[51%] her innocence with feelings along. We need firm evidence.” ► It should be alone.

[61%] I’m sure if she’d enjoy watching someone be questioned ► Remove if.

[63%] not the only one who’s had to ensure days of loneliness.” ► It should be endure.

Fixed!

@Terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6 - Part 7:

[16%] to use rat poison. Animals—and and small children, ► Duplicate and.

[42%] it when I question her, but does make me wonder.” ► It should be it does?

[53%] details by now,” said Her Majesty, so let’s move on ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.

Fixed!

@Terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 6 - Part 8:

[6%] and have her take to the blame for the ill effects.” ► Remove to.

[24%] I wanted to see Lord Simeon looking all gallant! ► This is Adrien(?) talking. Remove Lord.

[90%] stabbed him. There’s no time to lose!. They said ► Duplicate punctuation.

All fixed. Thanks again!

(I type "Lord Simeon" so automatically now that it's hard when I get to a character who doesn't say that 😭)

nofairytale

Volume 6 part 9

if the man who gave them was from a mere acquaintance ▶ Remove 'from'.
I pouted. ▶ Missing a sentence after that. I only remember this because the scene is super cute.
- "わたしの頬はパンパンだ. おかしそうな顔をして, シメオン様の指がつついた. [...] つつかれてわたしの口から空気が抜ける."

Terabyte

Volume 6 - Part 10:

[3%] surprised that only could this well-bred young ► It should be not only?
[73%] troublesome neighbour was always playing ► It should be neighbor (US spelling).

nofairytale

Volume 6 part 10

the ambassador to Easdale would make a personal visit ► should be of?

Philip Reuben

@nofairytale @Terabyte Replying very belatedly, but doing it now before I forget again 😅 Thank you very much for pointing out these issues - they're fixed in the final version.

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 1:

[26%] To think that my favourite type of character, ► It should be favorite (US spelling).
[44%] in his arms, I joined him in a private dance ► Missing period.
[62%] If she met someone knew now that she was ► It should be new.

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 2:

[Generic] This series uses !? usually but there are 3 instances of ?! in this part.

nofairytale

Volume 7 part 2

His Highness and the top brass of the military ► His Majesty

Philip Reuben

@terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 7 - Part 1:

[26%] To think that my favourite type of character, ► It should be favorite (US spelling).

[44%] in his arms, I joined him in a private dance ► Missing period.

[62%] If she met someone knew now that she was ► It should be new.

Fixed! Thanks!

@nofairytale said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 7 part 2

His Highness and the top brass of the military ► His Majesty

Also fixed! Thank you!

@terabyte said in The Tales of Marielle Clarac - Corrections Topic:

Volume 7 - Part 2:

[Generic] This series uses !? usually but there are 3 instances of ?! in this part.

We're standardizing on this going forward, so Marielle Clarac has switched over too. (I've changed part 1 to match now - that got caught in the crossover period.) Well spotted!

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 3:

[31%] Do you think you’ll be able to Sans-Terre soon, ► It should be return to Sans-Terre.
[66%] of firewood either, why didn’t you even come?” ► It should be did.
[71%] appreciate that, but doesn't it interfere with your ► It should be doesn’t (different ’ ).

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 4:

[3%] with the knights following.From behind me ► Missing space.

nofairytale

Vol 7 part 4

“Marielle, I’ve found you!” ► Since the speaker is Alain, would he really call his boss' wife with just her name instead of Madame Marielle or something like that?

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 5:

[16%] Those flowers placed there with prayers for ► It should be were placed ?

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 6:

[28%] “I’m embarrassed,” he murmured ► Missing period.

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 7:

[26%] this thought, the men before both stared with suddenly ► It should be before me?
[45%] to Smerda, and that meant Lagranga was Orta’s enemy ► It should be Lagrange.

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 8:

[8%] the way out of the carriage.Now I could see that ► Missing space.

Terabyte

Volume 7 - Part 9:

[7%] I was certain I had mishead, however. There is no way ► It should be misheard.
[15%] sleeping with no bed and without eat a proper dinner, ► It should be eating.
[43%] not understand that? Now matter how much someone ► It should be No.
[50%] pulled at my arms, drawing my down to lie beside him. ► It should be me.
[65%] It’s light enough to see my feet already, and it will only keep getting lighter as we walk, ► Maybe bright / brighter?