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    • L
      lovelight Staff last edited by

      This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Der Werwolf: The Annals of Veight.

      Currently in prepublication: Volume 11!

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      • Terabyte
        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

        Volume 11 - Part 1:

        • [14%] to Fahn, I said,” Please call the three girls in.” ► The dialogue's starting double quote is wrongly a closing one. Also, move the space before the quote.
        • [56%] bothered to come all the way out the front lines, ► It should be to the ?
        • [57%] Neither Pajam nor Veight was scared of Zagar. ► It should be were.
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        • Terabyte
          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

          Volume 11 - Part 2:

          • [3%] ‘I command thee with my meagre will, destroy ► It should be meager (US spelling).
          • [52%] methods he had. niacin was water-soluble, ► It should be Niacin (Capitalized).
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          • Terabyte
            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

            Volume 11 - Part 3:

            • [96%] came to an end, I stepped into the moonlight ► Missing period.
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            • Robert Rodriguez
              Robert Rodriguez Premium Member last edited by

              Volume 11 - Part 3:

              [19%] "I am certain... The royal physician used diving magic that has been passed down for generations..."► Should this be divining?

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              • Terabyte
                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                Volume 11 - Part 5:

                • [8%] the few that did have were infiltrating the ► Remove have. Or maybe he did have?
                • [37%] well, I should say I believe, since he’s ► It should be he believes. Amani's talking about her father here, not herself.
                • [38%] “Ah, that’s true..” ► Duplicate period.
                • [50%] “Here you, Balkel...or rather, Valkel.” ► It should be Here you go?
                • [59%] all the way to Mount. Kayankaka. Now ► Remove extra period.
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                • Terabyte
                  Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                  Volume 11 - Part 6:

                  • [34%] used this exact same method to trail people back on Earth. ► It should be trial.
                  • [73%] Zagar understood now that any position he might have had in high society was gone now. ► Duplicate now.
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                  • Terabyte
                    Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                    Volume 11 - Part 7:

                    • [32%] Honestly, though,, ever since that battle ► Duplicate comma.
                    • [75%] as we can and away seal their powers.” ► It should be seal away (switch around).
                    • [91%] “Uhh....” ► It should be 3 periods.
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                    • Robert Rodriguez
                      Robert Rodriguez Premium Member last edited by Robert Rodriguez

                      Volume 11 - Part 7:

                      • [14%] "You couldn't. It's not worth trying," I said. "Making even a thousand crossbows is a difficult feat... ► New paragraph after I said.
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                      • xdrfiredogx
                        xdrfiredogx Premium Member last edited by

                        32% "Honestly though,," double comma

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                        • Terabyte
                          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                          Volume 11 - Part 8:

                          • [34%] gave birth to Kuwol’s new prince while you were gone. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
                          • [48%] “Umm...Professor?” Myurie asked tentatively, looking ► It should be Myurei.
                          • [57%] “Hey there Myurie, Ryuunie! Welcome to the sweet ► It should be Myurei.
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                          • Terabyte
                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                            Volume 11 - Part 9:

                            • [Generic] There are 8 paragraphs that have the starting double quote (alone) in italic format: <p><em>“</em>.
                            • [10%] to my surprise, Master didn’t seem phased at all. ► It should be fazed.
                            • [15%] Airia in the meantime.”Master nodded and started ► Missing space.
                            • [50%] “Mmm..., I know.” ► Remove comma?
                            • [83%] hid his presence so well I couldn’t even smell him. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
                            • [90%] something similar to any other pregnant woman, ► It should be on?
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                            • Terabyte
                              Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                              Volume 11 - Part 10:

                              • [Generic] There are 3 paragraphs that have the starting double quote (alone) in italic format: <em>“</em>.
                              • [18%] Also, I’ll take care of any ’shady dealings’ as well. ► The starting single quote is wrongly a closing one.
                              • [36%] by many of the nobles started whispering frantically ► It should be starting?
                              • [45%] from this alliance as well.”Grinning, Mao ended his ► Missing space.
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                              • saskir
                                saskir Premium Member last edited by

                                Wonder how even Terabyte didn't see it. The daughter of Veight/Airia got once called Freide in there. I think it was around the 30% mark but need to re-read it.

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                                • Gamen
                                  Gamen Premium Member @saskir last edited by

                                  @saskir "Veight watched Freide play with his finger"; more like 70%

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                                  • I
                                    Ingraman Premium Member last edited by

                                    Vol. 11, part 10:

                                    ~48%

                                    “After making sure the nobles had been sufficiently shook, ...” — shaken, perhaps? Or shook up. Or blend the two, and go with shooken. :p

                                    As written, it might still be correct, but it doesn’t sound right to me.

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                                    • saskir
                                      saskir Premium Member @Gamen last edited by

                                      @Gamen said in Der Werwolf: The Annals of Veight - Corrections Topic:

                                      @saskir "Veight watched Freide play with his finger"; more like 70%

                                      Opps yeah. Was thinking about another error that Terabyte already mentioned.

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