Der Werwolf: The Annals of Veight - Corrections Topic

lovelight

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Der Werwolf: The Annals of Veight.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 11!

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 1:

[14%] to Fahn, I said,” Please call the three girls in.” ► The dialogue's starting double quote is wrongly a closing one. Also, move the space before the quote.
[56%] bothered to come all the way out the front lines, ► It should be to the ?
[57%] Neither Pajam nor Veight was scared of Zagar. ► It should be were.

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 2:

[3%] ‘I command thee with my meagre will, destroy ► It should be meager (US spelling).
[52%] methods he had. niacin was water-soluble, ► It should be Niacin (Capitalized).

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 3:

[96%] came to an end, I stepped into the moonlight ► Missing period.

Robert Rodriguez

Volume 11 - Part 3:

[19%] "I am certain... The royal physician used diving magic that has been passed down for generations..."► Should this be divining?

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 5:

[8%] the few that did have were infiltrating the ► Remove have. Or maybe he did have?
[37%] well, I should say I believe, since he’s ► It should be he believes. Amani's talking about her father here, not herself.
[38%] “Ah, that’s true..” ► Duplicate period.
[50%] “Here you, Balkel...or rather, Valkel.” ► It should be Here you go?
[59%] all the way to Mount. Kayankaka. Now ► Remove extra period.

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 6:

[34%] used this exact same method to trail people back on Earth. ► It should be trial.
[73%] Zagar understood now that any position he might have had in high society was gone now. ► Duplicate now.

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 7:

[32%] Honestly, though,, ever since that battle ► Duplicate comma.
[75%] as we can and away seal their powers.” ► It should be seal away (switch around).
[91%] “Uhh....” ► It should be 3 periods.

Robert Rodriguez

Volume 11 - Part 7:

[14%] "You couldn't. It's not worth trying," I said. "Making even a thousand crossbows is a difficult feat... ► New paragraph after I said.

xdrfiredogx

32% "Honestly though,," double comma

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 8:

[34%] gave birth to Kuwol’s new prince while you were gone. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[48%] “Umm...Professor?” Myurie asked tentatively, looking ► It should be Myurei.
[57%] “Hey there Myurie, Ryuunie! Welcome to the sweet ► It should be Myurei.

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 9:

[Generic] There are 8 paragraphs that have the starting double quote (alone) in italic format: “.
[10%] to my surprise, Master didn’t seem phased at all. ► It should be fazed.
[15%] Airia in the meantime.”Master nodded and started ► Missing space.
[50%] “Mmm..., I know.” ► Remove comma?
[83%] hid his presence so well I couldn’t even smell him. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[90%] something similar to any other pregnant woman, ► It should be on?

Terabyte

Volume 11 - Part 10:

[Generic] There are 3 paragraphs that have the starting double quote (alone) in italic format: “.
[18%] Also, I’ll take care of any ’shady dealings’ as well. ► The starting single quote is wrongly a closing one.
[36%] by many of the nobles started whispering frantically ► It should be starting?
[45%] from this alliance as well.”Grinning, Mao ended his ► Missing space.

saskir

Wonder how even Terabyte didn't see it. The daughter of Veight/Airia got once called Freide in there. I think it was around the 30% mark but need to re-read it.

Gamen

@saskir "Veight watched Freide play with his finger"; more like 70%

Ingraman

Vol. 11, part 10:

~48%

“After making sure the nobles had been sufficiently shook, ...” — shaken, perhaps? Or shook up. Or blend the two, and go with shooken. :p

As written, it might still be correct, but it doesn’t sound right to me.

saskir

@Gamen said in Der Werwolf: The Annals of Veight - Corrections Topic:

@saskir "Veight watched Freide play with his finger"; more like 70%

Opps yeah. Was thinking about another error that Terabyte already mentioned.