Lazy Dungeon Master - Corrections Topic

Vorthod

0%: In the empire, (missing comma) it is not proper to cut down civilians ~~without learning~~. I am learning, town chief. ->Should this be "without warning/asking/reason" or something?

15%: It's a shame I cannot show your heroic ~~fears~~ to Rukuko -> feats

89%: EVERYONE BUT ME IS A SHIIIIIIT!

kittytama

@vorthod Thank you, these should be fixed now.

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 7:

[18%] mainly just to get myself out of this mess.” ► The dialogue ended earlier. Remove extra closing double quote.

kittytama

@terabyte Thank you, fixed! :)

CosmicSpear

Volume 14, Part 8:

Not technically a correction for the book, but the links for part 8 on the home and calendar pages go to part 7 (but the link on the series page is right).
67%: "How could sheever refuse such a blatant invitation?" - Should be "she ever".

SomeOldGuy

57%:
an invitation to a from the dungeon
Either a place is missing or to a is extra

kittytama

@cosmicspear @SomeOldGuy Fixed these, thank you!

SomeOldGuy

@kittytama On the page after, Aidy wants to "well in the aftertaste", but dwell seems more appropriate.

kittytama

@someoldguy You're right. Thank you!

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 8:

[Generic] All 3 instances of #XXX’s Perspective are missing a space after the hashtag for consistency.
[18%] one wrong move and Rokuku would ► It should be Rokuko.
[49%] “Kemia. Do you have any ideas?” ► It should be Keima.
[83%] chasing the coronet while ignoring ► It should be cornet.
[98%] the three of them in the colosseum. ► It should be coliseum for consistency.

kittytama

@terabyte Thank you! I've applied these.

SomeOldGuy

V14 P9 0%:
It was a very familiar building,
room

She passed through the gate;as expected
Missing space

CosmicSpear

Volume 14, Part 9:

11%: "Aidy'sMagic Blade vanished, then reappeared in her hands." - Missing space.
74%: "And this time, the Dai Frame was holding her down so she couldn't escape." - Should be "Dai-Frame".
84%: "Misha would probably get punished too if Misha found out," - I think this should be "she", at least if I'm right to assume from the context that it's meant to refer to Haku.

kittytama

@cosmicspear @SomeOldGuy Thank you for the corrections, I've applied them.

SomeOldGuy

@kittytama Question about this at about 55%:
“I’ll be using some adds. You don’t mind, right?”
Deliberate, or should this be aids?

SomeOldGuy

@someoldguy Also, the next page, Aidy "leapt to the size", which probably was supposed to be side.

kittytama

@someoldguy "Adds" is deliberate. (https://www.cyberdefinitions.com/definitions/ADDS.html#:~:text=ADDS means Enemy Reinforcements in,help them in a battle.)

kittytama

@someoldguy Fixed!

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 9:

[23%] Both her senses and the voice’s nose told her that this was ► It should be noise.
[24%] “That’s why I had Rei stand aside. You understand, right?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly a single one.
[29%] think it would be the perfect place for us dungeons to duel?” ► It should be Dungeon Cores (Capitalized)?
[51%] Jersey. I simultaneously canceled my {Ultra Transform}. ► It should be Transformation.
[55%] Rokuko and I. You said so yourself a moment ago, No?” ► It should be no (lowercase).
[61%] “Only if they hit me, however....!” ► It should be 3 periods.
[62%] “{Element Shot.}” ► Move the period outside, after the }.
[72%] Before should even figure out what was going on, her ► It should be she could.
[85%] told the Pavella authorities about it, so just ask them” ► Missing period.
[97%] “Bit late to be asking this, but did you forget anyway?” ► It should be anything.

kittytama

@terabyte Thank you, fixed these! (Minus the "voice's nose" one and the "us dungeons" one--that's actually intended. ^^;)