Lazy Dungeon Master - Corrections Topic
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0%: In the empire
, (missing comma)
it is not proper to cut down civilianswithout learning. I am learning, town chief. ->Should this be "without warning/asking/reason" or something?15%: It's a shame I cannot show your heroic
fearsto Rukuko -> feats89%: EVERYONE BUT ME IS
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@vorthod Thank you, these should be fixed now.
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Volume 14 - Part 7:
- [18%] mainly just to get myself out of this mess.
”
► The dialogue ended earlier. Remove extraclosing double quote
.
- [18%] mainly just to get myself out of this mess.
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@terabyte Thank you, fixed! :)
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Volume 14, Part 8:
- Not technically a correction for the book, but the links for part 8 on the home and calendar pages go to part 7 (but the link on the series page is right).
- 67%: "How could sheever refuse such a blatant invitation?" - Should be "she ever".
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57%:
an invitationto a from
the dungeon
Either a place is missing or to a is extra -
@cosmicspear @SomeOldGuy Fixed these, thank you!
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@kittytama On the page after, Aidy wants to "well in the aftertaste", but dwell seems more appropriate.
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@someoldguy You're right. Thank you!
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Volume 14 - Part 8:
- [Generic] All
3 instances
of#XXX’s Perspective
are missing a space after the hashtag for consistency. - [18%] one wrong move and
Rokuku
would ► It should be Rokuko. - [49%] “
Kemia
. Do you have any ideas?” ► It should be Keima. - [83%] chasing the
coronet
while ignoring ► It should be cornet. - [98%] the three of them in the
colosseum
. ► It should be coliseum for consistency.
- [Generic] All
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@terabyte Thank you! I've applied these.
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V14 P9 0%:
It was a very familiarbuilding
,
roomShe passed through the
gate;as
expected
Missing space -
Volume 14, Part 9:
- 11%: "Aidy'sMagic Blade vanished, then reappeared in her hands." - Missing space.
- 74%: "And this time, the Dai Frame was holding her down so she couldn't escape." - Should be "Dai-Frame".
- 84%: "Misha would probably get punished too if Misha found out," - I think this should be "she", at least if I'm right to assume from the context that it's meant to refer to Haku.
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@cosmicspear @SomeOldGuy Thank you for the corrections, I've applied them.
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@kittytama Question about this at about 55%:
“I’ll be using someadds
. You don’t mind, right?”
Deliberate, or should this be aids? -
@someoldguy Also, the next page, Aidy "leapt to the
size
", which probably was supposed to be side. -
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@someoldguy Fixed!
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Volume 14 - Part 9:
- [23%] Both her senses and the voice’s
nose
told her that this was ► It should be noise. - [24%] “That’s why I had Rei stand aside. You understand, right?
’
► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly asingle
one. - [29%] think it would be the perfect place for us
dungeons
to duel?” ► It should be Dungeon Cores (Capitalized)? - [51%] Jersey. I simultaneously canceled my {Ultra
Transform
}. ► It should be Transformation. - [55%] Rokuko and I. You said so yourself a moment ago,
No
?” ► It should be no (lowercase). - [61%] “Only if they hit me,
however....
!” ► It should be 3 periods. - [62%] “
{Element Shot.}
” ► Move the period outside, after the}
. - [72%] Before
should
even figure out what was going on, her ► It should be she could. - [85%] told the Pavella authorities about it, so just ask
them
” ► Missing period. - [97%] “Bit late to be asking this, but did you forget
anyway
?” ► It should be anything.
- [23%] Both her senses and the voice’s
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@terabyte Thank you, fixed these! (Minus the "voice's nose" one and the "us dungeons" one--that's actually intended. ^^;)