Lazy Dungeon Master - Corrections Topic

lovelight

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Lazy Dungeon Master.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 16!

morbelek

Volume 14 - Part 1:

[44%] You know, I wanna watch Mikan play live again. Don't you, Aidy? ► Shouldn't it be Ichigo instead of Mikan?

kittytama

@morbelek Oh, you're right! Thank you for the correction, it's been applied.

CosmicSpear

Volume 14, Part 1:

57%: "I'm the one you should thaaank," - Should say "not" between these.

kittytama

@CosmicSpear Fixed, thanks!!

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 1:

[Generic] The word colosseum is used 2 times, it should be changed to coliseum for consistency.
[34%] I-It is true that you ultimately ended up safe, but..” ► It should be 3 periods.
[84%] At my encouragement, Mikan glanced at Rinnew ► Missing period.
[85%] “Errm, well.... I-I can’t say it! It’s too embarrassing!” ► It should be 3 periods.

kittytama

@Terabyte Thank you for these, they've been corrected!

SomeOldGuy

V14 53%:
We exchanged a fluffy handshake, with me taking that opportunity to pay back the DP I had lent from him.

Either I had borrowed from him or he had lent to me.

Iseguy

Volume 14 Part 1

Actually, never mind. Head pat her to your heart’s content.

I feel like “head-pat” would be better, because “head” is such an atypical adverb.

We exchanged a fluffy handshake, with me taking that opportunity to pay back the DP I had lent from him.

“borrowed from” (already reported)

kittytama

@SomeOldGuy @Iseguy Thank you, fixed!

CosmicSpear

Volume 14, Part 2:

0%: "I knew it would be easy going so far with so many people..." - Should be "wouldn't".
21%: "and everyone had on Beddhist honly symbols." - Should be "holy".
31%: "Neruneh, don't tap mugs with Neruneh!" - Presumably a second character is meant to be addressed in this sentence, though I couldn't say who.

morbelek

@CosmicSpear Looking at the context the second character is most likely Niku.

kittytama

@CosmicSpear Oh, thanks for these! I've fixed them.

morbelek

Volume 14 - Part 2:
[56%] "Aidy skipped over the water. When I said Wataru could do it, she said she could do it too, then, and thus became a legend." Oh yeah, I remember something about everyone who crosses the river on foot becoming a legend. ► In volume 10 chapter 2 [31%] "In this city, anyone who successfully crosses the river is called a hero. Lowercase". (Seems to be a discrepancy in terminology).

kittytama

@morbelek Excellent catch! Changed back to the consistent term of "hero". :)

SomeOldGuy

@kittytama But it should be Niku's mug that had clean water in it, which then got refilled with juice later.

kittytama

@SomeOldGuy Oh, shoot, you're right. Fixed.

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 2:

[1%] You were riiight, Niku, It’s not bad at aaall.” ► Either period or it’s (lowercase).
[15%] “Damn. A’ight, what about you, red-headed girl?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly a single one.
[17%] Not that it needs any repairs, by the looks o’ it. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[25%] this: Just say ‘Hello,’ or ‘Good day,” to them.” ► The closing single quote is wrongly a double one.
[41%] said, and in an instant , something exploded. ► Remove extra space.
[53%] into their rooms. (I went ahead and carried ► There's a starting parenthesis but no closing parenthesis later on.
[61%] shocked if wings of fire sprouted from her back ► Missing period.
[68%] they made an aliiaaance,” Neruneh explained. ► It should be alliaaance (double L instead of i).
[86%] “Yeah,yeah. You may count on me, milady.” ► Missing space.

Iseguy

Volume 14 part 2

Not that it needs any repairs, by the looks o’ it.

Closing quote.

he bellowed with laughter, picking the beer casket back up.

“cask”.
Technically, a barrel is a kind of cask, although in popular usage a cask is bigger than a keg and smaller than a barrel, a barrel being 55 gallons or 210 liters or 200 Kg.

The people of the empire don’t like fighting that much like you Demon Realm people do.

“as much as” feels more natural. Or just “like fighting like”.

What is even going on.

“?”

quests from the Adventurer’s Guild? The kind that only takes a day,”

“take”

A bunch of people glanced this way and looked us over,

“our way”

“Yeah,yeah. You may count on me, milady.”

“Yeah, yeah.”

kittytama

@Terabyte @Iseguy Thank you, I've applied these! :)

Also, re: "what is even going on", that's part of Keima's internal thoughts!