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      lovelight Staff last edited by yuzumori

      This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Lazy Dungeon Master.

      Currently in prepublication: Volume 16!

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        morbelek Premium Member last edited by

        Volume 14 - Part 1:

        [44%] You know, I wanna watch Mikan play live again. Don't you, Aidy? ► Shouldn't it be Ichigo instead of Mikan?

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          kittytama Editors @morbelek last edited by

          @morbelek Oh, you're right! Thank you for the correction, it's been applied.

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            CosmicSpear Premium Member last edited by

            Volume 14, Part 1:

            • 57%: "I'm the one you should thaaank," - Should say "not" between these.
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            • kittytama
              kittytama Editors @CosmicSpear last edited by

              @CosmicSpear Fixed, thanks!!

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              • Terabyte
                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                Volume 14 - Part 1:

                • [Generic] The word colosseum is used 2 times, it should be changed to coliseum for consistency.
                • [34%] I-It is true that you ultimately ended up safe, but..” ► It should be 3 periods.
                • [84%] At my encouragement, Mikan glanced at Rinnew ► Missing period.
                • [85%] “Errm, well.... I-I can’t say it! It’s too embarrassing!” ► It should be 3 periods.
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                • kittytama
                  kittytama Editors @Terabyte last edited by

                  @Terabyte Thank you for these, they've been corrected!

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                  • SomeOldGuy
                    SomeOldGuy Premium Member last edited by

                    V14 53%:
                    We exchanged a fluffy handshake, with me taking that opportunity to pay back the DP I had lent from him.

                    Either I had borrowed from him or he had lent to me.

                    "But the blueprints..."

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                    • Iseguy
                      Iseguy Member last edited by

                      Volume 14 Part 1

                      Actually, never mind. Head pat her to your heart’s content.

                      I feel like “head-pat” would be better, because “head” is such an atypical adverb.

                      We exchanged a fluffy handshake, with me taking that opportunity to pay back the DP I had lent from him.

                      “borrowed from” (already reported)

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                      • kittytama
                        kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

                        @SomeOldGuy @Iseguy Thank you, fixed!

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                          CosmicSpear Premium Member last edited by

                          Volume 14, Part 2:

                          • 0%: "I knew it would be easy going so far with so many people..." - Should be "wouldn't".
                          • 21%: "and everyone had on Beddhist honly symbols." - Should be "holy".
                          • 31%: "Neruneh, don't tap mugs with Neruneh!" - Presumably a second character is meant to be addressed in this sentence, though I couldn't say who.
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                            morbelek Premium Member @CosmicSpear last edited by

                            @CosmicSpear Looking at the context the second character is most likely Niku.

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                              kittytama Editors @CosmicSpear last edited by

                              @CosmicSpear Oh, thanks for these! I've fixed them.

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                                morbelek Premium Member last edited by

                                Volume 14 - Part 2:
                                [56%] "Aidy skipped over the water. When I said Wataru could do it, she said she could do it too, then, and thus became a legend." Oh yeah, I remember something about everyone who crosses the river on foot becoming a legend. ► In volume 10 chapter 2 [31%] "In this city, anyone who successfully crosses the river is called a hero. Lowercase". (Seems to be a discrepancy in terminology).

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                                • kittytama
                                  kittytama Editors @morbelek last edited by

                                  @morbelek Excellent catch! Changed back to the consistent term of "hero". :)

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                                  • SomeOldGuy
                                    SomeOldGuy Premium Member @kittytama last edited by

                                    @kittytama But it should be Niku's mug that had clean water in it, which then got refilled with juice later.

                                    "But the blueprints..."

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                                    • kittytama
                                      kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

                                      @SomeOldGuy Oh, shoot, you're right. Fixed.

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                                      • Terabyte
                                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                        Volume 14 - Part 2:

                                        • [1%] You were riiight, Niku, It’s not bad at aaall.” ► Either period or it’s (lowercase).
                                        • [15%] “Damn. A’ight, what about you, red-headed girl?’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is wrongly a single one.
                                        • [17%] Not that it needs any repairs, by the looks o’ it. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
                                        • [25%] this: Just say ‘Hello,’ or ‘Good day,” to them.” ► The closing single quote is wrongly a double one.
                                        • [41%] said, and in an instant , something exploded. ► Remove extra space.
                                        • [53%] into their rooms. (I went ahead and carried ► There's a starting parenthesis but no closing parenthesis later on.
                                        • [61%] shocked if wings of fire sprouted from her back ► Missing period.
                                        • [68%] they made an aliiaaance,” Neruneh explained. ► It should be alliaaance (double L instead of i).
                                        • [86%] “Yeah,yeah. You may count on me, milady.” ► Missing space.
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                                        • Iseguy
                                          Iseguy Member last edited by Iseguy

                                          Volume 14 part 2

                                          Not that it needs any repairs, by the looks o’ it.

                                          Closing quote.

                                          he bellowed with laughter, picking the beer casket back up.

                                          “cask”.
                                          Technically, a barrel is a kind of cask, although in popular usage a cask is bigger than a keg and smaller than a barrel, a barrel being 55 gallons or 210 liters or 200 Kg.

                                          The people of the empire don’t like fighting that much like you Demon Realm people do.

                                          “as much as” feels more natural. Or just “like fighting like”.

                                          What is even going on.

                                          “?”

                                          quests from the Adventurer’s Guild? The kind that only takes a day,”

                                          “take”

                                          A bunch of people glanced this way and looked us over,

                                          “our way”

                                          “Yeah,yeah. You may count on me, milady.”

                                          “Yeah, yeah.”

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                                          • kittytama
                                            kittytama Editors @Terabyte last edited by

                                            @Terabyte @Iseguy Thank you, I've applied these! :)

                                            Also, re: "what is even going on", that's part of Keima's internal thoughts!

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