J-Novel Club
    • Login
    • Search
    • Categories
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Users

    Lazy Dungeon Master - Corrections Topic

    Prepub Corrections
    ldm
    20
    257
    20405
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • Iseguy
      Iseguy Member last edited by

      14.9

      seeing what lied ahead made Aidy want to jump forward.

      “lay”

      Ah, what a lovely Vampire, that so bewitchingly entices me to murder her.

      “who so bewitchingly”

      Aidy’s disappointment flipped right into souring excitement.

      Did you mean “soaring”?

      doing so was a traditional greeting in Keima’s work.

      “world.”

      little reason to send a Core about before the Master.”

      “out”

      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
      • SomeOldGuy
        SomeOldGuy Premium Member last edited by SomeOldGuy

        How could a boob man like me miss the reference to Aidy's hest at about 46%?
        chest

        Oh, and another missing letter at 75%:
        pull any ricks.
        tricks

        "But the blueprints..."

        kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
        • kittytama
          kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

          @someoldguy @Iseguy Forgive the way late fixing on these, but fixed! :)

          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 2
          • C
            CosmicSpear Premium Member last edited by

            Volume 14, Part 10:

            • 8%: "Yes, sir! I am hon...honored...what? Avacation?" - Should be "A vacation".
            • 8%: "And so began Aidy's reward vacation." - Should be "Rei's".
            • 16%: "So, Nerune, what do you think? - Should be "Neruneh".
            • 40%: "I have used his services when my hips began to hurt." - Should be "her".
            • 56%: "Nikusteeled her resolve." - Should be "Niku steeled".
            • 54%: "If it were a small one that didn't hurt, enough casts of {Purification} to peel off the blank junk and a couple of potions or Restoration spells would fix it." - Should be "black".
            • 80%: "Rei the Holy Priestess was curing someone's cavity." - Should be "High".
            • 80%: "(and the pop, incidentally.) - Should be "Pope".
            kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
            • kittytama
              kittytama Editors @CosmicSpear last edited by

              @cosmicspear Thank you, I've fixed these! :)

              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
              • V
                Vorthod Premium Member last edited by Vorthod

                11%: what? Avacation? -> A vacation (already reported)
                17%: She could work on her vacations ever more blatantly -> even (already reported)
                23%: one they had borrowed when Keima and the authors went to the imperial capital -> others
                63%: Nikusteeled her resolve -> Niku steeled (already reported)
                80%: (and the pop, incidentally.) -> "pope" and the period should be outside the parenthesis, I think.
                86%: Excuse me, Spana-sensei -> Supana-sensei

                kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                • kittytama
                  kittytama Editors @Vorthod last edited by

                  @vorthod Thank you, fixed! :)

                  V 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                  • V
                    Vorthod Premium Member @kittytama last edited by Vorthod

                    @kittytama I noticed another instance of "Spana" at the end of the afterward (when they sign off at the very end). Don't know if that got caught too since it doesn't look like the app has picked up your changes yet.

                    kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                    • kittytama
                      kittytama Editors @Vorthod last edited by

                      @vorthod I did correct it, though it may take a bit to show. ^^;

                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                      • SomeOldGuy
                        SomeOldGuy Premium Member last edited by

                        About 55%, Rei welled up in the onsen. Maybe holed up?

                        "But the blueprints..."

                        kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                        • kittytama
                          kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

                          @someoldguy I agree, I think that sounds better. Fixed!

                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                          • Terabyte
                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                            Volume 14 - Part 10:

                            • [6%] Nah, the Otto family in town should be better. They just ► Is this a new/random name or a reference to a past character? While I do recall a wedding I don't remember anyone with that name.
                            • [11%] were high, weren’t they? Like, um,I just kind of did it.” ► Missing space.
                            • [28%] No doubt it was for self-defence, but it was still flagrant ► It should be self-defense (US spelling).
                            • [42%] left me in the dust ‘cause they can get massages from ► It should be ’cause (different ’ ).
                            • [52%] “Ngh, You’ve left me no choice... Oyasuminasai!” Rei ► Either period or you’ve (lowercase).
                            • [73%] “This world has licenses and stuff..?” Master thought ► It should be 3 periods.
                            • [93%] going on a rampage after getting taken oven drew from ► It should be over.
                            kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                            • kittytama
                              kittytama Editors @Terabyte last edited by

                              @terabyte Thank you, I've applied these! Also, yeah, that's a new/random name introduced.

                              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                              • Hephaestus13
                                Hephaestus13 Premium Member last edited by

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 5:

                                • [27%] "Nyahahahaha! The trap's nothing if you just run by the needles before the close. Eaaaasy!" ► Should be they
                                • [55%] I don't have anyone to compare myself to, so I'm not even sure how much 34 DP is, ► Should be GP
                                • [73%] She hadn't seen Aidy at the feast since she had dragged Neruneh away from questioning, ► Should this be for?

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 6:

                                • [25%] Rei was staring at me silently, clearing trying to convey she wanted to see Succuma too, but nope. ► Should be clearly
                                • [50%] I came here to check up my esteemed visitor, but... ► Add on?
                                  1. '"... I came here to check up on my esteemed visitor, but..."'

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 7:

                                • [50%] All I could say was, I felt bad for the members of the Blood Kraken. ► Should be Bloody

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 8:

                                • [17%] I had thought there would be a few in the second and third floors, the labyrinth, ► Consider brackets, two floors but only one description, also using labyrinth and dungeon are often interchangeable (not this novel), so adds more confusion - I had to read it a few times to get it anyway...

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 9:

                                • [0%] Only three weeks had passed since they returned from Demon Realm, and she had already ► Add the
                                  1. 'Only three weeks had passed since they returned from the Demon Realm, and she had already'
                                • [80%] Naturally, a lot of credit went to Niku, Ichika, Kinue, and Elca's many copies, ► Should be Elka's
                                • [90%] I could just put her in {Storage} and used the [Ivory Beach] to get to ► Should be use

                                ===

                                Volume 14 - Part 10:

                                • [46%] He had just shown a perfect master of the multiplication table, ► Should be mastery

                                ===

                                1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                                • C
                                  CosmicSpear Premium Member last edited by

                                  Volume 15, Part 1:

                                  • 53%: "whom Dolce said she ignored because they weren't assassins," - Should be "an assassin".
                                  kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                  • kittytama
                                    kittytama Editors @CosmicSpear last edited by

                                    @cosmicspear Whoops, you're right. Fixed...!

                                    1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                    • SomeOldGuy
                                      SomeOldGuy Premium Member last edited by

                                      V15P1 21%,
                                      As Rokuko walked down Goren
                                      around or possibly down the road in

                                      "But the blueprints..."

                                      kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                      • SomeOldGuy
                                        SomeOldGuy Premium Member last edited by

                                        32%, debutante is used without ball. Maiodore would be a debutante, making her debut at her debutante ball.

                                        "But the blueprints..."

                                        kittytama 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                        • kittytama
                                          kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

                                          @someoldguy Thanks! Tweaked it a bit.

                                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                          • kittytama
                                            kittytama Editors @SomeOldGuy last edited by

                                            @someoldguy Whoops, good catch there; added ball.

                                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                            • 1
                                            • 2
                                            • 3
                                            • 4
                                            • 5
                                            • 6
                                            • 7
                                            • 8
                                            • 12
                                            • 13
                                            • 6 / 13
                                            • First post
                                              Last post