Lazy Dungeon Master - Corrections Topic

Iseguy

14.9

seeing what lied ahead made Aidy want to jump forward.

“lay”

Ah, what a lovely Vampire, that so bewitchingly entices me to murder her.

“who so bewitchingly”

Aidy’s disappointment flipped right into souring excitement.

Did you mean “soaring”?

doing so was a traditional greeting in Keima’s work.

“world.”

little reason to send a Core about before the Master.”

“out”

SomeOldGuy

How could a boob man like me miss the reference to Aidy's hest at about 46%?
chest

Oh, and another missing letter at 75%:
pull any ricks.
tricks

kittytama

@someoldguy @Iseguy Forgive the way late fixing on these, but fixed! :)

CosmicSpear

Volume 14, Part 10:

8%: "Yes, sir! I am hon...honored...what? Avacation?" - Should be "A vacation".
8%: "And so began Aidy's reward vacation." - Should be "Rei's".
16%: "So, Nerune, what do you think? - Should be "Neruneh".
40%: "I have used his services when my hips began to hurt." - Should be "her".
56%: "Nikusteeled her resolve." - Should be "Niku steeled".
54%: "If it were a small one that didn't hurt, enough casts of {Purification} to peel off the blank junk and a couple of potions or Restoration spells would fix it." - Should be "black".
80%: "Rei the Holy Priestess was curing someone's cavity." - Should be "High".
80%: "(and the pop, incidentally.) - Should be "Pope".

kittytama

@cosmicspear Thank you, I've fixed these! :)

Vorthod

~~11%: what? ~~Avacation~~? -> A vacation~~ (already reported)
~~17%: She could work on her vacations ~~ever~~ more blatantly -> even~~ (already reported)
23%: one they had borrowed when Keima and the ~~authors~~ went to the imperial capital -> others
~~63%: ~~Nikusteeled~~ her resolve -> Niku steeled~~ (already reported)
80%: (and the ~~pop~~, incidentally.) -> "pope" and the period should be outside the parenthesis, I think.
86%: Excuse me, ~~Spana-sensei~~ -> Supana-sensei

kittytama

@vorthod Thank you, fixed! :)

Vorthod

@kittytama I noticed another instance of "Spana" at the end of the afterward (when they sign off at the very end). Don't know if that got caught too since it doesn't look like the app has picked up your changes yet.

kittytama

@vorthod I did correct it, though it may take a bit to show. ^^;

SomeOldGuy

About 55%, Rei welled up in the onsen. Maybe holed up?

kittytama

@someoldguy I agree, I think that sounds better. Fixed!

Terabyte

Volume 14 - Part 10:

[6%] Nah, the Otto family in town should be better. They just ► Is this a new/random name or a reference to a past character? While I do recall a wedding I don't remember anyone with that name.
[11%] were high, weren’t they? Like, um,I just kind of did it.” ► Missing space.
[28%] No doubt it was for self-defence, but it was still flagrant ► It should be self-defense (US spelling).
[42%] left me in the dust ‘cause they can get massages from ► It should be ’cause (different ’ ).
[52%] “Ngh, You’ve left me no choice... Oyasuminasai!” Rei ► Either period or you’ve (lowercase).
[73%] “This world has licenses and stuff..?” Master thought ► It should be 3 periods.
[93%] going on a rampage after getting taken oven drew from ► It should be over.

kittytama

@terabyte Thank you, I've applied these! Also, yeah, that's a new/random name introduced.

Hephaestus13

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Volume 14 - Part 5:

[27%] "Nyahahahaha! The trap's nothing if you just run by the needles before the close. Eaaaasy!" ► Should be they
[55%] I don't have anyone to compare myself to, so I'm not even sure how much 34 DP is, ► Should be GP
[73%] She hadn't seen Aidy at the feast since she had dragged Neruneh away from questioning, ► Should this be for?

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Volume 14 - Part 6:

[25%] Rei was staring at me silently, clearing trying to convey she wanted to see Succuma too, but nope. ► Should be clearly
[50%] I came here to check up my esteemed visitor, but... ► Add on?
1. '"... I came here to check up on my esteemed visitor, but..."'

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Volume 14 - Part 7:

[50%] All I could say was, I felt bad for the members of the Blood Kraken. ► Should be Bloody

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Volume 14 - Part 8:

[17%] I had thought there would be a few in the second and third floors, the labyrinth, ► Consider brackets, two floors but only one description, also using labyrinth and dungeon are often interchangeable (not this novel), so adds more confusion - I had to read it a few times to get it anyway...

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Volume 14 - Part 9:

[0%] Only three weeks had passed since they returned from Demon Realm, and she had already ► Add the
1. 'Only three weeks had passed since they returned from the Demon Realm, and she had already'
[80%] Naturally, a lot of credit went to Niku, Ichika, Kinue, and Elca's many copies, ► Should be Elka's
[90%] I could just put her in {Storage} and used the [Ivory Beach] to get to ► Should be use

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Volume 14 - Part 10:

[46%] He had just shown a perfect master of the multiplication table, ► Should be mastery

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CosmicSpear

Volume 15, Part 1:

53%: "whom Dolce said she ignored because they weren't assassins," - Should be "an assassin".

kittytama

@cosmicspear Whoops, you're right. Fixed...!

SomeOldGuy

V15P1 21%,
As Rokuko walked down Goren
around or possibly down the road in

SomeOldGuy

32%, debutante is used without ball. Maiodore would be a debutante, making her debut at her debutante ball.

kittytama

@someoldguy Thanks! Tweaked it a bit.

kittytama

@someoldguy Whoops, good catch there; added ball.