Unwanted Undead - Corrections Topic
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This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Unwanted Undead.
Currently in prepublication: Volume 8!
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Volume 8 - Part 2:
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Butif we could get their help...” ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
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Volume 8 - Part 3:
- [26%] at least close enough to give instructions to
them.► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. - [96%] Lorraine raised an eyebrow at
Myulliaas’sgloomy ► It should be Myullias’s. - [99%] Lorraine said. “But next time I
gotto the empire, I ► It should be go.
- [26%] at least close enough to give instructions to
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V8P3
39% - Better not be doing that at the guild
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Volume 8 - Part 4:
- [85%] “Enough!
it’shopeless!” said the boy. ► It should be It’s (Capitalized). - [94%] “That’s not true!
he’snot like that!” the ► It should be He’s (Capitalized). - [99%] “Oh,
Oh, I―” the girl stammered and stared ► It should be oh (lowercase).
- [85%] “Enough!
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@terabyte said in Unwanted Undead - Corrections Topic:
Volume 8 - Part 2:
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Butif we could get their help...” ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
On my display it's reading as at 71%, but I suspect I've got the text at a different level of magnification.
Anyway...
It hasn't been fixed as of yet.It's a one sentence spoken paragraph complete in one line, with a proper ending quotation mark. It doesn't have the beginning quotation mark. Thus, the line as a whole is as follows:
But if we could get their help..."
What it should be is:
"But if we could get their help..."
It really needs that opening quotation mark to flag the fact that it is a spoken sentence.
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@weasalopes said in Unwanted Undead - Corrections Topic:
It's a one sentence spoken paragraph complete in one line, with a proper ending quotation mark. It doesn't have the beginning quotation mark. Thus, the line as a whole is as follows:
But if we could get their help..."
What it should be is:
"But if we could get their help..."
It really needs that opening quotation mark to flag the fact that it is a spoken sentence.That's basically what I wrote. Not sure why you mentioned the same thing with different words? 🙄
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My thought was that if it hadn't been fixed in that amount of time, maybe they hadn't caught on to why it was wrong?
In such a situation, rephrasing sometimes helps.At least, back when I was a supervisor I found that to be the case.
Either way, it seemed enough time had passed since you reported it that giving it a bump felt like an idea.
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@weasalopes It depends on the translator/editor really: some fix things right away in the prepub, some fix it after a few days to wait for everyone to read/post, others simply check the topic once all volume parts are out and update the prepubs, and some other don't even update the prepubs but just fix the errors for the final epubs instead.
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@terabyte
Heh.
So there isn't a standard policy on this J-Novel wide...That does seem in line with J-Novel being founded and operated by folks who came up from within the fan community rather than a more traditional business model, yes.
I need to keep reminding myself that fan-derived groups operate differently from the bureaucracies I worked for prior to retirement.
You'd think I'd have caught onto that by now, being involved with Light Novels Translations (as in the specific fan translation group founded by Nefarian) for the last several years... -
@weasalopes said in Unwanted Undead - Corrections Topic:
being involved with Light Novels Translations (as in the specific fan translation group founded by Nefarian) for the last several years...
Hmm....
writes down Weasalopes name in his Death Note
...oh geez, you're the editor on that farce of DarkHeartedAlchemist's.
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@gamen DarkHeartedAlchemist is a stone around my neck. His philosophy of translation is way out of synch from my own, to put it mildly.
I think a translation should be line by line compatible with the raws, akin to the dual language editions of Ceaser's Gallic Wars and such that I was exposed to in academia...you should be able to look at the translation and figure out where you are in the raws due to the formatting matching up. The translation should reflect the flavor of the original, use the closest English equivalent in regard to the style in which it is written, and above all else, not have anything being added to it! None of this mass exposition which wasn't in the original stuff. If the original is terse, the translation should be terse. Don't be tossing gamer or suchlike terminology in when it's not to be found in the source materials. Grr.It is unfortunate but true that there are a significant number of translation projects at LNT where I'm listed as the editor where I've done very little for a very long time; a bad case of burnout as a result of a couple of projects where I found myself wanting to pretty much redo the translation from scratch once I started looking at the raws while editing...and DHA is right up there on the list.
Oddly enough, he requests me as his editor of choice, despite the differences in perspective. Differences in philosophy aside, he's not a bad guy; that actually makes it much more frustrating. -
Volume 8 - Part 6:
- [1%] I shouted as I put Lorraine
down.and ran toward him. ► Removeperiod.
- [1%] I shouted as I put Lorraine
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[41%] It had gonet unused for a long time and had received no blood -> gone
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Volume 8 - Part 7:
- [11%] Isaac heard Lorraine as
well.“We’ll talk later!” ► Missing space.
- [11%] Isaac heard Lorraine as
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Volume 8 Part 7
[0%] the room was shaped like half a sphere -> AKA a dome?
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Volume 8 Part 8:
This one may actually be an accurate translation of the raws, in which case it shows a difference between the author and myself in what should be mentioned in a fantasy setting..."It was more like a laser than fire breath"
Laser is an acronym derived from "light amplification by stimulated emission of radiation", and the first functional laser was built in the same year I was born, 1960. The concept, however, goes back to Albert Einstein, who wrote the underlying concepts in 1917 (all four of my grandparents were in their late teens or early twenties at that time...); it's a very recent development, barely over a hundred years since it was first theorized.
They got away with Rimuru Tempest using them due to his being a reborn Japanese salaryman...but this isn't an Isekai, this is a straight up fantasy setting, no imported Earth knowledge included.
So if レーザー shows up in the raws, that's that, but if it doesn't...could something else be used? Something that does fit with a pre-industrial culture?
Edit: OK, given magic users having done the proper research, the concept of a laser isn't impossible for them to have derived or replicated...but have we seen that within this setting to date? Research along those lines, sufficiently well know that Rennt would use it in his internal narration of events...that's what bothers me concerning this. Not that the monster used something that could be described by referring to lasers, but that Rennt would have the proper concepts to make such a reference in the first place.
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@weasalopes said in Unwanted Undead - Corrections Topic:
レーザー
At least in the WN it was 光線: 火炎というよりかは光線に近く
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Volume 8 - Part 10:
- [25%] Those are for purging
malice, which makes them ► Before it was called miasma. (Or is this another term change that happened when the new TL/ED team took over?) - [54%] That was why they
preferredmaterialsinstead of ► It should be preferred materials (space). - [72%] for food lately! Sister
Lilianeven hunts monsters ► It should be Lillian (double L).
- [25%] Those are for purging
