Reborn to Master the Blade: From Hero-King to Extraordinary Squire - Corrections Topic

costmuffled

Vol. 1 Part 8 - 21%
"Did Cyrene’s innate trust in people unknowingly led an enemy to her side?"
led -> lead
Even so, the sentence is a little awkward. Maybe something like this would be better, "Did Cyrene's innate trust in people allow an enemy to catch her unawares?"

Rahul Balaggan

@costmuffled

Hello,

I have merged your correction post from your created topic into this established corrections topic for the Hero-King series.

Thank you for taking the time to point this out.

Just for reference, all opening posts for the volume discussion topics do have a link to the corrections topics.

Once again, thank you.

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 10:

[37%] ► The text is split into 2 paragraphs, merge them.

“Moving it to an isolated area on a hostile border will let any magicite beasts it produces be our first line of defense,” Inglis said. “Fighting fire with fire. It still seems like a such a waste, though.” For Inglis, the idea of pitting two strong enemies against each other instead of having to—instead of getting to—fight either was a crushing blow,

even if the strategy was sound.

[98%] I can’t want to see how she mauls all the ► It should be wait.

Hephaestus13

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Volume 01 - Part 1:

[40%] "... To see how those come after me take up my mantle... " ► Add who OR whom
1. '"... To see how those who come after me take up my mantle... "'
2. '"... To see how those whom come after me take up my mantle... "'

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Volume 01 - Part 2:

[0%] She decided to take the situation as a reminder from Goddess to stay focused. ► Add the
1. 'She decided to take the situation as a reminder from the Goddess to stay focused.'
[0%] Inglis promptly flushed red at the suddention attention focused on her. ► Should be sudden
[73%] "Yes, it's wonderful!" Serena did as well. ► Should be either said OR nodded
1. '"Yes, it's wonderful!" Serena said as well.'
2. '"Yes, it's wonderful!" Serena nodded as well.'

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Volume 01 - Part 3:

~~[14%] They had both made wishes made that night. ► Delete superfluous~~ Already Mentioned
[43%] Finally, she found him at the rear of the haul, engaged in light chat with a few others. ► Should be hall AND chatter OR conversation
1. 'Finally, she found him at the rear of the hall, engaged in light chatter with a few others.'
2. 'Finally, she found him at the rear of the hall, engaged in light conversation with a few others.'
3. 'Finally, she found him at the rear of the hall, engaged in a light chat with a few others.'

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Volume 01 - Part 4:

[58%] destroying the nearly manicured line of trees, she was unharmed. ► Should be neatly

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Volume 01 - Part 5:

[0%] "Yeah, totally! I'm sure she'll make an impression!" Rafinha's gave voice to the spreading excitement. ► Either remove the 's or add something between the two, cry for example
1. '"Yeah, totally! I'm sure she'll make an impression!" Rafinha gave voice to the spreading excitement.'
2. '"Yeah, totally! I'm sure she'll make an impression!" Rafinha's cry gave voice to the spreading excitement.'

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Volume 01 - Part 8:

[30%] Did Cyrene's innate trust in people unknowingly led an enemy to her side? ► Should be lead Already Mentioned
[60%] Inglis watched the hieral menace moved without hesitation. ► Add as
1. 'Inglis watched as the hieral menace moved without hesitation.'
[60%] The Inglis had tried over and over to replicate the process for herself. ► Either remove The OR make Then Inglis But it really should be more like From then Inglis Already Mentioned
1. 'Then Inglis had tried over and over to replicate the process for herself.'
2. 'From then Inglis had tried over and over to replicate the process for herself.'
[70%] each of the complex flows of aether than made up a living thing. ► Should be that

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Terabyte

Volume 2 - Part 1:

[45%] Miriela paused again before confirming. “Two months for three, then?” ► Inglis asked for A month for three people and Miriela said ok. Why it's two months now? 🤨
[93%] ► The sentence is wrongly split into 2 paragraphs, merge them.

But no sooner had the words left her mouth than the Flygear rocked wildly
as the beast’s thrashing twisted the blade in her hands. “Ah! Ugh... It’s so heavy...”

Iseguy

2.1

the Flygear rocked wildly

as the beast’s thrashing twisted

Errant carriage return.

pcj

@terabyte said in Hero-King - Corrections Topic:

[45%] Miriela paused again before confirming. “Two months for three, then?” ► Inglis asked for A month for three people and Miriela said ok. Why it's two months now? 🤨

The original bid was for 3 months for one person, Inglis countered with a month for three people, and Miriela met her in the middle. I think Miriela went back up because she was impressed so she was giving her a bonus, rather than actually trying to negotiate at that point.

Terabyte

@pcj I guess that's also an option, I didn't think of it. If that's the case, I think it should be made a bit more clear though.

Terabyte

Volume 2 - Part 2:

[0%] Chapter II: Inglis, Age 15: Chiral Knights’ Academy (2) ► Chapter 1's title had a different format: Age 15—The Chiral Knights’ Academy (1) (dash instead of colon + missing The).

Ellyonia

The image in part 3 ~78% seems to be missing, it is showing {img - smiling girl with ice sword}

Terabyte

@Ellyonia The image's been fixed already. You can see it if you reload the part. 😉

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Volume 2 - Part 3:

[47%] why don’t we talk to the principal about it?” ► Missing closing parenthesis ).
[80%] “Hee hee hee....” The man followed Inglis ► It should be 3 periods.

Ellyonia

@terabyte yep, it was fixed shortly after I posted this >__<

I really liked this parts image

Terabyte

Volume 2 - Part 4:

[14%] “I am. Did you already finish your extra Flygear training? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[92%] I can’t move, I’m gonna diiieee....” Lahti slumped to the ► It should be 3 periods.

Terabyte

Volume 2 - Part 5:

[56%] following orders precisely! Our lives are not our own! ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[64%] “Hee hee hee heeeeeee....” The white-haired guard ► It should be 3 periods.

Shiroi Hane

V2, P4, 80%: “We should get out story straight” - our

UrchinStar47

V2P6 62% – At this rate they probably wouldn't hold out wrong.

Iseguy

@urchinstar47 said in Hero-King - Corrections Topic:

hold out wrong.

“long.”

Iseguy

2.6

Inglis knew if she allowed herself to fall back, it wouldn’t be impossible to make it through without being hit.

“would be impossible” or “wouldn't be possible”.

Terabyte

Volume 2 - Part 7:

[21%] “You could tell? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[39%] control of aether. It was impossible that he ► It should be possible.

Iseguy

2.7

two more Flygears arrived, replacing the presence of the one that just escaped.

Odd phrasing. Maybe “two more Flygears arrived in place of the one that just escaped.”