Guide to the Perfect Otaku Girlfriend - Corrections Topic

[myskaros]

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Guide to the Perfect Otaku Girlfriend: Roomies and Romance!

Currently in prepublication: Volume 5!

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Volume 1 - Part 1:

• [18%] the “Otaku Meetup & Matchmaking Party”. My reason ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [22%] about the “Otaku Meetup & Matchmaking Party”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [35%] She'd stood out from the very first day of school. ► It should be She’d (different ’ ).
• [63%] to “literally translate your name into English”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.

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Volume 1 - Part 2:

• [95%] IMS, short for “IdolMaster Station”, was a gacha ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [98%] YS—what did it stand for? ‘Yumeno☆Saki’, was it?” ► Move the comma inside the quotes.

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Volume 1 - Part 3:

• [15%] and hotpants that showed off her pale thighs.. ► Duplicate period.
• [20%] floral scent of her shampoo. it was more than ► Either comma or It (Capitalized)?
• [22%] It took every fibre of my being to keep myself ► It should be fiber (US spelling).
• [76%] “It’s called ‘PopKing’. It’s the anime that boys ► Move the period inside the quotes.

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Volume 1 - Part 4:

• [0%] Takeshi, literally meant “fierce”, but he looked, ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [11%] cosplay. He was what people called a “crossplayer”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [31%] “Yeah! It was great! I replied, finally noticing ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
• [48%] on an app I’d never heard of: “SNOW”. Kokoro ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [72%] Now this looks delicious! And it’s full of meat! ► Remove the italic format from the starting t of this.
• [78%] “RIP headphone users”, “Emily? More like Screamily”, “A lady of fine yuri taste indeed”, ► Move all 3 commas inside the quotes.
• [80%] even meet a boy like that! That’s total garbage!” ► Remove the closing double quote. Kokoro's dialogue continues in the next paragraph.
• [99%] the incoming call from “Up-Load”. That was the ► Move the period inside the quotes.

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Volume 1 - Part 5:

• [10%] my curiosity winning over my best judgement. ► It should be judgment (US spelling).
• [35%] Friendz had “communities”, theme-specific ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [36%] I could send her a “like”, and then she’d get ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [46%] Are you out of your mind!? Any sane girl would ► This series uses ?! usually.
• [67%] like “otaku” and “anime”, which immediately ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [67%] “Otaku Friendz Community”, and even more ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [67%] Community” and “VTuber Community”. They ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [81%] then would just hault mid-sentence, telling ► It should be halt.
• [85%] next to a pillar to message K,, but someone ► Duplicate comma.
• [87%] “What...? WHAT?! You’re K?!” she asked me ► Missing period.

[pcj]

I'm sure the comma outside the quotes things comes from people who are used to computer programs. Because if you put the comma inside the quote in a computer program, it's going to be part of the quoted text, even when you put the text somwhere the comma doesn't belong.

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@pcj said in Guide to the Perfect Otaku Girlfriend - Corrections Topic:

I'm sure the comma outside the quotes things comes from people who are used to computer programs. Because if you put the comma inside the quote in a computer program, it's going to be part of the quoted text, even when you put the text somwhere the comma doesn't belong.

Naw, it's a British punctuation/style guide thing, sorry for the confusion! It will change in parts that I edit in future but for anything I already completed, I'll go back to change it when I fix any errors rather than continually going back :)

(So for this, it should be American, but for series following a British style guide, it's different^^).

[Weasalopes]

Volume 1, Part 4: [note: percentages are with font size at 150%...]

[47%] How to Raise a Boring Girlfriend. It was a popular
The italics extend too far; they should stop at the end of Girlfriend.

Um, how to put this?
I took a glance at this novel just to kill some time...and I just purchased it.
So, yeah, doing good.

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Guess this part was edited before the above post since it's still British style. 😋

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Volume 1 - Part 6:

• [5%] like that was like labelling yourself as an ► It should be labeling (US spelling).
• [23%] concentrate on learning how to look “clean”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [24%] “Yeah, I’ll do my best anyway,.” I agreed. ► Duplicate punctuation.
• [37%] I meant “Kagetora Ichigaya”, but many ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [61%] nice to me: “Yumemiya Sumire”, a cute, ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [61%] and a frilly dress, and “Ice Queen”, a tall ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [81%] Far from being “cool”, all three of them ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [87%] told my eyebrows are “a bit off”. Great. ► Move the period inside the quotes.

[pcj]

Volume 1 - Part 6:

• [62%] Had they not been, after all, there’s no way they wouldn’t have let noobs like Kokoro join. >> should be would (because they did let them in, so it doesn't make sense otherwise)

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Volume 1 - Part 7:

• [13%] “Simple and clean, not ‘bland’. It’s better than ► Move the period inside the quotes.
• [56%] “I-It’s 2-Heart! ‘At’, number two, hyphen, Heart! ► Move the comma inside the quotes.

[pcj]

Volume 1 - Part 7:

• [15%] NOTHING IS WORTH IF YOU AREN’T HAPPY. >> unless this is a typical Japanese Engrish shirt and you're hoping the audience realizes that, then this should be WORTH IT IF
• [21%] You’re going to wear it in front of your friends. >> From the context this should be You're not going since she just told him her friends would laugh at her it they saw it.
• [28%] “But I always go out with a bag!” I asked her. >> That wasn't a question, why is it "asked"?

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Volume 1 - Part 8:

• [73%] I could have said “I told you so”, but I didn’t. ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
• [92%] for the first time. I hoped you all enjoyed reading ► It should be hope.

[pcj]

Volume 1 - Part 8:

• [48%] If it wasn’t for her, I wouldn’t have gone at that otaku meetup. >> should be to

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Volume 2 - Part 1:

• [11%] gyaru looks and extroverted behaviour, she looked ► It should be behavior (US spelling).

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Volume 2 - Part 4:

• [0%] A few days later. ► The paragraph's indented differently compared to the others. (Extra spacing at the start?)
• [93%] as we started eating,“I met Kusumi ► Missing space.

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Volume 2 - Part 5:

• [26%] a phone booth and dialled his own number. ► It should be dialed (US spelling).
• [50%] Kusumi. Anything troubling you?” I asked him ► Missing period.

[pcj]

Volume 2 - Part 5:

• [87%] she squealed Ai. >> should be at Ai or to Ai

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Volume 2 - Part 6:

• [43%] averted her gaze, shifting about as if uncomfortable.. ► Duplicate period.
• [80%] ► The second dialogue is split into 2 paragraphs, merge them.

“Yeah, I gotta agree with you there,” Iroha said. “They just come here hoping to date the maids or something.

Oh, by the way, did you manage to get the tickets for the Next Stage live event? I’ve had no luck at all.”

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Volume 2 - Part 7:

• [18%] “There’ll be looods of cute otaku maids for you to meet!” ► It should be loooads. (Or is it on purpose?)