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    • myskaros
      myskaros Staff last edited by lovelight

      This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Min-Maxing My TRPG Build in Another World.

      Currently in prepublication: Volume 4 Canto I!

      Whoever said nothing's impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.

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      • Terabyte
        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

        Volume 1 - Part 1:

        • [8%] perceiving myself as a five year old boy. A single ► It should be five-year-old (hyphens).
        • [25%] or twenty sides. One occasion hundred sided dice ► It should be On occasion.
        • [38%] “race of wise fools” or the “lottery race”, but ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
        • [57%] long, but the five year old deep in my heart was ► It should be five-year-old (hyphens).
        • [81%] in the end, I was still a five year old child. I could ► It should be five-year-old (hyphens).
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        • MasterLillyclaw
          MasterLillyclaw Premium Member last edited by MasterLillyclaw

          Volume 1

          Part 2, 61%: "The palpable motion in Her hair and the visible softness of her body were alluring enough [...]"

          Part 2, 67%: "With the Mother Goddess and her sidereal attendants as witnesses [...]"

          Based on the use of capitalization for deity pronouns earlier in this part when Erich was talking to the bishop, I think these should be capitalized as Her?

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          • Terabyte
            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

            Volume 1 - Part 3:

            • [Generic] There'e 5 instances of worshipped / worshipper(s) / worshipping (UK spelling). The US spelling has a single P.
            • [8%] full of stories about heavenly judgement, after all. ► It should be judgment (US spelling).
            • [56%] life and blood of the imperial palace. The way ► It should be imperial speech.
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            • Shiny
              Shiny Premium Member @Terabyte last edited by Shiny

              Volume 1 - Part 1:

              • These experiences formed memories—memories of a man named Fukemachi Saku. Should this be Fukamachi?
              • I would love to get at least one Scale IX, like IX: Divine Favor or IX: Divine. Two at level IX? I suspect that the the second Divine level is just an alternative name for Divine Favour that was left in as an internal note and so should be deleted. However, maybe it depends on the skill whether it is called Divine or Divine Favor, so maybe it is correct.

              Stay shiny, y'all.

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                Will Holcomb Editors @Shiny last edited by

                @shiny It depends on the skill in this particular case.

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                • jcochran
                  jcochran Premium Member last edited by

                  Part 4, 43% Is it even possible to rob a man of his sword without so much as itching his fingertips?

                  Shouldn't "itching" be "scratching"?

                  Morning and Mourning sound alike for good and sufficient reasons.

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                  • M
                    Med1um last edited by Med1um

                    I imagine, "mr. Brother" is "nii-sama".

                    Well, regardless, "mr" together with a "member of your family" is definitely no go. Atleast make it "dear brother".

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                    • Shiroi Hane
                      Shiroi Hane Premium Member last edited by

                      V1, P5, 79%: "lifted her by the armpits to dislodge [her from] my neck" - sounds painful otherwise.

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                      • Terabyte
                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                        Volume 1 - Part 5:

                        • [46%] in agony) effectively cancelled this gift out ► It should be canceled (US spelling).
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                        • Terabyte
                          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                          Volume 1 - Part 6:

                          • [32%] dodging, and counter attacking—both ► It should be counterattacking (no space) or counter-attacking (hyphen).
                          • [34%] is important, but the a helmet’s shape is ► Remove either the or a.
                          • [95%] That was proof of their acknowledgement. ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
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                          • Terabyte
                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                            Volume 1 - Part 8:

                            • [7%] how would I ever set foot into a forest or ruin ? ► Remove extra space.
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                            • Shiroi Hane
                              Shiroi Hane Premium Member last edited by

                              V1, P9, 64%: “without dampening its mpact”

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                              • Terabyte
                                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                Volume 1 - Part 9:

                                • [40%] his tendons and reached bone when its course ► It should be the bone / his bone?
                                • [63%] dampening its mpact, which was comparable to ► It should be impact.
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                                • M
                                  MaxWyght Premium Member last edited by MaxWyght

                                  Hello.

                                  First time doing something like this, and also unfortunately from mobile, so formatting might not be correct...

                                  Please forgive any mistakes...

                                  Part 3, 67%

                                  I looked around a featurless plain lined with farm boys from around our canton.

                                  Should be "plane"(area/expanse/field) rather than "plain"(simple/unadorned/average)

                                  Disregard, I am dumb

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                                  • saffire
                                    saffire Premium Member @MaxWyght last edited by

                                    @maxwyght said in Min-Maxing My TRPG Build - Corrections Topic:

                                    I looked around a featurless plain lined with farm boys from around our canton.

                                    Pretty sure plain is correct, as in a large flat grassland.

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                                      MaxWyght Premium Member @saffire last edited by

                                      @saffire said in Min-Maxing My TRPG Build - Corrections Topic:

                                      Pretty sure plain is correct, as in a large flat grassland.

                                      Well, now I feel dumb, but also not, because I double checked it and learned something new.

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                                      • Microdynames
                                        Microdynames Premium Member last edited by Microdynames

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                                        • Terabyte
                                          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                          Volume 1 - Part 10:

                                          • [71%] felt the mattress shift. She'd been putting up ► It should be She’d (different ’ ).
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                                          • M
                                            MaxWyght Premium Member last edited by

                                            Gonna embarass myself again, but screw it.

                                            V2 part 1:
                                            56%: I said, causing the woman to sigh in exasperation, "Did my parents say the same thing?"

                                            Wouldn't "didn't" work better in this context?
                                            MC is confident with his statement, so the question is more of a rhetorical statement.

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