Min-Maxing My TRPG Build - Corrections Topic

Libri Liberorum

V4 part 5 19%

That purging flame required several polemurges working in tandem

Number mismatch between "tandem" (exactly two) and "several".

Shiroi Hane

V4P5: "Two creatures altogether estranged from ethics each let their own heavy emotions sink deep into their cores, and then carried on with [the] lecture."

spegasaur

V4, P5 38%(ish)
"To choose violence was to choose a path with less smiles and more pain."

I realise I'm probably in a minority here, but would it not read better as "fewer smiles"?

Terabyte

Volume 4 - Part 6:

[73%] “You musn’t ask for the impossible, Your Majesty!” ► It should be mustn’t.

Microdynames

V4.1 Part 6:

40% - "I suspect the fault for that lies more with your genetics than with me..."

as the concept of the "gene" (discrete heritable units of information) and genetics is a relatively modern 19th century thing, it might be less jarring to translate this as something more classic like "bloodline" instead

Shiroi Hane

V4P6: there's a mix of Stuttgard and Stuttgart (the latter is correct)

MaxWyght

Volume 4, part 1, 6%
Spleen cancer should be replaced with pancreatic cancer

Shiroi Hane

V4P7, “Her thin black tights had intricate embroidery all across it” - across them.

MaxWyght

V4, Canto 1, Part 8, 56%:
"With how well she'd done well for herself..."

Pretty sure the second well is redundant

Terabyte

Volume 4 - Part 11:

[58%] “E-Erich, what do we do!? Should I try ► It should be ?! for consistency.

Wellwisher

Vol.4 Canto 1 part 2

This would be like handing an average white collar worker forty to eighty thousand dollars.

How were we ever meant to keep our cool when the equivalent of tens of thousands of dollars had fallen into our laps?

Volumes 1 and 3 used yen for real-world currency, so it should probably be converted to yen for consistency (or previous volumes should change to dollars)

Terabyte

Volume 4 (Canto II) - Part 1:

[94%] “Is this our destination?” Miss Cilia asked. ► It should be Celia.

Terabyte

Volume 4 (Canto II) - Part 2:

[41%] to Miss Celia could constitute sexual harrassment. ► It should be harassment.