Dragon Daddy Diaries - Corrections Topic

yuzumori

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Dragon Daddy Diaries.

Currently in prepublication: Volume 3!

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 1:

[6%] 1: Mr. Dragon Picks Up a Cute Baby Daughter ► It should be Chapter 1 to keep it consistent with part 2.
[53%] “Daddy!’ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a single one.
[63%] 2: Mr. Dragon Rears a Child ► It should be Chapter 2 to keep it consistent with part 2.
[79%] 3: Mr. Dragon Reads Aloud to Her ► It should be Chapter 3 to keep it consistent with part 2.

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Volume 1 - Part 2:

[19%] “Wowwww!” We’re so high!” ► Remove extra closing double quote in the middle.
[40%] what’s the big idea?I, I’m n-nice and ► Missing space.

indii

@terabyte Thank you!!! These items have all been updated.

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 3:

[85%] “Boo!” she shouted ► Missing period.

indii

@terabyte This has been fixed. Thank you again!

pcj

Volume 1 - Part 4:

[41%] Fairy Tail Cute >> haven't seen this series name drop another franchise before... is this supposed to be Fairy Tale?

indii

@pcj Great catch! This actually should have been Fairy-Tale Cute, and it's updated now :)

jcochran

7% I'd read so many child-reading books ...

Believe that ought to be child-rearing books.

indii

@jcochran This is also fixed now, thank you!

pcj

Volume 1 - Part 5:

[58%] When we left the city, Olivia was holding more than she could hold in her arms >> I love the metaphor but it sounds awkward because it's kinda physically impossible. :-) (not that Olivia isn't a miracle worker anyway). Does it need a different expression for "a huge amount of stuff"? Or maybe since it's more than she can hold in her arms, she's holding some of it somewhere else? (on top of her head? in a backpack?)

indii

@pcj Thanks for pointing this out! I just updated that bit to "Olivia was holding almost more than she could carry in her arms."

I personally imagined her with a huuuuuge mountain of bags and boxes in her arms and tiring herself out. Lol

pcj

@indii said in Dragon Daddy Diaries - Corrections Topic:

I personally imagined her with a huuuuuge mountain of bags and boxes in her arms and tiring herself out. Lol

With what Clowria has said about her I kind of doubt it would have tired her at all. Probably just be really awkward to hang on to :)

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 5:

[35%] the boarding school for girls ages twelve and up where ► It should be nine? Olivia is nine and right before it says She’d apparently be in the “pre-academy” phase of the school until age twelve.

pcj

Volume 1 - Part 6:

[77%] The Palestria that was Daisy’s ancestor may have turned tail and fled was still a member of the Hero’s party >> should be fled, but she was

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 6:

[28%] from next to us. “...’Eldraco’? The, the head of ► The starting single quote is a closing one.
[88%] though, my heart near enough stopped there...!“ ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a starting one.
[88%] “Oh no, that’s not good!“ said Olivia, eyes wide ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a starting one.

jcochran

21% ...scurried home right before stepping food in the castle!

"food" ought to be "foot".

indii

@pcj @Terabyte @jcochran Thank you all! These updates have been made

indii

@terabyte Good catch - we're going to double-check this bit against the Japanese again just to make sure we got this right.

Terabyte

Volume 1 - Part 7:

[6%] a friend come home to see me too! so...” ► It should be So (Capitalized).
[10%] know about my sleeping over Olivia’s.” ► It should be sleeping over at?
[19%] insert5.jpg ► Are you sure this image's in the right place? I see flags and fireworks(?) in it. Not exactly anything mentioned in this part so far.
[46%] I couldn’t even deal. Am I wrong, or is ► It should be deal with it?
[78%] laid out the picnic blnaket. The sunlight ► It should be blanket.
[83%] milady, what would you like to order? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[86%] “I want one you that made me!” ► It should be that you (switch around).

pcj

@terabyte said in Dragon Daddy Diaries - Corrections Topic:

[19%] insert5.jpg ► Are you sure this image's in the right place? I see flags and fireworks(?) in it. Not exactly anything mentioned in this part so far.

I was going to ask that, too. It shows Clowria, Meredia, and Olivia, and the 'fireworks' might be the flowers she found, so it might go with the romp in the field at the end.