Dragon Daddy Diaries - Corrections Topic

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Volume 3 - Part 6:

[30%] “Uhh....” ► It should be 3 periods.
[40%] “....Haugh?” The Dark Queen tilted her ► It should be 3 periods.
[59%] “Haugh....?” The Dark Queen stopped ► It should be 3 periods.
[93%] “Oh....? Tremendous power, is it?” the ► It should be 3 periods.

indii

@terabyte Updated! Thanks again!

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Volume 3 - Part 7:

[52%] “Haugh....” ► It should be 3 periods.
[65%] (Three of) the Four Great Kings of ► Why the parentheses? (And should The be Capitalized?)
[72%] “Grr....” ► It should be 3 periods.
[85%] “Okay, uhh, If I do this, then...” Olivia ► It should be if (lowercase).

indii

@terabyte Updated, thank you!

As for the second one, it's kind of a running joke that they're the Four Great Kings, even though there are currently three of them... However, I rephrased the sentence so it's a little less awkward.

Looking down coldly at her were (three of) the Four Great Kings of the Dark Realm.

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@indii Yeah, the sentence works better like that. :)

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Volume 3 - Part 8:

[33%] “About that ’trial’ thing?” ► The starting single quote is a closing one.
[72%] “.......What?” Maredia was riding ► It should be 6 periods (currently 7 😋).

indii

@terabyte Thank you! These are updated :)

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Volume 3 - Part 9:

[87%] (Three of) the Four Great Kings hung their heads in shame. ► Maybe With their heads hung in shame were (Three of) the Four Great Kings? Just like in part 7, starting with a parenthesis is a little awkward.
[90%] Massura with ’strength,’ Jinia with ’technology,’ and Chel ► Both starting single quotes are closing ones.
[99%] Was she strong enough to face her own weakness? ► It should be weaknesses (plural) for consistency.

indii

@terabyte These have been updated, thank you!

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Volume 3 - Part 10:

[Generic] Is there no Afterword for volume 3? The other two had it. I'm wondering if some text is missing at the end of the part.
[37%] “....Gah! I thought I was gonna die!!!” ► It should be 3 periods.
[43%] “....Ugh.” ► It should be 3 periods.
[60%] (Three of) the Four Great Kings of the [...] ► Just like before, starting the paragraph with a parenthesis is a little awkward.
[73%] and as the best Dark Queen in the all the realms.” ► Remove extra the.
[79%] had turned it into a ring, Thanatos had just said, ► The paragraph ends with a comma, merge the following dialogue or use a colon?

indii

@terabyte These items have been updated! And yup, there was no Afterword in this volume for whatever reason.