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    • yuzumori
      yuzumori Staff last edited by yuzumori

      This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections for Hell Mode.

      Currently in prepublication: Volume 4!

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      • Terabyte
        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

        Volume 1 - Part 1:

        • [5%] as he read the despair-inducing text that appeared.. ► Duplicate period.

        ===

        Volume 1 - Part 2:

        • [31%] “He’o. My name ’s A’en.” ► It should be name’s (no space). Or is it on purpose?
        • [42%] ► The Holder has 2 insects (Endurance +2; Agility +2) and 8 beasts (HP +8; Attack +8). Mousey's status around 3% lists Endurance 1, Attack 1 as buffs though rather than HP 1, Attack 1.
        HP: 4 (40) + 8
        MP: 0 (20)
        Attack: 1 (10) + 8
        Endurance: 1 (10) + 2
        Agility: 2 (25) + 2
        
        • [56%] “Wait, is that it? Even my max MP isn’t enough. Um, ► This is a thought. Remove extra starting double quote.
        • [67%] Creation {2}, Synthesis {1}, Enlargement {1}, Deletion ► It should be Expansion.
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        • Weasalopes
          Weasalopes Premium Member last edited by Weasalopes

          Part 3:

          Number of Throws Made (Cumulative)
          10,000
          0,000
          120,000

          Assume all the rest of the text not copied is good.
          What's with the 2nd line? Based upon further reading, it should be 10,000 (Edit: oops, 20,000 as pointed out below!)

          Effects of Leveling Up
          orrects the body's posture
          Increases the damage dealt

          Again, the first character of a line is missing.

          Rozemyne Rulz OK! | Roze and Ferd's Excellent Adventure. | All your libraries are belong to us. | Damuel is a Special Case.
          Regis LIVES! | WWRD
          Help me, Satomi-san. You're my only hope. | Fight! Yurika!
          All the cool kids call it StroX

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          • Terabyte
            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

            Volume 1 - Part 3:

            • [14%] had both heard from Greda that Krena was ► It should be Gerda.
            • [14%] to their place every day instead of Allen.. ► Duplicate period.
            • [17%] 0,000 times → Lvl. 2 ► It should be 20,000. (Based on the text later and also WN.)
            • [18%] behind obtaining skills . These specific ► Remove extra space.
            • [28%] orrects the body’s posture ► It should be Corrects. Already reported.
            • [31%] derived from “albaheron”, Mash’s name ► Move the comma inside the quotes.
            • [38%] “Don’t make trouble for the father, okay?” ► It should be your father?
            • [55%] behind to watch the other childrens’ results. ► It should be children’s (move the s).
            • [73%] just like that? Ater all the fuss they made ► It should be After.
            • [79%] maximum value a stat could cap out at. . ► Duplicate period.
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            • Anonynothing
              Anonynothing Premium Member last edited by Anonynothing

              Volume 1 - Part 2:

              [~15%] Allen's MP recoveres to full after sleeping for half a day (i.e., 6 hours).

              This may be correct, but half a day is 12 hours, and 6 hours being a quarter of a day, right? Assuming 6 h/MP × 2 MP = 12 h that may be correct, but I don't know what it originally is, so...

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              • mlindner
                mlindner Premium Member last edited by

                Are we sure his brother's name is "Mash"? Is it マシュー? As that's a common katakana for Matthew.

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                • Segoth
                  Segoth Member @mlindner last edited by

                  @mlindner said in Hell Mode Vol. 1 Discussion!:

                  Are we sure his brother's name is "Mash"? Is it マシュー? As that's a common katakana for Matthew.

                  This would probably be better in corrections.

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                  • Terabyte
                    Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                    Volume 1 - Part 4:

                    • [13%] time to meet the knights. Greda walked forward, ► It should be Gerda.
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                    • smdhundt
                      smdhundt Staff @Terabyte last edited by

                      @terabyte said in Hell Mode - Corrections Topic:

                      Volume 1 - Part 4:

                      • [13%] time to meet the knights. Greda walked forward, ► It should be Gerda.

                      Dang, Gerda's twin brother "Greda" making another appearance. Thanks for catching!

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                      • Terabyte
                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                        Volume 1 - Part 5:

                        • [89%] studying the Rank F Summons to the the extent ► Duplicate the.

                        ===

                        Volume 1 - Part 6:

                        • [60%] the +20 buffs, rather than the the +10 offered ► Duplicate the.
                        • [74%] The same bird that signalled the passing of the ► It should be signaled (US spelling).
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                        • Terabyte
                          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                          Volume 1 - Part 7:

                          • [18%] nodded to show his acknowledgement. He adjusted ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
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                          • Terabyte
                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by Terabyte

                            Volume 1 - Part 8:

                            • [33%] to recover MP does exist but is very experience. ► It should be expensive.
                            • [45%] received official acknowledgement as a full-fledged ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
                            • [90%] “Gerda and I discuss increasing the frequency of ► It should be discussed.
                            • [95%] after all, a six year old boy who had never even ► It should be six-year-old (hyphens).
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                            • Shiroi Hane
                              Shiroi Hane Premium Member @Terabyte last edited by

                              V1P8, 6%: "Rodin knew better [than] to say no"

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                              • Terabyte
                                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                Volume 1 - Part 9:

                                • [14%] double the number of great boar hunted. Both ► It should be boars.
                                • [32%] When Team 2 managed to lock the great boar’s ► It should be Team Two (in letters) for consistency.
                                • [54%] Allen nodded in acknowledgement, then began ► It should be acknowledgment (US spelling).
                                • [60%] was stopped, then Team 3 stepped forward to ► It should be Team Three (in letters) for consistency.
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                                • Shiroi Hane
                                  Shiroi Hane Premium Member last edited by

                                  V1, P10, 77%: “Deboji had sent a messenger To Rodin’s surprise” - missing fullstop
                                  80%: “fiststoo” - missing space

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                                  • Terabyte
                                    Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                    Volume 1 - Part 10:

                                    • [10%] in arm wrestling now?I’m so glad this level up came ► Missing space.
                                    • [75%] Deboji had sent a messenger To Rodin’s surprise, ► Missing period. Already reported.
                                    • [77%] as Gerda would resort to using his fiststoo quickly. ► It should be fists too (space). Already reported.
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                                    • T
                                      thefirstpunicwar Premium Member last edited by

                                      V1P10

                                      48% - However, this was a proper fleshed-and-blood world, not a game. ► Should be flesh-and-blood Only two saying I know would work for this. Either flesh-and-blood or fleshed out.

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                                      • Terabyte
                                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                        Volume 1 - Part 11:

                                        • [40%] dented the shields, but they otherwise held fast.. ► Duplicate period.
                                        • [52%] the price of a large steel shield swas astronomical.. ► A couple of issues:
                                          1. It should be was.
                                          2. Duplicate period.
                                        • [83%] in fact, virtually every one of the village’s menfolk ► Missing period.
                                        • [84%] one that was frantic.Many had ended up severely ► Missing space.
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                                        • b.scot.morgan
                                          b.scot.morgan Premium Member last edited by

                                          Volume 1, Part 11
                                          [43%] With the monster properly locked down, it was Rodin's team of spearmen to shine. ➡ maybe add time for between was and Rodin's?

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                                          • Hylebos
                                            Hylebos Premium Member last edited by

                                            There's a bunch of stuff this week that I'm sure someone with a keyboard will be better able to type out, but the one I wanted to inquire about was...

                                            In the middle of that phase in my life, I suddenly came across Reincarnated as a Dragon's Egg

                                            I'm sure this is a valid translation of the Japanese name for this series, but shouldn't this be Reincarnated as a Dragon Hatchling to match the english name for the series?

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