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    • myskaros
      myskaros Staff last edited by yuzumori

      This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections about Fantasy Inbound!

      Currently in prepublication: Volume 3!

      Whoever said nothing's impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.

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      • Terabyte
        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

        Volume 1 - Part 1:

        • [74%] could have elsewhere. If only they'd had one. ► It should be they’d (different ’ ).

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        Volume 1 - Part 2:

        • [9%] no amount of external judgement would stop her. ► It should be judgment (US spelling).
        • [66%] candles or lamps fuelled with salad oil if they ► It should be fueled (US spelling).
        • [74%] must. Believe me,we would have made a grand ► Missing space.
        • [96%] captivatingly beautiful. It sang, as if reciting a poem, ► It should be a colon? (Or a period?)
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        • Terabyte
          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

          Volume 1 - Part 3:

          • [21%] in light. “W-What the heck are those things!?” ► It should be ?! for consistency.
          • [38%] I-It won’t let go! Crap, there’s another one! ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
          • [56%] “I shall sing the traveller’s hymn. A song for ► It should be traveler’s (US spelling).
          • [75%] our escape plan doesn’t get out. Play it safe” ► Missing period.
          • [85%] “Yu,’ she said, “you accessed the Astral Library’s ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a single one.
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            thefirstpunicwar Premium Member last edited by

            V1P1

            52% - set with building muscles, boar-like faces ► Should this be bulging.

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            • Canipa
              Canipa Editors last edited by

              Thank you for the help, all. This is my first time as editor, so it's been a bit of a learning curve.

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              • Terabyte
                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by Terabyte

                Volume 1 - Part 4:

                • [17%] ► Duplicate The adjutant chuckled derisively part.
                [...] wonders for morale.” The adjutant chuckled derisively. The adjutant chuckled derisively, his unrepentant cruelty [...]
                
                • [71%] “Yu!” Aliya exclaimed ► Missing period.
                • [73%] Yu realized that he wasn't quite as right as ► It should be wasn’t (different ’ ).
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                • Terabyte
                  Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                  Volume 1 - Part 5:

                  • [53%] perfectly functional!” Aliya assured. “Stay calm, Yu! ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
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                  • Terabyte
                    Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                    Volume 1 - Part 6:

                    • [51%] into the back. They travelled from the city ► It should be traveled (US spelling).
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                    • Terabyte
                      Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                      Volume 1 - Part 7:

                      • [16%] skin beset both its eyes.. A green pheasant. ► Duplicate period.
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                      • Terabyte
                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                        Volume 1 - Part 8:

                        • [11%] “Aww, shucks, no way,“ Natsuki replied. her pitiful ► A couple of issues:
                          1. The dialogue's closing double quote is a starting one.
                          2. It should be Her (Capitalized).
                        • [53%] “I’ll input the message,” said Aliya ► Missing period.
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                        • Terabyte
                          Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                          Volume 1 - Part 9:

                          • [2%] can too, Yu. When you‘re one with the Asura, ► It should be you’re (different ’ ).
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                          • Terabyte
                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                            Volume 1 - Part 10:

                            • [8%] She parted her shapely lips and spoke the Gospel, ► It should be a colon?
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                            • Terabyte
                              Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                              Volume 2 - Part 1:

                              • [51%] Yeah!” Aliya interjected. “It’s been over ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
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                              • Terabyte
                                Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                Volume 2 - Part 2:

                                • [11%] That’s, well...” Shiba fidgeted nervously. ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
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                                • Canipa
                                  Canipa Editors @Terabyte last edited by

                                  @terabyte Thanks!

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                                  • Terabyte
                                    Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                    Volume 2 - Part 3:

                                    • [74%] mean specifically chicken,’” Aliya interjected. ► Remove extra closing single quote.
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                                    • Shiroi Hane
                                      Shiroi Hane Premium Member last edited by

                                      I’d already started a reply which I appear to have lost so I’ll have to do some re-reading

                                      V2P2, 81%: “Emasculated zombies” - I daresay they aren’t up for procreation but should that be emaciated?

                                      9%: “warehouses on the coast were a common enough site” - sight

                                      33%: “they were the greats” - I don’t get this. Greatest?

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                                      • Terabyte
                                        Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                        Volume 2 - Part 4:

                                        • [28%] separating them from the mens’ section was ► It should be men’s.
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                                        • Canipa
                                          Canipa Editors @Shiroi Hane last edited by

                                          @shiroi-hane Thank you! A little embarrassed I didn't catch the "emasculated zombies" lol.

                                          With, "They were the greats.", it's using the noun form here: https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/great

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                                          • Terabyte
                                            Terabyte Premium Member last edited by

                                            Volume 2 - Part 5:

                                            • [9%] with me than with that seagull your butchering.” ► It should be you’re.
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