Fantasy Inbound - Corrections Topic

[myskaros]

This is the dedicated topic for posting suggested corrections about Fantasy Inbound!

Currently in prepublication: Volume 3!

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Volume 1 - Part 1:

• [74%] could have elsewhere. If only they'd had one. ► It should be they’d (different ’ ).

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Volume 1 - Part 2:

• [9%] no amount of external judgement would stop her. ► It should be judgment (US spelling).
• [66%] candles or lamps fuelled with salad oil if they ► It should be fueled (US spelling).
• [74%] must. Believe me,we would have made a grand ► Missing space.
• [96%] captivatingly beautiful. It sang, as if reciting a poem, ► It should be a colon? (Or a period?)

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Volume 1 - Part 3:

• [21%] in light. “W-What the heck are those things!?” ► It should be ?! for consistency.
• [38%] I-It won’t let go! Crap, there’s another one! ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.
• [56%] “I shall sing the traveller’s hymn. A song for ► It should be traveler’s (US spelling).
• [75%] our escape plan doesn’t get out. Play it safe” ► Missing period.
• [85%] “Yu,’ she said, “you accessed the Astral Library’s ► The dialogue's closing double quote is a single one.

[thefirstpunicwar]

V1P1

52% - set with building muscles, boar-like faces ► Should this be bulging.

[Canipa]

Thank you for the help, all. This is my first time as editor, so it's been a bit of a learning curve.

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Volume 1 - Part 4:

• [17%] ► Duplicate The adjutant chuckled derisively part.

[...] wonders for morale.” The adjutant chuckled derisively. The adjutant chuckled derisively, his unrepentant cruelty [...]

• [71%] “Yu!” Aliya exclaimed ► Missing period.
• [73%] Yu realized that he wasn't quite as right as ► It should be wasn’t (different ’ ).

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Volume 1 - Part 5:

• [53%] perfectly functional!” Aliya assured. “Stay calm, Yu! ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.

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Volume 1 - Part 6:

• [51%] into the back. They travelled from the city ► It should be traveled (US spelling).

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Volume 1 - Part 7:

• [16%] skin beset both its eyes.. A green pheasant. ► Duplicate period.

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Volume 1 - Part 8:

• [11%] “Aww, shucks, no way,“ Natsuki replied. her pitiful ► A couple of issues:
  1. The dialogue's closing double quote is a starting one.
  2. It should be Her (Capitalized).
• [53%] “I’ll input the message,” said Aliya ► Missing period.

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Volume 1 - Part 9:

• [2%] can too, Yu. When you‘re one with the Asura, ► It should be you’re (different ’ ).

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Volume 1 - Part 10:

• [8%] She parted her shapely lips and spoke the Gospel, ► It should be a colon?

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Volume 2 - Part 1:

• [51%] Yeah!” Aliya interjected. “It’s been over ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.

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Volume 2 - Part 2:

• [11%] That’s, well...” Shiba fidgeted nervously. ► The dialogue's starting double quote is missing.

[Canipa]

@terabyte Thanks!

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Volume 2 - Part 3:

• [74%] mean specifically chicken,’” Aliya interjected. ► Remove extra closing single quote.

[Shiroi Hane]

I’d already started a reply which I appear to have lost so I’ll have to do some re-reading

V2P2, 81%: “Emasculated zombies” - I daresay they aren’t up for procreation but should that be emaciated?

9%: “warehouses on the coast were a common enough site” - sight

33%: “they were the greats” - I don’t get this. Greatest?

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Volume 2 - Part 4:

• [28%] separating them from the mens’ section was ► It should be men’s.

[Canipa]

@shiroi-hane Thank you! A little embarrassed I didn't catch the "emasculated zombies" lol.

With, "They were the greats.", it's using the noun form here: https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/great

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Volume 2 - Part 5:

• [9%] with me than with that seagull your butchering.” ► It should be you’re.