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    JNC Group Writing Review Thread —The Two Minds of Cassandra

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    • jazzyjeoff
      jazzyjeoff @Dawnaxis last edited by jazzyjeoff

      @Dawnaxis

      Well, some of that is good. I have dropped hints—and I can spoil it if you want. But he is is obviously using her—he calls her “his little investment”—the question is “how is he profiting off of her actions?” and that is supposed to be a mystery—there will be more hints (and I have already dropped a few)—I just don't want it to be too obvious—I hope to keep the reader guessing through at least half way through the book. Ideally, I want the hints to substantial enough that when the reader gets to the reveal, they yell—that was so freaking obvious!” —and then throw their reading device accross the room smashing it into a thousand pieces!
      Hmmmn—I feel like I forgot something…
      Oh, yes…
      Mwah-ha-ha!

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      • jazzyjeoff
        jazzyjeoff @Dawnaxis last edited by

        @Dawnaxis I might take out the bit about the “the church being tolerant” thing—but I think I will wait and see what the rest of the story looks like—I have removed my original ending and have decided to add many more chapters. But it does serve a purpose—the Reverend Mother is (possibly) the nicest adult in the book—and while it is okay for the reader feel a bit of respite from stress when Cassandra is with her—I don't necessarily want the reader to feel safe when Cassandra is in church.

        While the evil priest is not really isn't in that many scenes, he is supposed to be menacing when he is there. Not knowing what his boundaries are adds to that. (It's funny that something like Bookworm doesn't just hint at pedophile priests—but doesn't come off nearly as dark. That’s not an argument, just an observation. Just thinking about how to achieve that balance in the reader).

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