Going to start writing a LN soon! What your thoughts on what I’ve got so far?
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Reborn In Another World!
But then sent 5,000+ years into the future...
Genres: Isekai, Fantasy, Slice Of Life & Harem.
Synopsis: A teenager from Earth dies in a traffic accident on his way to school and is reincarnated in the world of Arthinean which is dominated by sword & magic. The teen is an otaku whom has always longed for a situation like being transported to occur but he didn’t expect to be born into a High Human Royal family. Only 3 week after he & his twin sister were born the High Human race was attacked by the Black god-slaying dragon known as Servententh. The Black God-slaying dragon’s attack caught the race off guard and was nearly sent into extinction but the Royal family sent the twins 5000+ years into the future to keep the newly born children from dying.
Race Characteristics:- High Human:
- All magic elemental attributes (Fire, earth, water, wind & holy |Chant & Chantless attributed Magic|)
- Life span of roughly 3,000 years (mostly due to magic ability’s)
- High Human royal family members can manipulate time-space magic which allows them to practly travel through time.
- Dragon-kin (White |Dragon King| & Black Dragon |God-Slayer|)
- Light Elves (Wind & Fire attributes) & Dark Elves (Earth & water attributes) |ancestors of the High Humans race which in the story is supposedly extinct|
- Beastfolk |Different tribes of Beastfolk with animal feature similar to animals on earth with mostly human bodies|
- Regular Humans
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I think it's worth really contemplating whether being originally from Earth is going to add anything to your story aside from "lol references to pop/otaku culture," "look at these backwater bumpkins I can impress with crop rotation or plagiarizing other inventions/ideas," or "hey check out this random technology I'm going to scam you with." Seems like the last one is outside the scope of your story, but really, the isekai stuff we see most of the time these days is a lazy vehicle to avoid real character building - "hey, this guy is from the same place and time you are, so pretend it's someone just like you!"
The main problem I see right off the bat is the "transported to another world" followed immediately by "transported to another time." One of the two is completely pointless since it adds nothing. Is there some reason your main character can't just be open-minded and forward-thinking instead of "came from Earth"? Is there some reason they have to be transported into the future instead of just immediately being in that future and using the past as history or background information? Basically, if you could take either of those away by changing a few setting details and it would not affect your story, then you only put them in there as "clickbait" and that's going to lose you some readers.
Obviously I know nothing about your ideas aside from exactly what you put here, so you maybe already have answers to my concerns here, but if the above were me looking at a description of a book in a book store or an upcoming anime airing in the near future, I would take a hard pass. "Isekai" and "teleported to another time" are both simply settings that tell me nothing about the story you actually want to tell.
Whoever said nothing's impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.
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I agree with what myskaros says. I think ditching either Isekai or Going to the future would be best. maybe you could just create a character that was just born in this world and when he is a teenager (maybe on a coming of age ceremony) have him and his twin sister sent to the future. This way you have 1 core gimmick instead of 2 loose gimmicks. You can even play with the whole 5000+ yr passage thing like maybe the world devolved into a dark age (maybe due to the dragon) or it progressed really far.
edit: I think The Faraway Paladin can be a good series to take inspiration from. It is similar to your original Synopsis in some ways like the Reincarnation, but one difference is that Will was raised with the knowledge from centuries ago like the with the Religious ceremonies.
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I have an Isekai idea too (the character archetypes I want to use work better in Isekai; I want the MC to be a bit self-aware of the archetypes from manga / anime at the start, and have preferences for certain ones over others).
My internal debate is not "is it necessary he is from the real world", but "is it necessary I open with / show the real world" and how much do I show. Faraway Paladin really doesn't show reality.
Of course, I haven't taken my pen to paper, this is just an idea, and ideas are cheap as they say. It's the execution that is key. I'd love to turn this into a visual novel with like VN Maker. I'll let you guys know if I ever do anything worth mentioning, though likely I'll just keep this on the burner forever (I'd like to learn some simple character creation / sprite tools, or how to create art and how to manipulate it in Live 2D).
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@myskaros, true. I’ve got the from Earth there basically as a reference for how he has knowledge and basis of common sense that we have here in stead of the other worlds and he will have to learn the new worlds common sense. Also I have it there because the magic in the story is basically elemental magic (EG: Fire, Earth, water, wind & Holy | High Human race royal family members can use all, giving off the OP MC feel). So with the knowledge and understanding from 21st century Earth were he was an honours student he can use that knowledge of the elements to visual create them (High humans can directly control elements and humans cannot).
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Here’s what I got for a draft:
Huh... White, just white... I turn my head from left to right but there’s nothing but whiteness and I can’t even differentiate between the ground and walls...[Well, well. It seems your awake] ?
[May I ask whom this is?] Ayata
[I am an existence which your people would call a ‘God’] God
A ‘God’ huh... So, I guess since I’m here that means I died.... The last thing I remember was waiting at the traffic lights and then hearing a loud bang but I can’t remember anything after that noise..
[It seems that the cause of your death was being hit by truck...] God
Hmm, if I was just hit by a truck then why am I here?? Shouldn’t I be being processed like everybody else to see wether or not I can go to heaven or hell?? Or there are no such places and the theory of reincarnation happens to be true and I’m about to be reincarnated??
[It would seem you are wondering why you are here. Firstly I would like to apologise for my underlings carelessness which indirectly caused your death] God
[So It was something like that huh... Almost like the Light Novels and Manga I read as a teen] Ayata
[Well, your rather calm for one that just learnt that they have died] God
[Ahaha, true, true. Well I guess I’m the type that accepts things as they are easily, especially this predicament here] Ayata
Well, I guess it’s true I’m way too calm. Well, I did read a lot of Light Novels and Manga with the MC having similar situations to the one I’m in now... I guess that has a part to play in my calmness and me knowing that I’m not hallucinating or dreaming this up after the incident..
[Well, I suppose I shall transport your conciseness into its new body which is about to be born] God
[Wouldn't I get some cheat ability or something??] Ayata
Well I guess that ‘God’ isn’t obligated to give me a cheat ability as it the incident wasn’t directly caused by him. Damnit I’m a moron shouting that out, I’m lucky enough I’m getting a second chance at life...
[Haha, do not worry. I’m sure you will find that your new body is quit powerful. Well now, do your best!] God
With those last words from ‘God’ my vision faded to black and I ended up falling asleep
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@woodssaayy said in Going to start writing a LN soon! What your thoughts on what I’ve got so far?:
@myskaros, true. I’ve got the from Earth there basically as a reference for how he has knowledge and basis of common sense that we have here in stead of the other worlds and he will have to learn the new worlds common sense. Also I have it there because the magic in the story is basically elemental magic (EG: Fire, Earth, water, wind & Holy | High Human race royal family members can use all, giving off the OP MC feel). So with the knowledge and understanding from 21st century Earth were he was an honours student he can use that knowledge of the elements to visual create them (High humans can directly control elements and humans cannot).
But see, you could just as easily explain his common sense by making him a progressive thinker, and make his magic prowess due to his innate intellect and, say, understanding of chemistry. Again, the way you explained your plan, the isekai is just a gimmick to avoid having to properly characterize your protagonist and uses the audience as a crutch. Him coming from another world has nothing to do with the story, it's just an excuse you can use to shuffle details off to the side and exclaim "he's from another world, don't worry about it."
Whoever said nothing's impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.
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filthy harems taking over the world 😒
Jokes aside (i was actually not joking okay?)
Will illustrations be present?(if you've mentioned it/someone else has already asked forgive me) -
@myskaros it would be really funny if the MC just got transported into the future and see him struggle with the world's new tech.
Mc:
"Damn this new generation and their high tech"Random guy:
"Dude even I can handle this. What do you mean with 'new generation' anyways? I'M 80! 80!"Mc:
(well I'm +5000 years old you dumb oldha- wait I'm older than him.)But it wasn't supposed to be comedy now was it? ^.^
"I drowned a fish, killed a dead tree and made medicine sick"
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@imilyaz said in Going to start writing a LN soon! What your thoughts on what I’ve got so far?:
@myskaros it would be really funny if the MC just got transported into the future and see him struggle with the world's new tech. ^.^
"You mean you have to use your hands? That's like a :baby: 's toy!"
Back to the Future 2 is secret best Isekai. =P
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Lol I like the idea but I agree with Myskaros. Also why a truck? It’s always the god damn truck!
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@hyferzftw, it’s gotta be the classic clichè truck man..
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@hyferzftw said in Going to start writing a LN soon! What your thoughts on what I’ve got so far?:
Lol I like the idea but I agree with Myskaros. Also why a truck? It’s always the god damn truck!
And then the magic train drives in front as our romantic leads were about to glance at each other and reunite. That dang train! =P
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@woodssaayy It feels really typically WN so far, if you get what I mean. Like the sort of stuff you find when you're scouring the novelupdates website. But not in a bad sense. :smiley:
Anyway, it all depends on how you work on this, right?
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@shrike_al, true.
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If You are writing this story I think going on a popular or well-known writers site thing might be good(I know there are some out there just don't know any) or make your own site or blog thing and post it there. If you do post is on a blog site like Weebly or Wix or something then you probably would need to post a new chapter on a regular basis then. If you do make a blog or something then I likely read it. I really like the WN style books. examples of WN style books are:
Konosuba
Smartphone Isekai
So I'm a Spider
Rising of the Shield Hero
Death Marchseries where there is a forward-moving story yet never stays too long on any 1 arc or adventure or quest. I am still iffy on the whole Isekai AND Future thing. I think it is probably best to ditch the Isekai cuz the 5000+ yrs in the future is pretty much a new world (Earth 5000 yrs ago is not like Earth now heck even 100 yrs ago we have advanced so much). Whether you do the world is a dark age or the technology is so far advanced or a little bit of both where they have the tech but no one remembers how to use them I would like it.
