V4, P7, around 61%:

Two Days Since Firing the KilnToday, I was joined by Mer and Danae,

There should be a line break between "Kiln" and "Today".

V2P3, 27%: "Elementary spirit arts were taught at the sixth rank, but [he|Akira] couldn't even reach the rank below that."

This isn't really correction, but more of a question:
In Volume 6, at 17% of part 1, Aoi says, "the temporal beings known as spirits."
Would it be better to use the word "ephemeral" instead of "temporal" in this context?

v3 p6

~15%

One evening, Werlich visited the Clausell estate. After greeting Weiss, who he hadn’t seen for a very long time, at the entrance, he left a white box behind and left.

Here Weiss is the object not the subject of the clause, so formally that should be:

After greeting Weiss, whom he hadn’t seen for a very long time, at the entrance, he left a white box behind and left.

~77%

“Just a tag longer for those materials to arrive, yeah?” Werlich said.

I'm not familiar with that expression; should that be

“Just a tad longer for those materials to arrive, yeah?”

V14 P12, 22%
“Oh, right, there’s this amazing spell that [can] chop right through a bundle of roots,” said Yoshino.

26%
“The Planeshift spell does not work [well? easily?] against living beings, but it apparently works against normal treants, correct?” Kaho asked.

V8P9, 46%:

I channeled mithril into my sword, took aim, and swung down
[…]
I looked down and saw my mithril sword crumble to dust until it had disappeared completely.
That was because I'd infused it with divine power.

should be divine power judging by the later text (from the start of the next section down the page).

93%:

I unleashed an area Tornado spell. It swept up the monsters in its funnel...but then disappeared a moment later.
It won't work after all, then. Chris had said that the magic-type monsters at the back had ways to interfere with attack spells, and she was right. The reason I'd decided to join the fray directly was because it had looked like spells would work.

should that be wouldn’t?

v6p5:

33% - traveling along the cost, -> Typo: coast 97% - when they wake up they’re head is perfectly clear -> their

v2p2:

87% - Haruka’s training regiment and facilities […] -> Wrong word/misspelling, unless a military unit was intended: Haruka’s training regimen […]

10.4

I could technically have a bit of alcohol if I used magic to boost my kidney function.

The breakdown of alcohol happens entirely in the liver.

This is common knowledge where I'm from, and I thought everywhere. Is it not in Japan?

Might be something to consider localizing.

(The kidneys can't concentrate alcohol. Totally drunk, your blood might be 0.2% alcohol. One-fifth of one percent. At that 0.2% BAC, only 0.2% of what the kidneys remove will be alcohol. Basically nothing. Relying just on your kidneys, drinking a lot of water, you would get sober in a few weeks, maybe.)

v7 p5

~1%

I’d come to a pivotal decision point. I wasn’t about to let this group of soldiers deliver the supplies, of course. But I needed to locate the Jaysha’s party as a matter of priority, because with each passing minute, there was a growing danger that they might launch an ambush on Camille and the others. I had a good chance of finding them if I followed the resupply team, but I’d need to take into consideration that I might end up in a head-on fight. I’d make things a lot easier for myself if I destroyed the supplies and exhausted their resupply team first.

@zeji13 said in The Otome Heroine’s Fight for Survival - Corrections Topic:

locate the Jaysha's party -> locate Aishe's party

There's definitely something wrong there, but it's not clear what the fix should be. It might be what you propose, but since there are multiple other parties in the dungeon it might be something like:

But I needed to locate the other parties as a matter of priority, because with each passing minute, there was a growing danger that they might launch an ambush on Camille and the others. I had a good chance of finding at least one of them if I followed the resupply team

V1, P10 around 52%:

One Saturday after everything calmed down,Maya down, Maya and I were visiting our parents’ graves.

Missing space.

Around 78%:

Ruka hurriedly shook her head, denying what RInne Rinne had said.

Capitalization mistake.

V5 P5 (21% - 10th line down from top of page)

She'd gone and dived into a river...

• Dove is more common in American and Canadian English (e.g., “We dove right in”).
• Dived is the traditional form and is strongly favored in British English and most other English-speaking regions. (Merriam-Webster dictionary)

As an American, I'm more used to "dove" in this type of sentence, but I guess dived could be used for a larger audience (proper king's english, eh?).

v5.1 p9

~45%

“My apologies. Still, Sir Reinald has made it clear that he does not wish to see you dead, Your Highness.”
“If that’s the case, I can only imagine he has some horrid reason for wanting me to leave.”

In the context of the previous sentence, should that be

to live

V7 P2 (37% - 13th line down from top of page)

As time passed, it wore down there their physical and mental strength.

Remove "there" from sentence.

e.g. As time passed it wore down their physical and mental strength.

For volume 18: In part 5, 'beat red' should be 'beet red'

Edit: Also in part 6 it should be 'bare skin' not 'bear skin'

In part 7 it should be "forbidden tome" not "forbidden tomb" and "gripped heart" should be "gripped her heart"

In part 8, "to empty her stomach" should probably be something like "to fill her empty stomach"

V7 P3, 79%
"I had never seen Satsuki look at me with such earnest hope before, so I felt obliged to raise my first and give her the best smile I could manage as I reaffirmed my promise."
First -> fist

88%
"I failed to completely dodge his lightning-fast stroke, and it cut a deep gash in my side."
I'm not certain, but I think stroke -> strike fits better

v13p7 ~80%

Gamut hat to go through Rohzenheim […]

Should probably be Giamut.

Volume 3 - Part 11:

[78‰] The information reaching him through official channels was often lacing, >> should be lacking