V9 P1 24% - two adorable smiles began bouncing around - smiles should be slimes

Volume 1 Part 10

"black father" vs "black knight's father"
Both of these seem to be used throughout the text, but only the latter seems appropriate. At 70% in the text [I had ... little talent for swords or spells], it is revealed that the father was never a member of any knight order, whether white, gold, or black.

V8.1 P6, 18%
"Though he had astounded many with his extraordinary rapid growth as a hunter..."
Not sure on this, but I'm thinking extraordinary -> extraordinarily

@nihility said in To Another World... with Land Mines! - Corrections Topic:

Sup on white rice? What does that mean?

https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/sup
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/sup
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/sup

V4 P8 (81% - 7th line up from bottom of page)

And it was obvious who'd turn on next.

Missing "they".

And it was obvious who'd they turn on next,

V5 P6, 32% "As he did, however, a tremendous rubble sounded..."
Rubble -> rumble

73%
"Oh, it's a spellsword technique..."
"Allen's desire for Leo to learn the so-called swordspell technique..."
'Spell' and 'sword', presumably one of these has these ordered the wrong way around. My guess is the latter.

V2 P9

16% "an experiment room that's sturdy enough to withstand even."

Is there a word missing here? It can withstand even what?

88% "We've all learned and mastered Maple Leaf's healing sorcery basics, so you could say that but our research into new spells aims to break free of that framework that's been passed down."

This is a rather rambling sentence by someone described as an eccentric. It is unclear what "you could say that" is referring to (what is "that" in this context?). Is something missing here or is he meant to be slightly incoherent (as an eccentric)?

V1P13
[94%] "They're certainly lovely," Liliana replied. ➡ should this be Petra? Liliana hasn't met the sister yet, in this life at least, so she wouldn't say that, right? Also, she is pretending to still be mute in front of Paul, isn't she? So it would make more sense to me if this was Petra's reply, though I'm not sure since it isn't entirely in character for her.

V2 P3 (55% - 11th & 12th line down from top of page,

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It's already been established several times that Lofus lost his left arm and left eyesight during the sea battle. His own father stated: "I also heard that you lost your left arm and sight in your left eye." during his discussion with Lofus.

If the left arm is missing, so is the left hand. Therefore, for accuracy in the story line, "hands" should be changed to "hand".

@Tube said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

I am aware that this almost goes to the side of nitpicky, but since it caught my attention I will bring it up. You can just ignore it if need be, after all.

Volume 6, part 3:

[56%] “You. Yes, the skinny old man with the white in your hair. […]”

While in Japanese people say that hair turns white as they age (right?), in English we usually talk about graying.

"the white" -> "(the) gray"

Edit: Volume 6, part 10:

[17%] Claire couldn’t express her true feelings and had to juggle watching the expressions of others while changing her own to match hers to match.

Repetition.

[62%] […] that powerful woman had a way of taking on an older sister role around those she alongside.

Missing a word.

Apologies, should all be fixed now. And great call on the gray hair!

@Iseguy said in The Otome Heroine’s Fight for Survival - Corrections Topic:

6.2

Elena glutched the knife to her chest and nodded.

“clutched”

Hi, sorry for the tardy reply! This is actually correct; per Merriam-Webster, "to glutch" is "to clutch an object received from, bequeathed by, or pertaining to the Grinch." That's actually where Elena got that knife. It's all explained in this year's Christmas bonus story, but sadly, due to licensing issues, it probably will not be translated, hence the apparent continuity error.

Spoilered just in case:

spoiler

We still haven't gotten last year's Christmas story, in which

spoiler

v3 p2

~45%

Einharjar Palace, where the emperor resided with his family, was situated in the heart of the capital of Grenflare.

~55%

The complex designs gracing Einherjar Palace’s walls slowly came into view.

The spelling of the palace's name should be consistent. I believe the usual spelling is Einherjar.

v32p5 ~5%:

As Shilly Rou continued to mash up the shaska, it was easy to tell that the pulp was getting stickier and sticker over time.

sticker over time -> stickier over time.

V3 P9 (12% - Line 9 & 10 from top of the page)

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Change "award" to "away".

Thank you for these corrections.

v5p4:

92% - Without her rope, it probably would’ve taken a lot longer for Lilia and I to reach the shore. -> Probably a case where me should be used, since “a lot longer for I to reach the shore” just doesn’t work: a lot longer for Lilia and me to reach the shore.

V2P8:

~44%:

You get coconut juice and oil from them

In English, I've only ever heard the liquid in a coconut referred to as coconut water. Unless it's mixed with a bunch of other junk, and then it's "juice". And the liquid from the flesh is "milk" somehow.

Also ~44%:

Even with easy jobs, this moment always was always a relief.

Extra always.

v4 p10

~5%

<Holy mother of vague, Mali. If you worded it that way on purpose to both grab my attention, then congratulations, it worked.>

Something seems awkward here. "Both" is used to indicate two or more things -- but there is no additional thing mentioned beyond the grabbing of Leah's attention, e.g. both grab my attention and confuse me. Maybe the both is unnecessary and can be omitted?