V14P7, 24%: "Later on, I sliced open the rest of the thunder eggs later" - redundancy

v6p3 ~27%:

Once I'd thickened it with potato starch, I threw in a generous amount of green leak tops.

leak -> leek.

V1P12
~11%

No sooner than Shizumi spoke the words, looks of horror appeared on the faces of her attendants.

Maybe missing word and wrong word? No sooner than Shizumi spoke the words, looks of horror appeared->No sooner had Shizumi spoke the words, than looks of horror appeared

~21%

Speakingly loudly, Shizumi turned to residents who lived in the manor and had come to see the cause of the commotion.

Extra letters? Speakingly->Speaking
Maybe missing word? turned to residents->turned to the residents

~21%

The retainers we disturbed by the thought of such a house turning traitor.

Wrong word / missing letters? we->were

~42%

The incessant chirping of the corporations and the rabble in Central Province has finally ceased.

Maybe wrong word? (Because the talk after is about Banda and the nobles from Shumon parliament underestimate Tsuguho and they try to make money, not about any from Takamagahara central province? It is maybe centre of this province (Shumon)?)

~63%

There was such a haze about him that he was difficult to see him at all.

Extra words? that he was difficult to see him at all->that it was difficult to see him at all
(or ->that he was difficult to see at all)

~63%

All that remained of his feelings was a single remnant—a desperate plea that purple spirits had saved and entrusted to Hanezu before they scattered and vanished.

Extra letter? (because only talk about Fuyo) spirits->spirit

~63%

She saw the usual buzz activity of Karen, but now it was a delightful sight, so much more alive and vibrant than before.

Maybe missing word? buzz activity->buzz of activity

~74%

That moment that thought occurred to me was the moment that Akira was born.

Maybe wrong word? That->The

V1 P5 60%

a fellow C-rank student named Jutta

Fellow C-rank student makes it sound like MC and Jutta are both C-rank, but MC is D-rank.

v1 p5

~37%

: Seriously?
: I mean I do know of how to add a little mana to swords and stuff, but I never heard that it would produce this much power...
: Yeah, it’s supposed to just be a little bit of support...right?
: Come on, only a monster could use this method to counter enemies who fight at long range...

This section of text is both italicized and monospaced. It should probably not be italicized, as a rule the chat logs are not italicized.

~45%

: Whoaaaa!
: I can’t believe it...
: At that level there’s no need for weapons w
: He’s such a monster w

Also probably should not be italicized.

v1 p5

~30%

Temples are training grounds for priests and are considered dwellings of the gods. Priests who pray there can be granted greater magical power. Since the Moon Goddess remains close to humanity, her temples can be found in every city. However, a donation is required to use the altar where prayers and offer prayers.

That final clause doesn't scan. I can't really guess what it should be though, maybe the altar where prayers are offered ?

V8 P4 (8% - 11th line down from top of page)

"But I could ask, the knight had already flown..."

add missing "before" in sentence

e.g. But before I could ask,...

V4 P11 (22% - 2nd & 3rd lines own from top of the page)

"WE WANTED TO GO THE FOREST."

Add missing word "TO" or "IN" in the sentence for better syntax:

e.g. WE WANTED TO GO TO THE FOREST.
-or-
WE WANTED TO GO IN THE FOREST

@Valanduin said in Keep Me Close: Finding My Home in You - Corrections Topic:

Volume 1 part 5 59%

How about the numbers for a three-year period from five years ago to three years ago, then?

Five years ago to three years ago is only a 2 year period.

Five years ago, four years ago, and three years ago. Three years in total.

V1P10
~21%

Martin has no reason to go after the Ghazalian delegate.

Martin returns? Missing letter? Martin->Martina

~63%

I’m sorry, Mr. Roland, but it seems, because of me...you’ll have to...

Extra letter? Roland->Rolan

~74%

Martina nodded. Imbued it with every ounce of her conviction.

Wrong tense? Imbued->Imbuing (Or Imbued -> She imbued)

~74%

There were the night watch guards, as expected—and a few knights dispatched by the king, unexpected.

Missing letters? unexpected->unexpectedly

~84%

the tears in Nadia’s eyes swelled. Before that could spill,

Maybe wrong word? that could spill->they could spill

V1P11
~74%

It took a while, but eventually, they managed a return to the amicable... Amicable? Well, whatever you call the usual dynamic between the three of them.

Maybe wrong person? you call->one would call (or ->you could)
(Also, maybe not 'amicable' two time? Sorry if it is okay with not change but maybe one because from sentence look, it is first 'guess' word and then try with different 'better' word? Sorry if it is not)

~84%

“Indeed,” Nadia replied. Then looked at Martina. “As should we, my lovely. I’m going to get some more wine too. What about you?”

Maybe missing word? Then looked->Then she looked

V5P5:

17%: "“Right, yes.” Elaina ridded her arms of shell" -> rid 33% "“You could help it! You were fighting" -> couldn't 50%: "“If went up and disappeared on his own" -> If he 67%: "The Shrine of the Dragoon King" -> Dragon 67%: "Shrine of the Dragon King, as a dragon really had" -> as if a dragon 83%: "Canaria’s motivations lied wholly in personal interest." -> lay

@Rinvelt said in Reborn to Reign - Corrections Topic:

@Charlie85 said in Reborn to Reign - Corrections Topic:

V2P1 ~50%

[…] our homeroom teacher, Frollo Kate's.

This looks like the Japanese name ordering, given he addresses her as Ms. Frollo. I'm not sure if that was a decision, but just wanted to point it out.

Frollo is her first name, not her family name. Characters call each other by their first names, not by their family names.

I realized that after reading part 3, but it was too late to edit or delete the post.

@Charlie85 said in Reborn to Reign - Corrections Topic:

V2P2 40%

It was as though taking classes […] were torture to him.

Should be was.

"As though" works the same way as "if." So "were" is correct here.

I see, subjunctive meaning, not plural. My bad.

Thank you for taking the time to clarify.

V5 P8, 72%
“She just bound you to her word,” I heard Eri mutter.
The wording of this doesn't quite sit right, to my ear. Something more like "She just bound you to her will by those words"

V5 P6, 28%
"Perhaps they felt they could act more adversarial towardSpire because, unlike Langus, he wasn’t part of the royal family. I smirk flickered across Spire’s lips before he defended his position."

'towardSpire' -> 'towards Spire', and 'I smirk' -> 'A smirk'

V4, P2, Around 10%:

However, I must also point out that this is an esoteric spell in Learute Lenarute, so I ask that you both keep this knowledge to yourselves.

Missing letter.

v5P2p1:

Sometimes “Teach” was capitalized and sometimes it wasn’t, even if it seemed to still be used as a name rather than a verb…

6.8:

So, which is it?
Queeres or Qurees?
I'm presuming the name of the Garage matches the last name of the owner.

V4P1
~31%

Lacey had never been one to care about appearances, but now it was agitating her far beyond control.

Missing word? far beyond control->far beyond her control

~62%

She went deep in thought.

Maybe wrong word? in->into

~77%

She seemed to be enjoying Lacey blink in awe over and over at their unusual destination.

Maybe wrong tense? blink->blinking

~77%

Lacey had always been uninterested in appearances, not even her own.

Maybe extra word? (Because second part of sentence is not opposite first half) not even her own->even her own (or ->including her own)

~92%

Despite that, she still felt a ticklish sense of pride upon hearing Cyrus talk about work with all smiles.

Missing word? about work->about her work

V4P2
~0%

I should be acting more like royalty, but it’s really not just my style.

Wrong word order? not just->just not

~13%

Back in Plume village, she would recall her much younger six-year-old friend Ellie chide her

Wrong tense? chide->chiding
Also missing capital? village->Village

~27%

What’s important to someone might be different for someone else.

Maybe wrong word? for->from

~40%

Lacey proceeded to talk like nothing happened.

Missing word? nothing happened->nothing had happened

~27%

Like he was pulling the wool over their eyes and strike when they least expected—

Wrong word? and->to

~67%

“I’ll wash my hands later.

Missing end "? later.->later.”

~67%

Using spatial magic needs constant concentration from the caster

Wrong tense? needs->needed