V9 P8 (0% - 12th line down from top of page)

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This part of the sentence sounds incomplete in relation to the rest of the comments. I believe the following makes better English syntex:

"She'd only known Liam to be clothed in his knight's uniform or the fancy garb you wore to a party,..."

12.10

Maybe we were starting to get physically and emotionally intimate. I really hope I’m not just imagining ot.

“it.”

Estelle and cast a spell. Right away, her entire body started to glow.

V3P3 ~36%
"...the crowned prince hit us with a curveball." -> "...the crowned crown prince hit us with a curveball."
(I'm not sure about capitalization for 'crown prince')

V12P3 ~26%
"...the big baar that had her brought her husband to the outskirts of Iluk..." - > "...the big baar that had her brought her husband to the outskirts of Iluk..."

v2p5 ~43%:

He'd been half-worried that Like had turned into a man, whereas Sirius was still often mistaken for a girl.

Like -> Luke.

"The zombie flailed its anns. Etan had been closest. Despite his huge frame, he went flying. His reflexes had saved him in the nick of time, but despite intercepting direct hit with his sword, he was still flung three meters into the air and three times the
distance away. Seeing a mighty audhumbla thrown around like a rag doll by a backhanded blow filled everyone at hand with an icy panic. That strength could crush lirnbs, pulverize bone, and liquify organs, reducing an unlucky victim to a bag of mincemeat.
The zombie's other arm extended, but just as it was about to grab [Martyn]'s throat, a high-pitched sound cut through the air.
That arm had moved like a whip; it would have crushed [Martyn]'s windpipe a mere moment later." -
Martyn ----> Etan

v2p10 16% That dark forest—the Ngai Forest—is a living barrier she’s cast using said wood magic. -> catching up on the D-Genesis manga has alerted me that this should probably be the Wood of N'gai

It is His wood—the Wood of N’gai, the terrestrial abode of the Blind, Faceless One, the Howler in the Night, the Dweller in Darkness, Nyarlathotep, who fears only Cthugha.

V2P3

Until that happened, it was pertinent for us to build up our forces and wealth.

I don't think "pertinent" works here. Perhaps "sensible"?

V11, P12, around 68%:

Generally, the solid liquid insect repellents had a stronger, minty scent.

Wrong word.

Volume 1 Part 8
61% The father states, "We may even need to build an annex for her." There is no problem with this sentence in itself, but the next few paragraphs seem to act like he had never made the suggestion.

V1 P8

Was some content dropped between P7 and P8? P7 ended with Evelyn passing out after Europa manipulates her into promising to visit her every day:

Lady Europa ignored the big splash echoing from below and crawled on all fours toward my collapsed form. Peeking out from her disheveled long hair was her terrifyingly beautiful face, with her tongue sticking out, licking at her cheek.
“Lady Eeevelyn...”
“Ee, eee...”
“We’ll be together...forever and ever and ever.” She paused ominously. “Won’t we?”
Kira! Save me, Kiraaa!
As I screamed my reliable companion’s name internally, I was overcome with terror and passed out right then and there.

But then P8 begins after some sort of "costume fitting", not mentioned in the previous part, is over:

After the costume fitting was done, I changed into simple clothes any town girl would wear and went with Lord Theodore to tour the festival. There was still time before my ceremony, and since nobody knew what the saint looked like, the Grand Basilica had given me permission to go out.

Was some text between these two parts omitted?

V6P3
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Perhaps because it was mostly out of sight, it had become a dumping ground for all kinds of everyday waste—rusty cartwheels, smashed crates, and discolored sofas to wine bottles, chairs with broken legs, and assorted fragments of other items.

Wrong word? and->from

V6P6
~29%

AS YOU WISH.FOR YOU, MY FRIEND, I WILL REDUCE ALL YOUR FOES TO ASH.

Missing space?; WISH.FOR->WISH. FOR

Arc 1, V6 P7 (33% - end of line 1 and beginning of line 2 from top of page)

--by why was he here now?

Should be:
--but why was he here now?

V2 P4, X%
Is there a difference in usage of 'Alfr' and 'Alfar'? Alfr is used 6 times, and Alfar x8 (I think), but I could never distinguish why one might be used in one situation over another, they seem to be used interchangeably

@Geezer-Weasalopes Twist it is then, thank you for the feedback.
We're all learning a lot today it seems.

V3 P5, 27%
"Oh that's right! It was in that random anime movie my older sister dragged me to see!"
This is probably just me misremembering, but has he ever referenced an older sister (or having more than one sister)? (If not, older -> younger)

Volume 7 - Part 8:

[83%] Emiliahe couldn’t just silently watch >> should be Emilia [87%] what she wanted.”“Hey! Don’t drag >> missing paragraph break (new speaker)

v4p2:

79% - He had cornered Mercedes and blandished the force of their guards […]. -> “Blandish” - Oxford says “coax (someone) with kind words or flattery”. I presume that you wanted the similarly-spelled “brandish” - “wave or flourish (something, especially a weapon) as a threat or in anger or excitement” -> He had cornered Mercedes and brandished the force of their guards […].