V3 P7, 3%
“...Lady Robur’s grasp is very refined. I’ve come to understand that it’s beyond the comprehension of a commoner like me.”
It feels really odd for the Prince to refer to himself as a commoner. I'm presuming he's meaning only within context of the subject (an entry level understanding of the topic). Neophyte, or perhaps amateur, novice, layperson, or even hobbyist might be alternatives?
24%
"No doubt she wass lost in thought about what to write in the new art book."
Wass -> was
39%
"The prince’s bloodshot crimson eyes were fixed fixated on me"
50%
"The first prince seems to have returned quietly."
After saying he had left a few paragraphs back I initially thought this was saying that the prince was back already. However on rereading I suspecting it's instead intended to reinforce the previous paragraph. For clarity, perhaps replace with left/departed, or add on after returned 'to the castle'.
78%
Snapping back to reality, I frowned at the erotic painting the princess held. “How utterly... shameless,” I spat. I hoped she wasn’t about to start commenting on it in red pen.
Likely just me, but the meaning of this sentence escapes me entirely.