Volume 14 Part 12
03% first time we've ran -> first time we've run
09% Feelo free -> Feel free
on this section, The reply is a poor match for the initial comment. Sae says, "We've got a lot of learning by example to do" while Nao replies, "Feel free to soak as much as you'd like" I wonder if the initial comment should be something more along the lines of "We've got a lot of adventuring survival knowledge to soak up" or maybe "We need to absorb these adventuring practices from your pool of knowledge" Either of these would make more sense of the comment to soak as much as you like
On the other hand, the whole thing could be resolved with Ingraman's suggestion to change it to "soak up as much as you'd like"
32% has anyone spotted a found treasure chest or return device yet -> has anyone spotted a treasure chest or found a return device yet
Iseguy's solution looks good too.
57% I don't even know I'm actually getting executed -> I don't even know if I'm actually getting executed
70% now I know how risky they are to use now -> aside from the repetitive use of 'now', it doesn't seem right. It isn't a matter of timing that setting up as an idol is risky in this world. The problem is the world itself, as she already realized in a previous paragraph. Perhaps the line should be: now I know how risky they are to use in this world.