v11 p4

~68%

Mech Studies lording over the other departments was one thing—even if it wasn’t the most flattering traitt—but mech knights injuring people was not to be taken lightly.

trait

V7 P5 (41% - 1st line at top of page)

She was certain he saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

Replace "he" with "she" for better syntax.

e.g. She was certain she saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

V1, P6, around 97%:

Most of the mana she’d focused hadn’t become part of the spell—nstead instead, it dissipated from her almost unceasingly.

Missing letter.

Volume 3 Part 7
04% No matter how many times Riley asked her not to address him so formally | I thought the issue was that the visiting princess was being too casual - or not formal enough. Shouldn't this sentence use informally instead? This would make the next section flow better. Shiroi got that one.
81% Sasha's initial reply to Riley asking, "Can't you bear the sight of blood?" - doesn't seem to match what she says in her follows up. This might make more sense (changes in bold): "If necessary, but there's no reason to grow accustomed to watching people being killed."

I have moved the conversation.

In the end. A suggestion has been made, and the team will decide to do what they feel is best. Thank you

V3P9 35%

"I feel like half of these frostbitten patients are just reaping what they sown."

This should use they have/they've sown.

This a a fairly minor issue, and I'm not sure if it is the reader or the formatting of the part, but on desktop I am reading in the two page spread view, but the illustration in v1p6 ~40% appears that it is supposed to be a two page spread, but it is rendering as a small image half the height of one page with a page of text on the side.

Also, the view selection button is somewhat unintuitive, there are 3 modes, a button is used to cycle through them, and the button displays a graphic and has alt text indicating what the next one is. This is a weird way to select multiple choices and I probably would have gone with 3 buttons with the current one highlighted or a drop down or something that makes it more obvious that there are 3 options and what they are.

V3P1 ~0%

[…] not by Bael, but by the true Demon King. Not against some summoned child, but by a true Hero of the world.

Shouldn't this be the same word also in the second sentence, so both against or both by?

[…] no one cared of its true meaning […]

Should be about or for.

~91%

[…] do you think Gurba's going to be much longer?"

The direct meaning would be Gurba's about to die, but the following dialog seems to imply he's just away in his workshop, so maybe going to be away or going to need?

V3P1 ~54%

[…] and attacked Ren's while his back was turned.

Probably should be Ren's horse from what happens next.

V5P7 ~73%

"Ridicuous!"

Is missing an l.

Volume 5 Part 7
35% As if here were thinking -> As if he were thinking
36% Aqua Vitae now,. and -> Aqua Vitae now, and | remove the period
44% how differently they were acting differently from yesterday ->how differently they were acting from yesterday
79% most prompting Langus to continue -> prompting Langus to continue [or] thus prompting Langus to continue

A2V1P3 ~64%

When the northern nobles had rebelled against the Kingdom of Knightly, allying themselves with Raymond, the king's treasonous younger brother, and the invading empire.

Somehow this sentence is missing what happened back then, and it also doesn't work as a continuation of the previous sentence. Seeing the last sentence of the block

That was the reason other countries viewed Abel as a strong king."

one could assume the When should be connected to the king's combat prowess, which was on display when [...], but something is missing.

I’m only just getting around to reading the book. The ebook’s not out here at JNC for a few hours. Did anyone get it from another retailer already? I’ll send this via email, too. I’ll add any others that haven’t already been noted (if there are any) to this post as I read the volume.

v7p2:

72% - The sight of all that flaccid flab barely contained by his oily was tough to look at. -> Missing word. Probably: barely contained by his oily skin was tough to look at. Could be something else, though.

v7p4:

Various% - Lots of instances of “divinity” (~23) and “Divinity” (~6 plus 1 capitalized when starting a sentence). I think that it’s an error when it’s a lower case “d”, but I might be overlooking some logic or a rule regarding capitalization… In v7p1, there were ~38 “Divinity”s and 0 “divinities”. In v7p2, it was ~59-0. In v7p3, ~18-0.

@Adam-Haffen Thank you sir. I had a feeling it was based on the original Japanese text.

V4P3
0%

Let’s see... It’s an object that chimes with the wind, so how about ‘wind chime?’

Maybe move ’ before question because ? is not in name? chime?’->chime’?

15.1:

When I;d checked the beehive

When I'd checked the beehive

They were merely laid inside the baskets, but carefully arranged into a lovely display.

They weren't merely laid inside the baskets, but carefully arranged into a lovely display.

Volume 14 Part 7
01% I'm here with other girls here today -> I'm here with other girls today
06% he nodded himself -> he nodded to himself - Crey got this
09% how excels at his craft -> how he excels at his craft
15% even he heard my pragmatic reply -> even [when|after] he heard my pragmatic reply - Crey got this
38% Metee's -> Metea's
42% plates of snakes -> plates of snaks - Crey got this
66% I'm gonna bring this up -> I'm not gonna bring this up - Geezer got this

V1P8 ~58% and ~90%: The earlier reference mentions royal library's repository and the latter royal library archival storage...

~58%: "Be sure to comb through the royal library's repository as well."
~90%: "The prime minister mentioned something about 'royal library archival storage.'"

Are these referring to the same part of the royal library (as I could not find another reference that would fit)? The latter is used in quotes too, so the same words should be used for both if so. (The start of P8 goes back to calling it a repository too.)