V16 P2
~73%

Gain said, earning a smile from the other three, and from me.

Not sure who this is supposed to be, but it definitely shouldn't be Gain. He's a god, and would not be one of the people in the room.

~80%

...one for the luring ostrich the mimic clime can turn into...

should be slime?

@heimdal7 said in The Villainess is Dead! Long Live the Empress! - Corrections:

I dunno if this is a correction or if it is just the way the author wrote it being weird. at 48% part 9 the emperor ask Leon what he thinks of Elizabeth and Leon responds she was born to be empress. The emperor then says you'd go that far?

It seems like there is lines missing as why would Leon be going that far for Eliz when he supports Wis? It basically comes off as all three of them are in agreement that Eliz is the choice.

I doubt there is anything missing.

The empress switched the conversation to Westalia and the emperor commented on how she could be a trump card against the Reyns. There is a paragraph of narrative describing why a trump card would be needed and the conversation resumes talking about "she" (Westalia, the person they were talking about a moment earlier) where Leo is asked for his opinion. Leo confirms that she (Westalia) was born to be empress.

The translator may want to consider replacing one or more of the "she" pronouns with Westalia's name to make the conversation clearer.

8.8

The man’s hand went numb for an instant, and as he lost the sense of his own limb,

“in an instant”

V1 P9 (11%)

He was failing to land a single blow on a former Rank 10 adventurer who'd been expelled from the guild,...
--> a former Rank 1 adventurer

("He" is referring to Raz. "former adventurer" is referring to Sora who was rank 1 when he was repelled from the guild.)

v1p9:

32% - Oznil had smoothed down, black hair and narrow, purple eyes with a hint of blue. -> Well, that’s probably better than ruffled feathers, black hair and narrow purple eyes... There should probably be a hyphen in there: smoothed-down, black hair… 76% - […] cutting ties with both Leophell and House Lotus, […] -> Extra letter (or Freudian slip? LEO’s Putting them through HELL?): Leophel Dad has two “L”s at the end of his name, but just one for the son. 77% - […] House Lotus set on their journey […] -> Does that work, or should it be set out on?

V3P2
~0%

But didn’t you say yesterday that you were doing it for Tricia?That was pretty touching, you know. Don’t look away from me, Layla!

I guess families worry about their daughters leaving the country, even if they are Rank B adventurers?Yor’s situation must be a bit unique in that regard, since she’s been away from home for years...

Missing spaces?;
Tricia?That->Tricia? That
adventurers?Yor’s->adventurers? Yor’s

3.3

The two stood motionless as the smith made the final adjustments of the armor on their bodies, appreciating the master work done by with master materials made by a master smith.

“done with”

but when a chunk of ice hit a golem, it sheared off whatever part it hit clean off.

“sheared clean off”

one would likely have to cheese the boss somehow—maybe forcing it into a similar state where it couldn’t really fight back and then just wailing on it.

“whaling on it.”

V3 P13

76% "Your entire world will change with a little bit different of an attitude."

This may just be personal preference but the second half of the sentence feels a little awkward to read. Instead I'd suggest, "Your entire world will change with a little bit of difference in attitude."

V1P9:

I think the image of Sano getting kicked by the chicken is in the wrong place, should be around this part and not at the start of the chapter:

“You’re scared of them, aren’t you?” She pecked me fiercely. Looks like I hit the nail on the head. She also gave me a good kick while she was at it, as if to say, “Don’t bother asking if you already know the answer!” Ouch. I’m sorry. But you didn’t have to go that far, you know.

V4P8
~26%

“Each and every one of you possesses worth far beyond mere gold,”he continued.“And if we stand together,

~35%

“It will be lonely,”she admitted.

“Then promise you’ll come visit!”Naila urged.

Naila held onto her friend tightly and returned the sentiment.“And you too, Claudia,”

Misisng spaces?;
gold,”he->gold,” he, continued.“And->continued. “And
lonely,”she->lonely,” she
visit!”Naila->visit!” Naila
sentiment.“And->sentiment. “And

@eggnog said in The Tiny Witch from the Deep Woods - Corrections:

V1P9 27%:

sometimes in the middle of a conversation, sometimes while just chewing the scenery.

"Chewing the scenery" means overacting. It's entertaining to imagine Misha absentmindedly hamming it up in her idle moments. But I think taking in the scenery would be closer to the intended meaning in this sentence.

I rather like it as it is. Since I never heard of it, I looked it up and learned a new phrase to use (eventually). As I've said before, reading JNC novels is a learning experience and increases one's knowledge...

@b-scot-morgan That's definitely a possibility. Might even be more correct than what I suggested.

V5P6, Around 86%:

It was true enough that if I hadn’t sent Baron Baronet Kahku packing

Wrong noble rank.

v5p1
15% bunker down -> hunker down? bunker down seems like a mistake-turned-almost-acceptable variant...
69% Despite just having turned sixteen this year -> fifteen? All in this part, it says he was fourteen when the stampede occurred (thus why he was worried about his accomplishments being recognized since fifteen is the minimum for an adventurer) and it's been less than a year since they came to Rakana, so logically he can't have just turned sixteen.

v2P2p2:

32% - […], and he titled his ear down to me. -> Letter swap? Probably: he tilted he ear down to me.

What happen with Zofina? She was the "liason" between Celesterial and Flio, and it was Celba (Goddess that monitor Klyrodes and left due to it breaks 3 times, why is Zofina is in Hok'kenton's place instead of Celba? (she was drunk and carried home in Vol 16)

V9 P5 First Sentence "Colonel [Terawasa] climbed out" -> Terasawa
0% "balance of [acidness] and sweetness in his coffee" -> acidity (not technically incorrect but I'm still suggesting it)

v11 p7

~10%

“Either way, we don’t know if he’s undergone demonification or not. Still, I’m glad we managed to learn in advance that Bazack and the others were hiding over fifty—perhaps even over a hundred—demonified soldiers.”

Should this be an intransitive verb instead of a transitive verb? I.e.

I’m glad we managed to learn in advance that, hidden among Bazack and the others, were over fifty—perhaps even over a hundred—demonified soldiers.”

While there were demonified soldiers hidden among the Illumasians, was it Bazack who hid them?

~35% But thisis different => this is (space).