V7 Part 10

~58% -- "[...] In addition, the role Lord Florus was meant to play [...]" -> "In addition, the role Lady Florus was meant to play"; unless I'm horribly mistaken or missing some quirk of the original text, "Florus" there is referring to the same "Lady Florus" from the prior paragraph?

V6P16

~8%

"Besides, Dolton and Miranda may well already be on the move," Cere'zhula said.

Did she really call Dalton a dolt or is that a typo?

~35%

About once a month, her financé, crown prince Elvan, would come visit.

Fiancé. And should "crown prince" be capitalized?

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

V13P3 ~74%
"We'd mostly likely see it..." -> "We'd mostly most likely see it..."

V7P2 ~94%
"...for the House of Florecruz." -> "...for the House of Florescruz."

V3 P3 (72% - 12th line down from top of page)

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V2P1 16%:

chastity of his backend

If this is a computing pun then it's fine, but if not, "back end" with a space would be better.

Volume 2 Part 3
30% Though her town -> Though her tone
47% that couldn't have been in -> that couldn't have been it

V4 P4, 22%
"It definitely shouldn't look like it's just rolled off the converter belt at the statue factory"
This could just be what I'm familiar with, not having a knowledge of converter belts as such, but converter -> conveyer

V3P9 26%:
The conversation "Now that I think about it, I should have seen the hints..." - "In what way?" - "Yeah. Making the medicine...is a lot of work, right?" doesn't make sense. Is part of it missing?

V2P7

50%: "“This is the spot,” I said. I had used my detective magic" -> detection

@Hylebos That's a great point! I checked over the original, and the line was, "メルティは刀を手にするのは初めてであり、その美しさと鋭さにしばし見入っていた。" So, it does say that it was the first time she had ever held a katana.

I also checked back to the other part you mentioned, and it clearly states that she was holding the Lutz's katana then, too.

The translation itself is accurate, but really nice catch. We might consider giving it a minor tweak to make a bit more sense.

Volume 7 (3rd page) :
Gazaru is spelled Garazu.

V7 P3

~40%

“And I would like the stone tables, if possible. I can use them to raise a skill called Ancient Language,” Millie said.

They are called tablets elsewhere in the chapter.

V3 P6 (75% - beginning of 13th line up from bottom of page)

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Correct to read: "over ten years older than Airi and me,"

V3 P13, 6%
"However, if any sacred beast, like Cass or Lag, had refused the release, I wouldn’t have been able to do it."
Cass -> Cas

16%
"Epilogue: The Most Frightening Guard (The Pope)"
This line looks like it should be a heading, with paragraph spaces before and after it.
Same with "Afterword", 83%

74%
"However, I’d had no idea that, through my magic, demonic charm power had accumulated within the priests themselves."
It works as is, but unless 'charm' is specified it might work better simply as 'demonic power'

V3 P1 (0% - end of 1st line on page 1)

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This sentence would make more sense if it said:
However, it was because a god made a mistake,...

V15 P6 (83% - 10th line up from bottom of page)

Ready to burn my shit at the drop of a hate,...

Should be "hat"

---> Ready to burn my shit at the drop of a hat,...