v1p5:

89% - Hearing that I”m nasty -> I’m

V7 P5, 47%
"I’m just passing though, but I thought I’d stop by to thank you for all your help during the transport mission."
Though -> through

v6p2 ~13%:

"But desire is anotherright?"

anotherright? -> another, right?

Volume 6, part 7:

8% butand that it was had been Mr Fisher's idea
16% That did proved that Ellie
16% Bbut
16% Assuming Ellie could hear my thoughts right now, I could practically hear herwhat Ellie would say: if she could hear my thoughts right now.
16% Their jet- black darkness -> Their jet-black darkness
16% Elizbeth is a prideful woman -> Elizabeth is a prideful woman
20% I borrowed a horse from the baron's carriage. and took off with Robert and I took off in the direction of the residential district that Yoh had reported seeing Ellie and the witch in last.
24% then maybe all she was doing was using an illusion to to shape herself into whatever that meant for them--, like a perceptual distortion? -> whatever that meant for them, like a perceptual distortion?
24% full- on -> full-on
24% even if they knew, deep down, that she wasn't really the object of their affectionwoman they loved.
24% we probably can't see her "cause -> can't see her 'cause
27% "Lady Lilia," called Robert called, refusing to take his eyes off ofnot looking at Ellie for even a moment.
31% But then there was a loud clang, and Robert's sword launched snapped out of his hands.
31% I panicked, crouching to avoid getting hit, and the sword embedded itself in stabbed a the dirt of a nearby flower bed.
31% I assumed that the fight was over now that Robert had lost his weapon, but he Robert didn't take a single step back.
31% Ellie tried to move out of the way and dodge his punch, but he just kept attacking her with high kicks. She [Delete paragraph break] Ellie managed to block them with her sword hand,

This is as far as I get for now. There are so many errors in this part that I assume they continue.

V5P1P7

Around 56%

"Just how long do you intend to say?"

"say" ought to be "stay" I think.

v18p4:
0%: "" lost... I lost again..." -> extra quote mark and space at the beginning
39%: Pioro had remembered how much I liked the food from Dragonewt -> Dragonewt was previously written as the name of the race/culture, not a place. Might want to change to something like "how much I liked Dragonewt food"
39%: 500 large coins. One large gold coin was worth 10,000 sute, so that came out to 50 million sute -> 5 million (also, double check the rest of the paragraph since there's more coin conversions happening)
71%: Besides, you're already a topic of conversation two meetin's ago -> you were
77%: I kept trotting as I called back to those how spoke to me -> who
84%: cosmetic products like make up -> makeup

v2p10
~13%

Ren couldn't causally get something going either.

Should this maybe have been casually?

~19%

[...] let's go by the fireplace.

They'd move to the fireplace, not by it, in the next sentence.

~38%

"Those guys ain´t got no sense of duty. [...]

The "ain´t" has an acute accent instead of an apostrophe.

V10P11
~12%

The major difference was that the magazine was switched from a fifty-round internal box to a ten-round detachable box.

It's a five round internal, not fifty.

~21%

Acquisition, Technology, & Logistics Agency

I don't think one would use an Oxford comma with an ampersand in a company / government division name.

~29%

However, [...]— His cell phone rang.

The combination of the emdash, the incompleteness of the sentence starting with However, and the uppercase continuation feels off.

A1 V7 P16
~21%

As captain of the reconnaissance unit so, Odoacer had no equal [...]

The so seems a leftover that needs to go.

A1 V7 P17
~66%

Yet he was able to regroup with just a single breath...

He wasn't regrouping. Maybe regain his composure would work better here.
Edit: Or maybe just recoup was intended.

6.2:

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter.

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter."

Missing ending double quote.

V7P4
~9%

The rest'd had no hand [...]

I still believe that contracting had to 'd makes reading books much harder.

~9%

[...], not giving even the slightest thought to what any else thought [...]

Probably anyone

~14%

I mean, he'd been stripped of his rank in the first place because he'd tried to ignore the divinity seize power.

As @Hylebos said the sentence feels off; however I think it should be [...] ignore the divinity to size power (for himself).

~36%

[...] of the Imperium as a whole.Still, [...]

Misses a space after the period.

V6 P5
(0% - 2nd line up from bottom of the page)

alt text

I believe the wording in the outlined area should be:
"magic bag"
As in:

Ciel immediately reached into her magic bag...

(62% - 7th line down from top of page)

alt text

Correct "the" in outlined wording to "them"and remove comma...
As in:

...the priest said, leading them down the mountain path.

V6 P9 (93% - Last line on the page)

alt text

This would sound better as:

"You were absent from lunch..."
-or-
"You have been absent from lunch..."

(I personally think "were absent" is the best choice)

v3p10 ~29%

[...] her eventual move to Magnolia Thus, I'd steeled [...]

There should probably be a period (.) between Magnolia and Thus

V2P10 ~85%

[...] to a dungeon together and clear it together!"

is bad to read.

~88%

Has a character encoding error in

[...], and it'll be just the two of us

~92%

[...] A lot's happened

Would be much better as A lot has happened.

V17 P5 75%
Gon, who was guzzling beer out of a bour that I'd filled for him.
bour=bowl
I looked up bour and all i could find was a scottish term for a cottage which i find funny, Gon would have to be full size to drink that much beer.

V1 P1
19%
“Full marks? You’re joking. Not even a noble could pull that off.”
The exam was scored out of a hundred, with the average hovering around sixty. It was decidedly not the sort of test anyone aced. And yet a commoner girl had done just that. A perfect score. The first in the kingdom’s history. The whispers only grew.
32%
"Heard you scored full marks on the exam. It’s been a decade since anyone’s managed that. And...forever since a commoner did it."

Those two statements seem to be in opposition. The former could be referring to the 'first commoner in the kingdom's history', maybe? (Though my read was instead that no one had ever done so)

36%
"The Office of General Affairs was located fairly centrally to the royal palace"
Probably just me, but the 'to' is throwing me off. To -> within, perhaps?

V1 P2, 21%
She was instead staring at Nadia with visible nervousness. “You’re a daughter of a... earl?"
25% "Prime example of this: My father’s a earl, and yet you run laps around him in the decency department, Martina."
a -> an (though could be an in-character slip up in the first case, due to shock/finding her words)

V13 P7, 60%
"It really was fortunate that he hadn’t been kicked in the head or stomach. Really, did that hoof mark on his lower back really not hurt?"
Repetition. 2 instances are probably fine, but may replace or remove one of the latter two?

67%
"A metal door opened, from which a tall woman emerged. She looked to be just a little older than Dahila."
Dahila -> Dahlia