v3 p5

~30%

After that, Dona took the at the forge, and the dwarves kept churning out new weapons.

Took the what? Maybe the lead?

v13p5 ~50%:

WIth these, we can salt our fish even more quickly than before!"

WIth -> With.

V15 P9 (32% - 10th line down from top of page)

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I believe this should say "until now". At least that makes more sense to me.

v13p1:

98% - […] anything we could buy or make ourselves were only capable of resorting only a sliver of mana. -> Typo (resorting), and possibly too many “only”s, of which I’d vote for getting rid of the first: anything we could buy or make ourselves were capable of restoring only a sliver of mana.

v16p5 ~0%:

There was also an attractive women somewhere in her thirties.

women -> woman

Please cut way, way back on the number of em dashes. Most of the parentheticals would be better off with commas instead of em dashes.

v9 p1

~17% Not a correction per se, more of a suggestion:

No cameras would be present, and all who had contributed were invited, regardless of status. This was especially relevant to those who were very behind the scenes. I was sure there were many people involved who I had just never met.

I'd suggest you use the more traditionally grammatically correct whom here. Nia speaks in quite a formal, educated voice when wearing her "noble" mask, as she seems to be doing here. Also "Whom" is used later in the chapter:

These were all things I’d felt in the process of my journey. I was certain that I had reached the top. I couldn’t remember with whom I had fought or what manner of fight we’d had.

V7 P4 (55% - Last line at bottom of page))

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Correct to "Lord Nazel" since all other references prior to this say "Lord Nazel",

Volume 1 - Part 3

[53%] “There’s no mistaking it. That’s the Lightning Spear Demon Kamikiri.
→ “There’s no mistaking it. That’s the Lightning Spear Demon Kamikiri.” [Missing ”] [54%] That’s why the enemy’s lighting magic is even more effective.
→ That’s why the enemy’s lightning magic is even more effective. [76%] I was probably still within the bomb blast’s range.
[Sounds odd to me. Maybe grenade’s blast range.]

33.2:

I'm sure what ahpenned must've left

I'm sure what happened must've left

Volume 2 Part 5
40% Dana -> Diana
57% could help but -> couldn't help but
79% union...n the future -> union... in the future
99% unimpressed he looked -> unimpressed she looked

the reference is to Kris.

12.2:

Volf carried the Ice-Wing Sword so, just a hilt)

Volf carried the Ice-Wing Sword (so, just a hilt)
Volf carried the Ice-Wing Sword (so just a hilt)

v3p1:

26% - empress’ ire -> I’d probably put the “s” there (empress’s), since empress is singular, but I’m not sure it’s required.

V8.1 P11, 53%
"...what if she though her death might bright Reina [around] eventually, leading her to accept the maid's final gift?"
Not sure, but I think there might be a word missing here.

@Libri-Liberorum said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

V6P16

... his other older brother who pretended to not have a care in the world with all of his affections

Is "affections" supposed to be "affectations"?

It is indeed meant to be affectations. Thank you for catching this. Should be fixed now.

V3 P2 ~73%

sSince nobody here was gravely injured, […]

sSince -> Since

V7P5, 22%: “Then there was Clay” - Cray

v3p10:

72% - The preparations have been made, holy savor -> Typo: savior