v13p5:

43% - It’ll take some time , money, and earning the Head Priest’s trust, -> Extra space: some time, money, and

v4P2p1:

66% - Corect. -> Missing letter, presumably: Correct.

v9p5 ~87%:

Were they shared carriages limited to the city streets?

they -> the, or perhaps just cut the shared carriages?

V3P2

86%: "...the noblewoman and her retinue fled with their tales between their legs" -> tails

@karasutengu it's implied. They're thugs, and in less posh circles it's common to leave the action implied instead of using correct English, especially when he already suggested it in the first half of the sentence.

@Khazidhea Thank you, we do try to reduce repetition and echos as much as possible.

v1p7 ~5%:

It could be a storm before we know it, so we're closeing up early."

closeing -> closing.

v4 p3

~82%

“Anyway, I’m sure those left behind will work things out. For now, there’s telling when you’d be able to make it back home, so you should probably find somewhere to relax,” Ryne said, trying to change the mood. “Now that your little lady is feeling better, it would be a waste to make her keep living life on the run. And we can’t exactly travel around with you.”

Should that be there’s no telling ?

V8 P7 (93% - 6th line up from bottom of last page)

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This doesn't sound right. Could the 2nd temple actually be "village"?
(as in: "by a stronger barrier than the village"

v7 p7

~45%

In the meantime, Nestart addressed his financial advisor/ “In addition, there won’t be any more budgeting issues. I’ve found myself with ample funds for this project after sorting through my grandfather’s treasures.”

=> advisor, (replace the / with a ,).

~80%

Edward had directed his question at the butler rather than at Wilson. Jild had come to the Van den Haak Viscounty on the orders of Edward himself after Friede’s blunder had forced Haldoria to cede land to the empire. He’d originally been Edward’s subordinate, and now he managed Wilson’s underlings on Edward’s behalf.”

The paragraph isn't dialog, so the trailing ” should not be present.

3.3:

he certainly hadn't to bump into him

he certainly hadn't expected to bump into him

Volume 1 - Part 7:

[51%] He titled the coffee pot >> should be tilted [86%] As long as I keep that sister-obsessed lunatic that I’m her >> should be thinking that

3.12:

pasted out drunk.

passed out drunk.

Sure, they were pasted. So much so they were passed out, OK?

V13 P14 (23% - last line at bottom of page)

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For proper English syntax, "I" should be changed to "I'll".
i.e.: I'll ask the king about doing something,

Question for the translator:

Can you check if there’s a missed description of the Wooden Magic Sword skill in part 1, similar to what we have in part 4 for the Metal Magical Sword?

Metal Magic Sword (LVL 1: 0/1000)
Sharpness increases with level.

Part 1 also seems to have references to the missing Wooden Magic Sword skill’s description.

As for Ren’s summoning skill proficiency, that seemed to level up with use. The “0/100” displayed after the level was likely his current proficiency. However, Magic Sword Summoner itself didn’t seem to have any levels.
The system also mentioned getting more magic swords by fulfilling certain conditions.

v5 p4

~25%

It helped that t rules also seemed to be less strict here than when we were gathering in Romano.

=> that the rules

v1p7 ~44%:

Iora had barely lost her mother when her father had welcomed his mistress and illigitimate daughter into his home.

illigitimate -> illegitimate

v3 p7

~10%

“Yeah! I was shocked too! Like...how’d he even it up?! How’d he even stand up, honestly?!”

Should that be even get it up?

~80%

“Why is a governor serving Marquess Arvale’s meeting with us? Has he discovered our identities?!” Marisha narrowed her eyes and stepped protectively in front of the princess.

Marquess Arvale’s what? Maybe Marquess Arvale’s house? Or maybe it should just be Why is a governor serving Marquess Arvale meeting with us?