V13 P9 (48% - 13th & 14th lines down from top of page)

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I think this sentence would work better if "she" is inserted between the words outlined above.

e.g. ...outside of what she had imagined...

V1P6, 12%: " I just want his path to end" - this?

V7 P6

With that, she strode towards the village gate and began **unleashing** a horse

Should be unhitching

V2 P11, 86%
"Don’t tell me...her vessel rupture?!"
This one may be correct as is. As a normal sentence, rupture -> ruptured. If referring to her ongoing 'vessel rupture', probably correct as is.

88%
"Ren panted for breadth, his hands trembling from exhaustion."
Breadth -> breath

96%
"All the plots that had been playing out on the palms of his hands had turned to mist and slipped through his fingers."
I could be wrong on this, but I believe that the phrase is always singular (in the palm of his hand).

v5 p9

~43%

It was plain to see Leah LP hadn’t dropped at all. Blanc just said that to set Leah up for the drunk.
And what a dunk it was. Thoroughly baited, the Archangel, zeroed in on Leah with even greater zeal.

That should be drunk or dunk consistently. Probably dunk

V18p5, 94%: "Maltose contains an enzyme called amylase..."
I'm not sure if this is the author being incorrect or if it was an error in translation. Maltose does not contain amylase. Introducing amylase (found in malt which could be made from barley) to cooked barley, potatoes, and certain other starches will begin an enzymatic reaction that results in maltose. (I'm not a chemist, just a nerd, so take the science explanation with a grain of salt.) I only bring this up because I thought there might be a chance the original Japanese text was misinterpreted -- even if my money is on the author just sciencing wrong.

v5p4 25% By defeating the Infernal Demonic Beast Haagenti, the empire had at least gained access to a painful plain that it could now develop. -> plentiful?

a1v7p18 ~16%

They know that if he were [...]

Should be knew.

~86%

Two pairs of eyes turned toward Ryo.
Both belonged to a white-haired man [...], and another man

"Both" should probably be "They" here.

v3p11 ~19%

" I apologize [...]

There's an extra space after the ".

~22%

[...] bright red once more.I couldn't [...]

~31%

[...] I smiled at him."Thank you [...]

Both missing a space after the period.

~34%

[...] learn how to smile, Much to [...]

The comma should probably have been a period.

~44%

[...] and resuming working.

Should probably have been "and resumed working". That being said, technically "being reminded about [...] resuming working" could work, but it's not nice to read. I guess "and resuming work" would be an alternative.

~47%

[...] way closer to us "Please, raise [...]

Looks like it's missing a period after the us.

~59%

[...] she said softly. I fear for the future.

Is missing the opening " before "I fear [...].

~78%

"'Just because,' you say?

Is missing the closing ".

~81%

[...] startled my father. [...] made my father become tense.

Maybe replace the second "my father" with "him"?

~84%

Naturally, Mer happily got on his back and had become very hyper.

The times of "got" and "had become", connected with just an "and", feels off.

Volume 5 - Part 2:

[72%]

"You are Patriarch ALdera, correct?"

ALdera > Aldera

V5 P1, 30%
"Reina was dextrous, so she could do anything, but she had said that Zelos was bad at it."
Seems both dextrous and dexterous are valid spellings, but with the latter being more common thought I'd make a note just in case.

While I'm noting things:
45% “This island is relatively untouched by human hands, and yet there are surprisingly many artificial things here.”
Seems a little definitive for someone with amnesia. Perhaps is -> seems (unless this happens to be a slip/foreshadowing and she knows more than she's letting on, or her subconscious coming through)

64%
"The three of them had apparently gotten stronger lately and could beat some monsters now, but when their enemies got to the rank of rabbits, they still struggled unless they were ready to sacrifice themselves to take down their foes."
This could well be me being dense, or just simply forgetting previous events, but what on earth is 'the rank of rabbits'?

V5 P11, 60%
"As commander, I could easily order Pickle or even Jaffar to martial the concerned knights in my steed"
Steed -> stead

V10 P8 ~89%

How dare. Such an accusation wounds me.

Incomplete first sentence.

V10 P12, 20%
"Even under the discounted military pricing, boot camp sessions cost thirty thousand dollars each. There probably weren’t many people out there like Team Simon who could push through the full eight rounds, but a good number could manage two or three. So from that point of view, in terms of value, the rings would be worth possibly fifteen thousand dollars at most."
Just checking, is this value in dollars, or yen? Of course they could be switching between two currencies (just earlier: "plain silver rings... five thousand yen or less", but I think it more likely (and easier to follow) if they were just using one or the other.

V1 P5, 89%
"Above us was an enormous firedrake, with arms as large as trees. Its tail, covered with arrowhead-like spines, writhed like a snake."
Spines to spikes, methinks. (Unless it's meant to convey arrowhead like spikes running up its spine, and I'm misreading it?)

Volume 8 part 4 53%

They exploited their people, imposing heavy taxes to enrich himself.

The pronouns don't match but appear to refer to the same subject, one should change. Based on context it should probably be themselves instead of himself, but changing they could make a grammatically sensible sentence.

v14p1:

38% - “[…],” said Haruka. “But I hope we never find ourselves in such a.” -> Has Haruka just been interrupted by Nao (if so, “uh oh”), or are we missing a word or words here? I would expect different punctuation if she’s been interrupted, so I’m presuming that it’s missing dialogue. “… in such a situation.”? “… in such a spot of bother.”? There are probably plenty of options to finish the sentence.

v4p6 ~57%:

The Five Sages ranked along kings and emperors

along -> among