v3 p1

~85%

I wailed on it with Cerberus Slaughter until it was down, the Energy I received outweighing the damage and putting me at a net positive.

According to Merriam Webster the correct word is whale not wail:

Whale is also a verb for the action of hitting something (such as that gambling table, or a punching bag) forcefully and repeatedly. This might be surprising to those people who misuse the identically (or, in some dialects) similarly pronounced verbs wail or wale with the meaning of "to hit." The verb whale can also imply attacking vigorously or repeatedly, as in "the team whaled on their opponent 20 to 2"; a person might also "whale away" during a debate (meaning they are verbally attacking their opponent and showing no mercy) or "whale into/at" that person with whom they are debating.

See also Waling vs wailing vs whaling upon.

V4 P5 (30%)
But now he advised them to draw...
-->But now he advised them to withdraw...

(based on context of Hilaron's sentence before this one)

V1P12

Waine continued," but it's a long trip

Wrong double quotes: closing quotes, should be opening quotes. And space before rather than after the quotes.

V8 913, 27%
"They wouldn't think they were doing anything wrong - and even if they did, [they] wouldn't care" I think there's a missing they towards the end there.

V8 P8, 33%
"and was currently crushingit by virtue..." (missing space)

V5P8
~11%

About a week prior to this, we had defeated the approximately three hundred thousand-strong enemy army in open battle on the southern plains of Keiyou, which in itself had been a dazzling achievement.

From last week it was mentioned a few times that the defending force was three thousand and Rinkei is only being attacked be two hundred thousand, so maybe a small error in the order of magntitude here?; three hundred thousand->three thousand
(Though it would have been interesting to hear the battle of Sekiei's thousand fighting three hundred thousand)

~21%

“I-I’m a better cook than her,” I protested. And I’m better at tea-tasting contests! Ugh. Anyway, let’s get back on topic.”

Missing an oppening set of " though it's unclear if they go before the 'and', 'ugh', or 'anyway'?; One of:
->"And
->"Ugh
->"Anyway

~32%

There was zero prospect of me getting my own way. Not against her..

Not sure if it's deliberate but in case not, only two . here; her..->her...?

@Koto said in Dahlia in Bloom - Corrections Topic:

One of the strengths of the Dahlia in Bloom translation has been the inclusion of dialogue tags, providing much-needed clarity. However, while reading the Volume 9 prepub, I've noticed that dialogue tags seem to be rare, though this regression may have started a volume or two ago.

In Japanese literature, dialogue tags tend to be sparse, because distinct speech patterns typically make it easy to identify which character is speaking. But these nuances are lost in English translation, which can lead to streams of dialogue that confuse readers about who's speaking, and break immersion as a result.

Adding dialogue tags during translation is crucial—not only for clarity, but also to make the text feel more natural and accessible to English-speaking audiences.

This issue is actually what put me off of light novels for so long. I'd tried several different series only to be immediately greeted by long walls of dialogue with zero indication of who was speaking. Due to that, it was rare for me to even finish a single chapter and really put me off the entire medium up until I gave Ascendance of a Bookworm a shot.

@hornet65 I admittedly can only speak for the web novel, and not the JP light novel text, but that is indeed the case there. I would be surprised if it suddenly changed from WN -> LN. It's at the end of each sentence spoken by Torte/Tarte, and infrequently used as a standalone exclamation.

V3P9
~61%

The young man had the air of an intellectual, only reinforced by his memorable silver-rimmed spectacles. The color of his air—gray—was kind of dull, but his eyes were a striking and vivid jade green.

Small misspell?; (second) air->hair?

V10P5
~0%

However, he didn’t want to risk getting a single one of his soldiers getting killed or injured in the process.

Repeated 'getting'? Maybe remove one?; he didn’t want to risk getting a single one of his soldiers getting killed or injured
->he didn’t want to risk a single one of his soldiers getting killed or injured
->he didn’t want to risk getting a single one of his soldiers killed or injured

~71%

The young girl mounted a silver horse, ready to ride through the streets with a sense of duty burning in her heart.
“Uh... Well, I guess, if the king’s gonna make sure they’re properly punished... Though I don’t think that ‘eradicating his entire lineage’ thing is necessary. I mean, just punishing the people who were directly involved in the crimes might be enough?” I said.

Missing some kind of break for change of point of views? The first sentence is for narrative of Falsetto and after that is back to Karou?

V2 P6 13% "The Anonymous Elf called the Kingdom of Bortely home" V2 P3 14% Anonymous Elf "I'm in a country called Bawtree"

Are Bortely and Bawtree meant to be the same place? If so, it would be best to be consistent in the transliteration.

V2 P6

75% "andusing it as a key"

Missing space, "and using it as a key"

@Geezer-Weasalopes I see, so the discussion is about the her

@Geezer-Weasalopes said in Now I'm a Demon Lord! - Corrections Topic:

@karasutengu said in Now I'm a Demon Lord! - Corrections Topic:

V12 P5 (33%)

I realized I don't know much about the goddess Nell's church worships...
--> I don't know much about what the goddess Nell's church worships...
-or-
--> I don't know much about the goddess Nell's church or the popular religions...

Um.
Nell's the Hero.
Nell's associated with a church.
Nell's church worships a specific goddess.
Yuki doesn't know much about that goddess.

The existing text works just fine if you keep who Nell is and the church she's associated with in mind.

So the Nell mentioned is the "Hero" Nell, not a goddess Nell. I understand now. Since I'm a late comer to this LN, I'm still trying to get all the names straight. Thanks.

Volume 2 Part 4
03% it had been clean kill -> it had been a clean kill - already reported
14% slightest as to why -> slightest idea as to why
54% "I planned to inform them... Sheila finished.
This sentence contains [Sheila's spoken words] [Lera's thoughts] [Sheila's spoken words]
It may be better to present the lines this way:
"I planned to inform them once they were adults."
Wasn't Colny already an adult?
"I thought it would be easier to tell them both at the same time." Sheila finished.

v4 p12

In Karla's first scan (~30%) show Fire Magic at 3:

[Fire Magic Lv. 3]

In Karla's second scan (~45%), it's still 3 with a +1 indicated:

[Fire Magic Lv. 3] △ +1

Shouldn't that second one be Level 4? [Fire Magic Lv. 4] △ +1

V9P5, 27%:

An Easterner in a triangular hat
...
Triangular hats were, in and of themselves

Shiori's hat is conical (round base tapering to a point) with a wide brim, not triangular.

v2p6:

At least one missing space in there…

V3 P2

34% "about the territory politics"

This should probably be either, "about territory politics" or "about the territory's politics"