@00-biting said in The Apothecary Diaries - Corrections Topic:

"Yes, my bodyguard here took her time," said Jinshi.

yes it is obvious this is Maomao talking and not Jinshi.
There is even a reference to him feeling carefree (ref to LN5 epilogue)

v3p13:

92% - Nina. who had come across a mother who’d lost her child, -> Wrong punctuation: Nina, who had

V2P2

"She hired adventurers and sent them after her opponent in the election's apprentice, right?"

This is a "garden path" sentence. Intended meaning:

She hired adventurers and {sent them after {her opponent in the election}'s apprentice}, right?

but is most naturally parsed (when you don't know how it is going to end) as something like

She hired adventurers and {sent them after her opponent} in the {election's apprentice}, right?

Please reword to something like
"She hired adventurers and sent them after the apprentice of her opponent in the election, right?"

V4P12, 4%:

They were currently on a trip to visit their **granddaughter**, who had moved to the port town when she married. "We have a fantastic **grandchild**, but we've been so busy, we've never had a chance to meet her. We're so excited!" "She's almost three years old now!"

They're either visiting their daughter, or it's their great-grandchild who is 3, because I doubt their granddaughter married at 3.

V6 P5, 34%
"Kano don't let any information slip about [topic]."
Don't quite know what would fit in there, but sentence looks to end short.

V4 P7 (56% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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Replace "his" with "her"
e.g. - Sara crossed her arms

V5 P1 (33% - 16th line down from top and 14th line up from bottom of page)

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Shouldn't there be a "you" between "didn't" and "tell"?
(as in: why didn't you tell us...)

V14 P3 (88% - 13th line down from bottom of page)

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Correct "Prcs" to Orcs.

V5P3 0%

While that required me to take the long way around, the rolls were far cheaper.

Tolls?

v6p6 ~39%

They were only able to grasp such great political power in the first place was because...

v2 p2 ~22%

There's an encoding error, at least in the app:

In other words, it's better to be prepared...

Shows as

In other words, it’s better to be prepared

@Vorthod Thank you for the feedback!
This series has changed hands a few times now and unfortunately there has been a miscommunication on some terms.
I have been trying my best to rectify this, but this series has a habit of characters suddenly returning after six or seven volumes and they fall through the cracks.
I will pass along your feedback for the previous volumes and see what can be done.

V13 P13, 8%
"Off in a corner of the orphange’s grounds, Metea stood..."
Orphange -> Orphanage

56% "Ishuca gently bent her arms and opened her palms upward as she flashes a compassionate smile at the Wings."
Flashes -> flashed

61% "Nao gently patted Remi’s head, and Kaho looked on in a way as if she thought it were a heartwarming moment."
Not sure on this, but might work just as well (or slightly better) without the 'in a way'

v4 p3 and p4

Was some material omitted between p3 and p4? P3 ends with the wight summoning 10 Dullahans and ordering them to attack:

“Defend me and remove these insolent wretches. Dark Summon.”
A thick, vile mist billowed into existence and coalesced into the shape of a knight mounted on horseback—except the knight had no head.
“A Dullahan?! He can summon undead that high in level?!” Alec shouted in disbelief.
Except it wasn’t just one. A second, then a third, and then another appeared, until there were ten Dullahans standing in formation in front of their king.
The wight pointed his staff at us. “Destroy them.”

But at the beginning of p4 the wight is attacking directly and several of the Dullahans have already been defeated:

The moment the wight tried to attack us, Guy struck him with his staff. There was a bright flash of light, and the wight’s bones started to disintegrate.
“Gaaaah...”
But it was somehow still alive, even though it was technically dead.
When Guy tried to attack again, the wight’s body was sucked into the ground, and then it reappeared somewhere else a few moments later. Apparently, it could travel from shadow to shadow.

The continuity seems broken here, perhaps some text in which the Dullahans attack has been skipped?

Wails are definitely not large marine mammals .

If it’s not too late:
V6P11, 4%: “I’d have liked to capture [her] alive”

V8 P4 (12% - 8th line up from bottom of page)

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Add missing word "flags" in high-lighted area.

--> The two squires bearing flags - one bearing a red flag,...

V14, P7, around 95%

“Natrurally Naturally, we realize that this alone is not sufficient,”

Extra letter.