v5p4:

92% - Without her rope, it probably would’ve taken a lot longer for Lilia and I to reach the shore. -> Probably a case where me should be used, since “a lot longer for I to reach the shore” just doesn’t work: a lot longer for Lilia and me to reach the shore.

V2P8:

~44%:

You get coconut juice and oil from them

In English, I've only ever heard the liquid in a coconut referred to as coconut water. Unless it's mixed with a bunch of other junk, and then it's "juice". And the liquid from the flesh is "milk" somehow.

Also ~44%:

Even with easy jobs, this moment always was always a relief.

Extra always.

@Khazidhea said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

V6 P8, 42%
"So if vampires seeked out blood for the flavour..."
I may not be correct on this in this instance, but as I know it: seeked -> sought

Nope, you are correct. Should be fixed now.

V6 P12, 71%
"She turned to see a girl with hair the colour of burnished iron holding a small crossbow, breathing heard..."
Heard -> hard

v4 p10

~5%

<Holy mother of vague, Mali. If you worded it that way on purpose to both grab my attention, then congratulations, it worked.>

Something seems awkward here. "Both" is used to indicate two or more things -- but there is no additional thing mentioned beyond the grabbing of Leah's attention, e.g. both grab my attention and confuse me. Maybe the both is unnecessary and can be omitted?

@zeji13 said in The Petty Villain Plays by the Rules - Corrections Topic:

v1p12:

Nanalie family name is Ronamis in the chapter title and RonamisRominas in the rest of the chapter. Not sure which is the right one, but the latter looks like a bulk replace mistake.

Yep, "Replace All" mistake was the first thing I thought of too.

V12 P8 (80% - 13th & 14 line up from bottom of page)

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add "if" to sentence for better syntax.

V5 P11, ~26%

I kept Detect Mana active and watched as Chris's mana level went down. Then I used Regulate Mana to restock her with my Euini's mana stores.

Should probably be "my and Euini's".

If not too late

V2P11, “guess he can’t bestow her mana on you!” - she

Vol2 p8, 57%, "there's a large drop in inefficiency" should just be "there's a large drop in efficiency"

V3P9:

~65% "oh say, twenty-five celsius, and fifty percent"
~86% "add two tablespoons of sugar"

Gotta love the Anglophone world's inconsistent use of metric/imperial in everyday speech.

V2P3
[56%] Ever since Norn was rescued, Lillia and Norn had been helping her ➡ Fol, I think.

V2P8
though she sometimes said some words that were too difficult for me to grasp, such as, "I wonder how I can get some good old fan service to happen. Maybe Prince Raph would be happy if he got a good glimpse of my panties?"

I think you should probably reword the whole sentence around the word "pantsushot".
Like "Maybe Prince Ralph would be glad if I gave him a pantsushot from time to time?"

V3 P3 (82% - 6th line up from bottom of page)

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Replace "mover" with "move".

Part 8, at 69%, pretty sure the wrong name was used. All 4 of them are supposed to have attacked, yet Franz's name is used twice. I think the first one, where Franz ised magic, as supposed to be Connie instead, as Franz was running with a sword at the time.

Volume 3 - Part 5:

[5%] Oh no, you’vc found my weak spots! >> should be you've

V14P8 91%: All six types of ogres - Red Ogre, Blue Ogre, Yellow Ogre, White Ogre, Yellow Ogre, and Black Ogre : Yellow Ogre is listed twice instead of some other colour.

V5 P9
(9% - 9th line down from top of page)

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Add missing "she" to sentence

(91% - 11th line down from top of page)

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"First and foremost" - most importantly; more than anything else.
e.g. "I'm first and foremost a writer"