v2p3:

42% - Although he could see where the range of the damage finally ended, off in the distance, an area of some hundreds of square kilometers had been transformed into a hellish mixture of ash and magma. 63% - Put simply, it was an asset so precious that it would never have been placed in Akira’s hands were it not for the risk that he might accidentally kill hundreds of people otherwise.

Is the population density of this world and city/town so small that destroying hundreds of square kilometers would only kill hundreds of people? One person per square kilometer is giving people a lot of space… Hundreds of meters would might be too small an area for hundreds of deaths unless people were packed in almost like sardines. I’m not sure what it might otherwise be, but the scale is feeling off (maybe intentional).

74% - […] weren’t practiced because they could cause fatalities Others were banned for being illogical. -> Missing period? […] cause fatalities. Others were banned […]

V8P9, 46%:

I channeled mithril into my sword, took aim, and swung down
[…]
I looked down and saw my mithril sword crumble to dust until it had disappeared completely.
That was because I'd infused it with divine power.

should be divine power judging by the later text (from the start of the next section down the page).

93%:

I unleashed an area Tornado spell. It swept up the monsters in its funnel...but then disappeared a moment later.
It won't work after all, then. Chris had said that the magic-type monsters at the back had ways to interfere with attack spells, and she was right. The reason I'd decided to join the fray directly was because it had looked like spells would work.

should that be wouldn’t?

v6p5:

33% - traveling along the cost, -> Typo: coast 97% - when they wake up they’re head is perfectly clear -> their

v2p2:

87% - Haruka’s training regiment and facilities […] -> Wrong word/misspelling, unless a military unit was intended: Haruka’s training regimen […]

Volume 14 Part 12
03% first time we've ran -> first time we've run

09% Feelo free -> Feel free

on this section, The reply is a poor match for the initial comment. Sae says, "We've got a lot of learning by example to do" while Nao replies, "Feel free to soak as much as you'd like" I wonder if the initial comment should be something more along the lines of "We've got a lot of adventuring survival knowledge to soak up" or maybe "We need to absorb these adventuring practices from your pool of knowledge" Either of these would make more sense of the comment to soak as much as you like On the other hand, the whole thing could be resolved with Ingraman's suggestion to change it to "soak up as much as you'd like"

32% has anyone spotted a found treasure chest or return device yet -> has anyone spotted a treasure chest or found a return device yet

Iseguy's solution looks good too.

57% I don't even know I'm actually getting executed -> I don't even know if I'm actually getting executed

70% now I know how risky they are to use now -> aside from the repetitive use of 'now', it doesn't seem right. It isn't a matter of timing that setting up as an idol is risky in this world. The problem is the world itself, as she already realized in a previous paragraph. Perhaps the line should be: now I know how risky they are to use in this world.

10.4

I could technically have a bit of alcohol if I used magic to boost my kidney function.

The breakdown of alcohol happens entirely in the liver.

This is common knowledge where I'm from, and I thought everywhere. Is it not in Japan?

Might be something to consider localizing.

(The kidneys can't concentrate alcohol. Totally drunk, your blood might be 0.2% alcohol. One-fifth of one percent. At that 0.2% BAC, only 0.2% of what the kidneys remove will be alcohol. Basically nothing. Relying just on your kidneys, drinking a lot of water, you would get sober in a few weeks, maybe.)

v7 p5

~1%

I’d come to a pivotal decision point. I wasn’t about to let this group of soldiers deliver the supplies, of course. But I needed to locate the Jaysha’s party as a matter of priority, because with each passing minute, there was a growing danger that they might launch an ambush on Camille and the others. I had a good chance of finding them if I followed the resupply team, but I’d need to take into consideration that I might end up in a head-on fight. I’d make things a lot easier for myself if I destroyed the supplies and exhausted their resupply team first.

@zeji13 said in The Otome Heroine’s Fight for Survival - Corrections Topic:

locate the Jaysha's party -> locate Aishe's party

There's definitely something wrong there, but it's not clear what the fix should be. It might be what you propose, but since there are multiple other parties in the dungeon it might be something like:

But I needed to locate the other parties as a matter of priority, because with each passing minute, there was a growing danger that they might launch an ambush on Camille and the others. I had a good chance of finding at least one of them if I followed the resupply team

V1, P10 around 52%:

One Saturday after everything calmed down,Maya down, Maya and I were visiting our parents’ graves.

Missing space.

Around 78%:

Ruka hurriedly shook her head, denying what RInne Rinne had said.

Capitalization mistake.

V5 P5 (21% - 10th line down from top of page)

She'd gone and dived into a river...

• Dove is more common in American and Canadian English (e.g., “We dove right in”).
• Dived is the traditional form and is strongly favored in British English and most other English-speaking regions. (Merriam-Webster dictionary)

As an American, I'm more used to "dove" in this type of sentence, but I guess dived could be used for a larger audience (proper king's english, eh?).

v5.1 p9

~45%

“My apologies. Still, Sir Reinald has made it clear that he does not wish to see you dead, Your Highness.”
“If that’s the case, I can only imagine he has some horrid reason for wanting me to leave.”

In the context of the previous sentence, should that be

to live

V7 P2 (37% - 13th line down from top of page)

As time passed, it wore down there their physical and mental strength.

Remove "there" from sentence.

e.g. As time passed it wore down their physical and mental strength.

For volume 18: In part 5, 'beat red' should be 'beet red'

Edit: Also in part 6 it should be 'bare skin' not 'bear skin'

In part 7 it should be "forbidden tome" not "forbidden tomb" and "gripped heart" should be "gripped her heart"

In part 8, "to empty her stomach" should probably be something like "to fill her empty stomach"

V3 P5, 6%
"Fiona then passed the comb through Licia’s hair. The sound of the strange untangling sounded strangely loud."
Repetition. Perhaps one could be deleted, or swapped with a synonym

V7 P3, 79%
"I had never seen Satsuki look at me with such earnest hope before, so I felt obliged to raise my first and give her the best smile I could manage as I reaffirmed my promise."
First -> fist

88%
"I failed to completely dodge his lightning-fast stroke, and it cut a deep gash in my side."
I'm not certain, but I think stroke -> strike fits better

v13p7 ~80%

Gamut hat to go through Rohzenheim […]

Should probably be Giamut.

Volume 3 - Part 11:

[78‰] The information reaching him through official channels was often lacing, >> should be lacking

Looks like the last couple of changes didn't make it to the ebook. I still Dorino's name when I was reading it.

Arc 2 V1 P6

~70%

There is an old Japanese poem about staves that goes something like this: “If thrust, it is a spear. If swept, it is a naginata. When held, it is a sword. The stave is infallible in a myriad of ways. It teaches and disciplines without injury. Lessons are found beyond the stave.”
...
As soon as Zeke charged into the horde of orcs, he swung his stave. If an orc survived his onslaught, the attack left it too weak to keep fighting or pose a real threat. Zeke thrust his spear, stabbing again and again, as he moved through their ranks like a god of war.

I don't believe Zeke has a spear as well as a stave; he only has a stave, which can be used in a variety of styles. Perhaps that should be:

Zeke thrust his stave like spear, stabbing again and again, as he moved through their ranks like a god of war.