V2 P2 (16% - 5th line down from top of page)

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Just FYI from Merriam-Webster Dictionary online:
Sneaked is the original past tense form of sneak, but in the late 1800s, the alternative past tense form snuck began making its way into American English. It is now very common and is considered standard.

V10 P1 35% "heir to the [Wayne] family headship." -> Wynne

v19 p2

~18%

“Oh really?” Fiery plumes struck up a mad dance as a young woman with gorgeous, long scarlet hair and a practice sword for sparring Tina shot me a dirty look. Lydia Leinster, the Lady of the Sword, had been the albatross around my neck since our Royal Academy days.

Should that be for sparring with Tina?

V2 P7 (% -

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felt - [verb] past tense of feel
opened - [verb] simple past tense of open.
seen - [verb] past participle of see.
saw - [verb] past tense of see.
(source -Dictionary.com)

Since the sentence begins with two past tense verbs (felt and opened), I believe "saw" should be used instead of "seen" for better syntax.

V4 P4 (35% - exact center of page - 15th line from from top or bottom of page)

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Ths should be "Patience" since there is only one MC by that name.

V3 P7, 3%
“...Lady Robur’s grasp is very refined. I’ve come to understand that it’s beyond the comprehension of a commoner like me.”
It feels really odd for the Prince to refer to himself as a commoner. I'm presuming he's meaning only within context of the subject (an entry level understanding of the topic). Neophyte, or perhaps amateur, novice, layperson, or even hobbyist might be alternatives?

24%
"No doubt she wass lost in thought about what to write in the new art book."
Wass -> was

39%
"The prince’s bloodshot crimson eyes were fixed fixated on me"

50%
"The first prince seems to have returned quietly."
After saying he had left a few paragraphs back I initially thought this was saying that the prince was back already. However on rereading I suspecting it's instead intended to reinforce the previous paragraph. For clarity, perhaps replace with left/departed, or add on after returned 'to the castle'.

78%
Snapping back to reality, I frowned at the erotic painting the princess held. “How utterly... shameless,” I spat. I hoped she wasn’t about to start commenting on it in red pen.
Likely just me, but the meaning of this sentence escapes me entirely.

V3 P3 (89% - 12th line up from bottom of page)

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Looks like there was indecision to use "her" or "them". Since "her" was used in the previous sentence, I suggest "her" be used in the above sentence.

Volume 3 Part 6
70% wasn't a bit rude -> was a bit rude

This makes more sense with the flow of her comments before and after this statement.

71% our source of our information -> the source of our information
76% I would've done the same to her -> I would've left her alone

As written, the sentence makes it sound like Ribbons would have been indimidated even if she hadn't been a pest.

80% Come to think of though -> Come to think of it though

14.8

If she were found herself in a situation where she had to choose

12.11

We might have been getting favorable treatment because of Estelle being a Rank 5 adventure.

“adventurer.”

9.9

Charging at the Carla’s restrained form left kneeling on the floor,

Volume 2 - Part 5:

[46%]

amenuenses

amenuenses > amanuenses

[77%]

"I didn't do anything!'

' > "
Also, not sure if this shouldn't have been italicized or not. It didn't seem to be internal monologue to be italicized.

v2 p4

~5%

“In my eyes, there’s a ninety percent chance that Cormeca is a witch. She is a really fishy person. However, we cannot deal with this independently. You understand why Erifell and Dergo are waiting for the Carbuncles, attempting to do this the right way, don’t you?”

=> Derg

~85%

“The five-day arrival estimate refers to when all members of the Carbuncles unit come to Esma on carriage through other intermediary villages. However, that’s not a problem if I get just the one tocome running.”

=> to come

V6 P9, 92%
As I slipped past the ragged cloth serving as a door, a young dogfolk child, alerted by the greeting, wagged his tail and clung to my leg. Elena, who had been playing with the dwarven child, looked up at me and smiled warmly.
My read is that this is the same child in each instance. Unless I've missed something and dogfolk and dwarf can be used interchangably, dwarven -> dogfolk.

V12P5 ~17%
"Had he perhaps already realized the Eldan's visit was all in an effort..." -> "Had he perhaps already realized the that Eldan's visit was all in an effort..."

V6P3 ~56%
"I'd been affected by Master Robin's once before, but after..." -> "I'd been affected by Master Robin's magic once before, but after..."
Might be unnecessary, but it just felt off reading it w/o the explicit reference to his magic.

v11.1 p16 ~38%

He had some blue blood in him, being the grandson of a noble's illegitimate child

Could this please be double checked, unless I'm mistaken Giesebrecht's father was married to his mother according to part 3 ~76%.

He fell for her after seeing her ephemeral beauty and immaculate grace on the dance floor, eventually whisking her away from her life in her troupe and marrying her. Every night he enjoyed watching her dance, and soon they were blessed with a child. However, as his wife was an immigrant, he couldn't simply raise his child under him.

The parts contradict each other.

~48%

Isolde

Erich and Margit's daughter's name was translated as Iseult back in volume 1, so ideally should be translated the same way here to maintain consistency.

v2p7 ~50%:

Seren had told me to go home, but he'd chosen to stay.

me -> him, pretty sure? At the very least, if there's an anonymous PoV character who is watching Sirius in this part, they're not mentioned again.

v2p7 ~56%:

"Father!" they called/

/ -> .