v5p9 ~45%:

BLAAAST!"

Missing opening quotation mark, though I concede this could be the same speaker as the previous line and their dialogue is split between lines for dramatic effect, though I forget precisely how those sorts of multi-paragraph dialogue continuations typically get stylized and it feels fairly rare to see it in this fashion, but I figured I'd mention it to be safe.

V4 P7 (28% - 10th line down from top of page)

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Correct indicated wording with "it's".

V8 P7 70%:
I don't think being my partner
The ' above is in the page as a text description of the mark, and should be fixed.

@Hylebos Thanks! It's fixed in the final version.

V4 P7, 9%
"Normally, this wouldn’t be a weapon that you’d pull out in a student tournament, but the union’s top brass don’t want fighters from the halidom and empire [to] hog all the attention"

V8.2 P7, 20%
“Ver well. Oh, actually, hold up a sec, Akira.”
Ver -> Very

58%
"[He] Then switched back to his guns and targetted the foot soldiers."

V6 P5 (58% - 2nd line down from top of page)

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Replace "here" with "her".
(e.g.- ...stolen Wisteria's seat from her...)

V2 P2

~62%

If he handled his duties without issue, he would soon take on full responsibility for the earldom.

In Volume 1, "county" was used, not earldom.

~ 76%

If I remember correctly, she's Theresalo, daughter of Viscount Traff.

Wellmy dug into her mind for details about the girl. If her calculations were correct, she was currently sixteen and had been a noble for four years, her father having been bestowed the title of viscount when she had been twelve.

Theresalo is a baron's daughter, not a viscount's. All instances of "viscount" should be replaced with "baron".

V2, P5

~ 34%

"You know, Wellie," Zumiano said, in a good mood, "When I learned about your plan to save Iora, I actually planned to wait for your conviction and break you out of jail, then whisk you to the Baslam Empire with me."

Balsam

P6

~ 68%

Aides gently patted her head. "Don't sulk." Then, after a pause, he finally told her about the case. "There were whispers that the Baslam Empire was involved in this matter. That's why we chose to keep the identity of the mastermind a secret."

"The Baslam Empire?" Wellmy knew that was where the drug originated from, but she'd had no idea there was more to it. "Wait. Was this case an actual, full-blown conspiracy to cause a split in Lionel?"

Balsam

V6 p5, ~11%

[…] it also mediated and intervened in quarrels between assault clans. So it wasn't utterly toothless, it thus needed the the strength [...]

The beginning of the second sentence doesn't match up. Maybe

In order not to be toothless, it needed the strength […]

Or something along that idea.

v2p4:

2% - Now that she’d finally come too, […] -> Too many “o”s, I think: she’d finally come to 43% - I lsaw the swordsman […] -> A stray letter wandered into the sentence: I saw the

v7p11 ~62%

Prince Willie is spelled as Willi in

"Please, don't," Willi said with a rueful smile.

v2p3 ~55%

He was reluctant to spend money so lavishly right of the bat, so couldn't bring himself to ask for it right away.

The second half seems to be missing either a conjunction like and so couldn't or the subject like so he couldn't bring.

~80%

"Excuse me, can you please tell me the way to the old annex."

Should in my opinion be ended with a question mark.

5.5:

guarantees!"But some

guarantees!" But some

v12p9 ~44%

The little dragon and its rider floated into the air, and rained rainbow light over them.

The actor in the second half sentence is off, as in <someone> rained the rainbow light. Changing the order to

The little dragon and its rider floated into the air, and rainbow light rained over them.

keeps things open (it's Megades' action).

~63%

He had read the bird in a book […]

Should probably be

He had read about the bird in a book […]

Volume 21. Part 12. 55%

Like in part 7, it's the same song Selphy sang in volume 19 ("Can you hear my song?")

V17 P3 82% "Annabellel" -> Annabelle

Volume 4 part 5 about 91%

It says

staying in the Fierce Ogrefolk village

but the characters right now are in the Beastfolk village

V6 P2 (50% - 9th line up from bottom of page)

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Replace "tit" with "it".