For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

v13 p4

~25%

“I suppose we can split the difference on the durability aspect. Instead, let’s focus on making sure that nothing can slip inside,” I said. “A door would easily take care of this, but I’d be annoying to manage if we put a lock on it. I’d like to avoid that potential headache.”

Perhaps that should be but it'd be annoying

~30%

There she was, the itty bitty Kaho with a gigantic log slung over her shoulder. Hell, Touya probably would have a hard time trying to lift up that log. I found myself at a loss for words, staring at the fox girl, completely amazing. She looked like a kid at first glance and yet she was carrying around something so massive with relative ease. It was so surreal.

=> completely amazed.

Mine early modern English senses tingle...

V3 P1

~67%: "Hath thee rethought" -> "Hast thou". "Hast" is the second person conjugation; "hath" is third person (he/she). "Thee" is the second person object pronoun, equivalent to "me". "Have me rethought" would be obviously wrong (should be "have I rethought"), so the same is true here. ~68%: "Doth thee?" -- three possible corrections: "Dost thou?" -- same as above; right now it reads as the equivalent of "does me?" "Hast thou?" -- strictly speaking, "do you" as a sort of catch-all is a much more modern construction; for something in this register, they'd echo the verb of what the prior speaker had said (in this case, "have", since it's "I've got something else to discuss") "Verily?" -- if you just want to avoid that headache entirely and just want the vibe of "is that so?". ~70%: "And what doth be this request?" -> "And what is this request" -- it really is that simple; "doth be" isn't a thing. ~75%: "Though that doth only apply" -> "Though that applyeth only" -- "Doth only apply" is the early modern equivalent of "does only apply", and considering the context, I don't think they'd use "that does only apply", which is a phrasing we'd only use if we were trying to emphasise "only" as a contrast to something else. Not strictly a correction -- it's grammatically correct as-is -- but I think the nuance is off ~76%: "Your opposite, I do suppose" -> "Thine opposite" -- "Your" is for formal or second person plural, which doesn't match the otherwise casual tone thus far. ~76%: "Why doth thee look so glum?" -> "Why dost thou look so glum?" -- Same reasonings as earlier ~78%: "her personality has deprived her of any friends" -> "her personality hath deprived her of any friends" -- "Has" is 1700s+, IIRC, and not generally associated with the register being used here. ~80%: "All sorts of magic, ye say?" -> "All sorts of magic, thou sayest" -- "ye" is formal (c.f. "usted" in Spanish), and the second person conjugation of say is "sayest" ("say" would be correct for first-person, "sayeth" for third person) ~89% "... or fail to praise thy achievements" -> "or fail to praise thine achievements" -- "Thy" vs "thine" is the same as "a" vs "an"; in this case "achievements" starts with a vowel sound, so "thine". ~93%: "Oh, there doth be no need to worry" -> "Oh, there is no need to worry" -- again, it really is that simple.

Hope this doesn't come across as harsh, but this is my pet peeve :P

NOTE: if the intent with this character is that she's trying to sound old-fashioned and just jumbling everything up, ignore all of this, but that's not the feeling I get from her.

V6P6, 84%:

That did seem possible. Worse, people might be willing to go to extreme lengths to get me to do what I wanted, like taking some of my party members hostage to threaten me.

Should probably read "get me to do what they wanted".

@Geezer-Weasalopes
Sure. It's probably not wrong, just the wording brought different connotations to mind (edit: I think due to linking it in my head to the term flesh-eating disease). And that could be down to local/colloquial differences as well. Body mass or musculature also sound better to my ears.
If it's not wrong, it doesn't need a fix, but I raised it just in case.

Volume 1 part 6 8%

While gunshouts resounded...

this should be gunshots.

V4 P2 (0% - 4th line down in 1st paragraph of 1st page)

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It seems to be missing a word such as "easy".
(example: because it would be easy to defend)

v1p6 ~4%:

lAt that time, though, I didn't even care about myself, let alone other people.

lAt -> At

v1p6 ~7%:

＊＊＊<

Erroneous less-than symbol sneaking its way into the first page break? :P

Volume 2, Part 8
[93%] as a prodigal swordsman. ➡ should be prodigy or prodigious

Volume 1 - Part 6:

[1%] Aides found it odd that Wellmy would have entrusted a letter to Leo while knowing his relationship with his sister >> the highlighted pronoun from context feels like it's talking about Wellmy, in which case, this should be her

Volume 1 - Part 6:

[8%] alone together Aurelio even >> needs a period after 'together' [8%] freshly run church bell. >> should be rung [91%] handed one to Dinae. >> should be Dina

Volume 1 part 6

The dragon's exceptionally buoyant skin repelled both slashes and stabs.

Buoyant can't be right here, what does the skins ability to float have to do with anything?

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

V 10 P 6 - "Precedent really has meaning" should be "has no meaning". It's unprecedented in the following paragraph.

@karasutengu said in Imperial Reincarnation - Corrections Topic:

V5 P11 (58% - 1st line at top of page)

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I believe a word is missing here, and it may be due to translation. However, for proper English syntax "the" should be inserted as in: ...come to the capital...

Given it being Carmine, "come to our capital" also works.
But there needs to be something there, yes.

V4 P7 (88% - 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "he" to the.

v5 p3

~55%

I’d been about to explain how the Northcours were constantly hosting guests, that Samuel and I would often play the hanon for those guests after dinner, and that that was the reason Samuel and I hadn’t had time to compose. I’d cut myself off so I could keep it a secret that Percival and Albert had visited the Northcourt manor.

=> Northcourts

@SilverFuton oh shoot, i forgot this is a general thread for the whole book series