V3P2 ~60%

Return turned his back to her to go to his room.

Should probably be Ren.

This, combined with the outfits the party guests wore, the sight was absolutely resplendent no matter where one looked.

The sentence is wrong. It would be possible to use Thus in place of This, but I doubt that was the intention. So maybe

This combined with the outfits the party guests wore for a sight that was absolutely [...]

without the commas and with the small change in the middle.

~83%

Their daughters understood this, stepped away from their fathers' quiet battle.

Feels like something is wrong or missing. I'd say stepping instead of stepped would suffice, or an and connecting the halves.

V4, P4, Around 31%:

And so, Mer remained in the study, where Danae continued reading to her. According to
Mer, Danae also gave the characters different voices when she read to her.

There is an unnecessary line break between to and Mer.

Volume 3 - Part 8:

[73%] kept in tough >> should be touch

@Valanduin said in Imperial Reincarnation - Corrections Topic:

On top of that, at the moment Erhardt was most definitely confident that his was Jurgens, not me.

His what?

His enemy, likely.

I have noticed that in the most recent part the name of the capital changed from Crystal Palace to Silver Palace.

V6P5 90%:

hit the breaks

breaks -> brakes

v5 p5

~75%

“I have less aerial forces than I thought,” Leah mused. “Well, not like I could’ve taken any more than this. I need some bodies protecting my holdings in the ground. This’ll do for an expeditionary force.”

fewer aerial forces or maybe less aerial force or less aerial strength.

Generally "fewer" is preferred when referring to countable amounts, see 'Fewer' and 'Less'.

(Sure, it's a persnickety difference, but maybe in character for Leah to use the words precisely.)

v5 p6

~25%

Light Magic activated—as you’d guess—at the speed light. Same went for its crowd control spells. And no matter how fast Destructive Arrow could travel, it could never travel faster than light. That whole “like a laser beam” simile from earlier was just that: a figure of speech. Besides, if you shut the attack down before it was even fired, then its speed ceased to matter altogether.

speed of light

~60%

When going toe-to-toe,, one would have to have Leah-levels of training and discipline to pull that off. But with this many of them, they could divide up the roles.

toe-to-toe, (extra comma).

@Valanduin Just double-checked it and nope, no error. If it helps, though, the spirit monster rank system seems to be something the Heavenly Realmers created to generalize how strong the different types of spirit monsters are, so this is saying that Minor Deity-rank spirit monsters are about as strong as literal Minor Deities.

v4p4:

12% - .Wayne -> Period probably shouldn’t be there. As a bonus, is there a good way to cut back on the commas in the rest of the sentence? Maybe break it into two sentences? It feels like it runs on a bit too much. :)

Volume 4 Part 12
97% one grader higher -> one grade higher

@Charlie85 You're right. I think the editor's brain read "is it" instead of "it is" and added a question mark at the end, then my brain did the same when I accepted the edit. Thanks for pointing it out!

@Tango said in I’ll Become an Elegant Villainess! - Corrections Topic:

V2P2
~10%

Given how I’d been born to a poor noble house in the midst of a terrible downfall in my previous life, the expensive clothes and bag made me reel.

Wrong word? (Because that is describe how her new life is start and if it is isekai old life is probably not have noble house?) previous->new

I think that you misunderstood the description of her previous life. In her previous life, she was a noble from a poorer house, and her parents sent her to social events with wealthier, more powerful houses where she always felt out of place, because her clothes weren't as expensive as those from the other noble families, since her family wasn't rich. She then died at one of those social events when an earthquake occurred and wished that she hadn't just always obediently done what her parents wanted (and thus decided in her new life to try to be like the villainess in one of her favorite books).

In her current life, she has once again been born into a noble family, but her noble family this time around is doing quite well.

v1p6:

10% - And it’s scabbard. -> Unnecessary apostrophe: And its scabbard.

V6 P4 (42% - 4th line down from top of page)

..."energetic kids always made them target."

Add missing "a" between "them" and "target" for better syntax.

e.g. energetic kids always made them a target.

v14 p8

~40%

“The dungeon’s monsters are still no match for us, so we still have some leeway,” said Kaho. “In any case,we didn’t make a lot of money from our latest expedition, but we’ve gathered plenty of fruit. Would half of the pile suffice?”

case, we (missing space)

~90%

Haruka had borrowed an accessory from Illias-sama that matched her dress back when we attended that wedding reception, but we weren’t rich enough to spend money on crafting accessories that we probably wouldn’t use much. As for dresses, it would be better to just build a few when girls actually need them.

"Build" is a very unusual word to use vis-à-vis the creation of clothing. Maybe instead:

tailor create sew Even construct seems more common, see e.g. here.

v11 p4

~68%

Mech Studies lording over the other departments was one thing—even if it wasn’t the most flattering traitt—but mech knights injuring people was not to be taken lightly.

trait

V7 P5 (41% - 1st line at top of page)

She was certain he saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

Replace "he" with "she" for better syntax.

e.g. She was certain she saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

V1, P6, around 97%:

Most of the mana she’d focused hadn’t become part of the spell—nstead instead, it dissipated from her almost unceasingly.

Missing letter.