Volume 1 - Part 7

[44%] ... , but one a proud woman like Sistia couldn't ignore. Ahe turned a wrathful gaze towards Inglis.

Should be She

Volume 6 - Part 9:

[13%] power is exactly as I remember it, either.” ► Remove the closing double quote. The Thorn Princess keeps speaking in the next paragraph.

Vol 1 - Part 7:

[74%] Unfortunately, however, it was a two-fold lock that would make it default to strong arm the door. ► make it difficult to strong the door.

V3P5
43% - "Lets see what's going on with Grand first" -> I think this should be Grantz

5.6

After a while of slowy floating

“slowly”

fled with their tribesmen to seek sanctum.

“sanctuary.”
The island is metaphorically (perhaps literally?) a sanctum, (note the article,) but that isn't the intended meaning in this sentence.

Resign and jump into his Majesty's

“Relent”, maybe?
That usage of “resign” (better, “resign yourself”) is archaic, now it means specifically “accept that something undesirable cannot be avoided.” Probably not the tone they were going for.

Volume 9 - Part 6:

[68%] She called me “young man,”, which just ► Remove duplicate comma after the quote. [87%] she asked as shehanded me the shampoo. ► It should be she handed (space).

Volume 3 - Part 6:

[91%] “So. you mean that as long as it’s not too big, ► It should be a comma.

@nofairytale @Terabyte Replying very belatedly, but doing it now before I forget again 😅 Thank you very much for pointing out these issues - they're fixed in the final version.

@pcj @Iseguy @Quixzlizx Thanks for your text corrections! We've now fixed all these in the final version. A few specific notes:

@quixzlizx said in Girls Kingdom - Corrections Topic:

0% "She told me it was even possible they'd declare martial law" >> Not a typo, but based on context, "implement a curfew" might make more sense in a school setting. Especially since that's what ends up happening later on.

The Japanese is pretty clear in its phrasing here, but it's meant as a metaphor, so we've rephrased slightly to make that come across.

@pcj said in Girls Kingdom - Corrections Topic:

Volume 3 - Part 10:

[General] The API has this tagged as "Final". Was this the last part of the volume? Seemed like a weird place to end a volume if so.

Yep, that's the end of volume 3. I thought it was an odd place to end the book as well, but there is one more volume it turns out, so we can look forward to seeing where the story goes!

[84%] It’s fantastic that you’ve got to know people. >> should be gotten

Technically this was intentional (British character, British grammar construction), but since it stood out, the editor and I agreed that we'd change it after all.

Volume 5 - Part 8:

[0%] insert12.jpg ► The title in the image is NOTHING (IN THIS OTHER WORLD) instead of NO ONE (IN THIS OTHER WORLD). [47%] This creature being set free was part of someone’s plan. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. [94%] (https://www.pixiv.net/fanbox/creator/1559348) ► Remove the parentheses? (At least they seem weird to me there in a new paragraph after a colon.)

An example of what happens when the font size is just right, and you used three periods instead of an elipsis character:

what's an elipsis?

5.1

Spacing:

I shook my head.“Do the memories come back

@pcj said in Altina the Sword Princess - Corrections Topic:

@shiny I'll concur with shiny and also point out that at least half of it is actually plot-relevant to the main story as well (and there are things in volume 9 that will leave you semi-lost if you didn't read the parts leading up to it in Loose Threads).

Agreed, a good chunk helps explain a lot in terms of past and present plots (and who knows how much it will help with future plot and character points).

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Volume 04 - Part 6:

[8%] though, so they weren't' left in official records." ► Remove extra apostrophe

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@reesen Oh well, seems like you use a Latin derived plural form in English (or the "normal" plural pegasuses); pegasoi would be more in line with the original old Greek - but that's apparently not a thing in English, and in Greek mythology there was only one Pegasus anyways.

@terabyte Thanks so much for these! They should all be updated now.

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Volume 02 - Part 1:

[22%] with a population of 1.4 billion and 9.6 square kilometers of land, ► Um, is there supposed to be a million/billion attached to this? Already mentioned [45%] The inside of the support facility at Sapporo was nowhere near as intimidating the one in Yokohama. ► Add as Already mentioned
1. 'The inside of the support facility at Sapporo was nowhere near as intimidating as the one in Yokohama.'

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Volume 02 - Part 3:

[Generic] Three mentions of the name Liu Fongguan, however one instance is Fonnguan. Already mentioned

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Volume 02 - Part 4:

[9%] "... Just what it is that's motivating him?" ► Should these be swapped? is it [36%] I found myself marveling once again at how variety we had in the group. ► Add much or other adjustments
1. 'I found myself marveling once again at how much variety we had in the group. ' [64%] Then I used Teleportation to bring all of them to Abyss, the Rank A dungeon Shishibone, Edogawa City. ► Needs full-stop after dungeon, and possibly new line, brackets [] and placement after the section break for the location of a new section and perspective OR add in
1. 'Then I used Teleportation to bring all of them to Abyss, the Rank A dungeon in Shishibone, Edogawa City.'
2. 'Then I used Teleportation to bring all of them to Abyss, the Rank A dungeon. {Section break} [Shishibone, Edogawa City - Ezoe Kazuhiko]'

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Volume 02 - Part 6:

[58%] "... After that, we can say goodbye to ever allowing Gamerican troops step foot on Japanese soil again." ► Add to

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Volume 02 - Part 7:

[7%] -her entire back, as well as both of her arms from the shoulder down, was completely bare. ► Should be were

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Volume 02 - Part 8:

[Generic] Multiple references to Meng Zemin, however one towards the end of the page is Zeming, check to make sure all references correlate. Already mentioned [70%] there was no need to look to look any further than Yuwaku Onsen, ► Remove double up

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Volume 1 - Part 6:

[62%] Had they not been, after all, there’s no way they wouldn’t have let noobs like Kokoro join. >> should be would (because they did let them in, so it doesn't make sense otherwise)

In the Epilogue (second page in my browser), right after "a very kind guard recognized your face..." Jinshi said Maomao touched her face.

Missing some punctuation or something.

Jinshi said as Maomao touched her face...?

Jinshi said. Maomao touched her face....?