@Hylebos said in To Another World... with Land Mines! - Corrections Topic:

v14p3 ~0%:

Then again, there was the off chance a golem could just hip over the bulwark since they had legs.

hip -> trip, though I suppose it could have also been hop, though that seems less likely.

I’m casting a vote for “hop”, because of the “then again” there. :)

73% - A few days had passed since we had first discovered a raw garnet, and we’d much faster progress with mapping out the passageway. -> Maybe technically correct as a contraction of “we had much faster progress”, but I’m inclined to suggest “and we’d made much faster progress” or just take the contraction out. Or are too many “we had”s in one sentence not a good idea? ;)

V13 P9, 6%
"Ripples formed on the surface of the coffee in Dahlia’s hands. She decided to set down her cup to add some milk into it."
Then just following on:
13% "Dahlia was served more coffee, but she did not reach for it. That was how surprised she was by what Zanardi said."

Probably not intended that way, but this brings to mind the latest Naked Gun movie - each time coffee is set down, even if it's a full cup just been ordered, a new cup is put into their hands immediately.

Granted, time could be passing by quicker than I realised in this scene, with her previous cup growing cold and there being overly attentive staff, but adding in milk is often done when coffee is too hot still, so seemed a little jarring with nothing in between particularly giving a reason for it.

22% “Miss Rossetti, do you perhaps find this repulsing?” Zanardi asked.
My instincts lean towards 'repulsive' over 'repulsing' here

v1 p7

~38%

“... For Black, delirious with passion, it shall take far longer.”
“Delerious?”

=> Delirious

v3p3 ~82%:

"M-Mlitary regulations?"

Mlitary -> Military.

Also, the original post of the thread should be updated to point to the latest discussion topic, no?

@strangeattractor said in Trials and Tribulations - Corrections Topic:

I would have appreciated more speech tags so I would have some idea who is talking.

I agree, and this series is not the only one that has this issue.

V8.2 P15, 9%
"And both of Akira’s black blades shattered—along with Dorus’."
...
"But Akira halted his final blow right in front of Dorus’ nose."
...
"I won’t force you—not sure I can with my blades gone anyway"
...
“Thanks, that’s a huge relief,” Akira said with a sigh of his own. He lowered his blade away from Dorus’s face at last.

I found it a little hard to keep track of things in this sequence. After Akira's blades were broken, I assumed in the next instance that his 'final blow' was a punch, or similar. But then at the end he lowers his blade? (I don't think I missed him equipping a new weapon, or any mention of his swords repairing themselves)

29%
"And so the farther east one traveled toward the Front Line, the less influence the Big Five had on."
Sentence ends awkwardly. Likely to drop the 'on', or add a subject 'had on them/on the adventurer'

71%
"Though not everything was resolved or and Akira was still in danger, of course, at least he had kept his spirits up in a situation anyone would recognise as hopeless."
Erroneous 'or'. To be either dropped, or might have some missing words to follow it.

@eggnog said in In Another World with Household Spells - Corrections Topic:

V6P8 18% and everywhere else that "force" is mentioned:

"Force is what makes things work," I explained."[...] When force is applied to the food we eat, it becomes energy to move our bodies. A growing flower uses force to take energy from the sun[...]"

This is a very strange definition of force. The physics concept of force is a push or pull on a object, with a magnitude and direction. It's not the same thing as a chemical reaction which is what most of her examples sound like to me. While force is indeed applied to the food we eat when we chew it, I don't get the impression Patience is describing chewing there. Is Patience giving a meaningless explanation in Japanese, or is there another word that force might be translated as...? I think she's describing the conversion of energy from one form to another, so maaaaybe transduction? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Transducer

I agree that what she is describing is a lot closer to energy transduction than anything else.
However, given the apparently primitive state of that world's natural philosophy, and the fact that Patience is just trying to get basic concepts across to her little brothers, I had assumed that she wasn't even trying to use the terminology correctly in terms of real world physics but was just repurposing terminology for her own ends.

V5p1:

0%: "from about halfway down all the way to their apexes" -> halfway up (just nitpicking directionality 8-) 9%: had known Solare back when he was being bullied by the other students.” -> extra quotes 36%: Strath, Elisa, and Shenley slowly followed from behind.” -> extra quotes

v18p6:
59%: put your payment into the fun -> fund
71%: As long as we give His Majesty a head's up -> heads-up

V10 P13, 60%
"With a bouquet of flowers in his hands that he had convinced a florist [to] put together at the break of dawn..."

v5 p5

~45%

Lily was taken to the first aid tent, and Commander Jacqueline made her way to the commanders’ tent to give her report. As for me, I’d completed the mission, thus freeing me from the team, so I returned to my tent. I sensed about two people inside—presumablySumire and Sara.

=> presumably Sumire

@Libri-Liberorum That one at least proves this is human translated. No machine would have made such miss take.

V1 P6, 85%
“I see I’ve lost,” Earl Schonheir replied. “You performed admirably"
Schonheir -> Schonheit

V7 P5 (17% - 5th and 6th line down from top of page)

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Add "you" between words in the outlined area:
e.g., It's been a hot minute since I've seen you guys.

V4P5, 8%: “Also, there are some pretty healers hiding out in the institute." - while possibly also true, there’s a word missing like “good”.

V7p6 ~19%

[...] who'd only just declared himself was too old [...]

Should be either "who'd just declared himself to be too old" or "who'd just declared that he was too old".

V5P9, 41%: “How razor-thin wires sharp enough to cut anything they touched could parry bare flesh without slicing clean through them was anyone's guess” - one or other of these is incorrect because flesh is not plural.

46% (same para as above post): “It was plain to see Leah LP hadn’t dropped at all” - Leah’s

66%: “Now that they thought about it, they'd completely neglected to tell Blanc the whole thing about how inventories worked for NPCs, did they?” hadn’t they?

V1 P6, 74%
"As the on-site envoy of House Kaddour, Sylan spent time lending an ear to the questions and concerns of the evacuees—his subjects."
Sylan -> Sylvan

83%
"After taking role—all accounted for—Escoffier addressed the group."
I'm not sure in the singular, as here, but presuming roll-call as the base word: role -> roll