v2p11 57%

Even if it were a lie.I knew

needs a space after the full stop

V10P2, 18%: "Each one's face had groves in it" - grooves

Volume 6 - Part 5:

[~9%]

his gaze drifting slightly to somewhere behind the man Upon closer inspection,

Missing punctuation. Add a period after man, before Upon.

v14p4:

16% - Aruharu pounced then with near blinding speed, closing the distance between her in the blink of an eye. -> Doesn’t look right to me. :) “Between her” what? Her and him? Her and Klaus? I could see “closing the distance between them in the blink of an eye.” Or just “closing the distance to him in the blink of an eye.”

v13p10:

16% - “Techinally, we’d seen […] -> Misspelled: Technically

@Geezer-Weasalopes said in To Another World... with Land Mines! - Corrections Topic:

13.10:

we should focus on developing new booze that can't be made with rice or anything you'd find in the grog around Laffan.

Um, like what?!
They'd be focusing on stuff that could be made from local resources if possible!
And what the heck is this "grog around Laffan" stuff? "area around Laffan"? Grog is booze!

I’m reading that as “new booze that can’t be made with rice” and “new booze that can’t be made with anything that you’d find in the grog around Laffan” (ie, booze that can’t be made with what’s already used in the Laffan-area alcoholic beverages).

v1p12 33%

More than anything, though, was how she stopped and listened to me when I’d sid monsters were alive,

sid --> said

v16p13 ~91%

My life might be easier if you would just get aggressive.
（いっそ嚙みついてくれたらいいのに）

Maomao is saying she wishes Jinshi would physically bite her, not just get aggressive. This seems like a reference to when Jinshi bit her in volume 4, bit her again in volume 9, and said he wanted to bite her in volume 14.

@kingpendragon said in Dahlia in Bloom - Corrections Topic:

V12, P11, around 8%:

“I believe so,” Ivan Ivano agreed.

Missing letter.

V12, P11, around 27%:

While everyone was ruminating, Ivan Ivano clapped his hands together.

Missing letter again.

He just lost a little weight. Well, if you consider 20% a little, that is.

V1 P1, 81%
"Anyway, speaking of family, Vanitas had two little sisters—twins, in fact. They both had opposite personalities..."
Very minor, but 'both' seems superfluous (can't have just one with an opposite personality, but the other doesn't)

P3, 4%
"If one were truly skilled, it was also possible to transform into animals, monsters, or inorganic matter—but only few could do that.
'but only few' ->
'but only a few'
or 'but only few'

71% “To that end, I’m ready to pay any price,” I declared. Then after a short pause, I said, “ Christina.”
Extra space in front of 'Christina'

P4, 15%
"Being slaves, I never shared a meal with them."
Stared at this a little, but I can no longer tell if this is currently fine as is or not. If not:
'I had never shared...'
or 'I never shared meals...'

50%
"Shuka was a woman who looked like in her early twenties"
Could just be phrasing I'm not used to, otherwise:
'who looked like she was in her early twenties'
or 'who looked to be in her early twenties'

P5, 92%
"Ms. Ashley was such a worrier. We [had] had this conversation multiple times already."

V6 P1 76% "It was only one story tall and about four square meters on each side, so "cabin" might have been" ->
"one story tall, square, and about four meters on each side," a page later the room is described as "about 15sq meters"

86% "didn't look much at first glance" -> like much

V3 P9 (63 % - 11th line down from top of page)

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V5 P1 (89% - 8th line down from top of page)

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Maybe its just me, but this sounds out of context. Claudia knew she couldn't stop Lutz from doing what he felt he had to, so I think this should read:
"she couldn't stop him"

V3 P11, 62%
"Auld was a little shocked to hear Shenly happily babble on about Aoi and everything and everyone related to her."
Shenly -> Shenley

V4 P2 P6 (43% -12th line up from bottom of page)

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The wording in the high lighted area is confusing. I believe the following would work better:
"you're dead set on a path"
-or-
"you're on a path"

( think the 1st suggestion above works the best)

Volume 1 - Part 12:

[56%] There was a man with him at the time >> should be her [79%] make the military consider committing their sentence. >> should be commuting [85%] Teodoro’s chair ratted violently >> should be rattled [90%] the soldier had their subordinated pinned >> should be subordinate

V1 P12 (48% - 1st & 2nd lines at top of page)

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I believe "his" is missing in the high-lighted text.
e.g.: give up his life,

V3P8 63%
This city was full of factions who rooting for our downfall,

who rooting --> who were rooting

V5p2

"Yeah, looked bored at the reception desk."

That sentence seems to be missing a pronoun.