Volume 21. Part 12. 55%

Like in part 7, it's the same song Selphy sang in volume 19 ("Can you hear my song?")

V12 P9 (63% -5th line down from top of page)

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Since several sentences prior to this comment references Allen's desire to capture the creature in front of him, I believe the high-lighted word should be "mine".

(possessive pronoun- used to refer to a thing or things belonging to or associated with the speaker. e.g. "you go your way and I'll go mine")

V17 P3 82% "Annabellel" -> Annabelle

Volume 4 part 5 about 91%

It says

staying in the Fierce Ogrefolk village

but the characters right now are in the Beastfolk village

V8.2 P5, 0%
"Akira turned his camo off and showed himself at last. He had accompanied the others into the vehicle—with Hikari being none the wiser."
Hikari -> Hikaru

V6 P2 (50% - 9th line up from bottom of page)

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Replace "tit" with "it".

4.2:

Please be rest assured.

Something is off with this. I think the "please be" is not normally associated with "rest assured"?
"Please be reassured"?
"Please rest assured"?

V16p10 96% - Afterword says "Thanks for buying volume 15" - should be 16, unless the author genuinely made that mistake.

V6P7

"We shall deploy troops to the north of the city ...

"to the north" means outside the city and north of it. (See previous paragraph, where the river is "to the north".) These troops are being deployed along the northern wall of the city. So "deploy troops in the north of the city" would be the simplest correction.

v5p8 ~94%:

I shrugged. "This is nothing. ," I shrugged.

Need to do a pass on that sentence to remove leftover decisions from past revisions.

Volume 5, Part 1, 47%

She’d give them her blood, they’d become lesser zombies

Not a grammatical or spelling error but in the context of the story, “lesser zombies” should be “lesser vampires”

V7 P4, 14%
“So where are we going? [Will] Eris be there?” Rurika pressed them.

V6 P10, 47%
"Cody didn’t know it, but the other members of his crew—Pet, Luca, and Eddge..."
Pet -> Pett

v3 p2

~77%

If it’s possible for me to be the spark that lights the powder keg, I should return to the village.

Please re-check this translation, I believe Ren does not want to return to the village if doing so would put them at risk, i.e.:

If it’s possible for me to be the spark that lights the powder keg, I should not return to the village.

v5 p4

~32%

“I am a direct descendant of His Grace, Duke Altishult Bingil Orvorus. My grandfather loves me to pieces. Now that you know who I am, you know that I must be telling the truth. If you try to fight back, I’ll get the duke’s imperial guardsmen to come and apprehend you... Is that what you want?”

There seems to be some continuing inconsistency in how this name is spelled. In previous volume previews it's usually Orvarus, but occasionally Orvorus as above. I'd suggest making it consistent.

For a prior example, see where @xdbx said in The Dorky NPC Mercenary Knows His Place - Corrections Topic:

The last name of Amilia Frannodol Orvarus's great uncle the Duke is spelled inconsistently. Sometimes it's spelled "Orvarus", but sometimes it's "Orvorus":

v2 p3 0%

It was decided that the duel between the Sasha, the [...]

~70%

orihalcon fists

This might be the correct spelling in this series, I did not find a reference quickly. Usually it's spelled along orichalcum though, so this may or may not be worth changing.

V5 P2, 67%
"Both the hallway and the entry hall had been renovated recently, much to my surprise; I’d only learned of the renovations plans after the work was already completed."
Could be a difference in dialect, but I've only heard it as 'renovation plans', (no matter how many renovations take place)

@xdbx "lord mannerism" is a form of address in speech for marquesses/marquises, so it isn't incorrect. as for the parker fletcher bit, i'm guessing that a line must have been shifted or deleted accidentally during the editing process since parker fletcher is raymond's righthand man. i'll let the editor know. thanks