V8.2 P9, 78%

What reasons could she possibly have to reject her help?
her -> his

V2 P9 (42% - 4th and 5th line down from top of page)

alt text

Correct "our" to your.

v5p1
0% seem to be missing the cover.
85% consisted mostly of complaining about the goddess she used to work for about the goddess she worked for -> doubled text.

10.2:

Ann told Sara. And I met Rod and the other

Ann told Sara. "And I met Rod and the other

v7p3, ~61%

[…] eventually they'd little choice but to interact.

As a non-native speaker, this contraction threw me off in parsing the sentence. I'd appreciate if it was changed to an explicit they had, as I tried to expand to a they would that was incomplete, and not there.

"I wouldn't be surprised if you didn't remember me. […]

Feels like the wrong tense. I wouldn't have been surprised fits better as the phrase as it is projects an expectation into the future, but the guard already recognized here.

v2p10 ~13%

–that's it's all a game.

Should probably be that it's all a game.

v12p14 ~16%

"Farwell," Desperad said […]

Should be Farewell

v1p2 ~55%

"Wyn" is used as heading, but not styled as such

V11 P4 (78% - 4th line down from top of page)

alt text

"I" appears to be missing and should be inserted in the annotated area:
i.e., But as I sank into self-deprecation,

(94% - last line on page)

alt text

Replace "must" with "might" for better syntax.
e.g. I might just get swept along with the current again.

@Hylebos Even the punctuation in her story is wicked!

V4 P10, 36%
"Tatiltiu had been knocked off her feet, and as if to pour salt into the wound, Mina followed up by launching an absurd amount of snowballs at her."
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

V1, P1, around 39%:

one where the divide between commoners and nobility was slowly erodingaway eroding away

Missing space

Arc 1 Volume 7 - Part 8:
[5%]

On that day, the sixth since the fall of Crystal Palace,

Maybe sixth day? It feels incomplete.

Arc 1 Volume 7 - Part 12:
[14%]

"I have no idea what you're talking about, but sure, if you say.

if you say so.

Volume 4 - Part 7:
[56%]

"I exchange, I just ask that you handle the winner's prize as well," I said

(1) I > In
(2) Missing a period at the end of the sentence. said.

Volume 4 - Part 9:
[18%]

"Next up is bathrooms," I said.

(1) The subject is plural. is > are. Could be rephrased as: "Next up are the bathrooms,"
(2) The context just right before this sentence was talking about baths. So using bathrooms to refer to the toilets immediately right after makes it confusing. Since the facility name is already "Public Restroom", it might be better to just use the same term: restrooms.

[59%]

We've got a foot shortage on our hands, but they seem to be just fine!"

Typo. Should be food.

V1P1, 33%: "he was still little something of an outsider"
70% "it was bustling with the activity [of] morning training.'
76%: "Kenji checked the readings of [a] yin-yang gauge"

V1P2, 18%: "The receptionist put a bundle of banknotes on the counter, each worth a costly five yen [...] Having confirmed that there were indeed five one-yen notes" - either there are multiple ¥5 notes or five ¥1 notes, but both of these things cannot be true.

V2 P8 (75% - 5th & 6th lines down from top of page)

alt text

Replace fought with taught for proper syntax.

18.1

I took a step back and accessed my work as a whole.

“assessed”