V6 P11, 76%
"Only after I saw Kaeda fall down in front of me..."
Kaeda -> Kaede

v12 p7

~55%

“And one more important thing...” Annette lowered her voice as she stared at the other two ladies. “This mission is extremely dangerous. Please keep that in mind. If either of your identities are revealed, your lives may be in danger.” There was a moment of silence before she went on. “But I have faith that you can complete this mission. Lady Diana, you are the sister of Count Eimoor and the Rose of the Duel Grounds. Lady Helen, you’re known as the Lightning Strike. I firmly believe that the two of you are perfect for this mission.”

Doesn't everyone know who Diana and Helen are? If so, maybe that should be your missions or your jobs or your real purposes or something like that?

V5 P8
[90%] use ropes to secure the boats to the shore ➡ floats

Volume 13:
Page 22: Since Reinbach had already retired, it was up to Reinbach to take on any chalenges the Jamils faced -> Reinhart
page 22: if Reinbach were to overstep and involve himself too much, the other nobles might see that as weakness on Reinbach’s part -> Reinhart's

Volume 14:
Page 14: as the grave slimes' Attract Haunts skill funneled them in -> Spirits
page 66: Class-4: 120,000+ sutes -> 12,000+
Page 106: Humas offer payment when giving quests -> Humans

Volume 15:
Page 75: They called Ryoma's grandpa the God of Military Arts again. See previous comment.

V1 P10, 33%
"Why had the viscount corrected himself from saying Ren Ashton to the Asthon family?"
Asthon -> Ashton

V1 P9, 85%
"and finally, they punched through the centre [of] the human upper body's forehead"

v3p4

0%: "The third floor was the haunt of human-sized bad monsters. " -> bat 0%: "and she clearly meant it as a complement." -> compliment

@groudonvert-own27br That was just a regular commercial treaty. It wasn't a magical contract. Friede probably just figured he wouldn't get caught. And he also is just monumentally stupid and lazy.

V3 P10, 28%
"Tatiltiu growled, as if in response to what I said"
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

v33p7 ~50%:

Yamiru Suun had coated herself in giba blood and tried to pressure into marrying her.

pressure into -> pressure me into

V8 P10 (69% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

All my worries are on.

All my worries are gone.

V1P7

70%: It was an investment, and investments could be recuperated. -> That should be recouped, no?

V2 P9 starting at 50%:
One of the jobs is labeled 'spy' although it was previously called 'scout'. And I think 'scout' is way more fitting.

@karasutengu it's implied. They're thugs, and in less posh circles it's common to leave the action implied instead of using correct English, especially when he already suggested it in the first half of the sentence.

V4 P8: There’s an extra quotation mark in the beginning of this paragraph.

“”Even those devoted to the Light faith are still demonkin. As long as you’re a demonkin, you can’t sever your connection to the Almighty. But the way you spoke back there, it sounds like the Disciples of Light, a human-based faith, has found a way to sever the connection between Chiyou and demonkin. I can’t ignore that.”

For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

Volume 2, Part 8
[93%] as a prodigal swordsman. ➡ should be prodigy or prodigious

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

V 10 P 6 - "Precedent really has meaning" should be "has no meaning". It's unprecedented in the following paragraph.

V4 P7 (88% - 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "he" to the.