I noticed there's a whole lot of italicizing of Ai's thoughts, especially at the start of chapter 1. I don't do a lot of (any) writing, but if the book is already first person, do Ai's thoughts really need to be italicized? Everything at the start of the chapter is already her thoughts if she's the one narrating the story.
Later it goes to third person, but the first person section at the beginning I don't think should have any italics for thoughts, right?

@hornet65 said in Proud to Be the Villainess - Corrections Topic:

@Geezer-Weasalopes
In Japanese I don't believe there is a difference between the two. They would both be spelled the same using the same characters. It's only an English distinction, and basically only the United Kingdom uses Earl.
This seems more like a translation error. It was translated as Earl a single time and every other time it was translated as count.

Gack.
Idiot me, I didn't look at the story text you quoted.
Yes, TL error, given the context.

Excuse me while I go slam my head against a wall repeatedly.

V6P2, 53%: “He’ds probably been worried“ - He’d
82%: “bigger than the redboars” - redbears.

@Devon unsure if this is a correction or just an error from the author but in p2 the # after the / in "wooden sword mastery" jumped from 1000 to 1500 on the second appearance. Nothing big, but was noticed.

V5 P1 (48% - 14th line down from top of page -beginning line of 3rd paragraph.

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Remove redundant "d".

V2P8

0%: "He ran as quickly as he could, like a fleeing hair." -> hare 0%: "However, ... Mischel was nowhere to be seen. But why?" -> Why? 14%: "abnormality the demons had no intel on—that marked his fate" -> sealed 14%: "We debated employing the Heroes," -> deploying? 57%: "In his left hand was a staff even taller than her was," -> he

v1 p18

~65%

Marianna must have been counting on at least Olga to side with her, for the female mercenary’s response finally rendered her speechless.

=> Marianne

V7 Part 10

~58% -- "[...] In addition, the role Lord Florus was meant to play [...]" -> "In addition, the role Lady Florus was meant to play"; unless I'm horribly mistaken or missing some quirk of the original text, "Florus" there is referring to the same "Lady Florus" from the prior paragraph?

V6P16

~8%

"Besides, Dolton and Miranda may well already be on the move," Cere'zhula said.

Did she really call Dalton a dolt or is that a typo?

~35%

About once a month, her financé, crown prince Elvan, would come visit.

Fiancé. And should "crown prince" be capitalized?

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

V2P1 16%:

chastity of his backend

If this is a computing pun then it's fine, but if not, "back end" with a space would be better.

V3 P6 (75% - beginning of 13th line up from bottom of page)

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Correct to read: "over ten years older than Airi and me,"

V3 P13, 6%
"However, if any sacred beast, like Cass or Lag, had refused the release, I wouldn’t have been able to do it."
Cass -> Cas

16%
"Epilogue: The Most Frightening Guard (The Pope)"
This line looks like it should be a heading, with paragraph spaces before and after it.
Same with "Afterword", 83%

74%
"However, I’d had no idea that, through my magic, demonic charm power had accumulated within the priests themselves."
It works as is, but unless 'charm' is specified it might work better simply as 'demonic power'

V5 P6 (48% - End of 13th line up from bottom of page)

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I believe this would sound better as:
What're you guys gonna do...

4.3:

The mages flew into a range and aimed their staffs at me.

The mages flew into a rage and aimed their staffs at me.
The mages flew into range and aimed their staffs at me.

Have to check the raws to determine which.
Unless, of course, it's a lovely play on words and quite deliberate.

@A-human
Sorry, Whately -> Whateley

v3p8:

6% - the town of Carassa -> Carcassa (as used a bit later in this part) 25% - […] where we’d encounter the last amount of monsters, […] -> the least amount of

I know I'm likely too late to suggest any edits for this volume, but just in case this could be of use:
V11.1 P6, 60%
"In a real battle, soldiers would use heavy spears—about seven meters long by Imperial standard"
Seven meters (23 feet, or about 4x a mans height) seems a little excessive.
If instead meaning to convert from 7', then perhaps two meters might be a little more manageable.

Also, V11.1 P12, 14%
"He moved with such quick and easy steps that you'd be forgiven for forgetting he wasn't wearing heavy armour"
Wasn't -> was

@Valanduin said in Imperial Reincarnation - Corrections Topic:

It might be a little late for it, but the term mold is used frequently when discussing the mints and it isn't really correct. Molds are used when casting by pouring molten metal, however casting isn't a technique that was ever particularly widely used for minting coinage. Coins are struck from blanks using using dies (the basic process is a plain disk of solid metal called a blank is placed between two tools with the inverse of the coin pattern carved into it, then the top piece is struck with a hammer), so die would be a more appropriate term, although this error might be an issue in the original source.

I concur, "mold" should be "die." (I spotted at least two uses of "mold".) Also:

"Well, the mintage facilities have been fully restored ..."

'mintage facilities' -> 'mints'.