V1P12 52%:
SIlence -> Silence
The letter i should be in lower case.

5.6:

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything.

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything."

V3 P9 (0% - 1st page, 12th line down from top)

Be rest assured, no expense will be spared for this mission.

Correct to:

--> Be assured, no expense...
-or- --> Rest assured, no expense...

@Gamen I
I've watched that show and I didn't get it. Even if someone recognizes that name, those Japanese words will never mean anything to the reader. They're never defined in the show, which is probably why they're removed from the American title. Something about spirals? Living underground? Digging? Child labor? Do any of the themes of that show actually fit here, or is the literal meaning of those words the primary message, and the fact that they're a Japanese show title just added color?

Imagine if the translation were going the other direction, and we're translating “it was like Animal House” to Japanese. You could transliterate the movie name to katakana, sure. Is anybody gonna get it? No. If instead you translate it “like an out-of-control university circle from an American movie,” then everybody can imagine what that might look like. (Student housing building? Off-campus apartment? This might be a bad example.) The tiny minority that actually have seen that movie will recognize it from the description, and nothing is lost for anyone.

Thanks for attending my TED talk.

Vol 12 P3 (42% - 7th line up from bottom of page)

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Need to add missing "he" to improve English syntax.

v2p11 57%

Even if it were a lie.I knew

needs a space after the full stop

Volume 6 - Part 5:

[~9%]

his gaze drifting slightly to somewhere behind the man Upon closer inspection,

Missing punctuation. Add a period after man, before Upon.

V1 P1, 81%
"Anyway, speaking of family, Vanitas had two little sisters—twins, in fact. They both had opposite personalities..."
Very minor, but 'both' seems superfluous (can't have just one with an opposite personality, but the other doesn't)

P3, 4%
"If one were truly skilled, it was also possible to transform into animals, monsters, or inorganic matter—but only few could do that.
'but only few' ->
'but only a few'
or 'but only few'

71% “To that end, I’m ready to pay any price,” I declared. Then after a short pause, I said, “ Christina.”
Extra space in front of 'Christina'

P4, 15%
"Being slaves, I never shared a meal with them."
Stared at this a little, but I can no longer tell if this is currently fine as is or not. If not:
'I had never shared...'
or 'I never shared meals...'

50%
"Shuka was a woman who looked like in her early twenties"
Could just be phrasing I'm not used to, otherwise:
'who looked like she was in her early twenties'
or 'who looked to be in her early twenties'

P5, 92%
"Ms. Ashley was such a worrier. We [had] had this conversation multiple times already."

V5 P1 (89% - 8th line down from top of page)

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Maybe its just me, but this sounds out of context. Claudia knew she couldn't stop Lutz from doing what he felt he had to, so I think this should read:
"she couldn't stop him"

V6 P5 (25% - 14th line up from the bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "Boar" meat?

(31% - 5th line up from bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "to snow"?

V9 part 9
67%-71% Mobile view

Well, not to brag, but the hands Akashi were gripping right now had already raised ten billion krams

It's not ten billion, it's only 1 billion that she gathered throughout the year. Why is this keep on happening?

v12 p7

~55%

“And one more important thing...” Annette lowered her voice as she stared at the other two ladies. “This mission is extremely dangerous. Please keep that in mind. If either of your identities are revealed, your lives may be in danger.” There was a moment of silence before she went on. “But I have faith that you can complete this mission. Lady Diana, you are the sister of Count Eimoor and the Rose of the Duel Grounds. Lady Helen, you’re known as the Lightning Strike. I firmly believe that the two of you are perfect for this mission.”

Doesn't everyone know who Diana and Helen are? If so, maybe that should be your missions or your jobs or your real purposes or something like that?

V1 P10, 33%
"Why had the viscount corrected himself from saying Ren Ashton to the Asthon family?"
Asthon -> Ashton

V1 P9, 85%
"and finally, they punched through the centre [of] the human upper body's forehead"

@groudonvert-own27br That was just a regular commercial treaty. It wasn't a magical contract. Friede probably just figured he wouldn't get caught. And he also is just monumentally stupid and lazy.

V3 P10, 28%
"Tatiltiu growled, as if in response to what I said"
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

v33p7 ~50%:

Yamiru Suun had coated herself in giba blood and tried to pressure into marrying her.

pressure into -> pressure me into

V8 P10 (69% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

All my worries are on.

All my worries are gone.

V1P7

70%: It was an investment, and investments could be recuperated. -> That should be recouped, no?

V2 P9 starting at 50%:
One of the jobs is labeled 'spy' although it was previously called 'scout'. And I think 'scout' is way more fitting.