Volume 2 Part 18
17% I know him, but we've never met. -> I know of him, but we've never met.
I believe this is probably the English version of what the author is trying to say.

v2p9:

24% - sShe looked on the verge of tears -> Extra letter: She

v2p10 ~13%

–that's it's all a game.

Should probably be that it's all a game.

v12p14 ~16%

"Farwell," Desperad said […]

Should be Farewell

V11 P4 (78% - 4th line down from top of page)

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"I" appears to be missing and should be inserted in the annotated area:
i.e., But as I sank into self-deprecation,

(94% - last line on page)

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Replace "must" with "might" for better syntax.
e.g. I might just get swept along with the current again.

V4 P10, 36%
"Tatiltiu had been knocked off her feet, and as if to pour salt into the wound, Mina followed up by launching an absurd amount of snowballs at her."
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

Volume 4 - Part 7:
[56%]

"I exchange, I just ask that you handle the winner's prize as well," I said

(1) I > In
(2) Missing a period at the end of the sentence. said.

Volume 4 - Part 9:
[18%]

"Next up is bathrooms," I said.

(1) The subject is plural. is > are. Could be rephrased as: "Next up are the bathrooms,"
(2) The context just right before this sentence was talking about baths. So using bathrooms to refer to the toilets immediately right after makes it confusing. Since the facility name is already "Public Restroom", it might be better to just use the same term: restrooms.

[59%]

We've got a foot shortage on our hands, but they seem to be just fine!"

Typo. Should be food.

V10P3 97%
WIth -> With

In volume 9 part 9, Tsuji says, "Maybe Peter Carol’s pentagram ritual... No, maybe it needs to be more abstract than that." His name is Peter Carroll, not Peter Carol. He wrote Liber Null and Liber Kaos and he was one of the founders of the Illuminates of Thanateros. He's a niche figure, so I understand not knowing about him, but he is a specific real guy who's surname is spelled with two rs and two ls.

V6 P8 (50% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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I believe the encircled word should be alert not alter.

v5 p6

~5%

A bow of light materialized in the Archangel’s hand. He drew it swiftly in one, continuous motion, loosing an arrow that flew toward Leah with incredulous speed—an immediate use of force. Either that was how he greeted all intruders, or Leah had successfully provoked him.

=> incredible. "Incredulous" is a state of mind, specifically "skeptical" or "disbelieving".

That being said, Merriam-Webster indicates there is a non-standard meaning of "incredible":

nonstandard : incredible sense 1
incredible adjective
1 : too extraordinary and improbable to be believed

So maybe the usage was intended here?

~ 15%

But the fact that she even could execute such precise, stable movements at her absolute limit... That was all thanks to her relentless training. Since she couldn’t train her muscles in real life, her physical speed could never improve. So instead, she honed everything else to a razor’s edge. Her ability to read ahead—her perception, her insight.

Something seems off with the phrasing -- why can't she train her muscles in real life? Maybe that sentence should be:

Since she couldn’t train her virtual muscles in real life, her physical speed in the game could not be improved that way. So instead, she honed everything else to a razor’s edge. Her ability to read ahead—her perception, her insight.

v5 p3

~54%

It helped thatCarter had thrown himself forward to avoid taking the full impact of the strike.

=> that Carter

V6 P11, 4%
"At the same time, the white coats were improving noticeably, [each/every] slash of their weapons and spell slung visibly brimming with raw power."

V5P6 29%:

plateeees
earthquakeeeees

The drawing-out-vowels thing that gets attributed to some characters in J-novels doesn't really work in English and I can't understand how those characters are supposed to sound. But drawing out the silent vowels makes no sense. It should probably be the A in these words that gets extended.

v10 p8
~1%

Even back in Beaden, Curuni had carried the saberboars on the assumption that she wouldn’t be fighting—it was unreasonable to ask anyone to join a battle

¶ carrying so much weight around.“Mmmgh...”

Inappropriate paragraph break.

@SomeOldGuy said in An Introvert’s Hookup Hiccups - Corrections Topic:

V13P6 8%:
we realized that we alsO needed to
also

65%:
WHen it came to me
When

Thank you for catching this!!

4.6:

She was the one who had fallenin love

She was the one who had fallen in love

V2P7:
15%:

He was so infatuated with his wife that he disliked even the idea of letting her see his family in the empire.

Isn’t the wife the one with family in the empire? If so, this should say her family.

58%:

He soon reached his destination: the Londard Trading Company, a major trading firm.

Shouldn’t this be Londart?

Volume 2 Part 8
48% your worthless little beast -> you worthless little beast

Volume 21. Part 2. 95%

"Don't go stinkin' your neck in stupid shit while I ain't watchin', got it?" > Don't go stickin' your neck in stupid shit while I ain't watchin', got it?"