[30%] of the new instalment of Snow White’s Revenge ► It should be installment.
[45%] was impressive enough, but this inside was just ► It should be the.
[70%] she approached, while Sumie looked like she was ► It should be Sumire.
[67%]: "That's quite hard to do while maintaining a human form, you see. In terms of technique, I only recently mastered it." The other translation might be mistaken here, but this version also sounds odd because we don't really see Lavas abandon his "human form" later on either, at least not willingly. The fan version renders this as "It proved, well, quite difficult to progress any further in my plans while keeping my humanity intact. The technology for it was completed recently."
I think this one got muddied in the edit -- he's talking about the technique/technology for preserving a human appearance through the demon possession (instead of becoming a twisted monstrosity like Veisam/the experimental chimeras, presumably), not stuff he's doing in the scene. I'mma clarify it.
[67%]: "But it was kind of you to let your guard down, assuming I was defeated!" Shouldn't he be saying the opposite? Gourry did not let his guard down, and it was thanks to that that only his shoulder guard was struck.
Good catch, I just messed that one up.
[72%]: "...his face had turned black..." Black? Not pale, not angry or whatever, but black? That sounds weird.
It's referring to the Blast Ash taking effect, but the phrasing DOES make it sound like an emotional thing, doesn't it? Will clarify.
All other edits have been taken into account, thanks for the in-depth look as always.
Luke goes into a long explanation broken into two paragraphs, with just small interjections in at the end of the first and beginning for the second: "I grumbled" and "I then continued", when it should be "He grumbled" and "He then continued", since it's not Lina speaking there?
I'd like to check on this, but do you think you could extract a line from the scene in question for our reference? (The percentages are a useful when I'm doing a full run-through, but not so good for picking out specific scenes after the fact.) I'll poke Megan to write a note for when we do the print edits.
[14%]They I suppose you won’t mind going last this time?＞ should be Then
[36%] Supposedly the natural sourness of the plums complimented > should be complemented
[86%] perfectly enhance and compliment the bitterness of the matcha. > should be complement
Volume 3 Part 5: 14% sobbed so loudly that SId was sure -> Sid.
Volume 3 Part 5: 31% You've sharp Jian-Dong -> You're.
Volume 3 Part 7: 29% with his sleeve and looked at the intricate . Intricate what? Model?
Volume 3 Part 7: 90% Tha hail became weaker and then... -> The hail became weaker and then...
Volume 3 Part 7: 95% There was only one thing to dot. -> There was only one thing to do.
Volume 3 Part 8: 17% An Erthly virus may have... -> An Earthly virus may have...
Volume 3 Part 8: 18% Even more than that, Marshall;thought... -> Even more than that, Marshall thought...
Volume 3 Part 8: 55% he then checked his watch -> He then checked his watch
Volume 3 Part 8: 79% You almost get the feeling tit can read your thoughts. -> You almost get the feeling it can read your thoughts.
Volume 3 Part 9: 07% ...door using a checking card,and had no more... -> ...door using a checking card, and had no more...
Volume 3 Part 10: 03% IT opened and a small... -> It opened and a small...
Volume 3 Part 10: 05% Yes, thank you!" -> "Yes, thank you!"
Volume 3 Part 12: 13% looked like glass but was made of energy. -> looked like glass, but was made of energy.
Volume 3 Part 12: 33% come to appreciate over the last few daysdays. -> come to appreciate over the last few days.
Volume 3 Part 10: 05% "But?"In the year..." -> "But?" In the year...
Volume 3 Part 10: 48% "So hat's the problem?" -> "So what's the problem?"
Volume 3 Part 11: 45% heard the words "crazy" and "freaky--and then... -> heart the words "crazy" and "freaky"--and then...
Volume 3 Part 11: 82% He had not managed to do what he'dwanted to. -> He had not managed to do what he'd wanted to.
[16%] So he can forget his frustrations!. And if those ► Duplicate punctuation.
[63%] bloodline that wasn’t not suited to direct combat. ► Remove not. Already reported.
[76%] ejected Blois and Lain from anything like a routine ► Missing period. Already reported.
[96%] The reasons Fukei hated Suiboku was described ► It should be were. Already reported.
[100%] Rokuro Akashi ► The name on the cover is Rokurou (extra u).
[8%] the situation in Orta was clamer, Prince Gracius ► It should be calmer.
[41%] contain that chaos like Lorencio I did, and make ► Remove I.
[59%] nothing but a violent free-for-fall where might ► It should be free-for-all?
[91%] was looking at him he was an ordinary person. ► It should be like he.