Sorry I know prepub parts have already expired but just putting this here for completion's sake as I only just finished this volume.
V11P5
~0%
Can had left the guild after finishing the delivery paperwork in a private room and accepted a portion of the payment in gold coins,
Wrong tense?; accepted->accepting
~47%
The Tears of the Goddess, alongside my degraded potions from Balmore and nearby kingdoms, appeared in every religious book written over the past seventy-odd years; not as myth, but it actually existed.
Sorry if it is okay as it is, but when reading it feels a bit 'odd' and does not seem to follow from the bit before?; but it actually existed->but as something that actually existed
P6
~0%
Then, realization hit me. I could’ve used a stamina potion instead of Reiko’s potion.
Wrong word?; potion->magic as Reiko has magic not potions?
~40%
Suddenly, I noticed the Eyes leader giving me a look as if to say he’d never allowed that.
Wrong tense? allowed->allow
P7
~40%
“Thirteen!’
Wrong speech ending?; ’->"
P8
~27%
A two-seater with cloaking to go invisible or disguise as a rock, with some sort of shield to prevent tampering when parked, autopilot, perfect safety system, and comes to us when called.
Wrong word/missing word? and comes to us->and that comes to us (or and->that)