v3p4

0%: "The third floor was the haunt of human-sized bad monsters. " -> bat 0%: "and she clearly meant it as a complement." -> compliment

@groudonvert-own27br That was just a regular commercial treaty. It wasn't a magical contract. Friede probably just figured he wouldn't get caught. And he also is just monumentally stupid and lazy.

V3 P6, 50%
"This restaurant was kind of like a hidden gem among the imperial and high-ranking aristocratic families. Memories of the birthdays Airi and I had celebrated here flowed through my mind. After our academy training got tougher, though, he hadn’t been able to make time to come here."
He -> she (or I, I suppose, depending who Eugene's referring to)

77%
"He was over ten years older than Airi and m, so he had already graduated from the military academy by the time we entered it"
M -> me

V3 P7, 0%
"As an angel from Heaven and a servant of the Goddess of Fate, mom [was] absolutely certain."

(Edit 4/8/26) V3 P12, 9%
"we were children who couldn't even defend themselves"
Not sure if I'm correct, but in my head 'ourselves' sounds like it might be better fit.

V3 P10, 28%
"Tatiltiu growled, as if in response to what I said"
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

v33p7 ~50%:

Yamiru Suun had coated herself in giba blood and tried to pressure into marrying her.

pressure into -> pressure me into

V8 P10 (69% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

All my worries are on.

All my worries are gone.

V1P7

70%: It was an investment, and investments could be recuperated. -> That should be recouped, no?

V2 P9 starting at 50%:
One of the jobs is labeled 'spy' although it was previously called 'scout'. And I think 'scout' is way more fitting.

@karasutengu it's implied. They're thugs, and in less posh circles it's common to leave the action implied instead of using correct English, especially when he already suggested it in the first half of the sentence.

V13 P14 (23% - last line at bottom of page)

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For proper English syntax, "I" should be changed to "I'll".
i.e.: I'll ask the king about doing something,

V4 P8: There’s an extra quotation mark in the beginning of this paragraph.

“”Even those devoted to the Light faith are still demonkin. As long as you’re a demonkin, you can’t sever your connection to the Almighty. But the way you spoke back there, it sounds like the Disciples of Light, a human-based faith, has found a way to sever the connection between Chiyou and demonkin. I can’t ignore that.”

For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

Volume 2, Part 8
[93%] as a prodigal swordsman. ➡ should be prodigy or prodigious

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

V 10 P 6 - "Precedent really has meaning" should be "has no meaning". It's unprecedented in the following paragraph.

V4 P7 (88% - 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "he" to the.

@pcj said in orrections to Vol 13:

@karasutengu that just means it's been a while since they made any mistakes for anyone to report.

That, or that anyone felt engaged enough to report something. :p I’ve stopped reporting missed spaces for the most part, unless there were other things to report and I remembered where those missed spaces were. ^o^

SS1 P6 (54% - 8th line up from bottom of page)

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Need to add a missing "a", i.e. to a cafe.

(In English syntax "a" is used when referring to someone or something for the first time in a text or conversation.)

@Valanduin said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

In the latest part the word jealous and words derived from it like jealousy is used in many places. Although it is very commonly misused (it is up there with literally), technically jealousy is when you don't want other people to have what belongs to you and envy is when you want something that belongs to you, envy would fit better in most of the places jealous appears. It wouldn't be a big deal if it was a one off because of how frequently jealous of misused, but when it is relating to the powers of the Devil of Envy being both inconsistent and incorrect with the terminology stands out a lot more.

While it is true that is one meaning of "jealous," Merriam-Webster's top definition for it also states it to mean, "hostile toward a rival or one believed to enjoy an advantage." Even stating that definition is equivalant to "envious." On the MW website, they also state that jealous can hold the same meaning as envious in the way "to describe someone who feels or shows a very strong desire for something that belongs to someone else."

https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/jealous

v7 p7

~ 20%

Not a correction so much as a formatting suggestion:

With that in mind, I opened the message.
Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.
“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

You might want to blockquote or otherwise indent the letter since it's supposed to be quoted text, e.g.:

With that in mind, I opened the message.

Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.

“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”