6.2

Elena glutched the knife to her chest and nodded.

“clutched”

V2P7, 73%: “Sets HP 1 to” - testing mic Yoda is.

9.1:

You should go on dates where there aren't any monsters or medicinal plants."

"You should go on dates where there aren't any monsters or medicinal plants."

Missing leading double quote.

V3 P10 (81% - 4th line up from bottom of page)
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Should be:

...,Sora's ex-fiancee,...
-or- ...,his ex-fiancee,...

v1p9:

76% - Thank the lord. -> Missing capitalization? Given that it’s being said by the priest (especially), I’m presuming that it would be “Thank the Lord.”

V6P9
~47% (same place as other)

“Because I’m your queen. I might be as capable as the others, but I know a lot about money. If you’re even in need of money, I’ll help you.”

Wrong word?; even->ever

V5P3 ~3%

The shipping containers they'd originally prepared for the amblypygids had been full up with owata pods, so the not-so-little guys were staying in the same rooms as the family during the voyage.

full → filled

v2p4:

99% - […] with Quinza’s group staring over. -> Typo: starting over. :)

Volume 8 - Part 6:

[0%]

got sent to an inescapableprison?

Add space.

V2 P13 (23% - 8th line down from top of page.)

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Vamillia was seen by both...

(Correct typo)

13.8

“Full glad am I to see you young ones with so much energy. Very good, very good.”

“Gladful” is still a word, even if it doesn't rate being recognized by the spell checker.

“Joyful” also works if you want to stick with popular words, although it's slightly less apt for this meaning.

@Gaffary said in Goodbye, Overtime! - Corrections Topic:

v6p10:

40% - Lydia had learned that Mikhail was to summer in the Yulnova Duchy -> probably to spend the summer in or something like that

That one’s valid, but it might be more British than American english. I’ve encountered the phrase in the past, but I couldn’t tell you whether on TV or in print. Oxford English Dictionary says that “summer”, as a verb, means “spend the summer in a particular place.”

V1 P8 (50% - 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "he" to "we" to match beginning of sentence subject: "We".

14.9:

the creature at his side the lindblum I so closely associated with him

the creature at his side wasn't the lindblum I so closely associated with him

as Bronze-classers went-both his learning and technique

A different "dash" should be used between "went" and "both'; different punctuation anyway; the proximity with "Bronze-classers" results in the reader instinctively thinking it too is a join, which it very much isn't.

Have the typo and error in part 1 and 3 already addressed?

V4 P1 (31% - 4th line up from bottom of page

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Replace first 'you':

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(Better sentence context. Makes more sense that he'd rebuild the shrine rather than the mountain god.)

V2P9 ~6%

Speaking of, the boy was currently sitting on an armchair across from Lord Feilx...

This is going to sound incredibly pedantic, but you sit in an armchair.
Unless of course, he's sitting say, on the arm of the chair or something, which I doubt.

Because English is weird and dumb, despite sitting on a couch, or on a stool, you sit in a chair.

spoiler

If the LN has the line as it was in the WN, if I am not reading too much into it/didn't otherwise misunderstand it, and there isn't some reason to change it in translation that I can't think of, I believe it would be a shame if this was "cut" in translation, so I figured I should make this comment at the risk of being totally wrong.

[29%] “If you join me, I’ll give you plenty of more opportunities to see the battlefield. [...]”

[WN] 「――あたしの配下になれば、あんたにもっと槍働きの機会を与えられる。[...]」

The Japanese is "use your spear" rather than "see the battlefield".

Zil answers her "Did you invite Daiagias to join you the same way?”" and I think he is turning "opportunities to use your spear" into an innuendo, utilising an apparent weak spot of Rubyfia's, which is also why it so successfully shuts her up.

"see the battlefield" -> "use your spear" (?)