V3 P2

~50%

Item stolen: Naval Piercing.

Should that be Navel Piercing? (I mean, Yuri could have stolen something for piercing through battleships, but somehow I reckon that a bellybutton piercing is more likely given some of the other junk that got stolen.)

V1 P5 (22% - 4th line down from top of page)

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Add missing "what" to sentence, e.g. - "Are you certain that's not what you would do".

("Not what you would do": This is used to contrast an action with what someone else would do, often implying that the action is out of character or different from their typical behavior. - AI Overview)

v6 p7

More missing or misplaced spaces around italics (text inside <em></em> tags), for instance at around 1%:

“Even from Sharon, I didn’t expectthis ,” Kent grumbled as he wiped sweat from his face. As usual, he was leading our formation. “Are we seriously doing this? I guess we have to...”

I won't mention any others, but please re-check this.

V4P9

I am under the impression these books are being localized to American English, not Commonwealth English. In two places in this part it says "in future". Americans don't say that. We say "in the future".

Also, "taking the piss" is British slang. I actually had to look that one up not long ago.

V4 P5 (42% - 8th line down from top of page)

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Should be "keep" - need to fix typo.

V4 P11

41% "We needed to shatter the enemy's morale because they could finish regrouping."

The key point here appears to be about timing. Rather than shattering them because they can regroup, a better fit may be to shatter them before they regroup.

"We needed to shatter the enemy's morale before they could finish regrouping."

SSP12, 85%: "with a furious grin plastered across my place" - face

V11 P2, 32%
"I heard a series of mechanic clunks from the other side of the door"
Mechanic -> mechanical
96%
"whoops, i guess it’s ’cause i was talking to to nago-chan"
Likely a duplicate (in character) due to the nature of chat messaging, but thought I'd point it out in case it was actually in error

V11 P4, 21%
"What, I should’ve considered with the possibility?"

38%
"I reheated the stew"
Likely not an error (and if so it would be in the original, not a translation error), just me struggling to picture the sequence of events and match to my own experience. I just can't identify any reasonable lengths of time for the following that would end with a cold stew:

From part 3, didn't leave work til after 10pm. Plus travel time, doesn't leave a whole lot of time for a stream (unless going unreasonable late). As prep + cooking didn't start til after the stream did, even cooking quickly with a pressure cooker, 1 hour might the quickest to be done. If the stream took 2 hours say, they'd still roughly line up, so can't see how it could've cooled down much at all.

Even with a really long streaming time (I'd say 2 hours would be a reasonable upper limit), prep + cooking

V11 P5, 27%
"... and wasn't inf touch with the rest of the team"
inf -> in
29%
"Even the shady clients you found on social media who got in legal trouble would gaggle at this"
Gaggle -> goggle

V3P8
[32%] Patience," Prince Keith said. ➡ Richard

V11P7 ~36%
"There were a least a couple of hundred of the monsters..." -> "There were a at least a couple of hundred of the monsters..."

~42%
"...and the goblins were always quick to pick up..." -> "...and the goblins monsters were always quick to pick up..."
I'm just verifying, but it seemed to be explicitly talking about the monsters, not the goblins.
I know it's VERY confusing that 'goblins' are little shark dudes in this and not the OBVIOUS monsters that have now shown up. I can even see this being an author error to be honest.

@Geezer-Weasalopes

Thanks, will remember that going forward!

Sorry I know prepub parts have already expired but just putting this here for completion's sake as I only just finished this volume.
V11P5
~0%

Can had left the guild after finishing the delivery paperwork in a private room and accepted a portion of the payment in gold coins,

Wrong tense?; accepted->accepting

~47%

The Tears of the Goddess, alongside my degraded potions from Balmore and nearby kingdoms, appeared in every religious book written over the past seventy-odd years; not as myth, but it actually existed.

Sorry if it is okay as it is, but when reading it feels a bit 'odd' and does not seem to follow from the bit before?; but it actually existed->but as something that actually existed

P6
~0%

Then, realization hit me. I could’ve used a stamina potion instead of Reiko’s potion.

Wrong word?; potion->magic as Reiko has magic not potions?

~40%

Suddenly, I noticed the Eyes leader giving me a look as if to say he’d never allowed that.

Wrong tense? allowed->allow

P7
~40%

“Thirteen!’

Wrong speech ending?; ’->"

P8
~27%

A two-seater with cloaking to go invisible or disguise as a rock, with some sort of shield to prevent tampering when parked, autopilot, perfect safety system, and comes to us when called.

Wrong word/missing word? and comes to us->and that comes to us (or and->that)

Thanks for all of your posts, everyone! All of your corrections up to this point are in the series now.

V7 P11, 42%
"A normal motorbike would have dropped to the ground and crashed onto the desolate ground below"
Repetition. Perhaps instead:
"A normal motorbike would have dropped to the ground, crashing onto the desolate landscape below"
or
"A normal motorbike would have dropped and crashed onto the desolate ground below"

Also:
"A normal motorbike would have dropped to the ground and crashed onto the desolate ground below... The bike made a sharp turn in midair, tilting so far it almost touched the ground."

Trying to picture this. I don't think it's saying that he dropped height, and was nearly touching the ground. Perhaps instead he's tilting so far that, if he was on a normal bike (on a road), that he'd be touching the ground? If so, maybe:
"The bike made a sharp turn in midair, tilting so far it almost touched the invisible (force-field) road"
or
"The bike made a sharp turn in midair, tilting so far it was almost horizontal"

V6P4, 54%: "Hakugei no Tachhi"

Oops, hit post early by mistake

99%: "maybe she used a return item to warm back to the castle?" - warp

V2P5 70% - jumped up on ne. - ne->me

V1P2 4%:

I may be able to find a specialization

may -> might

31%:

the possibility that he may not be from this country

may -> might

33%:

Up until recently, I haven't had the time

haven't -> hadn't

42%:

That said, I've never seen him take one up on her offer

I've -> I'd

v4 p8

~47%

About one hour had passed since the start of our party when Aero, who already seemed pretty drunk, leaned against me and brought up something that had happened before the race.
“Say, Scuba. You saw that Farseer guy before the race, right?”

Unless Aero is drunk and mispronouncing her name, it's Scuna.

@Iseguy said in The Dorky NPC Mercenary Knows His Place - Corrections Topic:

4.8

“Handsome Schoolboy and Handsome Schoolgirl Escape with their Lives from Corrupt Tyrannical Teacher’s Trap!”

“Beautiful Schoolgirl”

Handsome used to be used for women as well as men, I can remember one of my grandmothers using it. See

Can you still call a woman "handsome"? The Britannica Dictionary.

According to those definitions, as someone who is apparently quite athletic (and tomboyish?), "Handsome" might apply to Scuna.

However, I've never heard the term used for women in 21st century American English, so probably "Beautiful" would be preferred?

v9 p3

~95%

Also, it would be completely meaningless if I went missing right after her. If she was in danger, it was best to save her, but joining her in defeat would be the worst possible outcome. If I could save Surena by throwing mine away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing my life away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.

There's something a bit awkward here: the possessive pronoun "mine" is used prior to the possessive determiner "my (life)". I think it should be switched so that the determiner comes first, so either:

If I could save Surena by throwing my life away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing mine away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.

Or

If I could save Surena's life by throwing mine away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing mine away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.