V10 P3, 44%
“So this is just a guess, but so you think they just wanted to impress you, Chris?”
So -> do

V10Pr, 57%: “the skylight Runa that had complimented” -that Runa had

V3p9:

17%: “asked Wil with eyes” -> Wil asked with a wordless look/glare. 25%: “unordinary strength” -> extraordinary strength 25%: “seemingly fragile than” -> seemingly more fragile than 33%: “I just want all to get along” -> us all

V2 p6 multiple coach should be coachman

V1P2

She was also the first person Wellmy at school she had been willing to entrust her beloved sister to.

V4.5P7 45%
“I only ask for tailored breakfast ingredients when we only need to make it in small quantities,”

"Only" used twice.

V1P12 52%:
SIlence -> Silence
The letter i should be in lower case.

5.6:

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything.

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything."

v2p11 57%

Even if it were a lie.I knew

needs a space after the full stop

V1 P1, 81%
"Anyway, speaking of family, Vanitas had two little sisters—twins, in fact. They both had opposite personalities..."
Very minor, but 'both' seems superfluous (can't have just one with an opposite personality, but the other doesn't)

P3, 4%
"If one were truly skilled, it was also possible to transform into animals, monsters, or inorganic matter—but only few could do that.
'but only few' ->
'but only a few'
or 'but only few'

71% “To that end, I’m ready to pay any price,” I declared. Then after a short pause, I said, “ Christina.”
Extra space in front of 'Christina'

P4, 15%
"Being slaves, I never shared a meal with them."
Stared at this a little, but I can no longer tell if this is currently fine as is or not. If not:
'I had never shared...'
or 'I never shared meals...'

50%
"Shuka was a woman who looked like in her early twenties"
Could just be phrasing I'm not used to, otherwise:
'who looked like she was in her early twenties'
or 'who looked to be in her early twenties'

P5, 92%
"Ms. Ashley was such a worrier. We [had] had this conversation multiple times already."

V5 P1 (89% - 8th line down from top of page)

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Maybe its just me, but this sounds out of context. Claudia knew she couldn't stop Lutz from doing what he felt he had to, so I think this should read:
"she couldn't stop him"

V6 P5 (25% - 14th line up from the bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "Boar" meat?

(31% - 5th line up from bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "to snow"?

V9 part 9
67%-71% Mobile view

Well, not to brag, but the hands Akashi were gripping right now had already raised ten billion krams

It's not ten billion, it's only 1 billion that she gathered throughout the year. Why is this keep on happening?

v12 p7

~55%

“And one more important thing...” Annette lowered her voice as she stared at the other two ladies. “This mission is extremely dangerous. Please keep that in mind. If either of your identities are revealed, your lives may be in danger.” There was a moment of silence before she went on. “But I have faith that you can complete this mission. Lady Diana, you are the sister of Count Eimoor and the Rose of the Duel Grounds. Lady Helen, you’re known as the Lightning Strike. I firmly believe that the two of you are perfect for this mission.”

Doesn't everyone know who Diana and Helen are? If so, maybe that should be your missions or your jobs or your real purposes or something like that?

V1 P9, 85%
"and finally, they punched through the centre [of] the human upper body's forehead"

@groudonvert-own27br That was just a regular commercial treaty. It wasn't a magical contract. Friede probably just figured he wouldn't get caught. And he also is just monumentally stupid and lazy.

V3 P10, 28%
"Tatiltiu growled, as if in response to what I said"
Tatiltiu -> Tailtiu

v33p7 ~50%:

Yamiru Suun had coated herself in giba blood and tried to pressure into marrying her.

pressure into -> pressure me into

V8 P10 (69% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

All my worries are on.

All my worries are gone.

V1P7

70%: It was an investment, and investments could be recuperated. -> That should be recouped, no?