V2P9

This huge building was built of prime estate, ...

Possibly supposed to be 'built on prime real estate'? Also, 'building' and 'built' so close together is repetitive.

Potions ... were ... ineffective against monsters ...

Given we're talking about healing potions here, the word 'against' is odd.

V2P8

0%: "He ran as quickly as he could, like a fleeing hair." -> hare 0%: "However, ... Mischel was nowhere to be seen. But why?" -> Why? 14%: "abnormality the demons had no intel on—that marked his fate" -> sealed 14%: "We debated employing the Heroes," -> deploying? 57%: "In his left hand was a staff even taller than her was," -> he

I'm not sure... English is not my maternal language so I refrain to participate in that kind of topic in general, but I think this is a mistake :

V7 part2 59% :

Your body is still having trouble making the moments,...

moments would be movements I guess.

V8.1 P10, 30%
"Putting his lid on his thoughts about Alpha's ruin..."
His -> a

35%
"If we call it quits here, the fee for protecting me is gonna be heinous"
Possibly not any issues with the word choice, but my instincts are saying it should be 'hideous' instead.

70%
"She now knew this [was] information that Akira wanted to cover up—and just how inconvenient would Akira find that?"
Possibly missing a word

v1 p18

~65%

Marianna must have been counting on at least Olga to side with her, for the female mercenary’s response finally rendered her speechless.

=> Marianne

@Khazidhea said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

None of these might need any changes, but adding these in just in case any might be of use:

V6 P13, 50%
"Bending and warping around him unlike ever before were the laws of nature. They way they bent so willing made Emergias feel as though it would take quite some time to get acclimated to the change"
I think that might be 'willing' -> 'willingly'

56%
"It seemed that Charlotte’s efforts were starting to finally bear fruit, the little baby chicks finally working their way out of their shells."
Repetition of 'finally', I think it works a little better without the first instance

71%
"but even dirt could make a mountain, or whatever"
If it's an existing saying I'm not familiar with it, but it just sounds like it should be 'even' -> 'enough'

V6 P14, 56%
"Claire could see strain started to take to Charlotte’s face."
I always get the exact wording for tenses mixed up. It might be possible that one of these fits better: 'started -> 'starting', or -> 'had started'

Thanks, these should now be fixed.

V7 Part 10

~58% -- "[...] In addition, the role Lord Florus was meant to play [...]" -> "In addition, the role Lady Florus was meant to play"; unless I'm horribly mistaken or missing some quirk of the original text, "Florus" there is referring to the same "Lady Florus" from the prior paragraph?

V6P16

~8%

"Besides, Dolton and Miranda may well already be on the move," Cere'zhula said.

Did she really call Dalton a dolt or is that a typo?

~35%

About once a month, her financé, crown prince Elvan, would come visit.

Fiancé. And should "crown prince" be capitalized?

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

V13P3 ~74%
"We'd mostly likely see it..." -> "We'd mostly most likely see it..."

V7P2 ~94%
"...for the House of Florecruz." -> "...for the House of Florescruz."

V3 P3 (72% - 12th line down from top of page)

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V2P1 16%:

chastity of his backend

If this is a computing pun then it's fine, but if not, "back end" with a space would be better.

V4 P4, 22%
"It definitely shouldn't look like it's just rolled off the converter belt at the statue factory"
This could just be what I'm familiar with, not having a knowledge of converter belts as such, but converter -> conveyer

V3P9 26%:
The conversation "Now that I think about it, I should have seen the hints..." - "In what way?" - "Yeah. Making the medicine...is a lot of work, right?" doesn't make sense. Is part of it missing?

@Hylebos That's a great point! I checked over the original, and the line was, "メルティは刀を手にするのは初めてであり、その美しさと鋭さにしばし見入っていた。" So, it does say that it was the first time she had ever held a katana.

I also checked back to the other part you mentioned, and it clearly states that she was holding the Lutz's katana then, too.

The translation itself is accurate, but really nice catch. We might consider giving it a minor tweak to make a bit more sense.

V7 P3

~40%

“And I would like the stone tables, if possible. I can use them to raise a skill called Ancient Language,” Millie said.

They are called tablets elsewhere in the chapter.

V3 P6 (75% - beginning of 13th line up from bottom of page)

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Correct to read: "over ten years older than Airi and me,"

V3 P13, 6%
"However, if any sacred beast, like Cass or Lag, had refused the release, I wouldn’t have been able to do it."
Cass -> Cas

16%
"Epilogue: The Most Frightening Guard (The Pope)"
This line looks like it should be a heading, with paragraph spaces before and after it.
Same with "Afterword", 83%

74%
"However, I’d had no idea that, through my magic, demonic charm power had accumulated within the priests themselves."
It works as is, but unless 'charm' is specified it might work better simply as 'demonic power'

V3 P1 (0% - end of 1st line on page 1)

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This sentence would make more sense if it said:
However, it was because a god made a mistake,...