V4P9
~0%

In any case, this squadron would move to their designated station in compact formation before the troops scatter to execute the operation.

Wrong tense when reading maybe?; scatter->scattered

~31%

AIn the distant past, he had used his overwhelming power to rule the thieves and bandits in felling cities and towns, until his [...]

Wrong word potentially? I couldn't find a definition of 'felling' that would work here and I couldn't see 'felling city' or 'felling town' as a phrase, so maybe wrong word? Though I'm not sure what it would be otherwise, so probably just me not knowing where to look, sorry if it is, just adding this in case it is an accident wrong word.

V6P3, 24%:

[A young man with light hair is talking to a stressed, stout man with dark hair holding a key.]

I think there should be an image here or something.

V6P2
~35%

“Y-Yessir!” replied Dan Kouzen, who until had been frozen in shock at the sight of Sekiei’s uncharacteristic behavior mere moments before.

Missing word?; who until had been->who until now had been

~82%

Sekiei turned away and chirped, “All right, then. Well, I’m exhausted, so I’m gonna go hit the hay. Thanks for the tea, Asake. It was delicious.”

Not sure if it's a nickname but misspell?; Asake->Asaka

v2.1 p10

~5% Morizt => Moritz.

V3P8, 63%:

"I daresay, you're so bright, it's stinging my eyes!"

On the contrary, our socially awkward ninja was taking damage from his trip down memory lane.```

Yamikage is a girl isn't she?

v4 p11

~35%

Suddenly, the heads of their went flying, one after another.

Their what? Their opponents?

V15 P7 0% "no doubt about its [utility.Obtaining] information" -> spaces

V9 P3 (50%)

...of the mischief was surely brewing.
--> of the mischief that was surely brewing.

Vol.5 pt.10 Around 24%

Bare fangs is correct, not bear fangs.

2.3:

that meant they could overtake their House

that meant they could take over their House

Overtake: coming up from behind and passing to take the lead. Something you see in racing and such.
Take over: Seize control.

v4p5:

67 % - which means thatman is with her… -> Missing space, or he’s the new, poisonous herovillain: Thatman! Now I’ve got the old Batman theme running through my head. <sigh> :)

v1p6 ~63%

The bestkin girl was caught off guard.

bestkin -> beastkin

v2 p4

~60%

Dodo even seemed to be entranced.Mercedes only grew more convinced that Sieghart was of real royal blood, especially considering the fact that her hair still appeared to be its natural color.

=> entranced. Mercedes (missing space).

v15p2:

52% - The late arrival—not that I had ever expected to come on time—had overseen Lydia’s and my university education […] -> Missing word? Since it’s all about “the late arrival” (/professor), should the phrase be “not that I had ever expected him to come on time”? Or is Allen managing to insert himself into the sentence?

v15p3:

38% - now fully cooked ham -> fully-cooked

Since the book publishes today, I should probably also send this off to the email address, I suppose.

V5P3 - 84%

“Shopkeeper-san, who not ask her what she prefers?”

I believe it should be “why not ask her…”

@Geezer-Weasalopes https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/till

The "Did you know" section is definitely worth a read here.

v2p11:

4% - The woman drew her sword, […]. 5% - I […] reached for the hand of the woman holding the dagger. […] The tip of the dagger […]. 6% - It was impressive that she didn’t drop her knife from the shock, […].

Argh! What blade weapon is she using?! Sword? Dagger? Knife?

V3 p9

57% "the sunset so quickly this time of year."

Missing space sun set. This is not the noun sunset but instead sun as a noun followed by set as a verb.

97% "Bridgette, I won't be wearing that today," Bridgette said as she brought over a blue dress.

This is Anastasia talking to Bridgette. To maintain the first person narrative, it should probably change to:

"Bridgette, I won't be wearing that today," I said to Bridgette as she brought over a blue dress.

V4P4
~17%

So, sensing magic in the water isn’t strange.And yet...

Missing space?; strange.And->strange. And

@xdbx said in EXP Is Golden - Corrections Topic:

v2 p14

~10%

“...It is true,” the king muttered, his voice wooden and detached.
“Father...no,” the queen started, her voice rising, but Leah quickly silenced her with Disorient, , leaving the room under control once more.

Should that be Husband...no?

In Japan, it's common for a married couple with children to refer to each other by their respective parental role (Mom/Dad). Since this is written in Japanese by a Japanese author, it stands to reason that the Queen is really calling her husband "father" in the original text. However, since the game world they're in is more of a European-themed setting, it would be more fitting in this situation to have the Queen call the King "Husband", or "My King" or whatever. That said, the game itself is ultimately made by a Japanese company I think, so the NPCs could be programmed that way. So, it could go either way I think.