v5 p12

~90%

Another reason for their progress was that the Archangel had begun scaling back both the rank and frequency of its healing spells. It never once used the devastating ApE attack from earlier—Judgment Ray—again either. All of it the result of Lyrienne’s strategy.

Should that be AoE attack? As in Area of Effect attack?

v18p8 ~8%:

"I see... That it is an unusual payment system, but not difficult to implement," Orest said.

That it is -> That is, at least based on the current structuring of the sentences.

V1P8
~63%

Of course, can I completely rule out that the thing we’re dealing with is something similar to but not exactly a Hollow? Perhaps.

Maybe missing word? (Because Martina is say why she is think it is a Hollow in sentences before but next is want to say there is a small chance it is something different. At moment it is say she is think she is sure it is a Hollow because she is can perhaps rule out it is something similar but not a Hollow. Sorry if it is okay as it is) Perhaps->Perhaps not

It seems weird to comment on issues in the afterward (specifically the one for volume 2), but it seems like the translation for part of it has to be wrong, because the author is thanking the publisher for being allowed to advertise his "new" work despite it being under a different publisher, and that "new" works is Magic Stone Gourmet.

I must also give thanks for being graciously allowed to advertise my new work in this afterward despite it being under a different publisher. It'll be published under BOOKS and is called Magic Stone Gourmet.

The first volume of Sundering Fate was published in Japan in August of 2022 (and the second volume was published in March of 2023). The most recent volume of Magic Stone Gourmet was published in Japan in June of 2021. So, the entirety of what he's released for Magic Stone Gourmet came out before even a single volume of Sundering Fate came out. So, calling Magic Stone Gourmet a new series in the afterward for any volume of Sundering Fate doesn't make any sense.

So, I don't know what the afterward for volume 2 actually says in Japanese, but I don't see how it could say what the English version currently says about Magic Stone Gourmet being a new series.

Volume 11 - Part 2:

[~31%]

"Seems certainly seems busy,"

Wrong word. Seems > She.

Volume 10 - Part 5:

[49%]

"Got. Sorry for the trouble, Egil."

Missing a word. I suggest the ff:

"Got it. Sorry for the trouble, Egil."

Volume 5 - Part 3:

[3%]

"Can move the church to a place that's more out in the open?"

It's missing a word, I think. I suggest the ff:

"Can you move the church to a place that's more out in the open?"

v7p8 ~12%:

The emperor couldn't afford to simp on his guards for either his wives or the divinity's party, which was certain to leave his resources stretched thin.

simp -> skimp, though it would be really funny were it not a typo.

~58%:

From that point on, the logic of this world was driven into his Charles.

his Charles -> Charles.

V11 P9 (53% - starting on 2nd line up from bottom of page)

"Some icons that didn't seem to do anything."

"that" seems out of place in this sentence. I think there are two ways to make the .sentence work better:

e.g.:

Some icons didn't seem to do anything.
-or-
There were some icons that didn't seem to do anything.

v4 p2

~0%

“I’m very sorry, but we have a rule not to show [] inventors from foreign countries. Even those who hail from the Freja Kingdom... Oh, and please do drink your tea. It’s nothing fancy, I’m afraid.”

Not to show what to foreign inventors? Plans? Blueprints?

v5P1p10:

61% - Reinanld -> One too many “n”s: Reinald 97% - Samule -> Samuel

V3P4, 5% “Lakya drooped her head” - Rakya

20%: “A small scrap of paper in between the diary [pages].”

a1v7p20 ~4%

"Ya wanna know [...] it just regenerated.

Missed the ending quotation mark.

[...] is its definin' trait.' In fact, [...]

I think the ' after trait doesn't belong.

V13 P11 (92% - 8th & 7th lines up from bottom of page)

"Guido and Jonas were playing so that Wolf could one again experience the game he loved to play as a child,"

Correct "one" to "once" for better syntax.

e.g., so that Volf could once again experience...

v1p7 ~96%

[...] training sessions, " I murmured [...]

Has a stray space after the comma.

v1p8

89% - Tena -> Tenan

V18P1

31% However, that wasn't wall ->Presumably that wasn't 'all'.

v5 p6

~60%

“Now then, we’ve finished introducing our new members, so allow me to explain our strategy again. Look at this.” At the front of the conference room was a large magical projector displaying a blue screen with green dots of various sizes. It looked like a map of the countries in the Blue Sea Union and the surrounding ocean. “We are currently in the Gilded Land. This area is the Black Sea, which is the Infernal Demonic Beast’s territory—and our destination.”
At the bottom right of the sea chart, a black stain was spreading. It was the region of the ocean that had been corrupted by the miasma Vepar exuded. We called it the Black Sea or the Schwarz Meer. There were several islands in the Black Sea, but I heard that they were inhospitable to human life.

Bit of a subtle point here, but since the second paragraph is being paraphrased from Eugene's first person point of view, that should probably be It was called the Black Sea... or Claude called it the Black Sea... (assuming Claude is speaking) or maybe We heard it was called... .

v3p12 ~66%

[...] my father asked in a whisper. . "Also [...]

Has an extra period and space.

@karasutengu Thank you! It'll be fixed in the final version.