V2 P11, 86%
"Don’t tell me...her vessel rupture?!"
This one may be correct as is. As a normal sentence, rupture -> ruptured. If referring to her ongoing 'vessel rupture', probably correct as is.

88%
"Ren panted for breadth, his hands trembling from exhaustion."
Breadth -> breath

96%
"All the plots that had been playing out on the palms of his hands had turned to mist and slipped through his fingers."
I could be wrong on this, but I believe that the phrase is always singular (in the palm of his hand).

a1v7p18 ~16%

They know that if he were [...]

Should be knew.

~86%

Two pairs of eyes turned toward Ryo.
Both belonged to a white-haired man [...], and another man

"Both" should probably be "They" here.

v3p11 ~19%

" I apologize [...]

There's an extra space after the ".

~22%

[...] bright red once more.I couldn't [...]

~31%

[...] I smiled at him."Thank you [...]

Both missing a space after the period.

~34%

[...] learn how to smile, Much to [...]

The comma should probably have been a period.

~44%

[...] and resuming working.

Should probably have been "and resumed working". That being said, technically "being reminded about [...] resuming working" could work, but it's not nice to read. I guess "and resuming work" would be an alternative.

~47%

[...] way closer to us "Please, raise [...]

Looks like it's missing a period after the us.

~59%

[...] she said softly. I fear for the future.

Is missing the opening " before "I fear [...].

~78%

"'Just because,' you say?

Is missing the closing ".

~81%

[...] startled my father. [...] made my father become tense.

Maybe replace the second "my father" with "him"?

~84%

Naturally, Mer happily got on his back and had become very hyper.

The times of "got" and "had become", connected with just an "and", feels off.

Volume 5 - Part 2:

[72%]

"You are Patriarch ALdera, correct?"

ALdera > Aldera

V5 P1, 30%
"Reina was dextrous, so she could do anything, but she had said that Zelos was bad at it."
Seems both dextrous and dexterous are valid spellings, but with the latter being more common thought I'd make a note just in case.

While I'm noting things:
45% “This island is relatively untouched by human hands, and yet there are surprisingly many artificial things here.”
Seems a little definitive for someone with amnesia. Perhaps is -> seems (unless this happens to be a slip/foreshadowing and she knows more than she's letting on, or her subconscious coming through)

64%
"The three of them had apparently gotten stronger lately and could beat some monsters now, but when their enemies got to the rank of rabbits, they still struggled unless they were ready to sacrifice themselves to take down their foes."
This could well be me being dense, or just simply forgetting previous events, but what on earth is 'the rank of rabbits'?

V5 P11, 60%
"As commander, I could easily order Pickle or even Jaffar to martial the concerned knights in my steed"
Steed -> stead

V10 P8 ~89%

How dare. Such an accusation wounds me.

Incomplete first sentence.

Volume 8 part 4 53%

They exploited their people, imposing heavy taxes to enrich himself.

The pronouns don't match but appear to refer to the same subject, one should change. Based on context it should probably be themselves instead of himself, but changing they could make a grammatically sensible sentence.

v4p6 ~57%:

The Five Sages ranked along kings and emperors

along -> among

v1p5:

33% - You plan -> Your plan

V10 throughout i.e. part 8 63%:

Camellia has been used constantly when referring to events in Hydrangea, as well as the events that actually took place in Camellia. I don't know if the issue is with the original or confusion from the translator, but it's very confusing to the reader.

V13P4

50% Its "trunk" (if you could call it that) was pyramid-shaped and there was a glowing gem set where its belly button should be. -> While not technically wrong, the more common term would be 'torso', no?

V7 P11, 61%
"I saw a crack form in the soul recirculator and. Fearing its total collapse, I threw myself in front of it to protect it."
I think that's meant to be 'and, fearing' (or it's a sentence fragment, needing an ending)

v1p5:

89% - Hearing that I”m nasty -> I’m

v6p2 ~13%:

"But desire is anotherright?"

anotherright? -> another, right?

Volume 6, part 7:

8% butand that it was had been Mr Fisher's idea
16% That did proved that Ellie
16% Bbut
16% Assuming Ellie could hear my thoughts right now, I could practically hear herwhat Ellie would say: if she could hear my thoughts right now.
16% Their jet- black darkness -> Their jet-black darkness
16% Elizbeth is a prideful woman -> Elizabeth is a prideful woman
20% I borrowed a horse from the baron's carriage. and took off with Robert and I took off in the direction of the residential district that Yoh had reported seeing Ellie and the witch in last.
24% then maybe all she was doing was using an illusion to to shape herself into whatever that meant for them--, like a perceptual distortion? -> whatever that meant for them, like a perceptual distortion?
24% full- on -> full-on
24% even if they knew, deep down, that she wasn't really the object of their affectionwoman they loved.
24% we probably can't see her "cause -> can't see her 'cause
27% "Lady Lilia," called Robert called, refusing to take his eyes off ofnot looking at Ellie for even a moment.
31% But then there was a loud clang, and Robert's sword launched snapped out of his hands.
31% I panicked, crouching to avoid getting hit, and the sword embedded itself in stabbed a the dirt of a nearby flower bed.
31% I assumed that the fight was over now that Robert had lost his weapon, but he Robert didn't take a single step back.
31% Ellie tried to move out of the way and dodge his punch, but he just kept attacking her with high kicks. She [Delete paragraph break] Ellie managed to block them with her sword hand,

This is as far as I get for now. There are so many errors in this part that I assume they continue.

6.2:

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter.

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter."

Missing ending double quote.

V7P4
~9%

The rest'd had no hand [...]

I still believe that contracting had to 'd makes reading books much harder.

~9%

[...], not giving even the slightest thought to what any else thought [...]

Probably anyone

~14%

I mean, he'd been stripped of his rank in the first place because he'd tried to ignore the divinity seize power.

As @Hylebos said the sentence feels off; however I think it should be [...] ignore the divinity to size power (for himself).

~36%

[...] of the Imperium as a whole.Still, [...]

Misses a space after the period.

V6 P5
(0% - 2nd line up from bottom of the page)

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I believe the wording in the outlined area should be:
"magic bag"
As in:

Ciel immediately reached into her magic bag...

(62% - 7th line down from top of page)

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Correct "the" in outlined wording to "them"and remove comma...
As in:

...the priest said, leading them down the mountain path.

V2P10 ~85%

[...] to a dungeon together and clear it together!"

is bad to read.

~88%

Has a character encoding error in

[...], and it'll be just the two of us

~92%

[...] A lot's happened

Would be much better as A lot has happened.