87% - […] I wasn’t really a religious person, but Adonix-sana probably had a different mentality […] -> Too much time at the temple around this point? Did Adonix-san and Advastlis-sama get blended together? :)
[2%] when they were all these mean things >> should probably be were saying all
[6%] this new red bean—flavored one looks yummy! >> em-dash should be en-dash
[32%] high school—appropriate >> em-dash should be en-dash
Images flashed through their minds of Yotsuba losing all hope in humanity,
Images flashed through their minds of Yotsuba losing all faith in humanity,
Images flashed through their minds of Yotsuba losing all hope for humanity,
[0%] ► These 4 paragraphs at the start are duplicates. Part 8 ended with the same ones, albeit slightly different.
Heck yeah! A tea kettle and a tail means tanuki! No doubt about it! With a poof, a tanuki’s face and arms appeared, sticking out from the kettle. There was no mistaking what it was.
“A-Are you a yōkai?” I asked.
It apparently was as it nodded its head towards my question.
[72%] “Oh, are you telling me to drink up? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[72%] Tea Kettle Tanuki is too long to say. [...] ► This paragraph isn't indented like the others. Replace the line line break with a paragraph break.
[78%] I expected to be outbid quicklyt, and I was ► It should be quickly.
[80%] ► The tanuki's dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
“Sorry, I was just a little surprised.”
[96%] ten-star quality when the rarit is only a one? ► It should be rarity.