V2 p6 multiple coach should be coachman

V5 P1 70%:
What a pain!"She just barely
Space missing after quote character. Could also be a paragraph break there.

V14 P1 (20% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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Remove superfluous word "repairs" for better syntax or remove "fix" and replace with "do" for the same effect (e.g. "to do the carriage repairs...")

V2 P1, 9%
"The half-angel, half-demon girl who belonged nowhere. The foolish dragon with more muscle than sense. They’d never gotten along, even when they’d worked together, and yet the one they cared most for had been the same."
I don't think this ends up needing any correction, but just in case rewording for clarity might help:
The same (as in the same figure), not the same (as in Hellboy not getting along with them). First read my first thought was the latter, til realising the actual intent on a second read.

V1P2

She was also the first person Wellmy at school she had been willing to entrust her beloved sister to.

V4.5P7 45%
“I only ask for tailored breakfast ingredients when we only need to make it in small quantities,”

"Only" used twice.

V1P12 52%:
SIlence -> Silence
The letter i should be in lower case.

5.6:

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything.

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything."

3.10:

who kept to the depths of the forest and served ties with the outside world

who kept to the depths of the forest and severed ties with the outside world

v4 p8

~70%

After thinking about it for a moment, Misha nodded. “That’s why we’re not meeting anyone on the road, even thoughGanz said we would.

=> though Ganz (missing space)

V3 P9 (0% - 1st page, 12th line down from top)

Be rest assured, no expense will be spared for this mission.

Correct to:

--> Be assured, no expense...
-or- --> Rest assured, no expense...

@Gamen I
I've watched that show and I didn't get it. Even if someone recognizes that name, those Japanese words will never mean anything to the reader. They're never defined in the show, which is probably why they're removed from the American title. Something about spirals? Living underground? Digging? Child labor? Do any of the themes of that show actually fit here, or is the literal meaning of those words the primary message, and the fact that they're a Japanese show title just added color?

Imagine if the translation were going the other direction, and we're translating “it was like Animal House” to Japanese. You could transliterate the movie name to katakana, sure. Is anybody gonna get it? No. If instead you translate it “like an out-of-control university circle from an American movie,” then everybody can imagine what that might look like. (Student housing building? Off-campus apartment? This might be a bad example.) The tiny minority that actually have seen that movie will recognize it from the description, and nothing is lost for anyone.

Thanks for attending my TED talk.

Vol 12 P3 (42% - 7th line up from bottom of page)

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Need to add missing "he" to improve English syntax.

v3p9 17% Loulette -> Roulette

v2p11 57%

Even if it were a lie.I knew

needs a space after the full stop

Volume 6 - Part 5:

[~9%]

his gaze drifting slightly to somewhere behind the man Upon closer inspection,

Missing punctuation. Add a period after man, before Upon.

v1p12 33%

More than anything, though, was how she stopped and listened to me when I’d sid monsters were alive,

sid --> said

V1 P1, 81%
"Anyway, speaking of family, Vanitas had two little sisters—twins, in fact. They both had opposite personalities..."
Very minor, but 'both' seems superfluous (can't have just one with an opposite personality, but the other doesn't)

P3, 4%
"If one were truly skilled, it was also possible to transform into animals, monsters, or inorganic matter—but only few could do that.
'but only few' ->
'but only a few'
or 'but only few'

71% “To that end, I’m ready to pay any price,” I declared. Then after a short pause, I said, “ Christina.”
Extra space in front of 'Christina'

P4, 15%
"Being slaves, I never shared a meal with them."
Stared at this a little, but I can no longer tell if this is currently fine as is or not. If not:
'I had never shared...'
or 'I never shared meals...'

50%
"Shuka was a woman who looked like in her early twenties"
Could just be phrasing I'm not used to, otherwise:
'who looked like she was in her early twenties'
or 'who looked to be in her early twenties'

P5, 92%
"Ms. Ashley was such a worrier. We [had] had this conversation multiple times already."

V6 P1 76% "It was only one story tall and about four square meters on each side, so "cabin" might have been" ->
"one story tall, square, and about four meters on each side," a page later the room is described as "about 15sq meters"

86% "didn't look much at first glance" -> like much

V5 P1 (89% - 8th line down from top of page)

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Maybe its just me, but this sounds out of context. Claudia knew she couldn't stop Lutz from doing what he felt he had to, so I think this should read:
"she couldn't stop him"