Volume 2, Part 9

interlude: Diaego.

it spellling of Aoi Konominatos' wrong as: [Aoi knominato]

V9 P1 24% - two adorable smiles began bouncing around - smiles should be slimes

@nihility said in To Another World... with Land Mines! - Corrections Topic:

Sup on white rice? What does that mean?

https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/sup
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/sup
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/sup

V1P13
[94%] "They're certainly lovely," Liliana replied. ➡ should this be Petra? Liliana hasn't met the sister yet, in this life at least, so she wouldn't say that, right? Also, she is pretending to still be mute in front of Paul, isn't she? So it would make more sense to me if this was Petra's reply, though I'm not sure since it isn't entirely in character for her.

v32p5 ~5%:

As Shilly Rou continued to mash up the shaska, it was easy to tell that the pulp was getting stickier and sticker over time.

sticker over time -> stickier over time.

V3 P9 (12% - Line 9 & 10 from top of the page)

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Change "award" to "away".

v5p4:

92% - Without her rope, it probably would’ve taken a lot longer for Lilia and I to reach the shore. -> Probably a case where me should be used, since “a lot longer for I to reach the shore” just doesn’t work: a lot longer for Lilia and me to reach the shore.

V2P8:

~44%:

You get coconut juice and oil from them

In English, I've only ever heard the liquid in a coconut referred to as coconut water. Unless it's mixed with a bunch of other junk, and then it's "juice". And the liquid from the flesh is "milk" somehow.

Also ~44%:

Even with easy jobs, this moment always was always a relief.

Extra always.

v4 p10

~5%

<Holy mother of vague, Mali. If you worded it that way on purpose to both grab my attention, then congratulations, it worked.>

Something seems awkward here. "Both" is used to indicate two or more things -- but there is no additional thing mentioned beyond the grabbing of Leah's attention, e.g. both grab my attention and confuse me. Maybe the both is unnecessary and can be omitted?

@zeji13 said in The Petty Villain Plays by the Rules - Corrections Topic:

v1p12:

Nanalie family name is Ronamis in the chapter title and RonamisRominas in the rest of the chapter. Not sure which is the right one, but the latter looks like a bulk replace mistake.

Yep, "Replace All" mistake was the first thing I thought of too.

V5 P11, ~26%

I kept Detect Mana active and watched as Chris's mana level went down. Then I used Regulate Mana to restock her with my Euini's mana stores.

Should probably be "my and Euini's".

V2P8
though she sometimes said some words that were too difficult for me to grasp, such as, "I wonder how I can get some good old fan service to happen. Maybe Prince Raph would be happy if he got a good glimpse of my panties?"

I think you should probably reword the whole sentence around the word "pantsushot".
Like "Maybe Prince Ralph would be glad if I gave him a pantsushot from time to time?"

V3 P3 (82% - 6th line up from bottom of page)

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Replace "mover" with "move".

Part 8, at 69%, pretty sure the wrong name was used. All 4 of them are supposed to have attacked, yet Franz's name is used twice. I think the first one, where Franz ised magic, as supposed to be Connie instead, as Franz was running with a sword at the time.

Volume 3 - Part 5:

[5%] Oh no, you’vc found my weak spots! >> should be you've

V14P8 91%: All six types of ogres - Red Ogre, Blue Ogre, Yellow Ogre, White Ogre, Yellow Ogre, and Black Ogre : Yellow Ogre is listed twice instead of some other colour.

V5 P9
(9% - 9th line down from top of page)

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Add missing "she" to sentence

(91% - 11th line down from top of page)

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"First and foremost" - most importantly; more than anything else.
e.g. "I'm first and foremost a writer"

In part 14 at about 56% Krai says "that's not my ken" given the context I assume the translator just forgot to translate ken to sword.

v4p7:

64% - Even in death, he had been robbed his dignity. -> Probable missing word: he had been robbed of his dignity. I think that some versions of english (British? Another American dialect? Other?) sometimes don't use “of”, but it probably should be there in this case.

@Jojajones We're witnessing the cannonization of a pun. Seen it used in another book title already. A bit blunt if you ask me, but to each generation their sense.