V2 P2: "absorbed into the magestone" should be "magesword" -- this is the Emperor trying to power up his sword.

Oops. I assume it's too late to fix since the book has already been available in print for a bit now, but was re-reading Volume 11 and noticed a continuity error.

Halfway through Volume 11, Chapter 3, the family starts talking about an increase in parts of the animal population, and speculating that it's because they killed two bears. Diana later comments, "I've only seen one once."

In the novels, Forge Eizo has actually killed three bears. Eizo soloed the first bear in Volume 1. They killed a second bear in Volume 4 when a bear invaded Jolanda's home (Diana actually dealt the killing blow on that one). And the third bear in Volume 5 was how they got Lucy.

It's probably a discontinuity from the original web version of the story, since I believe Jolanda was a new character introduced for the novelization. I assume in the web version there were only two bears, and they forgot to correct the count in the Volume 11 reflections.

Didn't spot this until reading the manga, but:
V1P1 81% the second son of the duke of the Kingdom of Karvun -> That should either be 'the second son of a duke of the Kingdom of Karvun' or 'the second son of the Duke of Karvun'. 'the duke' doesn't apply to a Kingdom.

Also, the LN spells the country as 'Karvun', but the manga uses 'Carvan'.

Volume 1 - Part 1:

[53%]

I selected Yes from the prompt.

The format for Yes is off. Make Y also italicized.

Volume 11 Canto 1 part 2 about 76%

a punch or too my way.

"too" isn't spelled wrong, but for the context of the sentence, that's the wrong one to use. It should be

a punch or two my way.

Too = too much, too cold, too many, etc.
To = to eat, to the store, to celebrate, etc.
Two = two cats, two people, basically when it's for quantity (which is what should be used)

V1P3 3%:

Miss Mystère would say, "I will be queen while you shall support His Highness Raphael as empress dowager!"

Is that literally the term she used? It means the mother or widow of an emperor. It seems impossible for the MC to become an empress dowager while Miss Mystère is a queen.

30%:

Because both me and my brother chose Coco

me -> I (because it's part of the compound subject of this clause. "me" would be correct for the objective case.)
It would be more conventional to use the order "my brother and I", as well.

30%:

she had been a blue-blooded noble through-and-through;

through-and-through -> through and through
The examples on Merriam Webster demonstrate that through and through is not normally hyphenated in sentences like this one.

V1P3 66%:

He was after the entirety of my being.

This sentence is repeated two sentences later. The second instance fits better than the first instance, so I suggest deleting the first instance.

V1P3 67%:

I wondered if the way he scratched at his white hair was a tick.

The behavior is "tic", "tick" is the parasite and the superhero.

v6p5:

42% - […] could possibly replicate a son after hearing it once -> Missing letter: song

V1, P10, 75%: “It was oozing so much power that it was as if I'd poured straight mana.” - incomplete sentence

V6P2
~21%

“Just ignore it, Remzenel,” Lizolera replied.”

Extra "?; replied."->replied.

~21%

Because the business that couldn’t be made public was going to be discussed, even the keeper of the temple had been forced to step out.

Sorry if it is okay as it is, but just from the way this reads, extra 'the'?; Because the business->Because business

V6P3
~42%

“The king says, ‘I’m honored you came all this way out of concern for my people. If I can be of assistance, then I, Atos, will offer all the power and words at my disposal.”

Missing ending '?; disposal.”->disposal.'”

~53%

More important were King Atos and his attendant sitting behind her.

Not sure if it means the attendant is sitting behind Lizolera but as she isn't in this sentence and as attendants are usually just behind the person they serve?; her->him

v30p6 ~27%:

"That's because Kamyua Yoshi was working very hard to make that happen," I went ahead and chimed in, since Melfried wasn't saying anything.

Yoshi -> Yoshu

@Valanduin Thank you for bringing it up! Aikuchi is actually a classification of katana that is generally shorter and has no tsuba (hand guard), so they are both aikuchi with separate names. If it was a source of confusion though, it might be worth going back over and clarifying that point. Thank you again for your input!

V19 P3 (50% - 11th line from the bottom of the page)

They could see people walking up and down the street wearing kimono,...

walking up and down the street wearing kimonos,...

(since the subject of the sentence [people] is plural, the word "kimono" should also be)

v3.1 p10

~45%

“What he’s trying to say is, when she slams the door like that she’s saying, ‘Stay out.’ So yeah, you can go inside, just don’t say we didn’t want you.”

Should that be didn't warn?

V5P9, 55%: “A hit before I even used Fever Lore” - lure

@Khazidhea said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

V5P7, 39%
"Ossmeier XIII. As his name suggestd"
Suggestd -> suggested

44%
"perhaps they could've expected their neighbours to offer reinforcements... but now that it was clear Deftelos was doomed."
Possibly drop the 'that'

89%
"She's probably lounging back at the castle without care in the world"
As far as I'm familiar with it: 'without [a] care in the world'

Thanks! These all should be fixed now.

V1P2 84%:

The beastman's unfriendly remark made Arata realize

Should be 1st person.

vSSp4:

49% - Saido and Mitsurugi left to get rid of their extra makeup -> Saito and Mitsurugi

Not a correction from the book itself, but the series description:

After all, wherever legends of great tread, great trouble is sure to follow.

This should probably be "great legends" instead.

After all, wherever great legends tread, great trouble is sure to follow.

@Geezer-Weasalopes said in One Last Hurrah! The Grayed Heroes Explore a Vivid Future - Corrections Topic:

A reexamination of the Japanese is very much in order.

Fortunately, that part of the text is freely available as a preview on Bookwalker. Now, I don't know Japanese all that well, but throwing the first bit of the chapter in to DeepL results in the following, with the sentence you quoted above bolded:

There are quite a few people classified as martial arts masters. Those who survived the great war of the past have refined their martial arts skills once again, in case the same war were to break out again. However, as is to be expected, in the process of mastering their skills, masters often end up leaning toward either protecting people or killing them without mercy. Therefore, it was fair to say that the two were opposites. Their lifestyles and the goals they pursued with their swords were, on the surface, completely different.

This, I'm sorry to say, seems like a much more understandable translation. Whether it's accurate though, I have no idea because I don't know Japanese.