V5P9 ~47%
'Arnette Halserg' -> 'Arnette Halsberg'

~87%
'...and If they had arrived...' -> '...and If if they had arrived...'

Volume 5 Part 5
34% The mushroom from before when nowhere to be seen. -> The mushrooms from before were nowhere to be seen.
43% Every time you had to put or remove them -> Every time you had to put them on or remove them
57% Both my hands were both firmly planted (remove the latter 'both')
93% Although "I have fiiiiiiish!" is gramatically correct, I wonder if it isn't supposed to be 'hate' instead of 'have' in that sentence. It would make more sense with his previous comment about not wanting to be in the water.

1.2:

dog or cat here.But still...! There's no way I'm abandoning beast ears!I may look like

dog or cat here. But still...! There's no way I'm abandoning beast ears! I may look like

10.2

each gold medallion was worth more than the average salary of the working class.

So, average hourly salary, daily salary, weekly salary, yearly salary, or lifetime salary?

I've seen this mistake in probably half a dozen translated novels. In fact, I don't think I've ever seen it translated correctly. I've never seen it corrected all the times I've reported it, which makes wonder if there's some kind of cultural disconnect. Is it rude to define it?

“If you would have told me a month ago that we’d been hauling crates full of gold medallions...”

“you'd told me” “we'd be” (If you had told me we would be [I would have called you crazy].)

v1p1:

9% - You finally figured it out. -> Missing opening quotation mark: “You finally figured […]

v1 c1

~70%

“It’s been a century since I last allowed a student in here! You should be proud of yourself, Eugene! ” I remembered the headmaster telling me jovially.

=> Eugene!” (no space between the ! and the ")

v15p7

71%: But saying no was one thing she couldn’t do. -> "the one thing"? 86%: It would have been awful trouble to actually explain, however, so she kept quiet. -> "awfully troublesome"?

v1 p2

~50%

Wow! It’s a whole three stories tall!This place is exactly what I’m looking for, I just know it!

=> tall! This (missing space)

~55%

Say what now?!C-Cute dresses?!

=> now?! C-Cute (missing space)

V11P1 was Yoshin's temperature expressed in Fahrenheit in the original text? I'd prefer if measurements aren't localized in the Imperial system if they are metric in the Japanese text.

v10 p11

even if it would be miserable the whole time, and so last night Sit Tarutung announced we would be leaving.

I'm guessing it should be "Sir" not "Sit"

@Outinthegardener said in Dahlia in Bloom - Corrections Topic:

V10 P5 88%

Syntax suggestion:

Looking back, it occurred to Dahlia that she'd never seen Volf's face this close up before since the day they met.

Looking back, it occurred to Dahlia that she had not seen Volf's face this close up since the day they met.

"never seen... before since" is confusingly wordy.

Um.
Do we need to back to the story where they met to confirm whether it should be

Looking back, it occurred to Dahlia that she'd never seen Volf's face this close up before.

or

Looking back, it occurred to Dahlia that she'd never seen Volf's face this close up since the day they met.

V4 P5 (40% 4 to 5 lines above bottom of page)

I seriously can't with this guy.

Seems like a word is missing. Perhaps:

-->I seriously can't deal with this guy.

V5P1, 10%: "Aight, I'll do my best to fish up some whitespitted char" - unless him mangling the name is intentional, whitespotted.

V3, P6, around 41%:

The paragraph that starts with "I had put out a summons for those nobles to come to the imperial capital." is missing the first-line indent.

V17P6

had only exchanged nods with their number three, Mina Walker

In volumes 15 and 16 Olly Walker is described as the Howard's number three ranking maid, I think the last volume Mina appeared in was volume 11, where she is described as being the number 2, I don't remember someone taking the number 2 spot and I think Olly is still in the republic so wrong number?; number three->number two

V1P12 12%

I couldn’t afford to waste resources on broken equipment.
> Driven by that

On the site in my Chome browser on iOS, it looks like equipment.Driven but when I copy paste, there is a line break between them as shown above. Same as the previous part.

59%
“I see.”
I understood what he was getting at. But—
“I want this to be a formal request.”
I looked him in the eye …
I see”I -> I see” I
request.”I -> request.” I

“… him.
Even from afar..”
him.
Even -> him.
 Even

“… item: a jar.
More specifically, it was a Jar of Thirst…”
jar.
More -> jar.
 More

71%
“… falling steadily since early that morning,. long enough now that both…”

morning,. long -> morning, long

“… window.
Come to think of it …”
window.Come -> window. Come

There’s at least 5 more of these in the last couple pages, as well as a comma at the end of a sentence instead of a period. Not worth going through and listing them at this point.

V16 P5 9% "They were right [beShind] me just a second ago!" -> a wild S appeared

v6p6:

43% - “With less officials and soldiers, […] -> Wrong word, I think: With fewer officials and soldiers