V2P3, 65%: “that leads us [to] today”
P4, 87%: “However, that's not a problem if I get just the one tocome running.”
P9, 8%: “A present's not just something you just give them at that's it” - and

Can Two-Law Tyrant be changed to Two-Law Usurper? The story will explain why he's called an usurper. Plus, there will be another character that uses Tyrant, so this would help prevent confusion.

v2 p8

~10%

Then Raoul heard the rumors that Luke, who had been banished to the wasteland, had built an unbelievably city in a matter of months.

"Unbelievably" is an adverb not an adjective. Instead maybe that should be an unbelievable city or an unbelievable large city or an unbelievable X city where X is some other missing adjective.

v9p10:

12% - “[…] after I had done my business,” Cara replied, her tone perfectly even. -> Carla 45% - We had invited the head honcho of all three nations to proceed with the signing of the contract […] -> Typo? Poor phrasing? There isn’t one head for all three, but one for each: the head honchos of all three nations or perhaps the head honchos of the three nations.

v17p8 ~40%:

"Kiara. I'm sure we can't pry him for details about an important job HIs Grace put him to."

HIs -> His.

@b-scot-morgan I noticed the same. Likely the last of the trio (is it Belle?)

V5P3 77%:

whatever god had reined in this world was dead.

reined -> reigned

V3 P7

19% "yet you don't know a miorc is?"

Missing word. Perhaps, "yet you don't know what a miorc is?"

34% "Lord Peylon? What is this? Don't tell me you haven't-" 36% "Pardon me, Lord Peylon, you can forget we ever spoke."

In the room are Lera, Lord Duval, Lord and Lady Aspozat and the new "sharp eyed" character who is identified as "Qualos."

Is Lord Duval intentionally pretending to be Lord Peylon, or is this a mistranslation?

V7 P7 (33% - 7th line up from bottom of page)

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Delete extra "sword".

V2 P1 (40% - 6th line up from bottom of page)

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I believe this should be "leave" instead of 'love'.

V3P8 60%:

staring intently at Usa and I

I -> me
It's the object of a preposition.

3 P1 (75% - End of 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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This seems out of syntax to me. Sould it actually read as:
And what use does a witch have for a staff anyway?

V2 P2 (16% - 5th line down from top of page)

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Just FYI from Merriam-Webster Dictionary online:
Sneaked is the original past tense form of sneak, but in the late 1800s, the alternative past tense form snuck began making its way into American English. It is now very common and is considered standard.

V10 P1 35% "heir to the [Wayne] family headship." -> Wynne

v19 p2

~18%

“Oh really?” Fiery plumes struck up a mad dance as a young woman with gorgeous, long scarlet hair and a practice sword for sparring Tina shot me a dirty look. Lydia Leinster, the Lady of the Sword, had been the albatross around my neck since our Royal Academy days.

Should that be for sparring with Tina?

V3 P7, 3%
“...Lady Robur’s grasp is very refined. I’ve come to understand that it’s beyond the comprehension of a commoner like me.”
It feels really odd for the Prince to refer to himself as a commoner. I'm presuming he's meaning only within context of the subject (an entry level understanding of the topic). Neophyte, or perhaps amateur, novice, layperson, or even hobbyist might be alternatives?

24%
"No doubt she wass lost in thought about what to write in the new art book."
Wass -> was

39%
"The prince’s bloodshot crimson eyes were fixed fixated on me"

50%
"The first prince seems to have returned quietly."
After saying he had left a few paragraphs back I initially thought this was saying that the prince was back already. However on rereading I suspecting it's instead intended to reinforce the previous paragraph. For clarity, perhaps replace with left/departed, or add on after returned 'to the castle'.

78%
Snapping back to reality, I frowned at the erotic painting the princess held. “How utterly... shameless,” I spat. I hoped she wasn’t about to start commenting on it in red pen.
Likely just me, but the meaning of this sentence escapes me entirely.

14.8

If she were found herself in a situation where she had to choose

Volume 2 - Part 5:

[46%]

amenuenses

amenuenses > amanuenses

[77%]

"I didn't do anything!'

' > "
Also, not sure if this shouldn't have been italicized or not. It didn't seem to be internal monologue to be italicized.

V6 P9, 92%
As I slipped past the ragged cloth serving as a door, a young dogfolk child, alerted by the greeting, wagged his tail and clung to my leg. Elena, who had been playing with the dwarven child, looked up at me and smiled warmly.
My read is that this is the same child in each instance. Unless I've missed something and dogfolk and dwarf can be used interchangably, dwarven -> dogfolk.

Edit: I can see from a later part that there are both a dogfolk and a dwarven child, so no need for any edits.

V12P5 ~17%
"Had he perhaps already realized the Eldan's visit was all in an effort..." -> "Had he perhaps already realized the that Eldan's visit was all in an effort..."