@xdbx said in In Another World with Household Spells - Corrections Topic:

=> I Thank

Or even just,
=> Thank you

V1 P8 45%: In her frenzy, Aide's daughter <- this should be 'sister'

V1 P6 26%: "You made us Weapons." Shouldn't it be "You made me a Weapon."?

V2 P9 starting at 50%:
One of the jobs is labeled 'spy' although it was previously called 'scout'. And I think 'scout' is way more fitting.

@karasutengu it's implied. They're thugs, and in less posh circles it's common to leave the action implied instead of using correct English, especially when he already suggested it in the first half of the sentence.

v1p7 ~5%:

It could be a storm before we know it, so we're closeing up early."

closeing -> closing.

Volume 1 - Part 7:

[51%] He titled the coffee pot >> should be tilted [86%] As long as I keep that sister-obsessed lunatic that I’m her >> should be thinking that

3.12:

pasted out drunk.

passed out drunk.

Sure, they were pasted. So much so they were passed out, OK?

V13 P14 (23% - last line at bottom of page)

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For proper English syntax, "I" should be changed to "I'll".
i.e.: I'll ask the king about doing something,

V4 P8: There’s an extra quotation mark in the beginning of this paragraph.

“”Even those devoted to the Light faith are still demonkin. As long as you’re a demonkin, you can’t sever your connection to the Almighty. But the way you spoke back there, it sounds like the Disciples of Light, a human-based faith, has found a way to sever the connection between Chiyou and demonkin. I can’t ignore that.”

For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

V6P6, 84%:

That did seem possible. Worse, people might be willing to go to extreme lengths to get me to do what I wanted, like taking some of my party members hostage to threaten me.

Should probably read "get me to do what they wanted".

Volume 1 part 6 8%

While gunshouts resounded...

this should be gunshots.

Volume 2, Part 8
[93%] as a prodigal swordsman. ➡ should be prodigy or prodigious

Volume 1 part 6

The dragon's exceptionally buoyant skin repelled both slashes and stabs.

Buoyant can't be right here, what does the skins ability to float have to do with anything?

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

V 10 P 6 - "Precedent really has meaning" should be "has no meaning". It's unprecedented in the following paragraph.

@karasutengu said in Imperial Reincarnation - Corrections Topic:

V5 P11 (58% - 1st line at top of page)

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I believe a word is missing here, and it may be due to translation. However, for proper English syntax "the" should be inserted as in: ...come to the capital...

Given it being Carmine, "come to our capital" also works.
But there needs to be something there, yes.

V4 P7 (88% - 2nd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "he" to the.

@SilverFuton oh shoot, i forgot this is a general thread for the whole book series