v3p10 ~29%

[...] her eventual move to Magnolia Thus, I'd steeled [...]

There should probably be a period (.) between Magnolia and Thus

V2P10 ~85%

[...] to a dungeon together and clear it together!"

is bad to read.

~88%

Has a character encoding error in

[...], and it'll be just the two of us

~92%

[...] A lot's happened

Would be much better as A lot has happened.

V17 P5 75%
Gon, who was guzzling beer out of a bour that I'd filled for him.
bour=bowl
I looked up bour and all i could find was a scottish term for a cottage which i find funny, Gon would have to be full size to drink that much beer.

V1 P1
19%
“Full marks? You’re joking. Not even a noble could pull that off.”
The exam was scored out of a hundred, with the average hovering around sixty. It was decidedly not the sort of test anyone aced. And yet a commoner girl had done just that. A perfect score. The first in the kingdom’s history. The whispers only grew.
32%
"Heard you scored full marks on the exam. It’s been a decade since anyone’s managed that. And...forever since a commoner did it."

Those two statements seem to be in opposition. The former could be referring to the 'first commoner in the kingdom's history', maybe? (Though my read was instead that no one had ever done so)

36%
"The Office of General Affairs was located fairly centrally to the royal palace"
Probably just me, but the 'to' is throwing me off. To -> within, perhaps?

V1 P2, 21%
She was instead staring at Nadia with visible nervousness. “You’re a daughter of a... earl?"
25% "Prime example of this: My father’s a earl, and yet you run laps around him in the decency department, Martina."
a -> an (though could be an in-character slip up in the first case, due to shock/finding her words)

V13 P7, 60%
"It really was fortunate that he hadn’t been kicked in the head or stomach. Really, did that hoof mark on his lower back really not hurt?"
Repetition. 2 instances are probably fine, but may replace or remove one of the latter two?

67%
"A metal door opened, from which a tall woman emerged. She looked to be just a little older than Dahila."
Dahila -> Dahlia

35.3:

hunting dog can provide us first,"Giran Ririn then added.

hunting dog can provide us first," Giran Ririn then added.

Part 4 has a "Takagamahara" that should probably be "Takamagahara" instead.

v1p4:

58% - from the young female knights perspective -> female knights’ perspective ? (“their” is used later in the same sentence instead of “her”, so I presume that the “knights” is supposed to be a plural possessive, instead of a singular possessive).

Volume 4 Part 10
52% "The Colt Highland Federation truly is skilled at sales. It's impressive how you keep making new products."
Sales and product development are two very different things. Should the first line perhaps be referring to 'business' instead of sales?

V8.2 P10, 90%

that I have demonstrated efficiency and capability of the units ->
that I have demonstrated the efficiency and capability of the units

V1 P1, 49%
“Of course! But fear not, for you will have a perfect body, Satie!”
It confused me while reading it, til finding out in a bit that that's her reincarnated name. A bit of precognition/foretelling? Or should it be 'Satie' -> 'Saki' at this point (especially as she's then referred to as Saki Osanai just a few paragraphs later)?

V5 P2, 92%
"Though I’d felt their gazes on me, I hadn’t been able to sense them at all."
Probably correct, or not worth fussing over, but reads to me more like "though I'd sensed them, I hadn't been able to sense them". Maybe something more like "Though I’d felt their gazes on me, I hadn’t been able to sense [their source] at all"?

V4 P2 (47% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

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Insert missing "on" between outlined words
e.g. Astrid got up on Tien's shoulders.

V17 P8, 28%
"Ka Kunlou was a man well-versed in the Serpents’ secret techniques. He knew plenty of useful and peculiar medicines and poisons, how to mix a powder that glowed when wet, and even how to cause an explosion that could fill a room with dust."
By any chance, could the sentence be referring to a 'dust explosion'? If so: "and even how to cause an explosion [from a room filled] with dust."
Or more explicitly: "and even how to cause an explosion [with nothing more that the fine particles in the air of a room filled] with dust."

V4P7

67%: "“W-Well, stop it!” she yelled, her face beat red." -> beet

Volume 2 Part 18
17% I know him, but we've never met. -> I know of him, but we've never met.
I believe this is probably the English version of what the author is trying to say.

v2p9:

24% - sShe looked on the verge of tears -> Extra letter: She

10.2:

Ann told Sara. And I met Rod and the other

Ann told Sara. "And I met Rod and the other

v2p10 ~13%

–that's it's all a game.

Should probably be that it's all a game.

v12p14 ~16%

"Farwell," Desperad said […]

Should be Farewell