V10 P10 (46%)

..he has searched every storage, room, and treasury in the palace...

searched every storage room, and...

(Remove comma between storage and room)

V8P1 77% Addyjust -> Addy just

v2 p3
"And there’s no way she could have hidden a haul that league anywhere."

league -> large

The following is causing some debate over on the main forum:

"Until then, if Zen and Elysia could possibly produce an heir, it'd be some peace of mind for the Leadon family," said Yohia.

Perhaps it could be reworded to make it clear whether the heir being discussed is a Leadon heir or an imperial heir.

Volume 2 Part 9
23% manaed -> managed
31% seen to familiar -> seem so familiar
47% [grammar] me and Maria -> Maria and I

2.9:

Why had she been unable to she become the sort of person someone would love?

Why had she been unable to become the sort of person someone would love?

There's a multiple line section that makes no sense, and I'm damned if I'm transcribing all of it.
So here's the specific line that stands out as "Huh?" to me.

In the end, the maid simply gave her a bright smile. "You'd like to do so even if saying so is impertinent?"

It's like there should be something else right before that line, something missing, because as it is there's no proper lead in to this.
Or it could be that the line is wonky in itself.

Volume 7 - Part 2:

[28%]

"This is an urgent matter,and one involving Lily besides. What manner of wretch would I be to stay behind and rest on my laurels?"

Suggestion:

"This is an urgent matter,and one involving Lily. Besides, what manner of wretch would I be to stay behind and rest on my laurels?"

10.12

Wridra dragged me forward with her vice grip and freakish strength.

The metaphorical tool is the “vise”. Vice is sin.

V2 P9, 11%

Daniel walked over to Elizabeth and Remilena --> Daniel walked over to Westalia and Remilena

V8 P7 (89%)

Why are you coming with, Elm?

-->Why are you coming with me, Elm?

Volume 4 - Part 10:

[70%] other girl’sactions >> needs a space

v3p10:

56% - If you asked whether I had feelings for Char, the answer was probably. -> That almost reads like an incomplete sentence: It was probably what? Maybe something like: […] the answer was ”probably”. Unless it’s supposed to be: […] the answer was probably yes.

V5P7 75%:

Yet after this, it is not for myself that I must worry about.

Either "for" or "about" can stay, but they shouldn't both be there.

at vol 7 part 3 at around 80% is this part

High-Speed Jonathan’s carriage went faster than Zelos’s Harley-Sanders Model 13, if not faster

but i just sounds weird shouldnt be it "as fast"

V5P13, around 41%:

Using my left hand, I manipulated my weighted pendulum—which I’d initially launched as a distraction—with my left hand, aiming it at the back of Gostaura’s head as he turned away.

Using my left hand, I manipulated my weighted pendulum with my left hand.

Redundant statement, or something like that.

Literally all of the illustrations in this volume appear at least a few paragraphs and sometimes many pages after the ideal point. Often after the narrative has moved on, which makes them a complete waste.

I've been seeing that less often lately, which made me think that JNC had changed a policy, but IDK. In any case, it would be better if they were placed more carefully. If a thoughtless solution is truly required, placing all illustrations at the beginning of their chapter would be less than ideal but still on average better than the current placement.

Volume 8, part 4

Ruri accepted that Chi saying it wasn't his forte meant that he **couldn't ** do it, but she assumed that he had no interest in making the effort.

Was this supposed to imply that Chi could do it if he made the effort?

v7p8:

1% - The two of us were smacked across the bottoms with paper pans. -> What is a paper pan? Should that be “paper fans”? 24% - Lilit wore an angelic dress -> Lilith

v1p6:

86% - Although my residence was equipped with plenty of expensive magical tools catered to everyday comfort, […]. -> Maybe that was okay, maybe not. Missing word?: […] plenty of expensive magical tools that catered to everyday comfort, […]. Or possibly a different version of the word: […] plenty of expensive magical tools catering to everyday comfort, […].

V4P6 ~91%:

"...and began quietly speaking the same time." -> "...and began quietly speaking at the same time."
(On re-read, I can see this being less an error and more just a style thing so ignore if you think it's an unnecessary change)

V4P7 ~82%:

"...she wasn't going save them." -> "...she wasn't going to save them."

V4P9 ~75%:

"...still hadn't been to locate Rebirth's..." -> "...still hadn't been able to locate Rebirth's..."

~85%:

"Having found a clear goal and trained diligently using his newfound sense..." -> "Having found a clear goal and trained training diligently using his newfound sense..."
(Suggestion here but "trained" doesn't sound right, I assume this isn't just me though...)