Vol 10, P 11 90% : Ramses stared at her goggle-eyed, hands clasped to his next.

Should be neck.

v3 p8

~65%

The photo shoots were all supposed to be wrapped up in just one day. Claiming that they wanted to get some shots of us in our regular working environments, they organized an exhibition race on the closest planet to the capital, which was Planet Kewattraid at only 8,546 kilometers away. Each of the racing teams they’d assembled had its own camera crew.

The planet serving as the course for this mock race, Planet Kewattraid, had a surface made up of hard rock. There were no oceans, and instead, it had vast plains of iron oxide. With a radius of about twenty thousand kilometers, it was a small planet compared to some others, but there were stark differences between its flat areas and those with more dramatic topography. These were pretty basic features when it came to choosing a Planet Racing course, so Planet Kewattraid was the planet all beginners would race on first.

Please re-check the translation of that first distance, only 8,546 kilometers away. That makes the imperial capital planet Hain closer than one planetary radius to Kewattraid -- so close the platform floating 10,000 kilometers above the surface of Planet Kewattraid could crash into it.

Maybe it should be 8,546 million kilometers away or 8 million 546 thousand kilometers away? Venus's distance to Earth ranges between 40 million to 160 million kilometers so either number makes a certain amount of sense.

~70%

By the way, in order to take photos of us while we were chatting away, the crew had employed a circular, floating camera droid that was about ten centimeters in diameter. They were using that was supposedly out of concern for the racers. Having strangers enter the garage would only get in the way, and they might make some racers nervous.

The highlighted sentence doesn't scan because the "that" there reads as a conjunction or the subject of "was" rather than the object of "using". Maybe it should be

They were using that supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Or

They were using it supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Or

That they were using it was supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Book XII Labyrinth, P7 (40%)

But this isn't simplya family issue anymore.
--> But this isn't simply a family issue anymore. (add a space)

V10 P1 64%:

their ashen countenances rivaled those of the dead's

dead's -> dead

V8 P9, 21%
"He roughed up his palms a little"
Palms -> palm (with him only having one arm/hand). Unless it was an habit of speech on Noor's part, not thinking of that.

V2 P8 (29%)

..., but they just gave shot back mean-natured smirks.
--> but they just shot back mean-natured smirks.

in vol 1, the king's name is Sashes (example: part 3, 29%)
vol 2, the king's name is Sachis (example: part 4, 9%)
Which is his name?

Volume 3 - Part 2

[20%] Girne's right eye was the same icy blue as Lionett's. However, his right eye was a vibrant crimson

v3p13:

2% - … that the Tailors’ guildmaster, Forto’s, had a fondness for her … -> Extra possessive? I don’t think that the apostrophe and the s need to be there.

A few missing spaces here and there…

v2p8:

~12% - It had also been explained to them that the duchess was Princess Sonia's best friend... -> Should be viscountess if I am understanding the context correctly?

@Gamen said in My Instant Death Ability - Corrections Topic:

After p2
[50%] They had all assumed that meant she had been killed by Yogiri and therefore could have made it back to their world -> I assume this should be hadn't been killed by him

They all thought she was killed.
So, I think the correction should be:
"They had all assumed that meant she had been killed by Yogiri and therefore couldn't have made it back to their world, and yet here she was"

Edit: oh wait, I just realized the After Story is already published. I found some other typos. Do I just send it in email?

V5 P10, 0%
"What did this creature think, and what did it now?"
Now -> know
59%
"was a magic item that temporarily transformed its user into [a] fire elemental"
88%
"Although we would have to lift the fiend's curse that afflicted Arthur, but the breakdown of the game's story also made several individual events urgent"
I'm not sure that this sentence quite works as is - either the 'although' or the 'but' might need to be tweaked/dropped.

V4 P12
(25%)
But he had to admit it didn't quite as much as it once had.
--> But he had to admit it didn't hurt (or matter) as much as it once had.

(50% - below A Fool's Finality):
Yet nor was he granted the dignity...
--> Yet Nor was he granted the dignity...

@Tango said in Seventh - Corrections Topic:

V10P10
~64%

Come up beside me, Miranda confirmed our plans going forward.

Maybe wrong word?; Come up->Coming up

I was considering: Having come up beside me, Miranda confirmed… It’s an option. :)

@YowamushiInuhan said in Dagashi-ya Yahagi - Corrections Topic:

In Japanese, Zetter Gungalf is spelled as ゼッター not ゼ―タ! So I guess that means keeping it as Zetter should be fine?

If that's how it's spelled, then it definitely seems like the author was going for a Zeta Gundam and a Getter Robo reference. It's got Zeta for Zeta Gundam, with the Getter spelling for Getter Robo. So, Zetter Gungalf makes the most sense, and you get references to two mecha anime at the same time!

@YowamushiInuhan said in Dagashi-ya Yahagi - Corrections Topic:

If that's how the Gundam series have been handling their names, I'll discuss this with the others to see if it'd be best to do that as well!

As far as I know, that's the way they've always done it, and I think they do name their mobile suits with the English names already chosen. Most mobile suit names are written in Katakana, and the ones that aren't, such as the Hyaku Shiki (百式) are usually Romanized, rather than translated. The model kits also have the English names printed right on them, and have since the 80's when they first started making them. Which leaves very little room for misinterpretation. The only exception to this that I can think of, is the RGM-79 GM from the original Mobile Suit Gundam. You'd think each letter in GM would be pronounced, like jee-em. However, it's spelled ジム(Jimu) in Japanese, and pronounced "jim" in dubs of the series.

As an aside, it's never been officially stated why it's pronounced this way, but people believe that, just as the Zaku's name is possibly derived from Zako (meaing small fry), the GM could possibly be derived from Jimi (meaning plain).

16:12:

The first mention of Veight Gerun Friedensrichter has Friedensrichter misspelled. There may be other such errors.

V10 P14, 58%
"As long as one remains alert to the possibility of ambush, they're nothing but small fry. (missing " at the end)
88%
"and the current temperature was definitely unfavourable for the fish to" (to -> too)

Volume 1 - Part 7:

[28%] “Heh, cut it out,” Gain said. >> So far so references to this guy until here have called him Gaine

Volume 9 part 9 - 14%

Jack landed on the street once more

I think that should be Zero instead of Jack