9.11:

Shiori and Alev even got the dragon's scale

Who's Alev?

Shiori and Alex even got the dragon's scale

12.10

Tropical trees scattered on the pristine, white breach spread out around the mountain added a nice touch. Wow, this island is pretty nice!

“beach”

“Aye, aye, Cap-tain! Your wish our command!”

“Your wish is”, unless the mistake was intentional.

@xdbx Cion's real last name is "Kreuzwell", and "Cromwell" is an alias. Thank you for checking, though!

9.7:

tyrant."I don't

tyrant. I don't

Ditch the unnecessary quotation mark.

Just read though most of V2 recently so this'll be across a couple of parts.

V2P5, ~72% in the JNC app:

Din't ever want... Didn't ever want...

V2P8, ~77% in the JNC app:

...the bark to back all that bite. ...the bite to back all that bark.

V2P10, ~6% in the JNC app:

Cabbage and canola plants... Cabbage and rapeseed plants...

For this last one, I wasn't sure what the original text said, but canola and rapeseed often get confused (since Canola was originally just a rebranding of rapeseed oil due to it's less-than-savory name though it now does refer specifically to some cultivars of rapeseed), I thought I'd just bring it up here.

@Mitalma The text has been replaced with the correct part.

Minor things I noticed in volume 9, part 8.
First bigger paragraph at 72% "It was a tingling sensation, liken there was only a [...]"
Should probably be changed to "like" or rephrased so liken works.
Second paragraph at 96% (ignoring the indicidual lines) "I think that we operate together plays a big part in it too."
Awkward phrasing, something like "how we operate together" sounds more natural to me.

@ebaldwin Ah, I see that now. Sorry for my mistake

Vol 10, P 11 90% : Ramses stared at her goggle-eyed, hands clasped to his next.

Should be neck.

v3 p8

~65%

The photo shoots were all supposed to be wrapped up in just one day. Claiming that they wanted to get some shots of us in our regular working environments, they organized an exhibition race on the closest planet to the capital, which was Planet Kewattraid at only 8,546 kilometers away. Each of the racing teams they’d assembled had its own camera crew.

The planet serving as the course for this mock race, Planet Kewattraid, had a surface made up of hard rock. There were no oceans, and instead, it had vast plains of iron oxide. With a radius of about twenty thousand kilometers, it was a small planet compared to some others, but there were stark differences between its flat areas and those with more dramatic topography. These were pretty basic features when it came to choosing a Planet Racing course, so Planet Kewattraid was the planet all beginners would race on first.

Please re-check the translation of that first distance, only 8,546 kilometers away. That makes the imperial capital planet Hain closer than one planetary radius to Kewattraid -- so close the platform floating 10,000 kilometers above the surface of Planet Kewattraid could crash into it.

Maybe it should be 8,546 million kilometers away or 8 million 546 thousand kilometers away? Venus's distance to Earth ranges between 40 million to 160 million kilometers so either number makes a certain amount of sense.

~70%

By the way, in order to take photos of us while we were chatting away, the crew had employed a circular, floating camera droid that was about ten centimeters in diameter. They were using that was supposedly out of concern for the racers. Having strangers enter the garage would only get in the way, and they might make some racers nervous.

The highlighted sentence doesn't scan because the "that" there reads as a conjunction or the subject of "was" rather than the object of "using". Maybe it should be

They were using that supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Or

They were using it supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Or

That they were using it was supposedly out of concern for the racers.

Book XII Labyrinth, P7 (40%)

But this isn't simplya family issue anymore.
--> But this isn't simply a family issue anymore. (add a space)

V10 P1 64%:

their ashen countenances rivaled those of the dead's

dead's -> dead

V8 P9, 21%
"He roughed up his palms a little"
Palms -> palm (with him only having one arm/hand). Unless it was an habit of speech on Noor's part, not thinking of that.

V2 P8 (29%)

..., but they just gave shot back mean-natured smirks.
--> but they just shot back mean-natured smirks.

in vol 1, the king's name is Sashes (example: part 3, 29%)
vol 2, the king's name is Sachis (example: part 4, 9%)
Which is his name?

v3p13:

2% - … that the Tailors’ guildmaster, Forto’s, had a fondness for her … -> Extra possessive? I don’t think that the apostrophe and the s need to be there.

A few missing spaces here and there…

v2p8:

~12% - It had also been explained to them that the duchess was Princess Sonia's best friend... -> Should be viscountess if I am understanding the context correctly?

@Gamen said in My Instant Death Ability - Corrections Topic:

After p2
[50%] They had all assumed that meant she had been killed by Yogiri and therefore could have made it back to their world -> I assume this should be hadn't been killed by him

They all thought she was killed.
So, I think the correction should be:
"They had all assumed that meant she had been killed by Yogiri and therefore couldn't have made it back to their world, and yet here she was"

Edit: oh wait, I just realized the After Story is already published. I found some other typos. Do I just send it in email?

V5 P10, 0%
"What did this creature think, and what did it now?"
Now -> know
59%
"was a magic item that temporarily transformed its user into [a] fire elemental"
88%
"Although we would have to lift the fiend's curse that afflicted Arthur, but the breakdown of the game's story also made several individual events urgent"
I'm not sure that this sentence quite works as is - either the 'although' or the 'but' might need to be tweaked/dropped.