v4 p8

~47%

About one hour had passed since the start of our party when Aero, who already seemed pretty drunk, leaned against me and brought up something that had happened before the race.
“Say, Scuba. You saw that Farseer guy before the race, right?”

Unless Aero is drunk and mispronouncing her name, it's Scuna.

@Iseguy said in The Dorky NPC Mercenary Knows His Place - Corrections Topic:

4.8

“Handsome Schoolboy and Handsome Schoolgirl Escape with their Lives from Corrupt Tyrannical Teacher’s Trap!”

“Beautiful Schoolgirl”

Handsome used to be used for women as well as men, I can remember one of my grandmothers using it. See

Can you still call a woman "handsome"? The Britannica Dictionary.

According to those definitions, as someone who is apparently quite athletic (and tomboyish?), "Handsome" might apply to Scuna.

However, I've never heard the term used for women in 21st century American English, so probably "Beautiful" would be preferred?

v9 p3

~95%

Also, it would be completely meaningless if I went missing right after her. If she was in danger, it was best to save her, but joining her in defeat would be the worst possible outcome. If I could save Surena by throwing mine away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing my life away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.

There's something a bit awkward here: the possessive pronoun "mine" is used prior to the possessive determiner "my (life)". I think it should be switched so that the determiner comes first, so either:

If I could save Surena by throwing my life away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing mine away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.

Or

If I could save Surena's life by throwing mine away, I would gladly do so. However, throwing mine away and gaining nothing in return was out of the question. I had to calmly make that distinction.

Volume 8 - Part 6:

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got sent to an inescapableprison?

Add space.

Have the typo and error in part 1 and 3 already addressed?

V2P9 ~6%

Speaking of, the boy was currently sitting on an armchair across from Lord Feilx...

This is going to sound incredibly pedantic, but you sit in an armchair.
Unless of course, he's sitting say, on the arm of the chair or something, which I doubt.

Because English is weird and dumb, despite sitting on a couch, or on a stool, you sit in a chair.

spoiler

V1P6 12%:

it certainly makes things easier to learn." <paragraph break> "When you mentioned

Both these paragraphs make a single uninterrupted piece of dialog from a single speaker, so the highlighted right double quotes shouldn't be there.

Alternatively you could add an extra speaker tag. Ex: it certainly makes things easier to learn." <para break> Liese paused, then added, "When you mentioned ...

84%:

As her designated Jump specialist slash guard

It's strange to see a punctuation mark written out in text. Is this deliberate?

V4 P7

~2%

“I’m pretty sure that large geyser is what we’re sensing. That means it’s no far.”

Should that be not far?

In Volume 11 part 5 there are numerous formatting issues with the character stats, mostly missing spaces/newlines in between stats.

v3 p2

~60%

Lacey’s home used to be feared as a cursed property by the villagers, so other than Yorma, Reeve, their older brother Allen, and the fox-eyed merchant Lanze, who occasionally visited Plume Villages, people rarely visited the place.

=> Plume Village (singular)

v3 p4

~1%

“Family” was such a foreign word to her,something that she thought that she would never have a connection to.

=> her, something (missing space)

@Gamen

Hello,

This has been corrected. Thank you for reporting

I’m not sure if this is applicable as the issue appears to be in the original work.

The author revealed that Yahagi and Michelle were engaged in volume 3 part 1.

“… I’ll also introduce you as my fiancée.” That was right. We were finally engaged.

Later, in volume 4 part 9, Yahagi reveals that he plans on proposing that evening:

What was going to happen when I proposed to her after this?

If JNC has authorization, the plot hole could be resolved via modifying the 2nd quote to say that Yahagi is setting a wedding date.

V7P4 ~70%: "It's onlu lasts one generation."

Should probably be It only?

V6P1
~74%

as he finally yelled, still writhing over the ground

Apologies if it is okay as it is, but maybe wrong word / missing an 'on'? writhing over the ground->writhing on the ground
(or writhing over the ground->writhing over on the ground)

@MFDelta said in An Introvert’s Hookup Hiccups - Corrections Topic:

v11p7 ~85%:

I had heard on some trivia show that Finland was where Santa Clause was from, but who knows really.

The Santa Clause was filmed in the United States and Canada by Hollywood Pictures, though it is possible that Yoshin does not know this

It's a real classic, that one.

V1 P11 (80% - 11th line from bottom of page)

A number of candidates had forth,...

A number of candidates had come forth,...

(Better syntex for understanding)

@jjyoung Just curious where you see that it should expire on Sep 15 because when I hover over the parts it shows they expired Aug 15 which seems to fall in line with the general expiration rule of the 15th of the month following the release of the ebook.

Oops. I assume it's too late to fix since the book has already been available in print for a bit now, but was re-reading Volume 11 and noticed a continuity error.

Halfway through Volume 11, Chapter 3, the family starts talking about an increase in parts of the animal population, and speculating that it's because they killed two bears. Diana later comments, "I've only seen one once."

In the novels, Forge Eizo has actually killed three bears. Eizo soloed the first bear in Volume 1. They killed a second bear in Volume 4 when a bear invaded Jolanda's home (Diana actually dealt the killing blow on that one). And the third bear in Volume 5 was how they got Lucy.

It's probably a discontinuity from the original web version of the story, since I believe Jolanda was a new character introduced for the novelization. I assume in the web version there were only two bears, and they forgot to correct the count in the Volume 11 reflections.

10.9

Tahara gestured to the variable mountain of food and drinks, all part of the hoard they’d confiscated from the central nobles

“veritable”

v6p12:

1% - The first group stood on the front line with bitter expressions, fighting though they weren’t really used to it. -> Missing word(?): […] fighting as though they weren’t really […]