@karasutengu it's implied. They're thugs, and in less posh circles it's common to leave the action implied instead of using correct English, especially when he already suggested it in the first half of the sentence.

V4 P8: There’s an extra quotation mark in the beginning of this paragraph.

“”Even those devoted to the Light faith are still demonkin. As long as you’re a demonkin, you can’t sever your connection to the Almighty. But the way you spoke back there, it sounds like the Disciples of Light, a human-based faith, has found a way to sever the connection between Chiyou and demonkin. I can’t ignore that.”

For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

V 10 P 6 - "Precedent really has meaning" should be "has no meaning". It's unprecedented in the following paragraph.

@pcj said in orrections to Vol 13:

@karasutengu that just means it's been a while since they made any mistakes for anyone to report.

That, or that anyone felt engaged enough to report something. :p I’ve stopped reporting missed spaces for the most part, unless there were other things to report and I remembered where those missed spaces were. ^o^

@Valanduin said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

In the latest part the word jealous and words derived from it like jealousy is used in many places. Although it is very commonly misused (it is up there with literally), technically jealousy is when you don't want other people to have what belongs to you and envy is when you want something that belongs to you, envy would fit better in most of the places jealous appears. It wouldn't be a big deal if it was a one off because of how frequently jealous of misused, but when it is relating to the powers of the Devil of Envy being both inconsistent and incorrect with the terminology stands out a lot more.

While it is true that is one meaning of "jealous," Merriam-Webster's top definition for it also states it to mean, "hostile toward a rival or one believed to enjoy an advantage." Even stating that definition is equivalant to "envious." On the MW website, they also state that jealous can hold the same meaning as envious in the way "to describe someone who feels or shows a very strong desire for something that belongs to someone else."

https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/jealous

v7 p7

~ 20%

Not a correction so much as a formatting suggestion:

With that in mind, I opened the message.
Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.
“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

You might want to blockquote or otherwise indent the letter since it's supposed to be quoted text, e.g.:

With that in mind, I opened the message.

Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.

“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

V20 P2 (80%)

3rd line down from top of page:

...even my lady's fast stores of mana.

I believe this should read:

-->even my lady's vast stores of mana.

(This makes more sense and sounds better)

11th line up from bottom of page:

...clear the staircase in the underground hall by tomorrow at le thatest!

Correct to:

-->by tomorrow at the latest!

volume 4 Ch8 (52% in part 9)

0510: Alonson
The Eight and the Archangel seems to be all every kingdom’s NPCs

minor typo it should say the "Eighth"

Thank you for the corrections to vol 7 posted thus far.

v3p10:

72% - The preparations have been made, holy savor -> Typo: savior

V6P16

~8%

"Besides, Dolton and Miranda may well already be on the move," Cere'zhula said.

Did she really call Dalton a dolt or is that a typo?

~35%

About once a month, her financé, crown prince Elvan, would come visit.

Fiancé. And should "crown prince" be capitalized?

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

v3p8:

6% - the town of Carassa -> Carcassa (as used a bit later in this part) 25% - […] where we’d encounter the last amount of monsters, […] -> the least amount of

I know I'm likely too late to suggest any edits for this volume, but just in case this could be of use:
V11.1 P6, 60%
"In a real battle, soldiers would use heavy spears—about seven meters long by Imperial standard"
Seven meters (23 feet, or about 4x a mans height) seems a little excessive.
If instead meaning to convert from 7', then perhaps two meters might be a little more manageable.

Also, V11.1 P12, 14%
"He moved with such quick and easy steps that you'd be forgiven for forgetting he wasn't wearing heavy armour"
Wasn't -> was

V7P3 ~13%
"Caim turned his way with a smile." -> "Caim Lenka turned his way with a smile."

v5p8:

31% - How had they managed to cause so much chaos in the few months I’d be gone? -> Probable wrong word, given the tense: […] in the few months I’d been gone?

V3P7 ~67%
"I couldn't tell. No. I couldn't, but I didn't want to. This couldn't be real." -> "I couldn't tell. No. I couldn't, but I didn't want to. This couldn't be real."

V2 P3 (66% - 10th line down from top of page)

..., she intendedbe kind to him.

add space and "to" for better syntax:

---> she intended to be kind to him.