v3p10:

72% - The preparations have been made, holy savor -> Typo: savior

V7 Part 10

~58% -- "[...] In addition, the role Lord Florus was meant to play [...]" -> "In addition, the role Lady Florus was meant to play"; unless I'm horribly mistaken or missing some quirk of the original text, "Florus" there is referring to the same "Lady Florus" from the prior paragraph?

V6P16

~8%

"Besides, Dolton and Miranda may well already be on the move," Cere'zhula said.

Did she really call Dalton a dolt or is that a typo?

~35%

About once a month, her financé, crown prince Elvan, would come visit.

Fiancé. And should "crown prince" be capitalized?

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

V2P1 16%:

chastity of his backend

If this is a computing pun then it's fine, but if not, "back end" with a space would be better.

V5 P6 (48% - End of 13th line up from bottom of page)

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I believe this would sound better as:
What're you guys gonna do...

4.3:

The mages flew into a range and aimed their staffs at me.

The mages flew into a rage and aimed their staffs at me.
The mages flew into range and aimed their staffs at me.

Have to check the raws to determine which.
Unless, of course, it's a lovely play on words and quite deliberate.

v3p8:

6% - the town of Carassa -> Carcassa (as used a bit later in this part) 25% - […] where we’d encounter the last amount of monsters, […] -> the least amount of

I know I'm likely too late to suggest any edits for this volume, but just in case this could be of use:
V11.1 P6, 60%
"In a real battle, soldiers would use heavy spears—about seven meters long by Imperial standard"
Seven meters (23 feet, or about 4x a mans height) seems a little excessive.
If instead meaning to convert from 7', then perhaps two meters might be a little more manageable.

Also, V11.1 P12, 14%
"He moved with such quick and easy steps that you'd be forgiven for forgetting he wasn't wearing heavy armour"
Wasn't -> was

V7P3 ~13%
"Caim turned his way with a smile." -> "Caim Lenka turned his way with a smile."

v5p8:

31% - How had they managed to cause so much chaos in the few months I’d be gone? -> Probable wrong word, given the tense: […] in the few months I’d been gone?

V3P7 ~67%
"I couldn't tell. No. I couldn't, but I didn't want to. This couldn't be real." -> "I couldn't tell. No. I couldn't, but I didn't want to. This couldn't be real."

V2 P3 (66% - 10th line down from top of page)

..., she intendedbe kind to him.

add space and "to" for better syntax:

---> she intended to be kind to him.

V9 P1 24% - two adorable smiles began bouncing around - smiles should be slimes

V2P8
though she sometimes said some words that were too difficult for me to grasp, such as, "I wonder how I can get some good old fan service to happen. Maybe Prince Raph would be happy if he got a good glimpse of my panties?"

I think you should probably reword the whole sentence around the word "pantsushot".
Like "Maybe Prince Ralph would be glad if I gave him a pantsushot from time to time?"

Part 8, at 69%, pretty sure the wrong name was used. All 4 of them are supposed to have attacked, yet Franz's name is used twice. I think the first one, where Franz ised magic, as supposed to be Connie instead, as Franz was running with a sword at the time.

V14P8 91%: All six types of ogres - Red Ogre, Blue Ogre, Yellow Ogre, White Ogre, Yellow Ogre, and Black Ogre : Yellow Ogre is listed twice instead of some other colour.

V5 P9
(9% - 9th line down from top of page)

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Add missing "she" to sentence

(91% - 11th line down from top of page)

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"First and foremost" - most importantly; more than anything else.
e.g. "I'm first and foremost a writer"

v4p7:

64% - Even in death, he had been robbed his dignity. -> Probable missing word: he had been robbed of his dignity. I think that some versions of english (British? Another American dialect? Other?) sometimes don't use “of”, but it probably should be there in this case.

@Jojajones We're witnessing the cannonization of a pun. Seen it used in another book title already. A bit blunt if you ask me, but to each generation their sense.