V5 P7 (29% - 3rd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "someone" to "somewhere" as in:
She's hiding away somewhere safe, isn't she?!

@00-biting said in The Apothecary Diaries - Corrections Topic:

"Yes, my bodyguard here took her time," said Jinshi.

yes it is obvious this is Maomao talking and not Jinshi.
There is even a reference to him feeling carefree (ref to LN5 epilogue)

V14 P3 (88% - 13th line down from bottom of page)

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Correct "Prcs" to Orcs.

Wails are definitely not large marine mammals .

V14, P7, around 95%

“Natrurally Naturally, we realize that this alone is not sufficient,”

Extra letter.

V2 p6 multiple coach should be coachman

V1P12 52%:
SIlence -> Silence
The letter i should be in lower case.

5.6:

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything.

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything."

v2p11 57%

Even if it were a lie.I knew

needs a space after the full stop

V1 P1, 81%
"Anyway, speaking of family, Vanitas had two little sisters—twins, in fact. They both had opposite personalities..."
Very minor, but 'both' seems superfluous (can't have just one with an opposite personality, but the other doesn't)

P3, 4%
"If one were truly skilled, it was also possible to transform into animals, monsters, or inorganic matter—but only few could do that.
'but only few' ->
'but only a few'
or 'but only few'

71% “To that end, I’m ready to pay any price,” I declared. Then after a short pause, I said, “ Christina.”
Extra space in front of 'Christina'

P4, 15%
"Being slaves, I never shared a meal with them."
Stared at this a little, but I can no longer tell if this is currently fine as is or not. If not:
'I had never shared...'
or 'I never shared meals...'

50%
"Shuka was a woman who looked like in her early twenties"
Could just be phrasing I'm not used to, otherwise:
'who looked like she was in her early twenties'
or 'who looked to be in her early twenties'

P5, 92%
"Ms. Ashley was such a worrier. We [had] had this conversation multiple times already."

V6 P5 (25% - 14th line up from the bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "Boar" meat?

(31% - 5th line up from bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "to snow"?

v12 p7

~55%

“And one more important thing...” Annette lowered her voice as she stared at the other two ladies. “This mission is extremely dangerous. Please keep that in mind. If either of your identities are revealed, your lives may be in danger.” There was a moment of silence before she went on. “But I have faith that you can complete this mission. Lady Diana, you are the sister of Count Eimoor and the Rose of the Duel Grounds. Lady Helen, you’re known as the Lightning Strike. I firmly believe that the two of you are perfect for this mission.”

Doesn't everyone know who Diana and Helen are? If so, maybe that should be your missions or your jobs or your real purposes or something like that?

@groudonvert-own27br That was just a regular commercial treaty. It wasn't a magical contract. Friede probably just figured he wouldn't get caught. And he also is just monumentally stupid and lazy.

v33p7 ~50%:

Yamiru Suun had coated herself in giba blood and tried to pressure into marrying her.

pressure into -> pressure me into

V8 P10 (69% - 11th line up from bottom of page)

All my worries are on.

All my worries are gone.

V1P7

70%: It was an investment, and investments could be recuperated. -> That should be recouped, no?

V2 P9 starting at 50%:
One of the jobs is labeled 'spy' although it was previously called 'scout'. And I think 'scout' is way more fitting.

For the published Light Novel, in 5: (End of the Incident) It All Starts with a Traditional Japanese Band; is it intended that Laviange claimed that she was a magic beast? This chapter is from her perspective but we have 2 sentences which infer this.

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred my sacred beast powers to him."

My sacred beast powers infers that she posses or is a sacred beast.

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only I, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

In this sentence Lavi is directly calling herself a sacred beast. I only ask as this seems an odd thing to suddenly start saying. Since she is heretofore a sacred beast contract holder, and not a sacred beast herself. This comes across as a attribution mistake of the status of sacred beast not for Lavi but for Captain Dread.

Suggested changes:

"and formed a contract with the captain, I’d transferred their sacred beast powers to him."

"It was a method I’d thought of after I’d contracted with the captain: something only he, and not the other sacred beasts, could do."

What boggles me is this appears to of been changed from the more sensible wording in the prepub.

Additionally several times the word pact-bearer is doubled as "pact-bearerpact-bearer"

Finally I have to ask: Does replacing the chant of Death! Death! Death! with Mortis! Mortis! Mortis! make more sense? It just seems a bit odd to make a death metal plant use more obscure words that dont quite directly mean Death but instead reference Mortality. IE Is captain dread purposefully being obscure in the original Japanese?

Is there an other correction topic for this series ?
Two mistakes I found in part one of volume 12 (76%) :

Alo went through the gate first while the two girls followed, both clearly doubting Alo's sincerity.

Both should be written Aloh like the rest of the chapter.

@pcj said in orrections to Vol 13:

@karasutengu that just means it's been a while since they made any mistakes for anyone to report.

That, or that anyone felt engaged enough to report something. :p I’ve stopped reporting missed spaces for the most part, unless there were other things to report and I remembered where those missed spaces were. ^o^