9.5

“Hopefully the stitchs will help

“stitches”

Thor’s Lance—the disastrous Lightning spell that sent the Demon Lord fleeing

In part 3, the chant the demon lord actually had to dodge was

“For my blood—for my soul—bless me with your crown of light! Thoronation!”

I think the name that actually matches the spell is “Thor's Corona,” Thor being the god of lightning and corona being Latin for “crown” and also a phenomenon caused by lightning.

In any case, the name should be consistent.

Someone killed him already!

“kill him”

v2p7:

4% - […] levels of wealth and power,, but his beloved […] -> One too many commas: power, but 20% - At Opal outburst […] -> Missing possessive: At Opal’s outburst 22% - […] she was afraid of Beth losing consciousness again. Opal had never been nor had given birth […] -> Opal had never been what? Unconscious? Pregnant? Something else? 35% - You refused to abandon a fool like, and even extended a helping hand… -> Missing word: “a fool like me”, presumably. 86% - […] *hiding the truth.Not lying. -> Missing space between sentences. 89% - […] and do a full-blown interview of the place. -> Eh? An interview with [the populace of] the place? Or is he doing a review of Manthest? Maybe the original works, but it reads weirdly. :p

V1P2, around 32%:

Sorry, Michelle, but I’m very surethat’s sure that's all there is to it.

It is missing a space between "sure" and "that".

V1P3, around 75%:

Probably best to think of them bearing a resemblance in name onlye only.

@SomeOldGuy Thank you for catching this!

6.4

let’s bury the old privies and make some new ones.
We’ve got one by the kitchen range, over at the well,

Gross. Does the author not realize where well water comes from? Or where privy juices go?

V3P11:

Iris-san agreed. As things stand

Iris-san agreed. "As things stand

v26p9:

slip into the settlement,but the intruder

slip into the settlement, but the intruder

Not sure if v16p7 is supposed to be out today; it's on the calendar, but going to a 404, and on the series page it's not available yet. OTOH when I hover over the Part 7 button, the tooltip not only says that it'll be released on 2024-10-30, but it says Part 8; the other two buttons are similar, with Part 8 saying Part 9 in the tooltip and Part 9 saying Part 10, so something seems hinky, like a part got gobbled up.

Vol. 3, Part 3

The red slime shot fireballs at the organic mass to no effect—the slimes were inflammable thanks to their current wet and sticky coating.

Inflammable means flammable. If the intent here is to say that the slimes are currently not flammable because they're wet, a different word should be used. Nonflammble is the most common.

Vol 3 p 6:

began drilling the clams -> began grilling the clams

2.7

Tigaro was hiding
her breasts and everything below

Stray paragraph break.

V9P1 14%:

its bells peeling jubilantly.

peeling -> pealing

26%:

If only Edgar's behavior was as impeccable as his wit.

was -> were

v3p3:

8% - […] once he got a taste of this.Sharon had likely […] -> Missing space between sentences: taste of this. Sharon

Vol 12 Part 3: Cafe ole -> cafe au lait, surely.

vol 7 part 1
63%

"We should run into those Heims soon!" the knight shouted.

This ethnic term ought to be replaced with Heimese / Heimites.
edit:
again at 68% as well.
again at vol 7 part 2 at 45%

After p2
[50%] They had all assumed that meant she had been killed by Yogiri and therefore could have made it back to their world -> I assume this should be hadn't been killed by him

After p3
[11%] Hartuo had experience from the other world -> Haruto

Just picked this up, bought the V1 ebook and found that the ToC is slightly messed up so Part 2 appears as a child of Part 1. Thank goodness for Sigil...

1.14

Have the assault ants lead the charge using their flamethrowers, and the infantry ants sweeping up after them,”

Either “lead” and “sweep” or “leading” and “sweeping”.

Since they had no idea where, exactly, the army currently was, they couldn’t send a carrier pigeon to it.

Does the author think you give the pigeon GPS coordinates? Although, this is a video game; maybe you do.

v9p8:

Cyclopes or cyclops? They’re both being used in this part. or is the former just the plural of the latter? Kinda seems that way. … Yeah, just should have asked Google. It’s the plural. 95% - You can’ take it back now! -> Style of speaking, or missing letter: can’t