v1p7:

51% - If I can’t kill when she’s queen -> Missing word? If I can’t kill her when she’s queen

@eggnog said in In Another World with Household Spells - Corrections Topic:

V6P8 18% and everywhere else that "force" is mentioned:

"Force is what makes things work," I explained."[...] When force is applied to the food we eat, it becomes energy to move our bodies. A growing flower uses force to take energy from the sun[...]"

This is a very strange definition of force. The physics concept of force is a push or pull on a object, with a magnitude and direction. It's not the same thing as a chemical reaction which is what most of her examples sound like to me. While force is indeed applied to the food we eat when we chew it, I don't get the impression Patience is describing chewing there. Is Patience giving a meaningless explanation in Japanese, or is there another word that force might be translated as...? I think she's describing the conversion of energy from one form to another, so maaaaybe transduction? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Transducer

I agree that what she is describing is a lot closer to energy transduction than anything else.
However, given the apparently primitive state of that world's natural philosophy, and the fact that Patience is just trying to get basic concepts across to her little brothers, I had assumed that she wasn't even trying to use the terminology correctly in terms of real world physics but was just repurposing terminology for her own ends.

V10 P13, 60%
"With a bouquet of flowers in his hands that he had convinced a florist [to] put together at the break of dawn..."

V5 P1, 30%
"Reina was dextrous, so she could do anything, but she had said that Zelos was bad at it."
Seems both dextrous and dexterous are valid spellings, but with the latter being more common thought I'd make a note just in case.

While I'm noting things:
45% “This island is relatively untouched by human hands, and yet there are surprisingly many artificial things here.”
Seems a little definitive for someone with amnesia. Perhaps is -> seems (unless this happens to be a slip/foreshadowing and she knows more than she's letting on, or her subconscious coming through)

64%
"The three of them had apparently gotten stronger lately and could beat some monsters now, but when their enemies got to the rank of rabbits, they still struggled unless they were ready to sacrifice themselves to take down their foes."
This could well be me being dense, or just simply forgetting previous events, but what on earth is 'the rank of rabbits'?

Volume 8 part 4 53%

They exploited their people, imposing heavy taxes to enrich himself.

The pronouns don't match but appear to refer to the same subject, one should change. Based on context it should probably be themselves instead of himself, but changing they could make a grammatically sensible sentence.

V10 throughout i.e. part 8 63%:

Camellia has been used constantly when referring to events in Hydrangea, as well as the events that actually took place in Camellia. I don't know if the issue is with the original or confusion from the translator, but it's very confusing to the reader.

V13P4

50% Its "trunk" (if you could call it that) was pyramid-shaped and there was a glowing gem set where its belly button should be. -> While not technically wrong, the more common term would be 'torso', no?

v6p2 ~13%:

"But desire is anotherright?"

anotherright? -> another, right?

Volume 6, part 7:

8% butand that it was had been Mr Fisher's idea
16% That did proved that Ellie
16% Bbut
16% Assuming Ellie could hear my thoughts right now, I could practically hear herwhat Ellie would say: if she could hear my thoughts right now.
16% Their jet- black darkness -> Their jet-black darkness
16% Elizbeth is a prideful woman -> Elizabeth is a prideful woman
20% I borrowed a horse from the baron's carriage. and took off with Robert and I took off in the direction of the residential district that Yoh had reported seeing Ellie and the witch in last.
24% then maybe all she was doing was using an illusion to to shape herself into whatever that meant for them--, like a perceptual distortion? -> whatever that meant for them, like a perceptual distortion?
24% full- on -> full-on
24% even if they knew, deep down, that she wasn't really the object of their affectionwoman they loved.
24% we probably can't see her "cause -> can't see her 'cause
27% "Lady Lilia," called Robert called, refusing to take his eyes off ofnot looking at Ellie for even a moment.
31% But then there was a loud clang, and Robert's sword launched snapped out of his hands.
31% I panicked, crouching to avoid getting hit, and the sword embedded itself in stabbed a the dirt of a nearby flower bed.
31% I assumed that the fight was over now that Robert had lost his weapon, but he Robert didn't take a single step back.
31% Ellie tried to move out of the way and dodge his punch, but he just kept attacking her with high kicks. She [Delete paragraph break] Ellie managed to block them with her sword hand,

This is as far as I get for now. There are so many errors in this part that I assume they continue.

V6 P5
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I believe the wording in the outlined area should be:
"magic bag"
As in:

Ciel immediately reached into her magic bag...

(62% - 7th line down from top of page)

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Correct "the" in outlined wording to "them"and remove comma...
As in:

...the priest said, leading them down the mountain path.

V2P10 ~85%

[...] to a dungeon together and clear it together!"

is bad to read.

~88%

Has a character encoding error in

[...], and it'll be just the two of us

~92%

[...] A lot's happened

Would be much better as A lot has happened.

V17 P5 75%
Gon, who was guzzling beer out of a bour that I'd filled for him.
bour=bowl
I looked up bour and all i could find was a scottish term for a cottage which i find funny, Gon would have to be full size to drink that much beer.

35.3:

hunting dog can provide us first,"Giran Ririn then added.

hunting dog can provide us first," Giran Ririn then added.

v2p9:

24% - sShe looked on the verge of tears -> Extra letter: She

V10P3 97%
WIth -> With

In volume 9 part 9, Tsuji says, "Maybe Peter Carol’s pentagram ritual... No, maybe it needs to be more abstract than that." His name is Peter Carroll, not Peter Carol. He wrote Liber Null and Liber Kaos and he was one of the founders of the Illuminates of Thanateros. He's a niche figure, so I understand not knowing about him, but he is a specific real guy who's surname is spelled with two rs and two ls.

v5 p3

~54%

It helped thatCarter had thrown himself forward to avoid taking the full impact of the strike.

=> that Carter

v10 p8
~1%

Even back in Beaden, Curuni had carried the saberboars on the assumption that she wouldn’t be fighting—it was unreasonable to ask anyone to join a battle

¶ carrying so much weight around.“Mmmgh...”

Inappropriate paragraph break.

@SomeOldGuy said in An Introvert’s Hookup Hiccups - Corrections Topic:

V13P6 8%:
we realized that we alsO needed to
also

65%:
WHen it came to me
When

Thank you for catching this!!

Volume 2 Part 8
48% your worthless little beast -> you worthless little beast