v7 p7

~ 20%

Not a correction so much as a formatting suggestion:

With that in mind, I opened the message.
Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.
“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

You might want to blockquote or otherwise indent the letter since it's supposed to be quoted text, e.g.:

With that in mind, I opened the message.

Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.

“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

V20 P2 (80%)

3rd line down from top of page:

...even my lady's fast stores of mana.

I believe this should read:

-->even my lady's vast stores of mana.

(This makes more sense and sounds better)

11th line up from bottom of page:

...clear the staircase in the underground hall by tomorrow at le thatest!

Correct to:

-->by tomorrow at the latest!

Thank you for the corrections to vol 7 posted thus far.

v3p10:

72% - The preparations have been made, holy savor -> Typo: savior

V3P9, 61%: “let me eat thiいんs bastard”

v3p8:

6% - the town of Carassa -> Carcassa (as used a bit later in this part) 25% - […] where we’d encounter the last amount of monsters, […] -> the least amount of

I know I'm likely too late to suggest any edits for this volume, but just in case this could be of use:
V11.1 P6, 60%
"In a real battle, soldiers would use heavy spears—about seven meters long by Imperial standard"
Seven meters (23 feet, or about 4x a mans height) seems a little excessive.
If instead meaning to convert from 7', then perhaps two meters might be a little more manageable.

Also, V11.1 P12, 14%
"He moved with such quick and easy steps that you'd be forgiven for forgetting he wasn't wearing heavy armour"
Wasn't -> was

V2 P3 (66% - 10th line down from top of page)

..., she intendedbe kind to him.

add space and "to" for better syntax:

---> she intended to be kind to him.

V9 P1 24% - two adorable smiles began bouncing around - smiles should be slimes

V2P8
though she sometimes said some words that were too difficult for me to grasp, such as, "I wonder how I can get some good old fan service to happen. Maybe Prince Raph would be happy if he got a good glimpse of my panties?"

I think you should probably reword the whole sentence around the word "pantsushot".
Like "Maybe Prince Ralph would be glad if I gave him a pantsushot from time to time?"

Part 8, at 69%, pretty sure the wrong name was used. All 4 of them are supposed to have attacked, yet Franz's name is used twice. I think the first one, where Franz ised magic, as supposed to be Connie instead, as Franz was running with a sword at the time.

V5 P9
(9% - 9th line down from top of page)

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Add missing "she" to sentence

(91% - 11th line down from top of page)

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"First and foremost" - most importantly; more than anything else.
e.g. "I'm first and foremost a writer"

v4p7:

64% - Even in death, he had been robbed his dignity. -> Probable missing word: he had been robbed of his dignity. I think that some versions of english (British? Another American dialect? Other?) sometimes don't use “of”, but it probably should be there in this case.

@Jojajones We're witnessing the cannonization of a pun. Seen it used in another book title already. A bit blunt if you ask me, but to each generation their sense.

Volume 7 - Part 11:

[74%] I only tagged alone this time >> should be along

Volume 7 - Part 12:

[95%] on the head.She looked >> needs a space

V2P3, 65%: “that leads us [to] today”
P4, 87%: “However, that's not a problem if I get just the one tocome running.”
P9, 8%: “A present's not just something you just give them at that's it” - and

Can Two-Law Tyrant be changed to Two-Law Usurper? The story will explain why he's called an usurper. Plus, there will be another character that uses Tyrant, so this would help prevent confusion.

V2 P2 (16% - 5th line down from top of page)

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Just FYI from Merriam-Webster Dictionary online:
Sneaked is the original past tense form of sneak, but in the late 1800s, the alternative past tense form snuck began making its way into American English. It is now very common and is considered standard.

V10 P1 35% "heir to the [Wayne] family headship." -> Wynne

@alahue this story definitely needs something like a tragedy tag to give people a heads up on what they're getting in to.
Many people don't enjoy being blind sided with

spoiler
At the same time, people who do love it and are specifically looking for these kinds of stories don't have any way to tell that this story will scratch their itch