V3 P7 89%
"and their families who fell in the Girrad territory - let's take revenge together"
Girrad -> Girard

V3 P8, 65%
"You're too weak to beat me!" Seravimia lighty thrust me away with her hand
Lighty -> lightly

V11P9 13%:

"Lord Ashenbert," Raven had joined them, "might I ask that you unhand Mr. Nico?"

"Raven had joined them" isn't a dialog tag so it should be in a separate sentence. (Or maybe it could be rephrased to accompany a dialog tag, but I can't think of a way to do that gracefully).

V11P10 28%:
Oughted -> Oughtred

@faye-d Ah, ok. Thanks for the explanation.

V2 P10, 63%
"None of the people I curse broke for had suffered..."
Sounds odd to me as is, though might work. If not, perhaps 'I broke the curse for' or similar instead

Hi! Series editor here. Thank you both catching that missing quotation mark! I usually upvote corrections I've incorporated into the text, which I thought I did last week, but I might've forgotten to hit save or something. Anyway, it should be fixed in part 1 now.

V1P12 12%

I couldn’t afford to waste resources on broken equipment.
> Driven by that

On the site in my Chome browser on iOS, it looks like equipment.Driven but when I copy paste, there is a line break between them as shown above. Same as the previous part.

59%
“I see.”
I understood what he was getting at. But—
“I want this to be a formal request.”
I looked him in the eye …
I see”I -> I see” I
request.”I -> request.” I

“… him.
Even from afar..”
him.
Even -> him.
 Even

“… item: a jar.
More specifically, it was a Jar of Thirst…”
jar.
More -> jar.
 More

71%
“… falling steadily since early that morning,. long enough now that both…”

morning,. long -> morning, long

“… window.
Come to think of it …”
window.Come -> window. Come

There’s at least 5 more of these in the last couple pages, as well as a comma at the end of a sentence instead of a period. Not worth going through and listing them at this point.

V16 P5 9% "They were right [beShind] me just a second ago!" -> a wild S appeared

With the Age Gap Gone
Page 4 capitalized letter in "Looked" should not be capitalized
Reads as "I Looked at Lord Helena"

V7 P3 (0% - end of last sentence on page)

Hey Lily. Why do you care so little about fashion?

Hey Sara.

Shouldn't this be 'Sara' since she's the one they are trying to get clothed. Besides, the five who went to the women's clothing store were: Stella, Sara, Ikki, Alisiun, and Shizuku. There was no Lily (unless it's a nick-name for Sara).

V8P1 77% Addyjust -> Addy just

The following is causing some debate over on the main forum:

"Until then, if Zen and Elysia could possibly produce an heir, it'd be some peace of mind for the Leadon family," said Yohia.

Perhaps it could be reworded to make it clear whether the heir being discussed is a Leadon heir or an imperial heir.

Volume 2 Part 9
23% manaed -> managed
31% seen to familiar -> seem so familiar
47% [grammar] me and Maria -> Maria and I

2.9:

Why had she been unable to she become the sort of person someone would love?

Why had she been unable to become the sort of person someone would love?

There's a multiple line section that makes no sense, and I'm damned if I'm transcribing all of it.
So here's the specific line that stands out as "Huh?" to me.

In the end, the maid simply gave her a bright smile. "You'd like to do so even if saying so is impertinent?"

It's like there should be something else right before that line, something missing, because as it is there's no proper lead in to this.
Or it could be that the line is wonky in itself.

10.12

Wridra dragged me forward with her vice grip and freakish strength.

The metaphorical tool is the “vise”. Vice is sin.

V2 P9, 11%

Daniel walked over to Elizabeth and Remilena --> Daniel walked over to Westalia and Remilena

Volume 4 - Part 10:

[70%] other girl’sactions >> needs a space

V5P7 75%:

Yet after this, it is not for myself that I must worry about.

Either "for" or "about" can stay, but they shouldn't both be there.

at vol 7 part 3 at around 80% is this part

High-Speed Jonathan’s carriage went faster than Zelos’s Harley-Sanders Model 13, if not faster

but i just sounds weird shouldnt be it "as fast"

Volume 8, part 4

Ruri accepted that Chi saying it wasn't his forte meant that he **couldn't ** do it, but she assumed that he had no interest in making the effort.

Was this supposed to imply that Chi could do it if he made the effort?

v7p8:

1% - The two of us were smacked across the bottoms with paper pans. -> What is a paper pan? Should that be “paper fans”? 24% - Lilit wore an angelic dress -> Lilith