V13 P14, 16%
"Ishucaa was the temple’s head priest, and yet she hadn’t known a thing about this passageway."
Ishucaa -> Ishuca

56%
"The Wing had used the return device on the seventh floor"
Wing -> Jade Wings (or possibly just Wings, though I don't recall seeing their team name shortened that way)

61%
"This locked Kaho in the moment of deep thought."
Seems slightly off to me. Perhaps instead: "This locked [or knocked? or sent?] Kaho into a moment of deep thought."

V5 P7 (29% - 3rd line up from bottom of page)

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Change "someone" to "somewhere" as in:
She's hiding away somewhere safe, isn't she?!

P6V1, 99%: “Mathrew” - Matthew

v4p3 ~35%:

Though I wanted to include Nelly as part of my friend group, she was now clearly drawing a line between herself and the other children, taking her manners more seriously even than Mia did.

even than -> than even.

V17P3

Orania ran, desperately chasing after Yanna and Kiryl in the cramped back allies of Ganudos.

allies -> alleys

Light Novel Volume 4 official release.
Special Story 1: I’d Like to Blame It on the Alcohol, 90%:

“Say, Scuba. You saw that Farseer guy before the race, right?”

Should say "Say, Scuna. You saw that Farseer guy before the race, right?”

v03 release: character profiles

Three different characters are described as "Shenley's father" in the character profiles section for the Holy Maple Leaf Empire.

v2p2 4%

Still, they did share some things in common

Sounds like it should be did have some things in common

Volume 4, Part 5:

[~70%]

"Tee hee. I guess it's my turn, huh?"
Gori had only been dodging Rand's attacks, but she suddenly stopped and said, "Tee hee. I guess it's my turn, huh?"

Confused if this is intentional or actually redundant. I'm guessing the first one actually needs to be removed.

Vol 10 part 3
88% in "so the JDSF probably wouldn't have been willing to adjust their schedule."

Shouldn't this be JSDF or JDAG? there isn't any prior use of this acronym

@00-biting said in The Apothecary Diaries - Corrections Topic:

"Yes, my bodyguard here took her time," said Jinshi.

yes it is obvious this is Maomao talking and not Jinshi.
There is even a reference to him feeling carefree (ref to LN5 epilogue)

v3p13:

92% - Nina. who had come across a mother who’d lost her child, -> Wrong punctuation: Nina, who had

V2P2

"She hired adventurers and sent them after her opponent in the election's apprentice, right?"

This is a "garden path" sentence. Intended meaning:

She hired adventurers and {sent them after {her opponent in the election}'s apprentice}, right?

but is most naturally parsed (when you don't know how it is going to end) as something like

She hired adventurers and {sent them after her opponent} in the {election's apprentice}, right?

Please reword to something like
"She hired adventurers and sent them after the apprentice of her opponent in the election, right?"

V4P12, 4%:

They were currently on a trip to visit their **granddaughter**, who had moved to the port town when she married. "We have a fantastic **grandchild**, but we've been so busy, we've never had a chance to meet her. We're so excited!" "She's almost three years old now!"

They're either visiting their daughter, or it's their great-grandchild who is 3, because I doubt their granddaughter married at 3.

V6 P5, 34%
"Kano don't let any information slip about [topic]."
Don't quite know what would fit in there, but sentence looks to end short.

V4 P7 (56% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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Replace "his" with "her"
e.g. - Sara crossed her arms

V5 P1 (33% - 16th line down from top and 14th line up from bottom of page)

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Shouldn't there be a "you" between "didn't" and "tell"?
(as in: why didn't you tell us...)

V14 P3 (88% - 13th line down from bottom of page)

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Correct "Prcs" to Orcs.