V1, P1, around 39%:

one where the divide between commoners and nobility was slowly erodingaway eroding away

Missing space

Arc 1 Volume 7 - Part 8:
[5%]

On that day, the sixth since the fall of Crystal Palace,

Maybe sixth day? It feels incomplete.

Arc 1 Volume 7 - Part 12:
[14%]

"I have no idea what you're talking about, but sure, if you say.

if you say so.

Volume 4 - Part 7:
[56%]

"I exchange, I just ask that you handle the winner's prize as well," I said

(1) I > In
(2) Missing a period at the end of the sentence. said.

Volume 4 - Part 9:
[18%]

"Next up is bathrooms," I said.

(1) The subject is plural. is > are. Could be rephrased as: "Next up are the bathrooms,"
(2) The context just right before this sentence was talking about baths. So using bathrooms to refer to the toilets immediately right after makes it confusing. Since the facility name is already "Public Restroom", it might be better to just use the same term: restrooms.

[59%]

We've got a foot shortage on our hands, but they seem to be just fine!"

Typo. Should be food.

v1p2:

82% - I didn’t hear anything more about Win’s little vigilante game -> It’s been Wyn many times before and afterwards.

V10, P10, around 74%:

From here, she’d gone west to Camella Camellia,

Missing letter.

V1P1, 33%: "he was still little something of an outsider"
70% "it was bustling with the activity [of] morning training.'
76%: "Kenji checked the readings of [a] yin-yang gauge"

V1P2, 18%: "The receptionist put a bundle of banknotes on the counter, each worth a costly five yen [...] Having confirmed that there were indeed five one-yen notes" - either there are multiple ¥5 notes or five ¥1 notes, but both of these things cannot be true.

V2 P8 (75% - 5th & 6th lines down from top of page)

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Replace fought with taught for proper syntax.

18.1

I took a step back and accessed my work as a whole.

“assessed”

v1p2 ~5%:

"Ah, I see youâ€TMre excluding yourself on our account," he said.

Holy mojibake, Batman!

Likewise at 68%, 74%, 76%, 79%, 87%, and 97%, exact same style of apostrophe explosion.

V10P3 97%
WIth -> With

In volume 9 part 9, Tsuji says, "Maybe Peter Carol’s pentagram ritual... No, maybe it needs to be more abstract than that." His name is Peter Carroll, not Peter Carol. He wrote Liber Null and Liber Kaos and he was one of the founders of the Illuminates of Thanateros. He's a niche figure, so I understand not knowing about him, but he is a specific real guy who's surname is spelled with two rs and two ls.

v5P1p4:

82% - […] why were some of Estavarde’s people chasing me […] -> Typo: Estaverde, as its spelled everywhere else in this part 91% - […] sometimes made for fierce arguments across vertical plains […] -> Wrong spelling: planes

V8.2 P10, 67%
"After he had protected her from the Zone 3 juggernaut, she’d asked him what she could do for him, when the amount he deserved was far beyond his ability to pay."
If I've followed along with the sentence correctly, his -> her.

v10p6 ~39%:

The reality was that I was an old woman inside, so that could be why we were able to understand each other or at least be on a somewhat similar page.

old woman -> old fogey?

We were discussing this on the JNC discord a bit, to the best of our recollections, previously Nia has stated that she's unsure of what gender she was in her previous life, whereas here she seems to be taking a more concrete stance on her gender.

If that's what the Japanese translates out to then that's well and good, but we figured it was worth double checking. If not, a more gender-neutral term like fogey would be appropriate. She's certainly called herself as such in the past, such as in v3:

v3p4 ~82%:

Honestly, I wished that the real Nia Liston got to survive rather than an old fogey like me.

Volume 3 Part 8
34% herwashed -> washed