@Crey said in After-School Dungeon Diver - Correction Topic:

@Geezer-Weasalopes said in After-School Dungeon Diver - Correction Topic:

5.2

Skrae or Skrael?
Both get used. It's been long enough I don't recall which it should be.

As far as I remember, the shorter form is a nickname that she asked Akira to use.

Urg.
One presumes the raws are clear on the differing spellings.
And that if we read through without long breaks it would stay fresh in the reader's mind.

Here's hoping your memory is correct!

v6p1:

35% - […] in my official capacity as emperor. from the Empire’s […] -> Missing capitalization: From the 36% - […] for using their troops to go to war war with a third party. -> Too many wars going on: go to war with 60% - […] and was honestly a bit of a pain But I ended up stranded […] -> Missing period? Or missing comma with lower case “but” making a reeaallly long sentence. :) 62% - the emperor’s living space was located far back. -> Perhaps “farther back”?

Volume 13 Part 9
35% missing piece of our puzzle -> missing piece of the puzzle
36% come in hand while -> come in handy while
36% a shrew move -> a shrewd move Ingraman got this one
45% I'd be Sae -> I'd bet Sae

@strangeattractor said in Trials and Tribulations - Corrections Topic:

"When it's a hundred coins you're after, ask for two and settle for what you actually want."

I'm puzzled about the meaning of this phrase. Perhaps you could check the original Japanese, or add context.

When I read that, I had a similar interpretation as @xdbx did in the main thread: When it’s a (one) hundred coins you’re after, ask for two (hundred) and settle… There’s an unspoken word or two.

V1 P3, 26%
"She's just keep on like that and make her team the strongest in Heidelberg"
This doesn't quite sound right. Perhaps either:
"She's just to keep on like that to make her team the strongest in Heidelburg"
or
"She's just kept on like that and made her team the strongest in Heidelburg"

33%
"Pinanora... what kind of example is that?"
Unless he's stuttering, Pinanora -> Pianora

33%
"R-Right now?" Sashe asked. "But it's already dark."
Sashe -> Sasha

59%
"I'm Pianorra. Nice to meet the both of you."
Pianorra -> Pianora

74%
"That day was also a night like this"
Comes across a bit oddly. My best quick fix might be:
"That day was also much like tonight"

P4, 11%
"What?" she asked, sensing Hyse's presence.
It kinda works, but as she entered his area rather that the other way around, perhaps 'sensing Hyse's gaze/attention' might fit better

V6 P5 (25% - 14th line up from the bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "Boar" meat?

(31% - 5th line up from bottom of the page)

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Shouldn't this be "to snow"?

V9 part 9
67%-71% Mobile view

Well, not to brag, but the hands Akashi were gripping right now had already raised ten billion krams

It's not ten billion, it's only 1 billion that she gathered throughout the year. Why is this keep on happening?

V6 P11, 76%
"Only after I saw Kaeda fall down in front of me..."
Kaeda -> Kaede

v12p10:

67% - Some stories were included that would make any other person wouldn’t find remotely funny, -> Extra words? My brain doesn’t like that phrasing for the moment, at least. Maybe: Some stories were included that any other person wouldn’t find remotely funny… There might be a better option.

V4P7, 73%: "he had already [lost] enough blood to render him pale"

V1 P10, 55%
"I was out doing my usual training when I spotted some footsteps that weren’t there yesterday. You were lucky. Any longer, and the snow would’ve erased you along with your tracks."
Footsteps -> footprints

V6, P3, around 71%:

Incidentally, since there was no room aboard our ship for the rest of the galley’s crew—twenty or so soldiers-cum-oarsmen from the Dosuperion Dosuperior forces—they’d remained behind with their ship to continue toward the Yabré Baronry as planned.

Wrong letter.

V6, P4, around 2%:

With the exception of military affairs, the Dosuperior family had long maintained its distance from Yugrian society. Instead of sending each new generation to participate in what it deemed to be pointless bureaucracy and inefficient education, it trained them in the Dosuperion Dosuperior style of fighting and warfare

Wrong letter.

V1 P3 (89% - 10th line up from bottom of page)

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I believe this should be "his" fangs since "Ernst had finally bared his fangs" is a metaphor.
It acts as a metaphor because it directly applies an animalistic action ("bared his fangs") to a human subject ("Ernst") to imply aggression or extreme anger, without using words like "like" or "as". (Academic Journals Online)

(Apologies to the JNC staff for this late correction submittal. I just started reading this LN a day ago)

V1P11:

90%
As he stood between the landing and first floor, she noticed wounds all over his boy.

boy --> body

Volume 21. Part 5:

26%: "I was you, ya know, supportin' her at lil' more"

37%: "Black Needles" should be "Shadow Needle". This attack's name was used both in volume 14 and volume 16.

67%: "Bibliotique" should be "Bibliotheque" like in volume 19.

v12 p7

~55%

“And one more important thing...” Annette lowered her voice as she stared at the other two ladies. “This mission is extremely dangerous. Please keep that in mind. If either of your identities are revealed, your lives may be in danger.” There was a moment of silence before she went on. “But I have faith that you can complete this mission. Lady Diana, you are the sister of Count Eimoor and the Rose of the Duel Grounds. Lady Helen, you’re known as the Lightning Strike. I firmly believe that the two of you are perfect for this mission.”

Doesn't everyone know who Diana and Helen are? If so, maybe that should be your missions or your jobs or your real purposes or something like that?

V5 P8
[90%] use ropes to secure the boats to the shore ➡ floats

Volume 13:
Page 22: Since Reinbach had already retired, it was up to Reinbach to take on any chalenges the Jamils faced -> Reinhart
page 22: if Reinbach were to overstep and involve himself too much, the other nobles might see that as weakness on Reinbach’s part -> Reinhart's

Volume 14:
Page 14: as the grave slimes' Attract Haunts skill funneled them in -> Spirits
page 66: Class-4: 120,000+ sutes -> 12,000+
Page 106: Humas offer payment when giving quests -> Humans

Volume 15:
Page 75: They called Ryoma's grandpa the God of Military Arts again. See previous comment.