Volume 16, part 7

“letting out a ferocious war as he performed his killer downward slash.”
“war” should be “roar”
16%

“Abel chuckled. “I really can’t win against you. Of course, I didn’t think having that shield would make blocking easy, but you really are in for a world of shame if you fail to properly naturalize the force. He turned towards Mia. “Hey, Mia. What are you doing here?”

This paragraph doesn’t seem right at all —I am guessing that “naturalize”
should be “neutralize” at the minimum—and possibly the speaker should switch after the first sentence and have Sion (not Abel) say
“Of course, I didn’t think having that shield would make blocking easy, but you really are in for a world of shame if you fail to properly neutralize the force.”

It makes more sense that way.

17%

14.7 - "demon world" (appears twice) - has it always been described this way? It is not a separate world so "realm" or "country" makes more sense to me.

@Poncho9761 said in The Frontier Lord Begins with Zero Subjects - Corrections Topic:

V12P4 ~0%
"It's been a day since the mother baar had..." -> "It's It'd been a day since the mother baar had..."

"...to the fact his wife chewed him out but good the day before." -> "...to the fact his wife had chewed him out but good the day before."
There are multiple ways I believe to fix the 2nd issue I'm pointing out, but this was the one based on the sentence and my preferences.

"chewed him out but good" is a form of idiomatic English, and Dias very much is an idiomatic kinda guy.
It really fit the kind of person Dias is, at least from my perspective.

V3P4 ~14%
"The room emptied as one after another their names were called..." -> "The room emptied as, one after another, their names were called..."

V3P5 ~0%
"...you can hardly have operas with orchestras." -> "...you can hardly have operas with without orchestras."
~37%
"I was a complete stranger to our selection." -> "I was a complete stranger to our selections."
~52%
"While it might not qualify a race, we could..." -> "While it might not qualify as a race, we could..."
~74%
"This was the sort of the pressure he exerted on the monsters in Mystic Forest..." -> "This was the sort of the pressure he exerted on the monsters in the Mystic Forest..."
2nd struck-through 'the' could be kept but I wouldn't personally but that's me.

V6P11
~77%

“I’m tired of sleeping outside.

Missing ending "?; outside.->outside."

V2 P6 (80% - 10th line up from bottom of page)

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The sentence prior to this one stated "the moat was one hundred meters wide" and "encompassed the ground they were running on." Therefore"moan" should be also be moat for continuation of the subject.

v9p9 ~30%:

WIth a guild so big, there was probably a lot of trouble that needed responding to, she figured.

WIth -> With.

@Geezer-Weasalopes said in Scooped Up by an S-Rank Adventurer! - Corrections Topic:

@b-scot-morgan said in Scooped Up by an S-Rank Adventurer! - Corrections Topic:

Also, wouldn't that be "tolls" rather than "toll's"?

Not in this case. Toll is a man's name, and the sentence refers to Toll's expression.

Also

v11.1 p15 ~35%

After the time I’d sent the Craving Blade off with my space-time magic, only for it to return and burn me, I realized that I would need to deal with the lingering heat. I had used it to my advantage this time and completely incinerated the enemy.

I don't remember the Craving Blade ever burning him after being transported elsewhere, back in volume 3 after he sent it off it later just reappeared by his bedside in volume 4.1, with no heat or burning involved.

Checking the source

過去に渇望の剣を空間遷移にて吹き飛ばしたが帰ってこられた反省より、熱で念入りに焼いた後に余熱の処理をかねて放逐する術式は正しく敵を消し飛ばした。

which is something vaguely to the effect of "having learned from the time when I sent the Craving Blade away with space-bending only for it to return, the spell now completely incinerates the enemy and then banishes it to deal with the residual heat, obliterating it entirely."

which would be more consistent with the events of those volumes.

It's also more consistent with what he describes himself as doing here, where the space bending is a way to dump both the enemy and the lingering heat, not the source of heat (that was the fusion reaction).

Later text in the story makes direct references to Uranus and Medusa when describing Ragna's weapon, making it clear that the author intended the katakana name ハルパー to be the harpe of Greek legend, so how will that be handled at that point in the story if the name has been instead transliterated as "Halper" now?

V5 P6, 41%
"Sark was also talking to Hikari about all kinds of things, but she didn’t seem l particularly responsive."
Erroneous 'I' to remove

v2p4 ~46%: inasmuch -> in as much

V09P08

"Teto will escort you tonight, Lady Witch! **Teto was she had to say so. **"

I have no idea what that's saying, even trying to keep in mind Teto's childish language. Maybe I'm missing something though.

a1v6p8 ~25%

"While I doubt they'd hesitate to dispatch a vicious, cruel, and evil swordsman—someone like you, for example—they'd surely feel guilty about using forge against civilians."

forge -> force.

V3 P5, 0%
"Orthat was what I'd believed long ago..."
Missing space
4%
"Seeing the illustrator featured in a recent new release I’d bought made me harbour ambitions that someday, my novel might be illustrated too."
I think I just looked at this too long and am now viewing it wrongly - but the comma is now seeming misplaced. I've convinced myself that either removing it, or instead adding another one like so '...that**,** someday**,** my...' would work better

17%
"Whatever it was seemed to flinch from the attack and retreat. A basilisk? Not a basilisk?
I'm not quite getting the repeated use of 'basilisk' here.

26%
"Where Heinz had been standing, a white rabbit with a single horn on its head charged in. Even I was capable of recognizing a unicony."
Unicony is a term I'm not familiar with. If it's not meant to be a name unique to the series, 'Almiraj' might be a fitting alternative?

35%
"“Does the prince know this woman?” Mihail asked. “Is she an acquaintance of my sister?” “Ah...well, sort of?” Heinz replied evasively.
Seems just as odd to me as previously to refer to Heinz as a prince. I'll make just this one more note of it, then stop commenting on it.

64%
"My feelings for Mira hadn't been love. But [after] so long together"

70%
"...would save me, as his subject. [I] believed he’d never abandon me..."

Volume 4 Part 8
08% She just came up did that name, didn't she? -> She just came up with that name, didn't she?
09% turn on a new leaf -> turn over a new leaf

v4 p2

~10%

I screwed the cap onto the hot water bottle. “It fits! Now I just have to see if it sealsf.”

=> seals

Vol.9 pt.10 Around 23% "fastly" appears. Fastly is not a word. You can use either fast or quickly in its place.