@Tango said in I’ll Become an Elegant Villainess! - Corrections Topic:

V2P2
~10%

Given how I’d been born to a poor noble house in the midst of a terrible downfall in my previous life, the expensive clothes and bag made me reel.

Wrong word? (Because that is describe how her new life is start and if it is isekai old life is probably not have noble house?) previous->new

I think that you misunderstood the description of her previous life. In her previous life, she was a noble from a poorer house, and her parents sent her to social events with wealthier, more powerful houses where she always felt out of place, because her clothes weren't as expensive as those from the other noble families, since her family wasn't rich. She then died at one of those social events when an earthquake occurred and wished that she hadn't just always obediently done what her parents wanted (and thus decided in her new life to try to be like the villainess in one of her favorite books).

In her current life, she has once again been born into a noble family, but her noble family this time around is doing quite well.

V2P5 ~14%

"It is because of you that Mayurelika––?" Montiera grumbled.

What's the question here? It's not like she was interrupted by something confusing

V13P3 ~13%

Leaving Dogora and Luke behind, the Summoner Keel, who stood […]

Misses a verb: the Summoner moved/went to Keel I suspect.

v1p6:

10% - And it’s scabbard. -> Unnecessary apostrophe: And its scabbard.

V6 P4 (42% - 4th line down from top of page)

..."energetic kids always made them target."

Add missing "a" between "them" and "target" for better syntax.

e.g. energetic kids always made them a target.

v14 p8

~40%

“The dungeon’s monsters are still no match for us, so we still have some leeway,” said Kaho. “In any case,we didn’t make a lot of money from our latest expedition, but we’ve gathered plenty of fruit. Would half of the pile suffice?”

case, we (missing space)

~90%

Haruka had borrowed an accessory from Illias-sama that matched her dress back when we attended that wedding reception, but we weren’t rich enough to spend money on crafting accessories that we probably wouldn’t use much. As for dresses, it would be better to just build a few when girls actually need them.

"Build" is a very unusual word to use vis-à-vis the creation of clothing. Maybe instead:

tailor create sew Even construct seems more common, see e.g. here.

v11 p4

~68%

Mech Studies lording over the other departments was one thing—even if it wasn’t the most flattering traitt—but mech knights injuring people was not to be taken lightly.

trait

V7 P5 (41% - 1st line at top of page)

She was certain he saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

Replace "he" with "she" for better syntax.

e.g. She was certain she saw a curious look in his eye as he glanced at her.

V1, P6, around 97%:

Most of the mana she’d focused hadn’t become part of the spell—nstead instead, it dissipated from her almost unceasingly.

Missing letter.

Volume 3 Part 7
04% No matter how many times Riley asked her not to address him so formally | I thought the issue was that the visiting princess was being too casual - or not formal enough. Shouldn't this sentence use informally instead? This would make the next section flow better. Shiroi got that one.
81% Sasha's initial reply to Riley asking, "Can't you bear the sight of blood?" - doesn't seem to match what she says in her follows up. This might make more sense (changes in bold): "If necessary, but there's no reason to grow accustomed to watching people being killed."

I have moved the conversation.

In the end. A suggestion has been made, and the team will decide to do what they feel is best. Thank you

V3P9 35%

"I feel like half of these frostbitten patients are just reaping what they sown."

This should use they have/they've sown.

This a a fairly minor issue, and I'm not sure if it is the reader or the formatting of the part, but on desktop I am reading in the two page spread view, but the illustration in v1p6 ~40% appears that it is supposed to be a two page spread, but it is rendering as a small image half the height of one page with a page of text on the side.

Also, the view selection button is somewhat unintuitive, there are 3 modes, a button is used to cycle through them, and the button displays a graphic and has alt text indicating what the next one is. This is a weird way to select multiple choices and I probably would have gone with 3 buttons with the current one highlighted or a drop down or something that makes it more obvious that there are 3 options and what they are.

V3P1 ~0%

[…] not by Bael, but by the true Demon King. Not against some summoned child, but by a true Hero of the world.

Shouldn't this be the same word also in the second sentence, so both against or both by?

[…] no one cared of its true meaning […]

Should be about or for.

~91%

[…] do you think Gurba's going to be much longer?"

The direct meaning would be Gurba's about to die, but the following dialog seems to imply he's just away in his workshop, so maybe going to be away or going to need?

V3P1 ~54%

[…] and attacked Ren's while his back was turned.

Probably should be Ren's horse from what happens next.

V5P7 ~73%

"Ridicuous!"

Is missing an l.

Volume 5 Part 7
35% As if here were thinking -> As if he were thinking
36% Aqua Vitae now,. and -> Aqua Vitae now, and | remove the period
44% how differently they were acting differently from yesterday ->how differently they were acting from yesterday
79% most prompting Langus to continue -> prompting Langus to continue [or] thus prompting Langus to continue

A2V1P3 ~64%

When the northern nobles had rebelled against the Kingdom of Knightly, allying themselves with Raymond, the king's treasonous younger brother, and the invading empire.

Somehow this sentence is missing what happened back then, and it also doesn't work as a continuation of the previous sentence. Seeing the last sentence of the block

That was the reason other countries viewed Abel as a strong king."

one could assume the When should be connected to the king's combat prowess, which was on display when [...], but something is missing.