@Geezer-Weasalopes

After the day’s classes, my teacher informed me that someone from the Dungeon Union had asked to see me.“
A summons from the 100th Level of Babel?”

v12p11 ~18%

"Thanks, Sophie, Allen. When we get out of here, [....]

Please double-check if this shouldn't be

Thanks, Sophie. Allen, when we get out of here, [...]

~82%

At the same time Krena readied herself to fight from atop its back.

Subject is missing.

Volume 11 part 1 96%

If Krai had achieved something Yggdra that was impossible to overlook,...

A word is missing before Yggdra, in is probably the best but for could also work.

V17 p5

"You imbecil"

It's "imbecile."

Volume 21. Part 2. 95%

"Don't go stinkin' your neck in stupid shit while I ain't watchin', got it?" > Don't go stickin' your neck in stupid shit while I ain't watchin', got it?"

V17P6

"My apologies, Your Highness. It appears I have made quite an unreasonable demand. ..."

I struggled to figure out who was speaking here. It feels Ludwigian, but please don't yank me out of the flow of the story to try to puzzle this out.

Shipping boats pass through her all the time

her -> here

V1P10
There was a fixed regiment for infantrymen training - fixed regimen

V2P3
...will likely be seceded as part... - I don't think secede is the right word here. If the peace settlement will involve conceding territory outside the southern cities to Sabat, it should probably be "annexed"

10.6

It was feeling unfairly treated as we finished wrapping the tree with tape,

“I”

v5p10 Afterword - "I think I managed to pack in quite a bit of web-exclusive content this time around" and "It looks like there are going to be more and more web-exclusive stories moving forward" - is it actually "web-exclusive", as in exclusive to the web novel? How can it be web-exclusive when it's included in the light novel?

V4 P8 (71% - 10th line down from top of page)

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Since Luke is in the feline beastfolk's village not his own, I believe the high-lighted word above should be "our" not your. It makes more sense.

e.g. the second you set foot in our village,...

@Hylebos I totally agree. With an 'I said' in there, it looks like Tear/Reid said this, but I'm pretty sure this was Nikheik's line.

V12 P14, 57%
"Vanessaa’s father had been a knight with a barony"
Vanessaa -> Vanessa

Volume 8 Part 7
16% I was nothing like -> It was nothing like
69% some odd characters show up where it is supposed to say "I don't think being my partner would bring you trouble."

V13P6 8%:
we realized that we alsO needed to
also

65%:
WHen it came to me
When

@Libri-Liberorum said in Unsung Epics of the Hero’s Journey - Corrections Topic:

"I'm not sure. If they were good enough to know they'd been made from our reaction, ..."

"Made" should be something like "noticed." (Or maybe this is some idiom I am unfamiliar with.)

Just search for “been made slang” online and you’ll get lots of results. I’m not too familiar with it, but I’ve definitely heard/read it before. :)

V6P7, 77%: "Svetlana and Kafka were openly debating about who best to make me feel and despair." - missing word, and maybe how rather than who?

v5 p3

~10%

You’d think with that being the case, the mood would be a bit more solemn—reverent—asthe new queen faced down her death.

=> as the

~53%

Stanislav was evidently quite mind-boggled. No surprise there, Leah supposed. In that dinky underground ruin, he would’ve never had the change to fit a reagent this large, let alone try one in an experiment.

Should that be chance ?

v2p5 ~26%

Outside of the container dangerous magic beasts abound, but [...]

The sentence structure feels weird. A preposition could help

The outside of the container abounded with dangerous magic beasts, but [...]

or some reordering

Dangerous magic beasts abounded outside of the container, but [...]

or it's just the use of present tense while the second half is in past tense.

~48%

[...] the goblin's head when flying [...]

Should likely be went flying.

~65%

Then there was a clang. Hyse had materialized a massive rifle.
"Barret M-82!" he said, summoning his anti-material rifle.

Somehow the order feels off, like summoning, then summoning again. Maybe

Then there was a clang. Hyse had materialized a massive weapon.
"Barret M-82!" he had said, summoning his anti-material rifle.

~78%

[...] the level of the magic beasts he fought were very high.

Either levels, or was.