V3P1 ~0%

[…] not by Bael, but by the true Demon King. Not against some summoned child, but by a true Hero of the world.

Shouldn't this be the same word also in the second sentence, so both against or both by?

[…] no one cared of its true meaning […]

Should be about or for.

~91%

[…] do you think Gurba's going to be much longer?"

The direct meaning would be Gurba's about to die, but the following dialog seems to imply he's just away in his workshop, so maybe going to be away or going to need?

V3P1 ~54%

[…] and attacked Ren's while his back was turned.

Probably should be Ren's horse from what happens next.

V5P7 ~73%

"Ridicuous!"

Is missing an l.

Volume 5 Part 7
35% As if here were thinking -> As if he were thinking
36% Aqua Vitae now,. and -> Aqua Vitae now, and | remove the period
44% how differently they were acting differently from yesterday ->how differently they were acting from yesterday
79% most prompting Langus to continue -> prompting Langus to continue [or] thus prompting Langus to continue

A2V1P3 ~64%

When the northern nobles had rebelled against the Kingdom of Knightly, allying themselves with Raymond, the king's treasonous younger brother, and the invading empire.

Somehow this sentence is missing what happened back then, and it also doesn't work as a continuation of the previous sentence. Seeing the last sentence of the block

That was the reason other countries viewed Abel as a strong king."

one could assume the When should be connected to the king's combat prowess, which was on display when [...], but something is missing.

V3P7, 4%:

Princess Edith, who had been walking merrily beside Roland, suddenly stopped. "This garden is so beautiful, Lord Riley. Is there any part of it you're particularly fond of?"

No matter how many times Riley asked her not to address him so formally, she refused to relent. He had long since given up trying to persuade her, though he still insisted on addressing her formally in turn.

from the context, should that be informally? From part 4:

Edith looked up. "Um, I visit them often. There's one I particularly like. I could take you there sometime, Lord Riley."

Silence fell over the lounge. Failing to notice the sarcasm between the two princes was troubling enough, but addressing Riley so casually without permission was an even more serious breach of etiquette.

I’m only just getting around to reading the book. The ebook’s not out here at JNC for a few hours. Did anyone get it from another retailer already? I’ll send this via email, too. I’ll add any others that haven’t already been noted (if there are any) to this post as I read the volume.

v7p2:

72% - The sight of all that flaccid flab barely contained by his oily was tough to look at. -> Missing word. Probably: barely contained by his oily skin was tough to look at. Could be something else, though.

v7p4:

Various% - Lots of instances of “divinity” (~23) and “Divinity” (~6 plus 1 capitalized when starting a sentence). I think that it’s an error when it’s a lower case “d”, but I might be overlooking some logic or a rule regarding capitalization… In v7p1, there were ~38 “Divinity”s and 0 “divinities”. In v7p2, it was ~59-0. In v7p3, ~18-0.

@Adam-Haffen Thank you sir. I had a feeling it was based on the original Japanese text.

V4P3
0%

Let’s see... It’s an object that chimes with the wind, so how about ‘wind chime?’

Maybe move ’ before question because ? is not in name? chime?’->chime’?

15.1:

When I;d checked the beehive

When I'd checked the beehive

They were merely laid inside the baskets, but carefully arranged into a lovely display.

They weren't merely laid inside the baskets, but carefully arranged into a lovely display.

Volume 14 Part 7
01% I'm here with other girls here today -> I'm here with other girls today
06% he nodded himself -> he nodded to himself - Crey got this
09% how excels at his craft -> how he excels at his craft
15% even he heard my pragmatic reply -> even [when|after] he heard my pragmatic reply - Crey got this
38% Metee's -> Metea's
42% plates of snakes -> plates of snaks - Crey got this
66% I'm gonna bring this up -> I'm not gonna bring this up - Geezer got this

V1P8 ~58% and ~90%: The earlier reference mentions royal library's repository and the latter royal library archival storage...

~58%: "Be sure to comb through the royal library's repository as well."
~90%: "The prime minister mentioned something about 'royal library archival storage.'"

Are these referring to the same part of the royal library (as I could not find another reference that would fit)? The latter is used in quotes too, so the same words should be used for both if so. (The start of P8 goes back to calling it a repository too.)

v6p3 ~27%:

Once I'd thickened it with potato starch, I threw in a generous amount of green leak tops.

leak -> leek.

V1P12
~11%

No sooner than Shizumi spoke the words, looks of horror appeared on the faces of her attendants.

Maybe missing word and wrong word? No sooner than Shizumi spoke the words, looks of horror appeared->No sooner had Shizumi spoke the words, than looks of horror appeared

~21%

Speakingly loudly, Shizumi turned to residents who lived in the manor and had come to see the cause of the commotion.

Extra letters? Speakingly->Speaking
Maybe missing word? turned to residents->turned to the residents

~21%

The retainers we disturbed by the thought of such a house turning traitor.

Wrong word / missing letters? we->were

~42%

The incessant chirping of the corporations and the rabble in Central Province has finally ceased.

Maybe wrong word? (Because the talk after is about Banda and the nobles from Shumon parliament underestimate Tsuguho and they try to make money, not about any from Takamagahara central province? It is maybe centre of this province (Shumon)?)

~63%

There was such a haze about him that he was difficult to see him at all.

Extra words? that he was difficult to see him at all->that it was difficult to see him at all
(or ->that he was difficult to see at all)

~63%

All that remained of his feelings was a single remnant—a desperate plea that purple spirits had saved and entrusted to Hanezu before they scattered and vanished.

Extra letter? (because only talk about Fuyo) spirits->spirit

~63%

She saw the usual buzz activity of Karen, but now it was a delightful sight, so much more alive and vibrant than before.

Maybe missing word? buzz activity->buzz of activity

~74%

That moment that thought occurred to me was the moment that Akira was born.

Maybe wrong word? That->The

V1 P5 60%

a fellow C-rank student named Jutta

Fellow C-rank student makes it sound like MC and Jutta are both C-rank, but MC is D-rank.

v1 p5

~37%

: Seriously?
: I mean I do know of how to add a little mana to swords and stuff, but I never heard that it would produce this much power...
: Yeah, it’s supposed to just be a little bit of support...right?
: Come on, only a monster could use this method to counter enemies who fight at long range...

This section of text is both italicized and monospaced. It should probably not be italicized, as a rule the chat logs are not italicized.

~45%

: Whoaaaa!
: I can’t believe it...
: At that level there’s no need for weapons w
: He’s such a monster w

Also probably should not be italicized.

v1 p5

~30%

Temples are training grounds for priests and are considered dwellings of the gods. Priests who pray there can be granted greater magical power. Since the Moon Goddess remains close to humanity, her temples can be found in every city. However, a donation is required to use the altar where prayers and offer prayers.

That final clause doesn't scan. I can't really guess what it should be though, maybe the altar where prayers are offered ?

V8 P4 (8% - 11th line down from top of page)

"But I could ask, the knight had already flown..."

add missing "before" in sentence

e.g. But before I could ask,...