V13 P11, 20%
"Kaho sulked, huffed, and grabbed a fork before stabbing it into her cube stake—the lunch special’s main entrée"
I'm assuming stake -> steak, unless I'm missing something.

25%
"My party would lose out on the extra money from renting the bags out [to] the Wings"

35%
“I am well aware that Haruka might have purposely avoided making any clear statements, but part of her livelihood could be forfeit if you were to die, so— Or isn’t that the case?”
If I've kept track of things, I think it works slightly better as "Or is that not the case?"

44%
"It appears that my options for the future are limited at the moment,” said Kaho. “Perhaps I should attempt to opt in to the Nao fraternal insurance policy in earnest so that—"
Fraternal -> marital (?)

67%
"However, Yuki was nonchalant as ever while causally removing a few bags of compost from her magic bag and then lining them up on the floor."
Causally -> casually

75%
"Yuki grinned as she tacked on that extra bit of [incentive(?)], and it was very effective..."

V2 p6 multiple coach should be coachman

V5 P1 70%:
What a pain!"She just barely
Space missing after quote character. Could also be a paragraph break there.

V14 P1 (20% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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Remove superfluous word "repairs" for better syntax or remove "fix" and replace with "do" for the same effect (e.g. "to do the carriage repairs...")

v4 p5

~22%

At some point, a giant insectoid monster with four pairs of legs had crept up behind Carlo. It had an exoskeleton as hard as a suit of armor, and a beautiful, half-naked woman was growing from it.

Was a half-naked woman growing from the spider body -- or a naked half-woman? (I'm honestly not sure which is correct. Sometimes Arachnes have human legs in front, but more often not.)

V2 P1, 9%
"The half-angel, half-demon girl who belonged nowhere. The foolish dragon with more muscle than sense. They’d never gotten along, even when they’d worked together, and yet the one they cared most for had been the same."
I don't think this ends up needing any correction, but just in case rewording for clarity might help:
The same (as in the same figure), not the same (as in Hellboy not getting along with them). First read my first thought was the latter, til realising the actual intent on a second read.

v1 p2

~70%

Right in front of his eyes was a field of shirotsume flowers in full bloom. Hyse quickly went to work, carefully harvesting the flowers so as to not damage their roots. By leaving them in tact, the flower could still grow after being harvested.

=> intact.

Volume 21. Part 8

45% "Phenex was said to have [...] That's not a dialogue so the " at the beginning shouldn't be there.

82% Glaysa-Labolas > Glasya-Labolas

Volume 10 part 1 has a lot of areas in it that seems like translation notes or something that were missed on removal.

Basically there are lots of places in this part that have numbers in round brackets such as (1), (12), etc.

They look a lot like notes someone may have as the author or translator used to help keep track of things within the story but not meant for readers.

Or I could be mistaken and they mean something that is completely lost on me, just figured I'd mention it in case is was accidentally left in.

V1P2

She was also the first person Wellmy at school she had been willing to entrust her beloved sister to.

V4.5P7 45%
“I only ask for tailored breakfast ingredients when we only need to make it in small quantities,”

"Only" used twice.

V10P2:

[0%] feelingso comfortable with those warm arms wrapped around her. [20%] She felt like Chris's dogged persuitl of Nelly was finally paying off.

V1P12 52%:
SIlence -> Silence
The letter i should be in lower case.

V2P1

I was greeted by a young girl in a habit.

Given this is an orphanage, "young girl" summons an image in my mind of a six year old.

[...]

She was a lady who might've been around thirty.

Either there were two nuns and I somehow missed their plurality, or the description "young girl" is quite wrong.

"The only ones who need to be teeming with hatred as we charge the enemy enemies are us murderers."

Should be "enemy soldiers"?

V8.2 P2, 58%
"The commander might have been manning a powerful mech, but he couldn’t make an executive decision to clash with Dragonriver when it could potentially lead to Kugamyama’s downfall."
Kugamyama’s -> Kugamayama’s

5.6:

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything.

Unlike the pawns, Merlin told me everything."

3.10:

who kept to the depths of the forest and served ties with the outside world

who kept to the depths of the forest and severed ties with the outside world

v4 p8

~70%

After thinking about it for a moment, Misha nodded. “That’s why we’re not meeting anyone on the road, even thoughGanz said we would.

=> though Ganz (missing space)