@xdbx said in EXP Is Golden - Corrections Topic:

I'd suggest using one name (Thunderbolt or Lightningbolt) consistently. I can't remember what if anything was used previously though.

Based on the following examples of definitions for both, I think it would depend on the story's narrative in deciding which to use at the time:

Thunderbolt - a flash of lightning with a simultaneous crash of thunder.
Lightning-bolt often refers to Lightning only - an electric discharge in the atmosphere or between the atmosphere and the ground.

V5 P9 (4% - 4th line up from bottom of page)

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'The phrase "could have been smited" is grammatically incorrect in standard English, though it is sometimes used informally or in specific gaming contexts. The correct past participle of the verb "smite" is smitten (or sometimes the archaic "smit").
The correct ways to express the idea in standard English are:
"could have been smitten"
"could have been smitten down"
"could have been struck down" - Standard Dictionary Online'

V16 P5, 50%
"Orania as she is now and my past self are one in the same"
In -> and

@Jojajones said in The Canon Fodder’s Ascension from Pawn to World Unifier - Corrections Topic:

So, I'm guessing the first real correction would likely be the series' title because shouldn't this be "The Cannon Fodder's..."? Because I'm not sure what exactly Canon Fodder is supposed to be

Meant to be wordplay on "cannon fodder." Fodder is frequently used to describe Zil's role as he is discarded to prop up the future villains and power creep in the anime. "Canon" since that was how things happened in canon in the anime's part one and Zil is trying to change things from canon.

V9P6
~35%

For that reason, I was utterly baffled to hear the king acknowledge my efforts.

Should be emperor instead of king.

1.7:

But Lord Lightless has said not to push Sir Carlos too much.

But Lord Lightless has said not to punish Sir Carlos too much.

V2 P2

76% "She almost lost her balance as the flew backward,"

Incorrect word. What is flying backward here, the woman or her swords? Perhaps this should be;

"She almost lost her balance as she flew backward," or "She almost lost her balance as they flew backward,"

17.4:

prosecuted groups of folks

persecuted groups of folks

One could argue it was Spanish Inquisition style prosecuting, but no.

Moreover, I had a powerful ally by the name of Korumi, whom I shared with the group about.

Moreover, I had a powerful ally by the name of Korumi, whom I told the group about.

"whom I shared with the group about" is clunky.
Not that my suggestion is ideal.
I'm also questioning the comma usage. Not sure how I'd do it differently, but if you look at plucking out the in between the commas portion the remainder makes no sense. Replace the first comma with an ellipsis? Dunno about that.

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Why is Quinza's father wearing a dress? (I don't recall anything in the narrative so far to indicate he was a cross-dresser) I believe this is an error and should read as:
"The man was wearing exceptionally fanciful dress and wielding a magnificent staff."

(Remove "an")

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I believe this should read:
"...left open and unguarded."

V3 P4, 12%
"Hein, I intend to ask His Majesty..."
I assume Hein is a nickname, but including it here just in case it should instead be Heinz

23%
Come to think of it, there was Priest Nax, Prince Robur, and a boy who was the lady's classmate there with her"
Should that be Prince Regulus? (Or if instead her brother turned up, Lord (/Marquess, or other subsidiary title) Robur?)

"Since I made a donation... you ought to provide commensurate assistant"
Assistant -> assistance

"What?! Duchess Rober?!"
Rober -> Robur

35%
"Ever the high priest. No sooner had she spoken than he deployed a barrier spell around herself"
She -> he, herself -> himself

55%
"That day, when that good-for-nothing Second Prince got a wonderful fiancee far beyond his station but couldn’t even manage the simple task of meeting her face-to-face for the first time, it confirmed once more what a failure he was."
I don't think this sentence quite makes sense as is, unless Duchess Robur thinks that the Second Prince is also a good for nothing, and that Lavi is a wonderful fiancee. Instead, perhaps:
"That day, when that good-for-nothing got a wonderful fiancee of the Second Prince, far beyond her station, but couldn’t even manage the simple task of meeting him face-to-face for the first time, it confirmed once more what a failure she was."

"I’d ripped open that failure’s belly with my signature magic. But I didn’t kill him. I left my son, who was learning healing magic, by that failure’s side."
Him -> her

65%
"She does meet with the former prince outside sometimes, doesn’t she?”
I think this is referring to Heinz (since Prince Regulus is neither former or, I gather, hasn't visited the nearby atelier). I'm not fully on top of terms for nobility, but prince should only fit if the son of a Royal Duke (which I can't recall if this is the case here or not). If not, perhaps Lord (or even a subsidiary title like Marquess) might fit better.

Volume 7 - Part 7:

[57%] preconceptions aboutthe Dark Isle >> add space [90%] “We didn’t realize that I remembered it wrong! Ba ha ha!” >> should be we

Copying from main discussion to here:

@Libri-Liberorum said in Mercedes and the Waning Moon Vol. 4 Discussion!:

While the empire had promised to keep the academy's doors open, Beatrix had apprently planned to remove the female students and use the school as an isolation facility. Mercedes had confirmed this with Beatrix herself.

I am utterly perplexed by this paragraph. I can't connect anything in it to the context of the rest of the story. The empire doesn't run the academy, why are they promising to keep its doors open? They don't send students, so how can the female students be removed? How does removing them turn it into an isolation facility? Who is being isolated?

V3P1 ~77%
"Huh? Zodiac was in..." -> "Huh? Zodiac Zodian was in..."

V3P2 ~50%
"Oh, well this really something." -> "Oh, well this really is something."

V5P10 ~78%
"...the self-claimed Game Master..." -> "...the self-proclaimed Game Master..."

At 24%, It’s the simplest plance and I don’t need to use my head.

Not sure what was supposed to go here, possibly plan?

V2P9, 35%: “The mana inside her trashed about before flooding out of her.” - thrashed

Volume 4 Part 6
07% barely left that Char -> barely left when Char
08% didn't seem too share -> didn't seem to share
66% That's why y'all are here for. -> That's what y'all are here for.
72% areattacked -> are attacked