V1 P3, 26%
"She's just keep on like that and make her team the strongest in Heidelberg"
This doesn't quite sound right. Perhaps either:
"She's just to keep on like that to make her team the strongest in Heidelburg"
or
"She's just kept on like that and made her team the strongest in Heidelburg"
33%
"Pinanora... what kind of example is that?"
Unless he's stuttering, Pinanora -> Pianora
33%
"R-Right now?" Sashe asked. "But it's already dark."
Sashe -> Sasha
59%
"I'm Pianorra. Nice to meet the both of you."
Pianorra -> Pianora
74%
"That day was also a night like this"
Comes across a bit oddly. My best quick fix might be:
"That day was also much like tonight"
P4, 11%
"What?" she asked, sensing Hyse's presence.
It kinda works, but as she entered his area rather that the other way around, perhaps 'sensing Hyse's gaze/attention' might fit better