v1p7 ~96%

[...] training sessions, " I murmured [...]

Has a stray space after the comma.

v1p8

89% - Tena -> Tenan

V8.2 P16
61%
By now, several weeks since he'd personally seen Akira last. -> presumably should be, "several weeks had passed"

V7 P8, 44%
"Out of all his relatives, the viscount had thought Jyle decent promise, which was why he’d selected him for the task."
'decently promising', or 'had/showed decent promise'

v5 p11

~28%

“But don’t forget about the third of us know: suspicious red robes.”

Should that be now ?

~30%

<I guess that’s good, not standing out. We can enjoya relaxing trip without being disturbed,> Leah said.

=> enjoy a

~56%

<No, I do something different there,> Lyla replied. <There I try to control the Merc Guild by way of isolating it from the rest of the world. As a result of that they don’t use any paper if at all there, actually, so that method wouldn’t work.>

Something awkward about that sentence. Should it be something like they don't use much paper if any at all there or maybe just they don't use any paper at all there ?

v18p7 ~85%:

Sooner than I thought, the day had one.

one -> come.

V5 P1 P10 (50% - 9th line up from bottom of page)

"So if the waterways weren't the reason the military were the military breaking our doors down, then what was?"...

Replace redundant words the military on the sentence.

e.g, So if the waterways weren't the reason the military were breaking our doors down,..

V18P1

31% However, that wasn't wall ->Presumably that wasn't 'all'.

V7P5 ~50%

Even if you broke through one, if you had another [...]

I guess that should be the enemy instead of the first you, or a passive construct like Even if the first was broken through.

~80%

[...] leaving you at a disadvantage..

Should probably have only been one period.

V7P6 ~31%

[...] there was a fair chance it would give the Empire an advantage [...]

Actually, it would give the Kingdom of Rocourt an advantage if they sent more troops. Except maybe in the front in Benima, but then a lot of the other parts in this paragraph fall apart, as that would still not be detrimental to Rocourt and their current war against the Empire.

~81%

"Still I'm feeling utterly exhausted," Fabio said, uncannily. "Still, I'd be leagues improved [...]

The first replay of Carmine's inner monologue in spoken is amusing. The second "still" Fabio says, though, feels off; a yet or similar would feel much more natural.

V14 P3, 78%
"If someone of Mary’s strength wasn’t confident that she could destroy, let alone dent, an iron golem, then there was no way the rest of us would stand a chance against them."
Ordering is reversed. Should be 'dent, let alone destroy'

94%
"The body section was the heaviest one, but a few people, including me and Touya, needed to work together in order to lift it."
Phrasing seems slightly off. Either of these might work better:
"The body section was the heaviest one, but a few people, including me and Touya, needed to working together in order managed to lift it."
"The body section was the heaviest one, but with a few people, including me and Touya, needed needing to work together in order to lift it."

95%
"One hundredth was just a rough estimate too, partly because it was nearly impossible to feel even a few dozen grams of difference after tossing about ten more kilos inside."
Now Nao might just being a little loose with his language, but one hundredth of 10 kilograms is 100 grams (rather than dozens)

v5 p6

~60%

“Now then, we’ve finished introducing our new members, so allow me to explain our strategy again. Look at this.” At the front of the conference room was a large magical projector displaying a blue screen with green dots of various sizes. It looked like a map of the countries in the Blue Sea Union and the surrounding ocean. “We are currently in the Gilded Land. This area is the Black Sea, which is the Infernal Demonic Beast’s territory—and our destination.”
At the bottom right of the sea chart, a black stain was spreading. It was the region of the ocean that had been corrupted by the miasma Vepar exuded. We called it the Black Sea or the Schwarz Meer. There were several islands in the Black Sea, but I heard that they were inhospitable to human life.

Bit of a subtle point here, but since the second paragraph is being paraphrased from Eugene's first person point of view, that should probably be It was called the Black Sea... or Claude called it the Black Sea... (assuming Claude is speaking) or maybe We heard it was called... .

a1v7p19 ~12%

"We wanted to [...] from the very beginning.

Missed the ending quotation mark.

~95%

[...] you very much across like a battle-crazed maniac [...]

Should be come across.

v3p12 ~66%

[...] my father asked in a whisper. . "Also [...]

Has an extra period and space.

v2p12 ~29%

Fiona's power had triggered all of it to happen.

Reads like a mixture of "triggered it all" and "cause all of it to happen". "Triggered it to happen" feels off.

~33%

[...] a boss area were taking shape [...]

Should probably be was.

~71%

"Accept your demise weakling."

Should probably be "Accept your demise, weakling!" with a comma and an exclamation mark.

V1P2
~21%

abuse he’d endured by the hand adults

Missing word? (I am see it is ask before but it is not change but some other correction are have change in prepub) by the hand adults->by the hand of adults

~32%

It sounded like she was speaking from experience

Missing fullstop? experience->experience.

~84%

It was a future was so dazzlingly bright that it hurt to look at.

Missing word? future was so -> future that was so

V1P3
~0%

“No need to worry about that, Nikura,” Kenji said confidentially after checking the gauge he was carrying.

Maybe wrong word? (not sure if this needs to be secret from other?) confidentially->confidently

~0%

Kenji’s gaze shifted to the spot where imagined Ryota was waiting.

Missing word? where imagined->where he imagined

~0%

challenging them to strike the blights that the defense brigade rounded up with as much power they could muster.

Missing word? as much power they->as much power as they

~12%

Akira gritted his teeth as he noticed the other shielders staring at him

Missing fullstop? at him->at him.

~32%

A thunderous fwum! followed

Missing fullstop? followed->followed.

~59%

her power levels steadily climbing

Missing fullstop? steadily climbing->steadily climbing.

~71%

the look that appeared on Saki’s face “What’s wrong?”

Missing fullstop? (Ask because speech is start with capital) face “What’s->face. “What’s

~94%

Word Notes: Spirit Art Styles

Missing letter? Word->World

V1P4
~0%

they rose and thrust their spears into hog one after the other.

Missing word? into hog->into the hog

~0%

Since the incident hadn’t been too serious, Kenji called for the leader of the gunners rather than demand an explanation from the ground squad.

Wrong tense? demand->demanding

~42%

“Ha. The old man’s backing him changes nothing.

Extra " 's "? The old man’s backing him->The old man backing him (or The old man’s backing him->The old man’s backing)

~63%

Haru knew about Akira being exiled after failing to get recognized as an adherent in his hometown and understood why was afraid to go through another lot drawing ceremony.

Missing word? why was->why he was

~84%

Thinking back, everything he’d about him was weird.

Extra word? everything he'd about->everything about

~84%

Kozaburo folded in his arms

Maybe extra word? folded in his arms->folded his arms

V1P5
~0%

writing something at the rear of the reception area,

Wrong sentence end? (Because next is start with capital) area,->area.

~12%

the Ugetsu and their retainers had begun openly showing their disdain for him

Missing full stop? him->him.

~12%

except the people were gone, and shrine grounds surrounding him were entirely peaceful.

Missing word?; and shrine->and the shrine

~24%

His thoughts grew muddled when to make sense of what he was seeing.

Missing word? when to make->when trying to make (or just when->trying)

~35%

“All right...” Akira reigned himself to walking to the northeast side of the city.

Missing letter/wrong word? reigned->resigned

~59%

he looked at his own palm and found it was turning translucent along the rest of his arm.

Missing word? along->along with (or alongside)

~71%

“‘Show thy devotion unto Kugatachi...’”

Maybe extra ‘ here? (Show thy devotion for other shrine are just have " not ’ too, I do not know if this shrine is special?) “‘Show thy devotion unto Kugatachi...’”->“Show thy devotion unto Kugatachi...”

~71%

Akira thought nothing in response to the girl’s words except, Oh, okay...

Extra capital? Oh->oh

~82%

“‘Show thy devotion unto Chinowa?!’”

Also extra ‘ here? (First three are not have but Kugatachi and Chinowa are have?) “‘Show thy devotion unto Chinowa?!’” ->“Show thy devotion unto Chinowa?!”

V1P6
~0%

Under the flickering orange light of lamps, some of burning oil and others electrical, the festival music was growing louder, the crowd more lively along the path.

Missing word? crowd more->crowd growing more

~13%

Though he’d never met this woman before, his heart filled with warmth, as he’d lived with her for many years.

Maybe missing word? (since he has actually lived with her but not sure if he knows that when Akira thinks this) as he'd->as if he'd

~40%

Huh...?”

Missing start "? Huh...?”->“Huh...?”

V1 P7
~0%

Under the flicking light of evenly spaced lamps,

Wrong word? flicking->flickering

~0%

Divine precincts weren’t subject to natural laws nor defined by physics.

Maybe wrong word? defined->confined

~13%

But however imperfect though he might have been,

Maybe extra word? however imperfect though->however imperfect

~40%

Three Grand Shrines and Four Temples maintained a strict policy stating that

Missing starting word? Three Grand Shrines->The Three Grand Shrines

~67%

he realized that a girl with no more than twelve years life experience had just just seen right through him.

Extra word? just just->just

@karasutengu Thank you! It'll be fixed in the final version.

v1p7:

51% - If I can’t kill when she’s queen -> Missing word? If I can’t kill her when she’s queen

V1P4 ~15% in:
"An incredulous claim."

Perhaps "incredible" was intended here? (Only a person can be incredulous, not a claim).