14.1

it sounded like her spell’s impotency caused the goblins to burst into chunks

“potency”

“You’re roughly one and half times heavier than everyone else in the party, after all.”

“one and a half”, “anyone”

Our rope ladder had been damaged thanks to the landside,

“landslide”

@Shiroi-Hane Yeah "revive' would work too.

V13P4

50% Its "trunk" (if you could call it that) was pyramid-shaped and there was a glowing gem set where its belly button should be. -> While not technically wrong, the more common term would be 'torso', no?

V7 P11, 61%
"I saw a crack form in the soul recirculator and. Fearing its total collapse, I threw myself in front of it to protect it."
I think that's meant to be 'and, fearing' (or it's a sentence fragment, needing an ending)

V4 P4 (21% - 9th line up from bottom of page)

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Add "you" between would and care for better syntax...
e.g.:

"And would you care to share this reason with us, Sir Iyale?"

v1p5:

89% - Hearing that I”m nasty -> I’m

V7 P5, 47%
"I’m just passing though, but I thought I’d stop by to thank you for all your help during the transport mission."
Though -> through

v6p2 ~13%:

"But desire is anotherright?"

anotherright? -> another, right?

Volume 6, part 7:

8% butand that it was had been Mr Fisher's idea
16% That did proved that Ellie
16% Bbut
16% Assuming Ellie could hear my thoughts right now, I could practically hear herwhat Ellie would say: if she could hear my thoughts right now.
16% Their jet- black darkness -> Their jet-black darkness
16% Elizbeth is a prideful woman -> Elizabeth is a prideful woman
20% I borrowed a horse from the baron's carriage. and took off with Robert and I took off in the direction of the residential district that Yoh had reported seeing Ellie and the witch in last.
24% then maybe all she was doing was using an illusion to to shape herself into whatever that meant for them--, like a perceptual distortion? -> whatever that meant for them, like a perceptual distortion?
24% full- on -> full-on
24% even if they knew, deep down, that she wasn't really the object of their affectionwoman they loved.
24% we probably can't see her "cause -> can't see her 'cause
27% "Lady Lilia," called Robert called, refusing to take his eyes off ofnot looking at Ellie for even a moment.
31% But then there was a loud clang, and Robert's sword launched snapped out of his hands.
31% I panicked, crouching to avoid getting hit, and the sword embedded itself in stabbed a the dirt of a nearby flower bed.
31% I assumed that the fight was over now that Robert had lost his weapon, but he Robert didn't take a single step back.
31% Ellie tried to move out of the way and dodge his punch, but he just kept attacking her with high kicks. She [Delete paragraph break] Ellie managed to block them with her sword hand,

This is as far as I get for now. There are so many errors in this part that I assume they continue.

V5P1P7

Around 56%

"Just how long do you intend to say?"

"say" ought to be "stay" I think.

v18p4:
0%: "" lost... I lost again..." -> extra quote mark and space at the beginning
39%: Pioro had remembered how much I liked the food from Dragonewt -> Dragonewt was previously written as the name of the race/culture, not a place. Might want to change to something like "how much I liked Dragonewt food"
39%: 500 large coins. One large gold coin was worth 10,000 sute, so that came out to 50 million sute -> 5 million (also, double check the rest of the paragraph since there's more coin conversions happening)
71%: Besides, you're already a topic of conversation two meetin's ago -> you were
77%: I kept trotting as I called back to those how spoke to me -> who
84%: cosmetic products like make up -> makeup

v2p10
~13%

Ren couldn't causally get something going either.

Should this maybe have been casually?

~19%

[...] let's go by the fireplace.

They'd move to the fireplace, not by it, in the next sentence.

~38%

"Those guys ain´t got no sense of duty. [...]

The "ain´t" has an acute accent instead of an apostrophe.

V10P11
~12%

The major difference was that the magazine was switched from a fifty-round internal box to a ten-round detachable box.

It's a five round internal, not fifty.

~21%

Acquisition, Technology, & Logistics Agency

I don't think one would use an Oxford comma with an ampersand in a company / government division name.

~29%

However, [...]— His cell phone rang.

The combination of the emdash, the incompleteness of the sentence starting with However, and the uppercase continuation feels off.

A1 V7 P16
~21%

As captain of the reconnaissance unit so, Odoacer had no equal [...]

The so seems a leftover that needs to go.

A1 V7 P17
~66%

Yet he was able to regroup with just a single breath...

He wasn't regrouping. Maybe regain his composure would work better here.
Edit: Or maybe just recoup was intended.

6.2:

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter.

"I know---I'll just force the enemy's ships to pull back or scatter."

Missing ending double quote.

V7P4
~9%

The rest'd had no hand [...]

I still believe that contracting had to 'd makes reading books much harder.

~9%

[...], not giving even the slightest thought to what any else thought [...]

Probably anyone

~14%

I mean, he'd been stripped of his rank in the first place because he'd tried to ignore the divinity seize power.

As @Hylebos said the sentence feels off; however I think it should be [...] ignore the divinity to size power (for himself).

~36%

[...] of the Imperium as a whole.Still, [...]

Misses a space after the period.

V6 P5
(0% - 2nd line up from bottom of the page)

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I believe the wording in the outlined area should be:
"magic bag"
As in:

Ciel immediately reached into her magic bag...

(62% - 7th line down from top of page)

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Correct "the" in outlined wording to "them"and remove comma...
As in:

...the priest said, leading them down the mountain path.

V6 P9 (93% - Last line on the page)

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This would sound better as:

"You were absent from lunch..."
-or-
"You have been absent from lunch..."

(I personally think "were absent" is the best choice)