v6 p7

“It is the same skill by which the human nobles use to control their knights, as I’m sure you’re familiar. Some monsters possess it as well.”

That clause doesn't scan. Maybe instead:

It is the same skill as that with which the human nobles control their knights, The same skill is used by the human nobles to control their knights,

V2P4:

0%: her estimation of Sophian couldn’t get any higher, the prince informs her -> informed 33%: With a mighty swing of his sword, he cleaved through wind -> clove 44%: The borrowedd the space for the afternoon. -> they borrowed 67%: her heart absolutely resonating with kindredness, leaned in -> leant

V9.1P6
"Sorry to say it, but yeah." - Since this is Haruka speaking, presumably should be in italic like the others.

v5P2p2:

60% - you’ve got your father-in-law’s visit to prepare for. -> Eh?! Father of her deceased husband? Has Six not figured out the family structure? She’s just calling him “father”… I’ve forgotten a lot of the family tree that Karen’s a part of, but I assume that she knows what she’s talking about (and it’s well covered in that last 40%). :p

v6p2:

29% - […] I could’ve found them even with flying. -> Since she’s already flying, should that be: even without flying ?

Volume 14 Part 13
17% but that curriculum centered around that -> but a curriculum centered around that
35% there was no one sitting around here. -> there was no one sitting around her
53% some many prying eyes -> so many prying eyes
70% playing out the same handbook -> playing out of the same handbook

V2P3
~21%

“Gift Unleashed. Gloam’s Grand Finale: Punishing Eternal End.”

Other gift in part are use — not .?; Gift Unleashed. Gloam’s->Gift Unleashed—Gloam’s

~42%

“The only path left is to put our faith in a ruler that has earned our trust and confidence—one none other than Lettie Ungaria.

Extra word(s)?; one none other than Lettie Ungaria->none other than Lettie Ungaria
(or one none other than Lettie Ungaria->one Lettie Ungaria)

~42%

We must preserve the knowledge of our fallen researchers and scholars, lest they may rot in oblivion.”

Maybe extra word? lest they may->lest they

V2P4
~62%

While the beasts enjoyed their false banquet, a man was drinking alone from a gourd in the palace rooftop.

Maybe wrong word? in->on

V2P5
~0%

Zacks forcefully wrapped his arms around the masked man’s shoulders—the masked man whose very existence turns small events into large-scale conflicts.

Maybe wrong tense? turns->turned

~55%

I’ m gonna eat more sushi in your face!

Extra space?; I’ m->I’m

@Ingraman said in Making Magic - Corrections Topic:

v10p5:

88% - Most of our expeditions consisted of searching for valuable materials and dipping before the other adventurers could get a word in edgewise with us. -> Maybe it’s okay, but I was thinking that it’s dipping out, rather than the verb alone…

I believe it's considered informal, but I've definitely heard people leaving out the out in the phrase on numerous occasions.

v6 p9

~60%

We chatted for a little while after, then I announced, “Well, we’ll head back now. See you around, Miguel.”
“Yep. Catch you later.”
The rest of the team, twins included, called out “See ya!” and “Bye-bye!” as they followed Kuditt. That team was clearly held together by their leader. I’d just hope things didn’t weigh on him too heavily.

then Kuditt announced

V8P7 ~0%

[...] using an off-the-cuff spell to shifta pretty hefty storage shelf […]

Should be shift a.

~16%

Had he prepared in advance laid groundwork with his colleagues, […]

I'm not sure what would be correct here - just a comma after in advance, or only one of the two things (preparing or laying groundwork).

~17%

[…] much impact. it's

Should be It's.

~61%

[…] it was essential that I carry this task through […]

I'm not perfectly sure, but I feel like the more common carried should be used in the inner monologue, though I feel like Emperor Carmine would use the classic formal carry in dialogue.

v13p8 ~63%

Graham had once been a hero lauded […]

The whole paragraph about Grahan's family and his own demise is duplicate.

@watem said in The Otome Heroine’s Fight for Survival - Corrections Topic:

~77% "his combat power was close to 300"
Considering the next strongest person is described as having 1700 power, perhaps it's supposed to be 3000?

I checked before coming, and yes:
枯れたようなエルグリムから異様な殺気と威圧感が放たれた。３０００近い戦闘力。その圧力に配下の戦士たちさえ思わず息を呑み、周辺で様子を窺っていたダンジョンの魔物たちが逃げるように散っていく。

Volume 3 Part 12
34% placing himself in position to Duke Ealdred -> placing himself in opposition to Duke Ealdred

Volume 4 Part 7
58% I see.. That's an interesting. ->

I see... that's an interesting concept. I see. That's an interesting concept. I see. That's interesting.

59% Due to the punctuation, it looks like Two Days Since Firing the Kiln is supposed to be a section title; perhaps centered and/or placed above the paragraph it is currently in. Ah, I see kingpendragon has already noted this.

v1p11:

16% - What had she fallen for this man? -> Seems like something’s wrong. Perhaps “Why had she fallen for this man?” Or maybe “What had she fallen for in this man?”, but less likely? There’s always “None-of-the-above”, too.

V7P3, 76%: "As soon as they saw that we were [making] a break for it"

@Hylebos said in Looks like a Job for a Maid! The Tales of a Dismissed Supermaid - Corrections Topic:

v5p6 ~71%:

"I could tell just by watching the way he cooked—it was all a bit off, from the way he chopped the veges to how he cooked the meat.

veges -> veggies? This might legitimately be one of those style guide things where y'all are to prefer the spelling of certain words one way or another but I just wanted to double check to make sure.

I had assumed that it was an intentional misspelling, but searching through the previous four books doesn’t show any previous uses of “veges” or “veggies”. It’s been “vegetables” all the way… What will the overlord here decide? :)

V3 P6, 9%
"Meaning Werlick was the one who forged that sword"
Werlick -> Werlich

62%
"Ren waited from the incoming blow, his stance unsteady, but his sword ready to move at a moment’s notice. It was quite the contradiction."
From -> for. (Or 'waited from' -> awaited)

98%
"Fiona’s hands slowly fell from her shoulders and he grabbed the hem of Ren’s sleeve."
He -> she