V10P3 97%
WIth -> With

In volume 9 part 9, Tsuji says, "Maybe Peter Carol’s pentagram ritual... No, maybe it needs to be more abstract than that." His name is Peter Carroll, not Peter Carol. He wrote Liber Null and Liber Kaos and he was one of the founders of the Illuminates of Thanateros. He's a niche figure, so I understand not knowing about him, but he is a specific real guy who's surname is spelled with two rs and two ls.

v5P1p4:

82% - […] why were some of Estavarde’s people chasing me […] -> Typo: Estaverde, as its spelled everywhere else in this part 91% - […] sometimes made for fierce arguments across vertical plains […] -> Wrong spelling: planes

V8.2 P10, 67%
"After he had protected her from the Zone 3 juggernaut, she’d asked him what she could do for him, when the amount he deserved was far beyond his ability to pay."
If I've followed along with the sentence correctly, his -> her.

v10p6 ~39%:

The reality was that I was an old woman inside, so that could be why we were able to understand each other or at least be on a somewhat similar page.

old woman -> old fogey?

We were discussing this on the JNC discord a bit, to the best of our recollections, previously Nia has stated that she's unsure of what gender she was in her previous life, whereas here she seems to be taking a more concrete stance on her gender.

If that's what the Japanese translates out to then that's well and good, but we figured it was worth double checking. If not, a more gender-neutral term like fogey would be appropriate. She's certainly called herself as such in the past, such as in v3:

v3p4 ~82%:

Honestly, I wished that the real Nia Liston got to survive rather than an old fogey like me.

Volume 3 Part 8
34% herwashed -> washed

V6 P8 (50% - 3rd line down from top of page)

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I believe the encircled word should be alert not alter.

V4P12, 55%: "the dress I was wearing was one I had ordered back in back in Spring"

90%: "Good work out there, Lera. Oh. You do appear truly worked." - is this an actually expression? Not familiar with it and can't find it searching, unless it's meant to be a novel pun on "good work"?

V13P5

25% - The sword Volfnow carefully sheathed -> missing a space.

v5 p6

~5%

A bow of light materialized in the Archangel’s hand. He drew it swiftly in one, continuous motion, loosing an arrow that flew toward Leah with incredulous speed—an immediate use of force. Either that was how he greeted all intruders, or Leah had successfully provoked him.

=> incredible. "Incredulous" is a state of mind, specifically "skeptical" or "disbelieving".

That being said, Merriam-Webster indicates there is a non-standard meaning of "incredible":

nonstandard : incredible sense 1
incredible adjective
1 : too extraordinary and improbable to be believed

So maybe the usage was intended here?

~ 15%

But the fact that she even could execute such precise, stable movements at her absolute limit... That was all thanks to her relentless training. Since she couldn’t train her muscles in real life, her physical speed could never improve. So instead, she honed everything else to a razor’s edge. Her ability to read ahead—her perception, her insight.

Something seems off with the phrasing -- why can't she train her muscles in real life? Maybe that sentence should be:

Since she couldn’t train her virtual muscles in real life, her physical speed in the game could not be improved that way. So instead, she honed everything else to a razor’s edge. Her ability to read ahead—her perception, her insight.

v5 p3

~54%

It helped thatCarter had thrown himself forward to avoid taking the full impact of the strike.

=> that Carter

v18p1:
29%: The mold might be her choice of fertilizer -> his (see my previous comments about Fernobelia switching genders. I assume the original Japanese is light on pronouns, but based on some of Serelipta's teases in previous volumes, I think male is the correct gender for this deity)
96%: No book would be discarded, even if it looks damaged -> looked (to match verb tenses)

And @Ambriella, I'm happy to help. This series does seem particularly awkward to hand off to a new team with all the jumping between separate sets of characters.

V6 P11, 4%
"At the same time, the white coats were improving noticeably, [each/every] slash of their weapons and spell slung visibly brimming with raw power."

V7 P3, 28%
"Mwa ha ha... Perfect! Okay, it’s actually a little clumsy, but I’m sure he’ll scrap by."
Scrap -> scrape

62%
"The Royal Academy... I won’t deny that it’s got its merits as an academy institution..."
Possibly fine as is, but just in case: academy -> academic