V1P1
~35%

“But don’t get it twisted: although it may be grunt work—it’s worthwhile grunt work.

Missing end "? grunt work.->grunt work.”

~35%

Watching policy take shape through the work of our own hands is as worthwhile as its rewarding.

Maybe missing '? (Because want it to be "as it is rewarding"?) its->it's

~52%

“A light mage can heal wounds on the spot, so few comrades are more welcome in a fight,” Rolan explained.

Maybe missing word? (Because first part is positive about light mages but second is want less light mages? Sorry if I am not understand) so few->so a few

V1P4
~9%

“Now I am more convinced—the black haze phenomenon may very well be indeed a Miasmic Hollow,”

Maybe wrong word order? (Sorry if it is okay as it is, I only know in different word order) be indeed->indeed be

~52%

Like with the time with Nadia, she wasn’t sure what to say. So she didn’t, only frowned instead.

Maybe wrong tense? frowned->frowning

~70%

“Those, eh? Well, I definitely didn’t order my men to touch anything within the enclosure, but there’s a chance they may have moved naturally.

Maybe extra word? (The second part is not disagree with first part, Knights are can touch or move, they just do not have orders to move) but there's a chance->there's a chance

V1P5
~84%

They watched him go in silence—until Sylvan broke it.
“I don’t get it. How are you so good at memorizing things?”
Sylvan, of all people, was the one to do it.

Maybe repeat? (Both 'Sylvan broke it' and 'was the one to do it' are about silence end)

V1P7
~94%

Now, this is a great jumping off point, but I’l l need a few more references, ideally some—”

Extra space? (On the app but on pc the image is in the middle of the I'll?)

Volume 11 - Part 2:

[~31%]

"Seems certainly seems busy,"

Wrong word. Seems > She.

Volume 10 - Part 5:

[49%]

"Got. Sorry for the trouble, Egil."

Missing a word. I suggest the ff:

"Got it. Sorry for the trouble, Egil."

Volume 5 - Part 3:

[3%]

"Can move the church to a place that's more out in the open?"

It's missing a word, I think. I suggest the ff:

"Can you move the church to a place that's more out in the open?"

v7p8 ~12%:

The emperor couldn't afford to simp on his guards for either his wives or the divinity's party, which was certain to leave his resources stretched thin.

simp -> skimp, though it would be really funny were it not a typo.

~58%:

From that point on, the logic of this world was driven into his Charles.

his Charles -> Charles.

V11 P9 (53% - starting on 2nd line up from bottom of page)

"Some icons that didn't seem to do anything."

"that" seems out of place in this sentence. I think there are two ways to make the .sentence work better:

e.g.:

Some icons didn't seem to do anything.
-or-
There were some icons that didn't seem to do anything.

v4 p2

~0%

“I’m very sorry, but we have a rule not to show [] inventors from foreign countries. Even those who hail from the Freja Kingdom... Oh, and please do drink your tea. It’s nothing fancy, I’m afraid.”

Not to show what to foreign inventors? Plans? Blueprints?

v5P1p10:

61% - Reinanld -> One too many “n”s: Reinald 97% - Samule -> Samuel

General thing all around that I've been noticing: Ciel and Vincent always refer to Mitia as master, but shouldn't that be mistress since she's, y'know, female?

42%
all while giving orders to his rioters-turned-agents subordinates.

I'm not sure whether this is proper grammar or not, but it sounds kind of awkward nonetheless. Perhaps something along the lines of all while giving orders to his subordinates, the rioters-turned-agents would be better?

67%
I stood in the kitchen, opened the Crimson Book, brought out all the necessary ingredients, and began making pudding. I started by putting sugar and a small amount of water in a pot. Using Medium-Heat Magic, I boiled the contents down until they turned a nice looking red; then I used Hot Water Magic to add hot water and make the caramel sauce.

Er, why is sugar+water turning red from being heated? This seems like either something is missing that should be included or it might have been mistranslated. After rereading it a few times, I would hazard a guess that red might be a mistranslation. Since she's making caramel sauce, I would speculate that it should probably be brown.

14.4

Aim for the center of its body! Right above the magicite!

“over”, “on”, “at”, or “into”
I'm sure the word used in the original is often translated as “above,” but that's not right in this context. “Above” means “up,” toward the ceiling, between the core and head.

It's interesting how English prepositions have varying frames of reference and coordinate systems. Like, “put pressure on the wound” follows the body no matter what rotations happen, but “hold the wounded limb above the heart” is relative to gravity no matter what happens to the body.

the golem’s arms freezed in midair and proceeded to crash against ground.

“froze”, “against the ground.”

smashing through an opponent rather than silencing and dicing them.

“slicing”

their bodies were as large as a double bed on its side.

“stood on end.”
I mean, unless they're supposed to be wider than they are tall. Or did you mean “their torsos were as tall as a double bed is wide”? An odd unit of measurement, but the scale would work.

It’d be a pain in ass if we

“pain in the ass”

V1P8
~0%

“R-Right. But I mean, if I gave him some food I’d made...do think I’d be bothering him?”

Missing word? do think->do you think

~13%

pulling a large wagon behind him as he disappeared into the crowd .

Extra space? crowd .->crowd.

~27%

The captain turned to his second-in-command for support “Right?”

Missing comma? support “Right?”->support, “Right?”

~53%

When he arrived, couldn’t help but look surprised at the storm of activity.

Missing word? arrived, couldn’t->arrived, he couldn’t

~80%

As he spoke, kept his gaze facing firmly ahead to avoid seeing the reaction on Kansuke’s face.

Missing word? spoke, kept->spoke, he kept

V3P4, 5% “Lakya drooped her head” - Rakya

20%: “A small scrap of paper in between the diary [pages].”

V5P1

18%: "Allen causing such a disaster had beget so many" -> begotten 18%: "Naturally, we’d want to avoid visiting if you could." -> we'd and we or you'd and you, but probably you'd and you 36%: "a quest to deliver the Claira" -> extra "the" 36%: "battle with those monsters out of my own volition" -> out of my own... 45%: "Indeed. It’s been [x] since you ran away, I believe." -> x = "a while" or "x months" or ?? 64%: "But you can only go so far with teleportation magic at one," -> "at one casting" or "with one casting" or "per casting" or "with each casting" 82%: "Merlin had felt the blood rush from her face." -> drain

a1v7p20 ~4%

"Ya wanna know [...] it just regenerated.

Missed the ending quotation mark.

[...] is its definin' trait.' In fact, [...]

I think the ' after trait doesn't belong.

v7p7 ~65%

[...] I didn't mean I was any less jealous.

Might this supposed to be it didn't mean?

~85%

I continue to ignore him, sulkily [...]

Should be continued.

V13 P11 (92% - 8th & 7th lines up from bottom of page)

"Guido and Jonas were playing so that Wolf could one again experience the game he loved to play as a child,"

Correct "one" to "once" for better syntax.

e.g., so that Volf could once again experience...

v1p7 ~96%

[...] training sessions, " I murmured [...]

Has a stray space after the comma.

v1p8

89% - Tena -> Tenan