v16p7:

48% - […] he had been known to work in nothing but a work shorts, […] -> Extra, or missing word(s)? “in nothing but work shorts” or “in nothing but a pair of work shorts”

Volume 5 - Part 8:

Ms Maliksi

I can't recall if I missed any from the other parts but the contractions Mr., Ms., and Mrs. should have a period after them. So in this case, Ms. Maliksi.

v1p5 ~40%:

Christina obeyd and carried an item envelopped in cloth to Dylac, placing it on the ground.

envelopped -> enveloped.

~80%:

While at a slow pace, I was steadily making progress in my mastery of Graspin Magic.

Graspin -> Grasping.

Volume 2 - Part 1:

[21%]

the man in all black

should be hyphenated since it's an adjective (or noun). all-black

Arc 1 Volume 6 - Part 15:

[57%]

Zasha the dual wielder

should be hyphenated. dual-wielder since it's a noun.

Volume 3 - Part 6:

[8%]

By bending truths and lives,

lives > lies

[38%]

They had to be about three hundred meters away, so Dorth relaxed.

And then the arrow zoomed through the air, dashing Dorth's optimism.

These confused me because it is talking through a POV of Franco's vassal, facing Dorth's (or rather, Luke's) army. It doesn't make sense why Dorth is being described here.

p12v4 13%:

"Chairman Yusef, how about I send you a portrait of Jonas on the day he confers his barony?" -> wouldn't the barony be confered upon him? Later on Dahl thinks about receiving her barony so that's probably the right phrasing?

v1p5 ~46%:

A Rank-2species—Arachne."

2species -> 2 species.

v1 p5

~30%

I was nervous about setting out on a journey, but it was a good chance to get out of my normal environment. Rright now, I was eating a peaceful meal. That alone made it feel worth leaving the temple.

=> Right

@pcj said in orrections to Vol 13:

@karasutengu that just means it's been a while since they made any mistakes for anyone to report.

That, or that anyone felt engaged enough to report something. :p I’ve stopped reporting missed spaces for the most part, unless there were other things to report and I remembered where those missed spaces were. ^o^

SS1 P6 (54% - 8th line up from bottom of page)

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Need to add a missing "a", i.e. to a cafe.

(In English syntax "a" is used when referring to someone or something for the first time in a text or conversation.)

v3 p4 15%:

"The women who’d brought up Aoi frowned." -> woman

3.1:

This time,s he didn't bat my hand away.

This time, she didn't bat my hand away.

@Valanduin said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

In the latest part the word jealous and words derived from it like jealousy is used in many places. Although it is very commonly misused (it is up there with literally), technically jealousy is when you don't want other people to have what belongs to you and envy is when you want something that belongs to you, envy would fit better in most of the places jealous appears. It wouldn't be a big deal if it was a one off because of how frequently jealous of misused, but when it is relating to the powers of the Devil of Envy being both inconsistent and incorrect with the terminology stands out a lot more.

While it is true that is one meaning of "jealous," Merriam-Webster's top definition for it also states it to mean, "hostile toward a rival or one believed to enjoy an advantage." Even stating that definition is equivalant to "envious." On the MW website, they also state that jealous can hold the same meaning as envious in the way "to describe someone who feels or shows a very strong desire for something that belongs to someone else."

https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/jealous

v7 p7

~ 20%

Not a correction so much as a formatting suggestion:

With that in mind, I opened the message.
Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.
“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

You might want to blockquote or otherwise indent the letter since it's supposed to be quoted text, e.g.:

With that in mind, I opened the message.

Dear Brave Pekkle,
Let me start by apologizing. You must be confused, receiving a letter like this out of the blue. But from the moment I saw you on the battlefield, it was like lightning had seized my core stone. I think about you every day, and every night I lie awake thinking of you.
...
From,
Someone who thinks of you always.

“What’s this? A walkthrough? It’s addressed to Brave Pekkle.”

V20 P2 (80%)

3rd line down from top of page:

...even my lady's fast stores of mana.

I believe this should read:

-->even my lady's vast stores of mana.

(This makes more sense and sounds better)

11th line up from bottom of page:

...clear the staircase in the underground hall by tomorrow at le thatest!

Correct to:

-->by tomorrow at the latest!

V5P2

Prince Charles seemed to understand ...

Prince -> Sir

v1p5 ~35%:

"He probably just came back to the estate because Aurelio wants to let the executives know that DIna Ferletti is back.

DIna -> Dina.

47%:

As the words left her lisp, a chill ran down her spine.

lisp -> lips