@Ingraman said in Making Magic - Corrections Topic:

v10p5:

88% - Most of our expeditions consisted of searching for valuable materials and dipping before the other adventurers could get a word in edgewise with us. -> Maybe it’s okay, but I was thinking that it’s dipping out, rather than the verb alone…

I believe it's considered informal, but I've definitely heard people leaving out the out in the phrase on numerous occasions.

v6 p9

~60%

We chatted for a little while after, then I announced, “Well, we’ll head back now. See you around, Miguel.”
“Yep. Catch you later.”
The rest of the team, twins included, called out “See ya!” and “Bye-bye!” as they followed Kuditt. That team was clearly held together by their leader. I’d just hope things didn’t weigh on him too heavily.

then Kuditt announced

V8P7 ~0%

[...] using an off-the-cuff spell to shifta pretty hefty storage shelf […]

Should be shift a.

~16%

Had he prepared in advance laid groundwork with his colleagues, […]

I'm not sure what would be correct here - just a comma after in advance, or only one of the two things (preparing or laying groundwork).

~17%

[…] much impact. it's

Should be It's.

~61%

[…] it was essential that I carry this task through […]

I'm not perfectly sure, but I feel like the more common carried should be used in the inner monologue, though I feel like Emperor Carmine would use the classic formal carry in dialogue.

v13p8 ~63%

Graham had once been a hero lauded […]

The whole paragraph about Grahan's family and his own demise is duplicate.

v14 p13

~60%

Yufu was the small girl who sat on the seat in front of my desk.

Since the seat is where she regularly sits, in my dialect it would sound more natural as

Yufu was the small girl who sat in the seat in front of my desk.

@watem said in The Otome Heroine’s Fight for Survival - Corrections Topic:

~77% "his combat power was close to 300"
Considering the next strongest person is described as having 1700 power, perhaps it's supposed to be 3000?

I checked before coming, and yes:
枯れたようなエルグリムから異様な殺気と威圧感が放たれた。３０００近い戦闘力。その圧力に配下の戦士たちさえ思わず息を呑み、周辺で様子を窺っていたダンジョンの魔物たちが逃げるように散っていく。

Volume 3 Part 12
34% placing himself in position to Duke Ealdred -> placing himself in opposition to Duke Ealdred

Volume 4 Part 7
58% I see.. That's an interesting. ->

I see... that's an interesting concept. I see. That's an interesting concept. I see. That's interesting.

59% Due to the punctuation, it looks like Two Days Since Firing the Kiln is supposed to be a section title; perhaps centered and/or placed above the paragraph it is currently in. Ah, I see kingpendragon has already noted this.

v1p11:

16% - What had she fallen for this man? -> Seems like something’s wrong. Perhaps “Why had she fallen for this man?” Or maybe “What had she fallen for in this man?”, but less likely? There’s always “None-of-the-above”, too.

V7P3, 76%: "As soon as they saw that we were [making] a break for it"

@Hylebos said in Looks like a Job for a Maid! The Tales of a Dismissed Supermaid - Corrections Topic:

v5p6 ~71%:

"I could tell just by watching the way he cooked—it was all a bit off, from the way he chopped the veges to how he cooked the meat.

veges -> veggies? This might legitimately be one of those style guide things where y'all are to prefer the spelling of certain words one way or another but I just wanted to double check to make sure.

I had assumed that it was an intentional misspelling, but searching through the previous four books doesn’t show any previous uses of “veges” or “veggies”. It’s been “vegetables” all the way… What will the overlord here decide? :)

V3 P6, 9%
"Meaning Werlick was the one who forged that sword"
Werlick -> Werlich

62%
"Ren waited from the incoming blow, his stance unsteady, but his sword ready to move at a moment’s notice. It was quite the contradiction."
From -> for. (Or 'waited from' -> awaited)

98%
"Fiona’s hands slowly fell from her shoulders and he grabbed the hem of Ren’s sleeve."
He -> she

v6 p6

~5%

“Sure do!” Blanc replied. “You were talking about taking over portal towns, right? Though, for what reason, I’m still not exactly sure.”
“Right! That’s right!” Lyla said. “So why did you mention something about a mafia?”
“Well, by portal team, you mean those towns next to the dungeons, right? In Shape, that’d be the town of Klinngl, since it’s next to the one-star dungeon, the Cherva Conifer Forest!”

portal town

v5P2p6:

63% - Morizt -> Moritz

V2P3, 27%: "Elementary spirit arts were taught at the sixth rank, but [he|Akira] couldn't even reach the rank below that."

This isn't really correction, but more of a question:
In Volume 6, at 17% of part 1, Aoi says, "the temporal beings known as spirits."
Would it be better to use the word "ephemeral" instead of "temporal" in this context?

V8P9, 46%:

I channeled mithril into my sword, took aim, and swung down
[…]
I looked down and saw my mithril sword crumble to dust until it had disappeared completely.
That was because I'd infused it with divine power.

should be divine power judging by the later text (from the start of the next section down the page).

93%:

I unleashed an area Tornado spell. It swept up the monsters in its funnel...but then disappeared a moment later.
It won't work after all, then. Chris had said that the magic-type monsters at the back had ways to interfere with attack spells, and she was right. The reason I'd decided to join the fray directly was because it had looked like spells would work.

should that be wouldn’t?

v6p5:

33% - traveling along the cost, -> Typo: coast 97% - when they wake up they’re head is perfectly clear -> their