V6 P5 (58% - 2nd line down from top of page)

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Replace "here" with "her".
(e.g.- ...stolen Wisteria's seat from her...)

V2 P2

~62%

If he handled his duties without issue, he would soon take on full responsibility for the earldom.

In Volume 1, "county" was used, not earldom.

~ 76%

If I remember correctly, she's Theresalo, daughter of Viscount Traff.

Wellmy dug into her mind for details about the girl. If her calculations were correct, she was currently sixteen and had been a noble for four years, her father having been bestowed the title of viscount when she had been twelve.

Theresalo is a baron's daughter, not a viscount's. All instances of "viscount" should be replaced with "baron".

V2, P5

~ 34%

"You know, Wellie," Zumiano said, in a good mood, "When I learned about your plan to save Iora, I actually planned to wait for your conviction and break you out of jail, then whisk you to the Baslam Empire with me."

Balsam

V6 p5, ~11%

[…] it also mediated and intervened in quarrels between assault clans. So it wasn't utterly toothless, it thus needed the the strength [...]

The beginning of the second sentence doesn't match up. Maybe

In order not to be toothless, it needed the strength […]

Or something along that idea.

v2p4:

2% - Now that she’d finally come too, […] -> Too many “o”s, I think: she’d finally come to 43% - I lsaw the swordsman […] -> A stray letter wandered into the sentence: I saw the

v7p11 ~62%

Prince Willie is spelled as Willi in

"Please, don't," Willi said with a rueful smile.

v2p3 ~55%

He was reluctant to spend money so lavishly right of the bat, so couldn't bring himself to ask for it right away.

The second half seems to be missing either a conjunction like and so couldn't or the subject like so he couldn't bring.

~80%

"Excuse me, can you please tell me the way to the old annex."

Should in my opinion be ended with a question mark.

5.5:

guarantees!"But some

guarantees!" But some

v12p9 ~44%

The little dragon and its rider floated into the air, and rained rainbow light over them.

The actor in the second half sentence is off, as in <someone> rained the rainbow light. Changing the order to

The little dragon and its rider floated into the air, and rainbow light rained over them.

keeps things open (it's Megades' action).

~63%

He had read the bird in a book […]

Should probably be

He had read about the bird in a book […]

Volume 21. Part 12. 55%

Like in part 7, it's the same song Selphy sang in volume 19 ("Can you hear my song?")

V17 P3 82% "Annabellel" -> Annabelle

Volume 4 part 5 about 91%

It says

staying in the Fierce Ogrefolk village

but the characters right now are in the Beastfolk village

V8.2 P5, 0%
"Akira turned his camo off and showed himself at last. He had accompanied the others into the vehicle—with Hikari being none the wiser."
Hikari -> Hikaru

V6 P2 (50% - 9th line up from bottom of page)

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Replace "tit" with "it".

4.2:

Please be rest assured.

Something is off with this. I think the "please be" is not normally associated with "rest assured"?
"Please be reassured"?
"Please rest assured"?

V16p10 96% - Afterword says "Thanks for buying volume 15" - should be 16, unless the author genuinely made that mistake.

V6P7

"We shall deploy troops to the north of the city ...

"to the north" means outside the city and north of it. (See previous paragraph, where the river is "to the north".) These troops are being deployed along the northern wall of the city. So "deploy troops in the north of the city" would be the simplest correction.

v5p8 ~94%:

I shrugged. "This is nothing. ," I shrugged.

Need to do a pass on that sentence to remove leftover decisions from past revisions.

Volume 5, Part 1, 47%

She’d give them her blood, they’d become lesser zombies

Not a grammatical or spelling error but in the context of the story, “lesser zombies” should be “lesser vampires”