V17 P5 75%
Gon, who was guzzling beer out of a bour that I'd filled for him.
bour=bowl
I looked up bour and all i could find was a scottish term for a cottage which i find funny, Gon would have to be full size to drink that much beer.

V1 P1
19%
“Full marks? You’re joking. Not even a noble could pull that off.”
The exam was scored out of a hundred, with the average hovering around sixty. It was decidedly not the sort of test anyone aced. And yet a commoner girl had done just that. A perfect score. The first in the kingdom’s history. The whispers only grew.
32%
"Heard you scored full marks on the exam. It’s been a decade since anyone’s managed that. And...forever since a commoner did it."

Those two statements seem to be in opposition. The former could be referring to the 'first commoner in the kingdom's history', maybe? (Though my read was instead that no one had ever done so)

36%
"The Office of General Affairs was located fairly centrally to the royal palace"
Probably just me, but the 'to' is throwing me off. To -> within, perhaps?

V13 P7, 60%
"It really was fortunate that he hadn’t been kicked in the head or stomach. Really, did that hoof mark on his lower back really not hurt?"
Repetition. 2 instances are probably fine, but may replace or remove one of the latter two?

67%
"A metal door opened, from which a tall woman emerged. She looked to be just a little older than Dahila."
Dahila -> Dahlia

Volume 4 Part 3
48% was to figure out how to figure out how to stop the rampancy. -> was to figure out how to stop the rampancy.

35.3:

hunting dog can provide us first,"Giran Ririn then added.

hunting dog can provide us first," Giran Ririn then added.

Part 4 has a "Takagamahara" that should probably be "Takamagahara" instead.

V6 P1 (76% - 12th line up from bottom of page)

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Insert "I" in outlined box for better syntax...
e.g.,

I happened to find myself dining with the rest of them," I explained plainly.

Volume 1 Part 3
16% topped backward -> toppled backward

v1p4:

58% - from the young female knights perspective -> female knights’ perspective ? (“their” is used later in the same sentence instead of “her”, so I presume that the “knights” is supposed to be a plural possessive, instead of a singular possessive).

Volume 4 Part 10
52% "The Colt Highland Federation truly is skilled at sales. It's impressive how you keep making new products."
Sales and product development are two very different things. Should the first line perhaps be referring to 'business' instead of sales?

V8.2 P10, 90%

that I have demonstrated efficiency and capability of the units ->
that I have demonstrated the efficiency and capability of the units

V3, P10, around 85%:

delivered to the guest palace.Once palace. Once they arrive,

Missing space.

“Once that kind of culture was establish”
established

V2 P9, 9%
"However, the adventures here were aware of the power such influential people possessed."
Adventures -> adventurers

45%
"I don’t believe a man of Marquis Ignard’s standing would get angry over something so trivial."
Ignard -> Ignart

In part 3, we had this list: alt text

But the current part makes it clear that Hihi'irokane is STR, which I assume makes adamantite VIT. (Which honestly makes more sense anyway.)

Edit: this was acknowledged on Discord as author error and will be fixed in post

V1 P1, 49%
“Of course! But fear not, for you will have a perfect body, Satie!”
It confused me while reading it, til finding out in a bit that that's her reincarnated name. A bit of precognition/foretelling? Or should it be 'Satie' -> 'Saki' at this point (especially as she's then referred to as Saki Osanai just a few paragraphs later)?

V5 P2, 92%
"Though I’d felt their gazes on me, I hadn’t been able to sense them at all."
Probably correct, or not worth fussing over, but reads to me more like "though I'd sensed them, I hadn't been able to sense them". Maybe something more like "Though I’d felt their gazes on me, I hadn’t been able to sense [their source] at all"?

A1 V7 P16 (42% - 8th line up from bottom of page)

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Add "was" between the words outlned above for correct syntax -
e.g. "his allies' defensive line was at its' limits"