Volume 12 Part 7 ~25%

"they talk to Ryousuke and I." should be "they talk to Ryousuke and me."

v9p6:

93% - […] the event Id signed up for. -> Wizard of? Missing apostrophe: I’d

v12p16:

30% - […] for such a ride, Gyoku-ou, . He lacked […] -> Extra comma and space: Gyoku-ou. He

V1P4 40%:
Reinald was a far better offer than I ever could've ever hoped for."
Suggest either dropping EITHER one of ever, or change the second one to even.

V1 P11 23%

"so this time, I couldn't let myself lose."

"This time" is present tense but he is thinking back to his entrance exam and how he couldn't let Ana down by losing. Using "that time" would be a better fit for narrating in the past tense.

"so that time, I couldn't let myself lose."

v9p9:

89% - But the signal the sixth heat’s Art showed […] -> sixth head’s Art

v1p10:

75% - Beshides, . I’m going back to my tower soon. -> Bonus period after the comma: Beshides, I’m going […]. She speaks awkwardly, but I don’t think that she managed to magically speak a period into that spot.

V9 part 8 7% carraige return and possibe punctuation.
"Also, here are some more gifts that I forgot to take out earlier."
, and I lined up three apples in front of Diola.

-> remove period and shift the comma inside of the apostrophes.
"Also, here are some more gifts that I forgot to take out earlier," and I lined up three apples in front of Diola.

-> As an alternate, heretically start a sentence and paragraph with a conjunction. Remove comma completely.
"Also, here are some more gifts that I forgot to take out earlier."
And I lined up three apples in front of Diola.

3.8

Even though the hoard had passed,

“horde”

v1 p4

~75% And with my sister’s being as they were, I was often the one doing the cooking => sisters (because the subsequent word "being" is used as a verb not a noun, so "sisters" is not a possessive.)

Vol.6 pt.3

Around 38%

Dragon's is written where you want Dragons. I do this all the time when I type that little apostrophe sneaks into a simple plural.

V2P6:

Caim nonchalantly brought back the conversation on track.

Caim nonchalantly brought the conversation back on track.

@Guydude said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

Vol. 3 Part 5 around 16%

"I saw you walk out so came out to look for you."

Thanks, that does sound awkward so fixed that.

@Gamen said in Zilbagias the Demon Prince - Corrections Topic:

@ebaldwin In that case it's just "set up" e.g. "Lumia set him up" or "He claims he was set up by Lumia". Though I think 唆す/instigate is more "put him up to it" than "set him up"

Went back to double check and re-read the next part to see how they worded it there as well and you are correct. "Putting him up to" makes more sense here since although deceit was part of it, the core of the issue alongside the rumors is her making him do her dirty work and fanning the flames on the situation. Reworded the lines and honestly thank you again for catching that.

5.9

making sure we didn’t break the dragon’s stone into anymore parts.

“any more parts.”

The compound word pertains to time, not quantity.

I'm not sure if anyone has noticed this but in the published e-book, the color illustration listed the "Chief Researcher of the Slime Nursery" as Gildovan when it's suppose to be Idaealina.

3.8:

Nahmard at one point is called "Narmald".

v26p3 ~ 23%

Vina was acting a little troubled about that because it kind of goes against our customers, but she looked really happy too.

customers -> customs

V8P11 30%:
Teshikaga-kun wailed.
Context would be Hitoshi.