[68%] I lay back on the huge bed big, which was large enough to sleep the three of us all at once -> big ?; not sure
[71%] "It's fine, Aya said we shouldn't wake up, seeing as you looked so tired." -> you?
[16%] that of an ouroboros,those tasked with representing ► Missing space.
[26%] A chain of explosions were whipped up, sending Lufas ► It should be was?
[52%] so there was no point in leaving behind descendents. ► It should be descendants.
[67%] Orm finally realized that,at some point, the Goddess’s ► Missing space.
[79%] in bird puns, or they were so so above it all that ► Duplicate so.
[87%] that a bird pun-crackingIroha looked attractive ► It should be pun-cracking Iroha (space).
[93%] giving me a doubtful frown,but now wasn’t the ► Missing space.
[32%] her eyes sharp. “I must tell my sister Kintsuno the ► The dialogue's starting double quote alone is in italic format.
[78%] the Dark World. At your service, General Valentine. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
[93%] Despite her words, she had a big smile on her face ► Missing period.
[95%] impulse struck Flio to check on his childrens’ status. ► It should be children’s.
[2%] Felicia, who was stood next to him, said with a hard, ► Maybe who stood (remove was) or who was standing?
[49%] for the Glass Gobletwas well known among members ► It should be Goblet was (space).
[59%] as the masked man who brought Homura to tears..” ► Duplicate period.
[81%] Despite his lack of talent, however. he had persevered. ► Wrong period.
[Generic] Checking again part 8 I noticed the nickname there is Lightning Blades (plural) instead of Lightning Blade (singular) like in part 10 (where it's used not once but 6 times).
[34%] a female dwarven blacksmith named Rike Tanya. ► It should be Lieke.
[~48%] The gate behind them was partially destroyed, creating an opening for the others to escape though -> through
[~88%] [...] given to them by the concierge Celestina, who had met in Quenza. -> who they had met?