@eggnog said in In Another World with Household Spells - Corrections Topic:

V6P8 18% and everywhere else that "force" is mentioned:

"Force is what makes things work," I explained."[...] When force is applied to the food we eat, it becomes energy to move our bodies. A growing flower uses force to take energy from the sun[...]"

This is a very strange definition of force. The physics concept of force is a push or pull on a object, with a magnitude and direction. It's not the same thing as a chemical reaction which is what most of her examples sound like to me. While force is indeed applied to the food we eat when we chew it, I don't get the impression Patience is describing chewing there. Is Patience giving a meaningless explanation in Japanese, or is there another word that force might be translated as...? I think she's describing the conversion of energy from one form to another, so maaaaybe transduction? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Transducer

I agree that what she is describing is a lot closer to energy transduction than anything else.
However, given the apparently primitive state of that world's natural philosophy, and the fact that Patience is just trying to get basic concepts across to her little brothers, I had assumed that she wasn't even trying to use the terminology correctly in terms of real world physics but was just repurposing terminology for her own ends.

At the beginning of the section "To kill a friend a second time" I felt pretty lost.

I would have appreciated more speech tags so I would have some idea who is talking. Unless I'm supposed to be bewildered? It felt needlessly obscure.

V5p1:

0%: "from about halfway down all the way to their apexes" -> halfway up (just nitpicking directionality 8-) 9%: had known Solare back when he was being bullied by the other students.” -> extra quotes 36%: Strath, Elisa, and Shenley slowly followed from behind.” -> extra quotes

v18p6:
59%: put your payment into the fun -> fund
71%: As long as we give His Majesty a head's up -> heads-up

V10 P13, 60%
"With a bouquet of flowers in his hands that he had convinced a florist [to] put together at the break of dawn..."

v5 p5

~45%

Lily was taken to the first aid tent, and Commander Jacqueline made her way to the commanders’ tent to give her report. As for me, I’d completed the mission, thus freeing me from the team, so I returned to my tent. I sensed about two people inside—presumablySumire and Sara.

=> presumably Sumire

@Libri-Liberorum That one at least proves this is human translated. No machine would have made such miss take.

V14 P2, 0%
"Every step Touya took down that ladder was accompanied by the sound of groaning wires. Given the board and other equipment strapped to his back, Touya was probably putting three times his average load on [the] rope."
Less certain, but I think that it's the same here:
“...If you’re saying that, then I sure hope that [the] body doesn’t explode into a fountain of blood,” said Touya.

97%
“I thought the things in here tasted awful next to what we could find outside, but I was actually wrong! It’s quite good!” Metea exclaimed.
With it being Metea, might match her speech patterns, but as a normal sentence think 'tasted' -> 'would taste' might fit better

V1 P6, 85%
“I see I’ve lost,” Earl Schonheir replied. “You performed admirably"
Schonheir -> Schonheit

V7 P5 (17% - 5th and 6th line down from top of page)

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Add "you" between words in the outlined area:
e.g., It's been a hot minute since I've seen you guys.

v1 p6

~5%

A faint,orange light glimmered behind the torii. The lively clamor of a crowd of people could be heard from beyond, inviting him to join them.

=> faint, orange (missing space)

V4P5, 8%: “Also, there are some pretty healers hiding out in the institute." - while possibly also true, there’s a word missing like “good”.

v3p2:

98% - I’d figure -> Not “I figured” (you’d have that problem)? When the previous line is: “All of my subordinates are older than me, so I was having trouble knowing how to handle them.”

V7p6 ~19%

[...] who'd only just declared himself was too old [...]

Should be either "who'd just declared himself to be too old" or "who'd just declared that he was too old".

V5P9, 41%: “How razor-thin wires sharp enough to cut anything they touched could parry bare flesh without slicing clean through them was anyone's guess” - one or other of these is incorrect because flesh is not plural.

46% (same para as above post): “It was plain to see Leah LP hadn’t dropped at all” - Leah’s

66%: “Now that they thought about it, they'd completely neglected to tell Blanc the whole thing about how inventories worked for NPCs, did they?” hadn’t they?

V1 P6, 74%
"As the on-site envoy of House Kaddour, Sylan spent time lending an ear to the questions and concerns of the evacuees—his subjects."
Sylan -> Sylvan

83%
"After taking role—all accounted for—Escoffier addressed the group."
I'm not sure in the singular, as here, but presuming roll-call as the base word: role -> roll

v13p9:

71% - As for the person next to who muttered that overly dramatic comment, […] -> Missing word: Perhaps “As for the person next to her who muttered […]”

V2 P11, 86%
"Don’t tell me...her vessel rupture?!"
This one may be correct as is. As a normal sentence, rupture -> ruptured. If referring to her ongoing 'vessel rupture', probably correct as is.

88%
"Ren panted for breadth, his hands trembling from exhaustion."
Breadth -> breath

96%
"All the plots that had been playing out on the palms of his hands had turned to mist and slipped through his fingers."
I could be wrong on this, but I believe that the phrase is always singular (in the palm of his hand).