V13 P9, 6%
"Ripples formed on the surface of the coffee in Dahlia’s hands. She decided to set down her cup to add some milk into it."
Then just following on:
13% "Dahlia was served more coffee, but she did not reach for it. That was how surprised she was by what Zanardi said."
Probably not intended that way, but this brings to mind the latest Naked Gun movie - each time coffee is set down, even if it's a full cup just been ordered, a new cup is put into their hands immediately.
Granted, time could be passing by quicker than I realised in this scene, with her previous cup growing cold and there being overly attentive staff, but adding in milk is often done when coffee is too hot still, so seemed a little jarring with nothing in between particularly giving a reason for it.
22% “Miss Rossetti, do you perhaps find this repulsing?” Zanardi asked.
My instincts lean towards 'repulsive' over 'repulsing' here