Volume 8 - Part 4:
[24%] problem flock sooner than later -> add rather between sooner than.

7.5

Yes, an “invitation, ”not a summons.

Typo.

5.5

to pray on these smaller groups.

“prey on”

Yup, I’ve got no idea what I’m saying myself.

“seeing”

Volume 6 - Part 6:

[4%] I tossed and turned.I was like a huge worm wriggling ► Missing space. [11%] I was glad I was alone. If I’d woken up to that prince’s ► The I character alone in If isn't in italic format. [17%] The skin that had been under the rope, but it didn’t ► It feels like there's missing words here. Already reported. [24%] me! I can sneak out now! Supressing my excitement, ► It should be Suppressing. [74%] “Owwwww! What was that!?” Turning towards where ► It should be ?! for consistency.

Volume 2 - Part 3:

[25%] participating in the Guardian trials in this town, ► It should be trial (singular). [34%] that I will the one who become s the Guardian ► A couple of issues: It should be will be. It should be becomes (remove space). [39%] “A single Royal Knights fight with the force of an ► It should be Knight fights (move the s). [46%] Sepith turned to me. “You are n ’ t off the hook ► It should be aren’t (remove spaces). [49%] of House Denning were treated as an adult once ► It should be as adults? [53%] participating in the trials himself. It must’ve been ► It should be trial (singular). [64%] The woman started placed down our meals onto ► It should be started placing, or just placed (remove started). [70%] “So then, rookie.The Knight Commander has high ► Missing space. [72%] I sighed inwardly She had no clue about why I ► Missing period. [73%] Sepith sided with the Dustour so that he could ► It should be the Dustour Empire, or simply Dustour (remove the). [78%] didn’t need to point that out, I thought, annoyed . ► Remove extra space. [85%] everyone who came in the door with a beaming ► It should be from the. [88%] but that the girl was a first-year student at Kirsch ► Missing period.

Chapter 25—the part right after Mia catches Ruby crying it says “Worst yet...”, I believe it should have been “Worse yet...”

Volume 13 - Part 9:

[65%] the Fa house’s stove. GIba is a high-quality meat, ► It should be Giba (lowercase i).

Volume 4 - Part 2:

[Generic] The topic link at the end of the part is still broken (missing slash / after domain). 😋 [3%] our own food and drinks,and Yuki came with ► Missing space. [26%] masculine that it really hits the mark for me ► Missing period. [59%] was the last time you did it with Momota-kun? ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. [84%] It’s rich coming from annoying hardcore virgin!” ► It should be an annoying. [88%] I’m thirty-four-years-old... I want to cherish ► It should be thirty-four-year-old (singular; hyphens) or thirty-four years old (plural; hyphen).

Volume 7 - Part 3:

[31%] Do you think you’ll be able to Sans-Terre soon, ► It should be return to Sans-Terre. [66%] of firewood either, why didn’t you even come?” ► It should be did. [71%] appreciate that, but doesn't it interfere with your ► It should be doesn’t (different ’ ).

V4P1
0% - This meant that there was something wrong with Sara's declaration - In the context of the sentence, shouldn't it be "nothing wrong" instead?

15% - visit the mistress's family and stay with her." - Two points. First, by convention, you don't need the extra s after the apostrophe when the possessive ends in an s already. Second, since the dialogue is continuing in the next paragraph with the same speaker, you don't need the ending quote.

Volume 3 Part 8

I doubted they'd be any helpful with that
any help or helpful, but not any helpful

@zwabbit Thanks for the feedback. It's definitely a line we'll consider when we're finalizing the book.

Re: v5p7

[76%] along with his own wims.

I haven’t looked up that spelling, but shouldn’t it be whims?

Or has the book been published already? I should double check. ^^;

@pcj I guess that's also an option, I didn't think of it. If that's the case, I think it should be made a bit more clear though.

Volume 5 - Part 11:

[0%] for truly special occasions.Even members of the royal ► Missing space. [66%] attempt to use Royal Degree. Analyze Eye informed ► It should be Decree. [69%] only thing he could do was again use Royal Decree. ► Maybe use again (switch around). [91%] Mara Pisuna/Demon Lord-ification, Concealment ► The previous instance was Lordification (no hyphen). Update either one to match. [99%] he’s now gone. So I can’t fulfil that dream of mine ► It should be fulfill (US spelling).

5.11

he’d only given Nadasha and the Church of God’s Light responsible information;

This seems more like “irresponsible information”, or "he's only responsible for giving”.

“That’s right. I’ve doubted whether you were Seraphie,

It should be made more clear that it's Quartz talking here, not Light.

V4p1
[0%] The kingdom's locale meant -> location; locale doesn't sound right there.
[58%] significantly more than Aura [...] possessed -> than possessed by Aura, [...] ...just a suggestion to avoid leaving one lone word orphaned at the end by the insertion of the aside...

V11p4 [55%] struck a painful blow to their coppers -> on the off chance that coffers was meant instead...

@terabyte It was somehow missing a ">" in its coding. I fixed it, so hopefully it's showing up correctly now. Thanks for the note. :-)