Thank you both so very much for the incredibly detailed and helpful feedback, @strangeattractor and @Hylebos. I'm a bit under the weather today and not up to writing a detailed response to all of it atm, but please know I am truly and deeply grateful to you both.
@strangeattractor said in JNC Writing Group Review Thread - The Adopted Princess is Actually a Wayfarer of Worlds:
I feel like my feedback is a little on the harsh side, but I decided to voice some of the criticisms that I might usually hold back from saying, since you said that you want to get published and make money from writing, and want to know what may be holding you back from that.
Oh no, I don't want you or anyone else to hold back on telling me how I can make my work better. I'm nothing but grateful to you and everyone else for taking the time to help me become a better writer. Thanks so much for responding again and clarifying what you meant, especially when you're so busy. I will definitely try reworking the opening chapter with all this advice in mind.