Finally getting around to reading v2, and I can't believe no one commented on Kai's "ten-square-foot" bedroom... Guess I have to send an email about that...
Also included the "twenty-square-meter wide" living room.
[35%] "I couldn't tell what the Emperor Maximillian was thinking," ► Remove the
[General] Maximilian / Maximillian is inconsistently spelled (sometimes with one L and other times with two). Just noticed in this part, but could be in previous parts too (as I admittedly haven't paid too much attention and just happened to notice in this part because it happened back to back) - there are four instances of this right after the part called out above (at 35%) where it starts with 2 L's, goes to 1, then back to 2, and then back to 1 again in the span of a few paragraphs.
[34%] "Woe was me." (2 uses) ► isn't the saying "Woe is me."?
[62%] "Very well, Lady Iris. We'll all go there together!" ► Hmm, this is just conjecture, but shouldn't this be directed to Werra, not Iris? Though I have no idea what the original text says, this sentence just seems off in context when the last thing Werra said (which was "Not at all! Not at all! We would love to have you accompany us!") was to try to convince Iris to go with them and then Werra speaks again and says the line in question to Iris, which feels like a line that Iris should have been saying to Werra. Though, I guess there could be some unspecified conversation going on in the inner dialogue between these two lines.
[13%] Diablo raised his voice and called out, ► Paragraph ends with a comma, merge the following dialogue into it.
[28%] “Whaaaaaaaaaa!” he screamed ► Missing period.
[34%] Mairabelle peered at them dubiously. ► It should be Mariabelle.
[96%] newest volume of14-Year-Old and Illustrator ► Missing space.
Even Lady Angelica was audibly shocked by this. “My word!”
“Why would she do that? It definitely came from Saeko? Matsuri wasn’t the one who wanted to quit?”
These should really be one paragraph, especially if you're forced to use incorrect quotes otherwise.
Thank you for taking the time to post about this, for future reference, all volume discussion topics have a link to the corrections topic in the opening post.