Part 6
11%
After all, Count Salzberg had a major weakness hanging over his head; his possession of the halite vein.
--should be colon, not semicolon
12%
wouldn't Count Salzberg know that we visited the Christof Company because we went to the Mystel Company?"
--"before"?
16%
Simone's and Gennou's descriptions of the Count's characters matched with the unease Ryoma felt toward the man.
--"character"
20%
Every person who leaves their land would mean less tax income for these nobles.
22%
to think creatively in ways that ignore this Earth's logic.
--"ignored"
24%
In which case, perhaps it would be safer to forego drawing people from the other nobles' territories and simply buying slaves."
--"buy"
33%
But so long as Ryoma doesn't do anything foolish enough to make them revolt, the liberated slaves wouldn't turn against him.
--"didn't"
--"left"
37%
He'd only slightly stepped outside the main street, which served as Epirus's main artery, he found himself on dark roads covered with shady establishments.
--insert "when"
38%
A bearded man who introduced himself as the shopkeeper bowed his cheerfully.
--"to him"
38%
All around them were slaves, who looked into empty space with vacant expressions and connected to the wall with chains.
--insert "were"
40%
It was if something had taken the definition of the word 'avarice' and fashioned it into a human face.
--insert "as"; "avarice" should have double quotes around it since it is not an interior quote
42%
but we will gladly provide you to the best of our abilities."
--insert "for"?
53%
Most of his victims were child slaves that were useless as workforce, too.
--insert "part of a"?
55%
And when people saw other human beings as objects, they discard the ability to feel emotion.
--"discarded", or change "saw" to "see"
64%
Until then, the white race believed them to be chosen by God and treated people of color as subhumans.
--"themselves"
66%
One could call slavery evil as much as they want, but no one would lend them an ear.
--"wanted"?
66%
It was this understanding that allowed him to pass weeping children being struck with a whip by and doing nothing.
--"do"
66%
But having this slaver speak to him like he knows it all simply added too much oil to the fire burning in Ryoma's heart.
--"knew"
68%
I swear it on my life, we will do as you requested!"
--comma splice
75%
He etched into his heart that human greed can come across as toxic, suffocating stench.
--insert "a"
81%
Only those chosen children will be promised a future and freedom,
--"would"
81%
Not all of them will gain freedom, but they were all at least given a chance.
--"would"; "would all at least be given"
88%
"Thank you for your patronage," The shopkeeper didn't even bother checking the contents of the sack before stuffing it into his bag and bowed his head.
--comma should be period; "bowing"
98%
They only consider things as their own the moments their master says so...
--"moment"
98%
They were simply restraining their individuality and will, so they don't make themselves seem unnecessary.
--"didn't"
