@Terabyte said in Fake Fake Princess Vol. 2!:
Volume 2 - Part 5:
[12%] Is it ‘cause it’s a robot that she feels close to it? ► It should be ’cause (different ’ ). Just nitpicking ;P
[17%] they like robots, rather than instead of a real dog,” ► Duplicate. Remove either rather than or instead of.
[22%] Those three words passed through Kyouhei’s mind, ► The dialogue “He needs charging? Leave it to me,” is more than three words. It either is referred to the whole of it (so seven words) or most likely to the second part of it about leaving it to Pamil which would instead be four words. (I doubt it refers to the first part about it needing charging?)
[44%] “...Ah” ► Missing punctuation.
[46%] around Pamil and sat at his feet, looking up at him, ► Replace both his / him with her (Pamil)?
[61%] a plastic bag for if it rains, I’ll put you in it right away. ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing.
Changed all the stuff in here and the last message.
For the rather than instead of I used the rather than, though @Eric-Bravo might decide to change it to the other.
The three words refer to the bit at the start of that line, Electricity, Pamil, hand.
Changed the his feet to Kyouhei's feet to get rid of the ambiguity, pcj had the right of it there.
