2.7

two more Flygears arrived, replacing the presence of the one that just escaped.

Odd phrasing. Maybe “two more Flygears arrived in place of the one that just escaped.”

@gamen

spoiler

You can also see a list of all the premium bonuses (if there are any) here on this thread:

https://forums.j-novel.club/topic/305/premium-e-book-bonus-contents-list

Specifically for Slayers, the physical edition is a 3-in-1 omnibus, in case that affects your decision. You can check out some photos of it here:

https://twitter.com/SlayersevoR/status/1419729188593012745
https://twitter.com/SlayersevoR/status/1419729394290024460

Volume 5 - Part 1:

[28%] if my father saw through how conflicted I was, said, ► Paragraph ends with a comma, merge the following dialogue into it. [38%] women. Apparently, they were “Instagram-worthy”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.

Volume 14 - Part 3:

[4%] that fill the Magmatic Sols. You can destroy a detachment, ► It should be Magimatic. [15%] telling everyone else to be careful, Diablo casted a spell. ► It should be cast? [31%] decision. She raised her hands up to the air, and chanted, ► Paragraph ends with a comma, merge the following dialogue into it or make it a colon. [41%] “....Y...Yes...” ► It should be 3 periods. [41%] Edeglard’s body began crumbling into particles of light ► It should be Edelgard’s. [46%] came falling down from the castle., but the place they ► Remove extra period. [54%] “Edelgard is special to you, after all,” ► It should be a period. [67%] Lumachina, she complained that she “smelled like God”. ► Move the period inside the quotes. [86%] said she “needs to try something for the first time”. ► Move the period inside the quotes.

Volume 12 - Part 6:

[42%] the moment Signus lain eyes on the other ► It should be laid? [84%] “Hmm. Right then,” lione replied, seemingly ► It should be Lione (Capitalized).

@iseguy I've changed all uses of "lead" to "leash." Thanks for your note.

Volume 1 - Part 5:

[2%] I would’ve expected for a thirteen year old boy. ► It should be thirteen-year-old (hyphens). [44%] “By the way, the princess says she’ll be making ► It should be said? [92%] them through. I suppose I really should apologize ► Missing period.

Volume 7 - Part 9:

[7%] I was certain I had mishead, however. There is no way ► It should be misheard. [15%] sleeping with no bed and without eat a proper dinner, ► It should be eating. [43%] not understand that? Now matter how much someone ► It should be No. [50%] pulled at my arms, drawing my down to lie beside him. ► It should be me. [65%] It’s light enough to see my feet already, and it will only keep getting lighter as we walk, ► Maybe bright / brighter?

Volume 14 - Part 4:

[25%] Her proud profile wore a sort of pensive looking expression. ► It should be pensive-looking (hyphen).

Volume 1 - Part 5:

[35%] the boarding school for girls ages twelve and up where ► It should be nine? Olivia is nine and right before it says She’d apparently be in the “pre-academy” phase of the school until age twelve.

Volume 1 - Part 5:

[46%] in agony) effectively cancelled this gift out ► It should be canceled (US spelling).

Volume 6 - Part 1:

[Generic] Gerard's skill Self Modification is written 2 times as Self-Modification (with a dash). Remove the dash to make it consistent with previous volumes. [Generic] Gerard's skill Self Transcendence is written 6 times as Self-Transcendence (with a dash). Remove the dash to make it consistent.

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Volume 6 - Part 3:

[Generic] The skill Glory Within Mine Hands is written 2 times as Glory in Mine Hands (in instead of Within).

Volume 6 - Part 7:

[Generic] While Hel is a place that exists in this world there are some instances of hel (lowercase) that should probably be hell. I listed them below. (If that's not the case then the instances of hell should be changed to hel instead?) [14%] In the midst of this hel hot enough to even boil rock, ► It should be hell. [37%] save them from this hel. However, reality forced her ► It should be hell. [37%] who drove them further into hel. She was the scum ► It should be hell. [58%] What the hell is she?! I don’t know anything like her?! ► It should be anyone ? (Or is anything used on purpose?) [65%] But.. Ahhh, how ironic. To think that the one to say ► It should be 3 periods. [87%] Didn’t Exgate Online accomodate all sorts of regions ► It should be accommodate.

Volume 7 - Part 6:

[84%] Shadow Summoners. However. what would happen if ► It should be a comma. [89%] then was caught by entirely surprise. While Shadow ► It should be entirely by (switch around). [92%] If Hinse wanted to avoid it, she probably could have . ► Remove extra space.

Volume 3 - Part 5:

[3%] several Seal Tools at his favourite store, ► It should be favorite (US spelling).

Volume 1 - Part 6:

[Generic] Flio used Purge to purify Delaveza Forest and not Purification, but the new name is certainly better. Just a reminder to update the previous parts to match. [Generic] Uliminas is described as the Dark One's confederate but considering her fear of being killed and all the word subordinate makes more sense to me. [9%] like, sorry for it, y’know? I just... I just can’t....” ► It should be 3 periods. [11%] Rys took over Balirossa's training from Flio, and ► It should be Balirossa’s (different ’ ). [13%] can’t block me like that...” Uliminas hid behind a ► Thought, not dialogue. Remove the closing double quote. [19%] meowne of the strongest spells in existence?!” ► Thought, not dialogue. Remove the closing double quote. [39%] “Ha,” said Byleri. “Ha ha haaaaaa?! ► The dialogue's closing double quote is missing. [47%] Blossom’s cries of Joy, Belarossa rushed over ► A couple of issues: It should be joy (lowercase). It should be Balirossa. [52%] “And who might you be?”As he stood in thought, ► Missing space. [64%] He’ll kill me for sure... ” There was no sign of ► Remove extra space. [82%] to the castle?” Balirossa emphatically shook ► Add a line break?

@pcj
@Terabyte
Hm, I see what you mean. The way she replies quite confidently here is a little surprising given how uncertain and bewildered she is in the previous scene. Well, it's an easy fix; I've added a little speech tag to clarify. Thanks both of you for the feedback!

@terabyte Yup, all good now, thank you!