Part 8
2%
If the false impression that every member of the Biboth Clan shares your notion that being first equates to true glory, then I couldn't live with the shame,"
--insert "you have" or similar (as-is, "the false impression" is the grammatical subject of the "if" clause but it's missing a corresponding predicate/verb)
2%
Your insanity, on the other end, is far from 'florid.'"
--"hand"?
17%
"Wait, why am I writing this in Baronh?" he said scanning the Ath glyphs he'd engraved.
--insert comma; "Abh"
35%
Lafier interest was piqued, slightly.
--"Lafier's"
47%
Meanwhile, Samson was throwing multifarious ingredients into his giant caldron.
--"cauldron"?
47%
Thinking on it, this was the first time she'd ever seen somebody hand-preparing cuisine (as opposed to machines).
--insert "using", since the machines weren't hand-preparing things?
64%
A place that was typically dimly lit, but was not filled with the dazzling light provided by the brigade members' illumination devices.
--"now"
71%
Dyaho did not disdain her, but he wasn't yet in heat, so he passed her by without incident.
--"she"?
94%
but at Nanatei they warmed the juice and made a lemon wedge floating in it.
--"float"
